Comments received on poems by Michael Edwards
A FEW COUPLETS
sue.evans said:
I like couplets - so much said in such short verse. Love it.
July 17th, 2017 14:56
sue.evans said:
I like couplets - so much said in such short verse. Love it.
July 17th, 2017 14:56
OPHELIA
malubotelho said:
Thanks for all this interesting learning. I\'m amused by your work, both painting and writing. My senses are in ecstasy with the perfume of your art.
July 17th, 2017 13:43
malubotelho said:
Thanks for all this interesting learning. I\'m amused by your work, both painting and writing. My senses are in ecstasy with the perfume of your art.
July 17th, 2017 13:43
OPHELIA
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks you MICHAEL for sharing the process of \"writing a poem\" with us. I have saved my comment to the last. Having had a Classical Education ~ in Literature and Art I was familiar with the illusions to OPHELIA (which is your final title) and of course Millais\' famous painting. I am a Performance Poet so for me RHYTHM is more important than RHYME. Because you rejected rhyme you were able to juggle the 21 lines in VERSION ONE to 19 lines in TWO and 16 in version THREE ~ where you also introduced some new lines ! Also in TWO you versified the Poem into a 6 7 6 line pattern and finally in three into a 5 5 6 pattern. I do point out to people who ask that the number of lines in the verses can vary as long as each verse makes sense. Some classical forms have strict versification ! We all have to remember that POETRY started as a ORAL tradition therefore it had to be REMEMBERED and RECITED hence the evolution of rhyme ~ rhythm ~ repetition. You final draft is BLANK VERSE ~ the verses make sense and it is recitable ! Thanks for bending our minds ~ BRIAN Personally (but I\'m not an artist) I would have included MILLAIS\' painting with the final draft ~ you still could ~ but as others have commented yours is equally effective ~ B.
July 17th, 2017 05:01
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks you MICHAEL for sharing the process of \"writing a poem\" with us. I have saved my comment to the last. Having had a Classical Education ~ in Literature and Art I was familiar with the illusions to OPHELIA (which is your final title) and of course Millais\' famous painting. I am a Performance Poet so for me RHYTHM is more important than RHYME. Because you rejected rhyme you were able to juggle the 21 lines in VERSION ONE to 19 lines in TWO and 16 in version THREE ~ where you also introduced some new lines ! Also in TWO you versified the Poem into a 6 7 6 line pattern and finally in three into a 5 5 6 pattern. I do point out to people who ask that the number of lines in the verses can vary as long as each verse makes sense. Some classical forms have strict versification ! We all have to remember that POETRY started as a ORAL tradition therefore it had to be REMEMBERED and RECITED hence the evolution of rhyme ~ rhythm ~ repetition. You final draft is BLANK VERSE ~ the verses make sense and it is recitable ! Thanks for bending our minds ~ BRIAN Personally (but I\'m not an artist) I would have included MILLAIS\' painting with the final draft ~ you still could ~ but as others have commented yours is equally effective ~ B.
July 17th, 2017 05:01
OPHELIA
FredPeyer said:
Michael, this time I have to admit
I was captured by your painting quite a bit
Even though your poem is great
your picture is evem better.
How much do you charge for one of these originals?
July 17th, 2017 03:53
FredPeyer said:
Michael, this time I have to admit
I was captured by your painting quite a bit
Even though your poem is great
your picture is evem better.
How much do you charge for one of these originals?
July 17th, 2017 03:53
OPHELIA
Fay Slimm. said:
Super picture and you captured with imagery the haunting feel of Millais\'s deceased Ophelia. Great stuff Michael.
July 17th, 2017 03:26
Fay Slimm. said:
Super picture and you captured with imagery the haunting feel of Millais\'s deceased Ophelia. Great stuff Michael.
July 17th, 2017 03:26
OPHELIA
orchidee said:
A fine write and pic M. Did Shakespeare say anything about 1066? heehee.
July 17th, 2017 01:29
orchidee said:
A fine write and pic M. Did Shakespeare say anything about 1066? heehee.
July 17th, 2017 01:29
OPHELIA
Frank Prem said:
The painting is lovely Michael. I\'m not much for Shakespeare - original or retold (philistine), but the pic is very nicely done, IMO.
July 17th, 2017 01:25
Frank Prem said:
The painting is lovely Michael. I\'m not much for Shakespeare - original or retold (philistine), but the pic is very nicely done, IMO.
