Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Exciting.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Hi FAY - We love the PICTURE & the POEM ! We love the Cornish Coast which is much more rough & rocky and therefore more interesting & exciting than the Essex Coast which is smoother. When the tide comes in the scene changes every minute - especially at DAWN ! Each of your verses paInts a beautIful Cornishscape - We can see it - smell it - taste it - hear it all our senses are stirred this morning - EACH Morning - This is CORNWALL !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love ANGELA & BRIAN 💛💛💛
Please check *THE PATH NOT TAKEN* Thanks A & B !
June 18th, 2020 13:54
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Hi FAY - We love the PICTURE & the POEM ! We love the Cornish Coast which is much more rough & rocky and therefore more interesting & exciting than the Essex Coast which is smoother. When the tide comes in the scene changes every minute - especially at DAWN ! Each of your verses paInts a beautIful Cornishscape - We can see it - smell it - taste it - hear it all our senses are stirred this morning - EACH Morning - This is CORNWALL !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love ANGELA & BRIAN 💛💛💛
Please check *THE PATH NOT TAKEN* Thanks A & B !
June 18th, 2020 13:54
Exciting.
MendedFences27 said:
So beautiful Fay. Your words are more powerful than the photo. Reading it I was there, seeing it not so much. It\'s rare to outdo a photo Nature and wildlife always an inspiration. Loved this one. - Phil A.
June 18th, 2020 13:30
MendedFences27 said:
So beautiful Fay. Your words are more powerful than the photo. Reading it I was there, seeing it not so much. It\'s rare to outdo a photo Nature and wildlife always an inspiration. Loved this one. - Phil A.
June 18th, 2020 13:30
Exciting.
AwHec8 said:
Wow I could picture in my mind the scene from your words. Love the picture that is shown of your inspiration, too.
June 18th, 2020 06:31
AwHec8 said:
Wow I could picture in my mind the scene from your words. Love the picture that is shown of your inspiration, too.
June 18th, 2020 06:31
Less Trodden.
Suresh said:
Isn\'t it strange that what is indelible etched in our mind is what doesn\'t conform.
As always a wonderful poem.
June 17th, 2020 23:04
Suresh said:
Isn\'t it strange that what is indelible etched in our mind is what doesn\'t conform.
As always a wonderful poem.
June 17th, 2020 23:04
Less Trodden.
Accidental Poet said:
I\'m reminded of an idea I had for \"thinking outside the box\". I\'ll have to re-investigate the matter thanks to this poke in the side. An awesome write Fay. Straight to my favs.
June 17th, 2020 19:15
Accidental Poet said:
I\'m reminded of an idea I had for \"thinking outside the box\". I\'ll have to re-investigate the matter thanks to this poke in the side. An awesome write Fay. Straight to my favs.
June 17th, 2020 19:15
Less Trodden.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening FAY - WE love it when you assume your School Maam stance and give us a bit of instruction Poetrywise ! Being under 40 - Angela & I are still in the Poetic Kindergarten ! We need role models like Yourself ! Consequently we use Classical Forms like ACROSTICS (limits the length of the Poem) Pantoums which repeats each line and Pseudo Sonnets - limited ti 14 lines and SHAPE POEMS limited by Geometry. W e dont know long a Poem should be - do You ? Our SUBJECTS are never abstract - but about things of Time & Sense - Like Shopping - Science _ Smokey. Pehaps in time we will present mor original and *Less Troden* Poems. However I would point out that your poem - although in *Free Verse* it has a Rhythm LONG LINE - SHORT LINE - LL -SL - LL - SL - LL - SL but is not IAMBIC - Subtle ! However it is divided into four neat octains and it sure looks like a *proper* POEM ! However it is NOT constrained by Rhyme or Rythm as many of our Poems are. However to show we are open to *Critique Positive* we will post a riposte *The Path not Taken* a Collaboration. It is not in a Classical Style - It has 26 lines (We ran out of words !) and an irregular verse pattern. It has no Full - Half or Infernal Rhyme. However because we are *Performance Poets* - and would want to recite it after Yours - It does have Rhythm ! Lines are IAMBIC and alternately Pentameter (10) & Tetrameter (8). It is a Parable therefore not abstract. Your *Critque Positive* would be appreciated !
