Comments received on poems by Jabberwocky
There was a young lady (Limerick)
Frank Prem said:
EEEuuuwww!
Sport can be soooo over-rated.
April 12th, 2017 03:17
Frank Prem said:
EEEuuuwww!
Sport can be soooo over-rated.
April 12th, 2017 03:17
Sketch: Arrogance
Garry said:
5 feet great.
Excellent . Technically not quite the limerick we were promised. But definitely excellent.
I might be inspired to post one of mine but this makes them look a bit silly.
April 11th, 2017 03:25
Garry said:
5 feet great.
Excellent . Technically not quite the limerick we were promised. But definitely excellent.
I might be inspired to post one of mine but this makes them look a bit silly.
April 11th, 2017 03:25
Sketch: The Player
Garry said:
Too many long poems around. Short and taut. Excellent
April 10th, 2017 15:20
Garry said:
Too many long poems around. Short and taut. Excellent
April 10th, 2017 15:20
Mediocrity
Garry said:
Great poem, as always. I love the last 4 lines of the first verse, were these the ones you added last? If so, great call.
April 7th, 2017 14:14
Garry said:
Great poem, as always. I love the last 4 lines of the first verse, were these the ones you added last? If so, great call.
April 7th, 2017 14:14
Mediocrity
willyweed said:
good write albeit sad I agree with Pharaoh there are other fish in the sea so to speak! ww
April 7th, 2017 08:00
willyweed said:
good write albeit sad I agree with Pharaoh there are other fish in the sea so to speak! ww
April 7th, 2017 08:00
Mediocrity
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very well written, and sad a bit...Don\'t feel that way because one person hurt you...Best of luck to you
April 7th, 2017 03:37
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very well written, and sad a bit...Don\'t feel that way because one person hurt you...Best of luck to you
April 7th, 2017 03:37
Microwave Pasta at Mums
Jabberwocky said:
Interesting frog.... or rather toad. They don\'t usually have teeth or breasts in my limited experience.
I think it\'s proper name is Bufo Buffo
:)
April 5th, 2017 17:15
Jabberwocky said:
Interesting frog.... or rather toad. They don\'t usually have teeth or breasts in my limited experience.
I think it\'s proper name is Bufo Buffo
:)
April 5th, 2017 17:15
Microwave Pasta at Mums
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, back in my youth microwaves had not been around so Mum had to cook properly and always did even when they got a microwave, and from that early beginning I have now now been cooking for over sixty years where mum had taught me.
April 5th, 2017 03:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, back in my youth microwaves had not been around so Mum had to cook properly and always did even when they got a microwave, and from that early beginning I have now now been cooking for over sixty years where mum had taught me.
April 5th, 2017 03:11
Sun in April (Haiku)
Jabberwocky said:
I was one sound too many! Made a change losing \"comes\" from third line.
April 3rd, 2017 07:06
Jabberwocky said:
I was one sound too many! Made a change losing \"comes\" from third line.
April 3rd, 2017 07:06
Sun in April (Haiku)
Frank Prem said:
I\'d be one to opt for the 4 syllables, myself - Jan-u-air-y, but don\'t think it matters, except as it suits your needs.
Nice haiku.
April 3rd, 2017 05:27
Frank Prem said:
I\'d be one to opt for the 4 syllables, myself - Jan-u-air-y, but don\'t think it matters, except as it suits your needs.
Nice haiku.
April 3rd, 2017 05:27
Sun in April (Haiku)
Jabberwocky said:
People here commonly say January as if it has three sounds; Jan You Ray.
Just a note, I thought I could get away with it :)
April 3rd, 2017 05:11
Jabberwocky said:
People here commonly say January as if it has three sounds; Jan You Ray.
Just a note, I thought I could get away with it :)
April 3rd, 2017 05:11
Sun in April (Haiku)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS JW ~ Love the middle line ~ very true in my experience ! Love HAIKU ~ Please check my poems ~ Thanks BRIAN
April 3rd, 2017 03:35
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS JW ~ Love the middle line ~ very true in my experience ! Love HAIKU ~ Please check my poems ~ Thanks BRIAN
April 3rd, 2017 03:35
Alice by the Window
Jabberwocky said:
Anniversary of his death rather, I think.
April 2nd, 2017 13:17
Jabberwocky said:
Anniversary of his death rather, I think.
April 2nd, 2017 13:17
Babel
Jabberwocky said:
Our sins too often swallow our graces. We have to build the tower higher.
April 2nd, 2017 09:11
Jabberwocky said:
Our sins too often swallow our graces. We have to build the tower higher.
April 2nd, 2017 09:11
Babel
Garry said:
I too really enjoyed the idea of a tower in a pit. Thanks for the email message. I appreciate the time you took. Cheers
April 2nd, 2017 07:29
Garry said:
I too really enjoyed the idea of a tower in a pit. Thanks for the email message. I appreciate the time you took. Cheers
April 2nd, 2017 07:29
Tick Tock
Jabberwocky said:
I updated this to make my meaning clearer. \"We\" in the first and second verse changed to \"she\" and \"I\". \"Iron\" changed to \"leaden\".
Just so you know :)
April 2nd, 2017 06:37
Jabberwocky said:
I updated this to make my meaning clearer. \"We\" in the first and second verse changed to \"she\" and \"I\". \"Iron\" changed to \"leaden\".
Just so you know :)
April 2nd, 2017 06:37
Babel
Jabberwocky said:
I also liked the image of building a tower in a pit. It seems somehow a metaphor for relationships, or for life in fact
April 2nd, 2017 06:09
Jabberwocky said:
I also liked the image of building a tower in a pit. It seems somehow a metaphor for relationships, or for life in fact
April 2nd, 2017 06:09
Babel
Jabberwocky said:
Well, it means I thought my good points and the good I did and far far outweighed the sins I committed, or the inadequacies I showed. It suggests a self awareness of those \"sins\" and a conscious effort too. But I was judged only on those \"sins\" and the fall is both the disappointment in understanding that and the fact that I \"fell\" consequently from a state or place of grace and love a long way down, in fact back into the pit with my sins suggesting I dwelt on them (as one does analysing failure). The title suggests the tower was build on miscommunication and that is why it was perceived differently.
Something like that.
April 2nd, 2017 05:49
Jabberwocky said:
Well, it means I thought my good points and the good I did and far far outweighed the sins I committed, or the inadequacies I showed. It suggests a self awareness of those \"sins\" and a conscious effort too. But I was judged only on those \"sins\" and the fall is both the disappointment in understanding that and the fact that I \"fell\" consequently from a state or place of grace and love a long way down, in fact back into the pit with my sins suggesting I dwelt on them (as one does analysing failure). The title suggests the tower was build on miscommunication and that is why it was perceived differently.
Something like that.
April 2nd, 2017 05:49
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