July 17th, 2017 01:25
WORK IN PROGRESS (2)
malubotelho said:
I like both but need to admit that this one is susceptible better. Will wait for the final. Thanks
July 16th, 2017 16:42
malubotelho said:
I like both but need to admit that this one is susceptible better. Will wait for the final. Thanks
July 16th, 2017 16:42
WORK IN PROGRESS (2)
orchidee said:
Ooohh it\'s good enough now, in my view. heehee. I didn\'t mean: \'Oh that\'ll do, any old stuff!\' though.
July 16th, 2017 01:34
orchidee said:
Ooohh it\'s good enough now, in my view. heehee. I didn\'t mean: \'Oh that\'ll do, any old stuff!\' though.
July 16th, 2017 01:34
WORK IN PROGRESS (2)
Nicholas Browning said:
I can see the areas that were changed clearly. Well done. Looking forward to the final version. I might add, that watching this process is very educational. I thank you profusely for going through the trouble.
July 16th, 2017 00:44
Nicholas Browning said:
I can see the areas that were changed clearly. Well done. Looking forward to the final version. I might add, that watching this process is very educational. I thank you profusely for going through the trouble.
July 16th, 2017 00:44
WORK IN PROGRESS (1)
malubotelho said:
Thanks for sharing your work process. I always wonder how people writes because for me I\'m not a writer yet. I write for fun and don\'t work a lot on it. It comes and I throw it there as it is. I\'m excited to read more of you.
July 15th, 2017 11:32
malubotelho said:
Thanks for sharing your work process. I always wonder how people writes because for me I\'m not a writer yet. I write for fun and don\'t work a lot on it. It comes and I throw it there as it is. I\'m excited to read more of you.
July 15th, 2017 11:32
WORK IN PROGRESS (1)
FredPeyer said:
Thank you so much Michael for sharing the way you work and develop your writing. We all can learn a lot from this. I cannot wait to see the finished product and then compare it to this first draft.
July 15th, 2017 03:16
FredPeyer said:
Thank you so much Michael for sharing the way you work and develop your writing. We all can learn a lot from this. I cannot wait to see the finished product and then compare it to this first draft.
July 15th, 2017 03:16
WORK IN PROGRESS (1)
orchidee said:
For me, I hardly seem to re-work much of my stuff! Erm, not cos it\'s perfect every time! lol. Or is it?! (Go eat humble pie Orchi, getting too big for your boots. heehee).
But I feel if I re-work them too much, I will end up writing nothing. That\'s just me!
July 15th, 2017 02:13
orchidee said:
For me, I hardly seem to re-work much of my stuff! Erm, not cos it\'s perfect every time! lol. Or is it?! (Go eat humble pie Orchi, getting too big for your boots. heehee).
But I feel if I re-work them too much, I will end up writing nothing. That\'s just me!
July 15th, 2017 02:13
WORK IN PROGRESS (1)
Fay Slimm. said:
To empty the mind when a subject is chosen is vital - the wording here will make an excellent finish - great idea to show work in progress Michael.
July 15th, 2017 01:48
Fay Slimm. said:
To empty the mind when a subject is chosen is vital - the wording here will make an excellent finish - great idea to show work in progress Michael.
July 15th, 2017 01:48
WORK IN PROGRESS (1)
Nicholas Browning said:
I can see how this could be formed into a different poem entirely by changing the fundamentals, such as layout or rhyme scheme. Keeping and recycling old material is something I personally don\'t do. But if it works, it works. Look forward to the next version.
July 15th, 2017 00:37
Nicholas Browning said:
I can see how this could be formed into a different poem entirely by changing the fundamentals, such as layout or rhyme scheme. Keeping and recycling old material is something I personally don\'t do. But if it works, it works. Look forward to the next version.
July 15th, 2017 00:37
A FEW COUPLETS
Heather T said:
Very smart couplets, sir. Usually if I think one up, it\'s on the fly and something silly for the children
July 14th, 2017 21:32
Heather T said:
Very smart couplets, sir. Usually if I think one up, it\'s on the fly and something silly for the children
July 14th, 2017 21:32
A FEW COUPLETS
malubotelho said:
I like the couplets so much. I have more but don\'t publish them here but on Instagram to go with pictures. I\'m not doing much pictures lately. The one with the milk cart took me to a place like from a movie scene about a French bakery and milk man delivering his milk before the city is awake.