Love - Peace - Joy as always
Yours Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
June 17th, 2020 17:58
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening FAY - WE love it when you assume your School Maam stance and give us a bit of instruction Poetrywise ! Being under 40 - Angela & I are still in the Poetic Kindergarten ! We need role models like Yourself ! Consequently we use Classical Forms like ACROSTICS (limits the length of the Poem) Pantoums which repeats each line and Pseudo Sonnets - limited ti 14 lines and SHAPE POEMS limited by Geometry. W e dont know long a Poem should be - do You ? Our SUBJECTS are never abstract - but about things of Time & Sense - Like Shopping - Science _ Smokey. Pehaps in time we will present mor original and *Less Troden* Poems. However I would point out that your poem - although in *Free Verse* it has a Rhythm LONG LINE - SHORT LINE - LL -SL - LL - SL - LL - SL but is not IAMBIC - Subtle ! However it is divided into four neat octains and it sure looks like a *proper* POEM ! However it is NOT constrained by Rhyme or Rythm as many of our Poems are. However to show we are open to *Critique Positive* we will post a riposte *The Path not Taken* a Collaboration. It is not in a Classical Style - It has 26 lines (We ran out of words !) and an irregular verse pattern. It has no Full - Half or Infernal Rhyme. However because we are *Performance Poets* - and would want to recite it after Yours - It does have Rhythm ! Lines are IAMBIC and alternately Pentameter (10) & Tetrameter (8). It is a Parable therefore not abstract. Your *Critque Positive* would be appreciated !
Love - Peace - Joy as always
Yours Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
June 17th, 2020 17:58
Less Trodden.
Michael Edwards said:
Now it\'s my turn to heap the praises - your ability to weave words is above and beyond - another masterpiece dear Fay.
June 17th, 2020 13:36
Michael Edwards said:
Now it\'s my turn to heap the praises - your ability to weave words is above and beyond - another masterpiece dear Fay.
June 17th, 2020 13:36
Less Trodden.
dusk arising said:
Is this a sly poke in the eye for those who churn out \'poetry\' in their imitation of classic poetic style perhaps encouraging to be a little more \'original\'?
To be honest, since my juvenile days, I have never been able to fit in among the bank holiday crowd mindset and always seek the different. Often becoming unpopular for seeing an alternative way but nonetheless containing the mindset that it is \'my\' way.
Poetry is more than the grown up version of nursery rhymes and once one frees ones self from the restriction of classic influence ... the world of well chosen words lays ahead.
And you do it so well.
signed.... A fan
June 17th, 2020 02:35
dusk arising said:
Is this a sly poke in the eye for those who churn out \'poetry\' in their imitation of classic poetic style perhaps encouraging to be a little more \'original\'?
To be honest, since my juvenile days, I have never been able to fit in among the bank holiday crowd mindset and always seek the different. Often becoming unpopular for seeing an alternative way but nonetheless containing the mindset that it is \'my\' way.
Poetry is more than the grown up version of nursery rhymes and once one frees ones self from the restriction of classic influence ... the world of well chosen words lays ahead.
And you do it so well.
signed.... A fan
June 17th, 2020 02:35
Less Trodden.
orchidee said:
Well I would, but on country walks I have to keep to tracks, or I don\'t know where I may end up!
Books: \'The way less travelled\' or similar title? I\'m travelling it less, that\'s a fact, due to I can\'t understand some of the book! lol.
June 17th, 2020 01:45
orchidee said:
Well I would, but on country walks I have to keep to tracks, or I don\'t know where I may end up!
Books: \'The way less travelled\' or similar title? I\'m travelling it less, that\'s a fact, due to I can\'t understand some of the book! lol.
June 17th, 2020 01:45
Less Trodden.
Goldfinch60 said:
Strange I was talking with a friend yesterday about life and where we will go and she has been on this earth longer than I have but she still always looks for those untrodden paths and unopened doors as the wonder that can be there is so exciting.
Wondeful words Fay.
Andy
June 17th, 2020 01:22
Goldfinch60 said:
Strange I was talking with a friend yesterday about life and where we will go and she has been on this earth longer than I have but she still always looks for those untrodden paths and unopened doors as the wonder that can be there is so exciting.
Wondeful words Fay.
Andy
June 17th, 2020 01:22
Crossed Wires.
Goldfinch60 said:
So many crossed wires can be found in some relationships but once the electrician has sorted them out the power of love will shine through in all its brilliance.
Andy
June 17th, 2020 00:57
Goldfinch60 said:
So many crossed wires can be found in some relationships but once the electrician has sorted them out the power of love will shine through in all its brilliance.
