Comments received on poems by dusk arising



not you
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:

Nicely expressed 🙂 certainly frustrating to not be with the one you want

April 25th, 2021 01:33

a glass of her
Goldfinch60 said:

She will keep dancing for your forever d a.

Andy

April 24th, 2021 00:06

a glass of her
Neville said:


I just knew I woz gonna like this page and all that resides here the very moment I first cast my eyes on your title ................

on this occasion, my eye surgeon would be proud of me ................... N

April 23rd, 2021 16:41

a glass of her
orchidee said:

Should I meet her? Would it be too much for me?! I might burn up in the flames, and be all of a heap (of ash).
I keep saying I will meet Neville\'s women from his poems - do I ever meet the,? lol.

April 23rd, 2021 07:32

a glass of her
L. B. Mek said:

boorish, and proudly-so
a realistic depiction of how drunk we posture
when gripped by that requited heat
of magnetic attraction
for we know: in that moment
all is love, so what could possibly - go wrong...
a great read Dusk!

April 23rd, 2021 06:52

not you
L. B. Mek said:

\'You took yourself
from my arms but
left your embrace
on my heart\'..
such a relatable write Dusk, brilliant in its unflinching honesty!
\'in that ferocious concoction
of broken feelings, we title a \'break-up\'
there\'s little sense to what actions our incensed - mindset
deludes us, into acting-out
only, the remnants of our foggy memories, are left
and that unshakeable - loss, we\'re forced to brave
every time, our thought\'s - tilt
to those befuddling fingertips of necrosis love\'s, ghostly grip
on what are now: our taunting mirages of massacred dreams\'

April 23rd, 2021 05:13

not you
Goldfinch60 said:

Such an emotive write d a, the sorrow you feel I also feel for you. Writing these words may help though.

Andy

April 23rd, 2021 00:13

not you
Fay Slimm. said:

The heartache this experience causes will not go away but a writer can rearrange the feelings of almost despair and somehow cope with deep loss by scribing words of lament. I can relate to each line my friend.

April 22nd, 2021 13:27

not you
Neville said:


... I know just how you felt when you first penned these words and it aint a nice feeling, is it ...

... I am a firm believer that all poets need to experience this, before they can begin to really write ...

tis surely an unwelcome rite of passage ... N

April 22nd, 2021 11:32

not you
Jerry Reynolds said:

Good write, Dusk. \"Love the one you\'re with.\"

April 22nd, 2021 07:28

ghosts
L. B. Mek said:

forgive me Dusk, I\'m in such a silly frame of mind this morning, all I could think after reading your deeply insightful words:
\'this, is exactly when we call
for Ghostbusters!
de, da , dedum, de da dedum
who we gona call!\' lol


April 22nd, 2021 04:45

ghosts
Goldfinch60 said:

Good words d a. There is certainly some form of spirit that we can be aware of, too many inexplicable things have happened in my life for me not to believe in ghosts.

Andy

April 22nd, 2021 00:30

ghosts
Neville said:

........... jeez .. now I\'m gonna have nightmares and probably for the rest of the year ...

there is something about this poem/post that takes me back to my early childhood ... ...

and to certain events that I would rather forget ..

that\'s the mark of a well writ bit o writing for sure ...

Neville




April 21st, 2021 13:44

ghosts
Fay Slimm. said:

Oooooh - scary those sprites my poetic friend - - shall look more carefully around my solo home walls after perusing this warning.

April 21st, 2021 13:22

ghosts
orchidee said:

A fine write dusk.
I thought it was about me singing to ya at night, with the screaming and shivering, when I read through it! lol.

April 21st, 2021 10:02

ghosts
Jerry Reynolds said:

Good write, Dusk. I do believe in ghosts.

April 21st, 2021 09:05

upon Burleigh common
Fay Slimm. said:

I am speechless after reading these lines on the experience of spiritual awakening - - - I shall have your honest words in my favourites to read whenever I feel the need of an uplift - - thank you dear friend.

April 21st, 2021 02:03

upon Burleigh common
Goldfinch60 said:

I don\'t say this very often but this one is going into my favourites.

I can totally agree with all your wonderful words written.

Andy

April 21st, 2021 00:52

upon Burleigh common
Michael Edwards said:

Hey there duskiness - a real treat to come back to after my absence from MPS


April 20th, 2021 15:50

upon Burleigh common
Neville said:


Everything .. and I do mean every single thing about your page here smacks of quality ..

Beautifully entitled \'Upon Burleigh Common\' has got to be a personal fave ................................ Neville

April 20th, 2021 13:32

upon Burleigh common
orchidee said:

Good write dusk.

April 20th, 2021 10:01

upon Burleigh common
L. B. Mek said:

wonderful to read, better yet: if felt
by those with the capacity to connect
words to those tethered memories
they invoke, within us all..
a holistic journey within words, thanks Dusk

April 20th, 2021 06:12

upon Burleigh common
Kevin Michael Bloor said:

A beautiful reflective poem. (Love the title and structure, by the way) Very atmospheric and moving. My fave bit: \'my speck
of irrelevant existence.\' A touching description of how we feel sometimes, in the presence of this vast universe. Great job. Well done.

April 20th, 2021 05:18

forest
L. B. Mek said:

what a body blow of a last line Dusk!
utilised with practised skill, to emphasis the message in your words:
such a leaf of potential enlightenment
to the harm our actions can have
is waiting for us all - to realise
in the abundance of Nature
we far too easily, disregard..
an important write! worded so accessibly relatable

April 20th, 2021 03:26

forest
Goldfinch60 said:

So true d a, that falling leaf could be a new door opening on your life.

Andy

April 20th, 2021 00:21

forest
orchidee said:

Good write dusk.
Can ya glue it back on the tree?! If ya wants to.

April 19th, 2021 09:31

forest
Fay Slimm. said:

A question which every lover of nature is asking in these troubled times my friend - your words will stay as fresh as that one single leaf in this reader\'s mind as needed reminders and thank you for posting your wording on forest pleas for action from negligent and greedy humanity.

April 19th, 2021 07:23

where
L. B. Mek said:

brilliant utilisation of poetic format and repetition, to extract every ounce of your artistic ambition!
such a measured, yet intensely distilled study:
\'the \'where\' of next
\'where\' we all meet
that certainty of fate...\'

April 19th, 2021 04:53

where
Goldfinch60 said:

May the sun arise for you for many, many more days to come and when we do pass I will meet you wherever that may be.

Andy

April 19th, 2021 00:25

where
Fay Slimm. said:

You pen a gem of a verse here Dusk where dreams soaked in hope take us to places of glorious adventure so we can wake with a smile in our hearts -- must have this delightful write in my faves.

April 18th, 2021 15:56



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