July 14th, 2017 11:54
malubotelho said:
I like the couplets so much. I have more but don\'t publish them here but on Instagram to go with pictures. I\'m not doing much pictures lately. The one with the milk cart took me to a place like from a movie scene about a French bakery and milk man delivering his milk before the city is awake.
July 14th, 2017 11:54
A FEW COUPLETS
Louis Gibbs said:
Classic couplets, Michael! Well done. Thanks for sharing.
July 14th, 2017 07:19
Louis Gibbs said:
Classic couplets, Michael! Well done. Thanks for sharing.
July 14th, 2017 07:19
A FEW COUPLETS
Fay Slimm. said:
Excellent wisdom-filled couplets and great sculpture Michael - you have many talents my friend.
July 14th, 2017 04:52
Fay Slimm. said:
Excellent wisdom-filled couplets and great sculpture Michael - you have many talents my friend.
July 14th, 2017 04:52
A FEW COUPLETS
FredPeyer said:
Michael I love these couplets. Too bad that hardly any of today\'s youth even know what bellows mean or do. And the milk cart you can forget completely.
The last one is the one that intrigues me the most.
July 14th, 2017 03:23
FredPeyer said:
Michael I love these couplets. Too bad that hardly any of today\'s youth even know what bellows mean or do. And the milk cart you can forget completely.
The last one is the one that intrigues me the most.
July 14th, 2017 03:23
A FEW COUPLETS
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Good Morning Michael | don\'t fret about your Pole Position | I have been Cock of the Walk for a day. Form rhyming couplets do stand alone !
When all is said and done
The war of words is WON !
Thanks for the MODEL (photo ?) it is OUR Adult Education College in Trumpton. You will like my HOT AIR BALLOON Painting & Poem today - please check - BRIAN
July 14th, 2017 03:06
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Good Morning Michael | don\'t fret about your Pole Position | I have been Cock of the Walk for a day. Form rhyming couplets do stand alone !
When all is said and done
The war of words is WON !
Thanks for the MODEL (photo ?) it is OUR Adult Education College in Trumpton. You will like my HOT AIR BALLOON Painting & Poem today - please check - BRIAN
July 14th, 2017 03:06
A FEW COUPLETS
burning-embers said:
These are really good. Thought provoking. Did you reveal them \'as is\' because you\'ve had them a while and couldn\'t find a use for them (Sorry i\'m a cheeky buggah) or are you just red hot at thinking these sizzlers up. When i get a little pearl like these i want to encapsulate it in a bigger piece you see.
July 14th, 2017 02:52
burning-embers said:
These are really good. Thought provoking. Did you reveal them \'as is\' because you\'ve had them a while and couldn\'t find a use for them (Sorry i\'m a cheeky buggah) or are you just red hot at thinking these sizzlers up. When i get a little pearl like these i want to encapsulate it in a bigger piece you see.
July 14th, 2017 02:52
A FEW COUPLETS
kevin browne said:
that\'s so sweet Michael Edwards. well done on putting these wonderful words together.
July 14th, 2017 00:47
kevin browne said:
that\'s so sweet Michael Edwards. well done on putting these wonderful words together.
July 14th, 2017 00:47
THROUGH THE NIGHT (3)
Heather T said:
This spun on to a gorgeous resolution. I adore images of candles shedding their shifting light. I hope your garden is as lovely after 300 traipsers traipsed.
July 13th, 2017 17:25
Heather T said:
This spun on to a gorgeous resolution. I adore images of candles shedding their shifting light. I hope your garden is as lovely after 300 traipsers traipsed.
July 13th, 2017 17:25
THROUGH THE NIGHT (3)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS MICHAEL | For posting a poem in a classic form RONDELET AbAabbA It is the repetition of the title - Through the night - as lines 1 3 7 that emphasises and reinforces the subject. At my age I could sustain the Love & Passion - \"All through the Night\" it calls for high libido and compatibility ! Thank for sharing - BRIAN I love walled gardens |- very intimate ! B
July 13th, 2017 14:16
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS MICHAEL | For posting a poem in a classic form RONDELET AbAabbA It is the repetition of the title - Through the night - as lines 1 3 7 that emphasises and reinforces the subject. At my age I could sustain the Love & Passion - \"All through the Night\" it calls for high libido and compatibility ! Thank for sharing - BRIAN I love walled gardens |- very intimate ! B
July 13th, 2017 14:16
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