Andy
June 17th, 2020 00:57
Crossed Wires.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening Fay - Brian here - Love the perfect Geometry (a circuit box ?) in the Form & Function of your electrifying (ELECTR) ODE ! I teach Physics (Electronics & Electridity) and your ODE (judging by the replies) seems to have flipped everybodies SWITCH ! In my experience a DIRECT CURRENT (Love Affair) seemd preferable to an ALTERNATING ONE ! After three years of Courtship our Love Circuit is still intact and has (so far) survived the High Voltage Surge of MARRIAGE and no blown FUSES yet from the resisitance of LOCKDOWN. However with the MORTGAGE & the ARRIVAL of SMOKEY we find we are having to put more BOBS in the METRE to keep the Home Lights and Fires Burning Brightly - AMEN !
Blessings & Joy & Peace
Love Brian & Angela 💛💛💛
June 16th, 2020 18:01
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Good Evening Fay - Brian here - Love the perfect Geometry (a circuit box ?) in the Form & Function of your electrifying (ELECTR) ODE ! I teach Physics (Electronics & Electridity) and your ODE (judging by the replies) seems to have flipped everybodies SWITCH ! In my experience a DIRECT CURRENT (Love Affair) seemd preferable to an ALTERNATING ONE ! After three years of Courtship our Love Circuit is still intact and has (so far) survived the High Voltage Surge of MARRIAGE and no blown FUSES yet from the resisitance of LOCKDOWN. However with the MORTGAGE & the ARRIVAL of SMOKEY we find we are having to put more BOBS in the METRE to keep the Home Lights and Fires Burning Brightly - AMEN !
Blessings & Joy & Peace
Love Brian & Angela 💛💛💛
June 16th, 2020 18:01
Crossed Wires.
Accidental Poet said:
Crossed wires can lead to many a broken heart. The antidote: Listening with the heart. Great write Fay.
June 16th, 2020 05:12
Accidental Poet said:
Crossed wires can lead to many a broken heart. The antidote: Listening with the heart. Great write Fay.
June 16th, 2020 05:12
Crossed Wires.
dusk arising said:
A short circuit to a power outtage. When sparks fly, and theres so much resistance around the ohm. Watt can one do but reverse polarity. Even in an ac/dc relationship the voltage has to be maintained or it will lead to a terminal strip. Switched off.
Well you can see i\'m currently transformed by your capacitance for poetic circuitry.
June 16th, 2020 04:08
dusk arising said:
A short circuit to a power outtage. When sparks fly, and theres so much resistance around the ohm. Watt can one do but reverse polarity. Even in an ac/dc relationship the voltage has to be maintained or it will lead to a terminal strip. Switched off.
Well you can see i\'m currently transformed by your capacitance for poetic circuitry.
June 16th, 2020 04:08
Caught.
dusk arising said:
Can\'t help but love bubbles can you. I have bought a bubble machine and gallons of bubble fluid to amuse the grandkids and what do we get.... lockdown grrr can\'t win.
Yes i was taken again by you to the sticky popping of bubbles on my face just after seeing my nose\'s amplified reflection drawing too close.
A wonderful summertime piece.
June 16th, 2020 00:31
dusk arising said:
Can\'t help but love bubbles can you. I have bought a bubble machine and gallons of bubble fluid to amuse the grandkids and what do we get.... lockdown grrr can\'t win.
Yes i was taken again by you to the sticky popping of bubbles on my face just after seeing my nose\'s amplified reflection drawing too close.
A wonderful summertime piece.
June 16th, 2020 00:31
Caught.
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Fay, bubbles are so interesting to look at and into, so many things can be seen then all suddenly disappears and leave you waiting for the next one.
Andy
June 15th, 2020 23:52
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Fay, bubbles are so interesting to look at and into, so many things can be seen then all suddenly disappears and leave you waiting for the next one.
Andy
June 15th, 2020 23:52
Caught.
MendedFences27 said:
This is brilliant Fay. I\'ve never looked at bubbles in this way. Surely they fascinate the minds of children, pets, and now adults. I must protest though that you left out the tiny bubbles of Champaign magic. Loved this poem. - Phil A.
June 15th, 2020 21:23
MendedFences27 said:
This is brilliant Fay. I\'ve never looked at bubbles in this way. Surely they fascinate the minds of children, pets, and now adults. I must protest though that you left out the tiny bubbles of Champaign magic. Loved this poem. - Phil A.
June 15th, 2020 21:23
Caught.
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
I love your use of syllabubbles here Fay ~ enchanting to my childs mind.
Ex animo, Alan
June 15th, 2020 14:40
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
I love your use of syllabubbles here Fay ~ enchanting to my childs mind.
Ex animo, Alan
June 15th, 2020 14:40
Caught.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD MORNING FAY ~ BRIAN HERE ~ Angela @ Work me Huse Husband & Smokey Minder but not for Long ! Next Monday I have to be back in College to prepare for a brief return by Students before the August (come she must !) break ! Becaus all our courses are based on continuous assessment they will all progres to the next year ~ AMEN !
BUBBLES are awsome and kids love them. Because of Surface Tension they are spherical and because th surfce refracts the White light into R O Y G B I V they are rainbow coloured ! Everything is a Childs life is ephemeral - so wen they burst (and disappear !) when you catch them - adds to their mystique ! Its interesting that with C 19 relaxaion we talk about *Inviing People into our BUBBLE !* Thanks for sharing
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 💛💛💛
June 15th, 2020 03:16
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD MORNING FAY ~ BRIAN HERE ~ Angela @ Work me Huse Husband & Smokey Minder but not for Long ! Next Monday I have to be back in College to prepare for a brief return by Students before the August (come she must !) break ! Becaus all our courses are based on continuous assessment they will all progres to the next year ~ AMEN !
BUBBLES are awsome and kids love them. Because of Surface Tension they are spherical and because th surfce refracts the White light into R O Y G B I V they are rainbow coloured ! Everything is a Childs life is ephemeral - so wen they burst (and disappear !) when you catch them - adds to their mystique ! Its interesting that with C 19 relaxaion we talk about *Inviing People into our BUBBLE !* Thanks for sharing
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 💛💛💛
June 15th, 2020 03:16
Glorious Din.
MendedFences27 said:
Beautiful poem Fay. I love poems of nature. This one rings true, as we would see geese flying overhead of our previous home during Fall and Spring. They would settle in nearby marshlands. Just a lovely poem - Phil A.
June 12th, 2020 18:24
MendedFences27 said:
Beautiful poem Fay. I love poems of nature. This one rings true, as we would see geese flying overhead of our previous home during Fall and Spring. They would settle in nearby marshlands. Just a lovely poem - Phil A.
June 12th, 2020 18:24
Glorious Din.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FOR SHARING FAY ~ Love the Pic & Poem. A Skein of Geese in flight & formation is an unforgettable experience ! Your POEM (as expected) elgantly describes the scene & honking ! I see & feel & hear it perfectly ! The silence (V 9) is as awesome when they have gone ! It reminds us that Makind does not OWN the EARTH ! We share it with billions of other living creatures !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
LOVE Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
June 12th, 2020 14:04
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FOR SHARING FAY ~ Love the Pic & Poem. A Skein of Geese in flight & formation is an unforgettable experience ! Your POEM (as expected) elgantly describes the scene & honking ! I see & feel & hear it perfectly ! The silence (V 9) is as awesome when they have gone ! It reminds us that Makind does not OWN the EARTH ! We share it with billions of other living creatures !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
LOVE Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
June 12th, 2020 14:04
Glorious Din.
Suresh said:
Your art of displaying a subject in mesmerizing words is stupendous
June 12th, 2020 12:27
Suresh said:
Your art of displaying a subject in mesmerizing words is stupendous
June 12th, 2020 12:27
Glorious Din.
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
I would rather experience the sounds of countryside. On a walk, I returned to a main road. Nosy motor-cyclists. Maybe two of them racing each other. I thought \'Oh vanity, making that stupid noise on those bikes\'. Not many about to see/hear them showing off.
June 12th, 2020 05:55
orchidee said:
Good write Fay.
I would rather experience the sounds of countryside. On a walk, I returned to a main road. Nosy motor-cyclists. Maybe two of them racing each other. I thought \'Oh vanity, making that stupid noise on those bikes\'. Not many about to see/hear them showing off.
June 12th, 2020 05:55
Glorious Din.
dusk arising said:
It\'s been so long since i goosed! lol
A lovely reminder of something i haven\'t seen or heard in more years than i care to recall. Probably because i took it for granted back then. How the years cast a different hue upon the like now.
As before, I enjoyed the pictures conjured up in reading this.
June 12th, 2020 05:15
dusk arising said:
It\'s been so long since i goosed! lol
A lovely reminder of something i haven\'t seen or heard in more years than i care to recall. Probably because i took it for granted back then. How the years cast a different hue upon the like now.
As before, I enjoyed the pictures conjured up in reading this.
June 12th, 2020 05:15
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