Comments received on poems by Neville
As Yet Unfurnished
L. B. Mek said:
erm, so Hyung
sometimes I just read your title and then
lose control of my fingers for a bit
inspired
to try and scribble a little poetic reply
since I so relate with your words
thank you!
(replete, with our youthful zeal
lust inspiring us to love without handbrakes
we were young
all we chased was a place
for us to embrace
and cuddle, all night
since, climbing out
of the toilet window to evade capture
got old, after one rainy weekend
so now
we trace Time, in a finger caress
with that ease of mind
yeah, it\'s a lot of money
when between us, we can barely
pay the rent
let alone the bills, but
the memories we made, in that
very first place, we both
got to call our own, even for just
a while, lasted us a lifetime
dear, first love..
and yes i still remember it all
like it was yesterday
wine n dining you on tuna sandwiches
and cheap strawberry wine
making your lips, taste
a little more sweet, with every sip
I remember it all
no regrets
just mementos I cherish, with pride
knowing how lucky I was
that it was you I got to share
those moments with)
July 24th, 2023 03:21
L. B. Mek said:
erm, so Hyung
sometimes I just read your title and then
lose control of my fingers for a bit
inspired
to try and scribble a little poetic reply
since I so relate with your words
thank you!
(replete, with our youthful zeal
lust inspiring us to love without handbrakes
we were young
all we chased was a place
for us to embrace
and cuddle, all night
since, climbing out
of the toilet window to evade capture
got old, after one rainy weekend
so now
we trace Time, in a finger caress
with that ease of mind
yeah, it\'s a lot of money
when between us, we can barely
pay the rent
let alone the bills, but
the memories we made, in that
very first place, we both
got to call our own, even for just
a while, lasted us a lifetime
dear, first love..
and yes i still remember it all
like it was yesterday
wine n dining you on tuna sandwiches
and cheap strawberry wine
making your lips, taste
a little more sweet, with every sip
I remember it all
no regrets
just mementos I cherish, with pride
knowing how lucky I was
that it was you I got to share
those moments with)
July 24th, 2023 03:21
As Yet Unfurnished
orchidee said:
I refuse to buy KP a secret room where she can give botox treatments to others. lol.
July 24th, 2023 01:42
orchidee said:
I refuse to buy KP a secret room where she can give botox treatments to others. lol.
July 24th, 2023 01:42
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Goldfinch60 said:
That person can be so important in your life Neville.
Andy
July 24th, 2023 01:07
Goldfinch60 said:
That person can be so important in your life Neville.
Andy
July 24th, 2023 01:07
As Yet Unfurnished
Goldfinch60 said:
The imagination fills with thoughts Neville. A secret room eh?
Andy
July 24th, 2023 00:48
Goldfinch60 said:
The imagination fills with thoughts Neville. A secret room eh?
Andy
July 24th, 2023 00:48
Requiem For a Lost Cause
MendedFences27 said:
I think this is a desire to focus on the important things in life, closeness and \"time together.\"
It sounds by the title it is something not to be granted. Outside influence to force a separation? I enjoyed the ease of language in this poem. It sounded as though it was being softly spoken, almost mournfully. As always, a most enjoyable treat. - Phil A.
July 22nd, 2023 18:36
MendedFences27 said:
I think this is a desire to focus on the important things in life, closeness and \"time together.\"
It sounds by the title it is something not to be granted. Outside influence to force a separation? I enjoyed the ease of language in this poem. It sounded as though it was being softly spoken, almost mournfully. As always, a most enjoyable treat. - Phil A.
July 22nd, 2023 18:36
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Bella Shepard said:
You pull at the heart strings with this beautiful poem dear Nev. The simple pleasutes of coats touching but never close enough, the taste of a crisp red apple made even sweeter when shared, and the park bench where two can sit as one and just enjoy one anothers company. The longing for just one more encounter makes this so priceless my friend. I love it!,
July 22nd, 2023 11:13
Bella Shepard said:
You pull at the heart strings with this beautiful poem dear Nev. The simple pleasutes of coats touching but never close enough, the taste of a crisp red apple made even sweeter when shared, and the park bench where two can sit as one and just enjoy one anothers company. The longing for just one more encounter makes this so priceless my friend. I love it!,
July 22nd, 2023 11:13
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Doggerel Dave said:
I too, as Rik above, picked up on the autumn line ....... what is to be made of this?.
July 21st, 2023 21:12
Doggerel Dave said:
I too, as Rik above, picked up on the autumn line ....... what is to be made of this?.
July 21st, 2023 21:12
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Garth Rakumakoe said:
These words bridge many more gaps than the ones on benches my friend. Be proud sir, be proud.
July 21st, 2023 09:47
Garth Rakumakoe said:
These words bridge many more gaps than the ones on benches my friend. Be proud sir, be proud.
July 21st, 2023 09:47
Requiem For a Lost Cause
arqios said:
Brings to mind the red coats and the blue (?) the history of it is getting vaguer as the days go by. The \'very last autumn\' sounds a bit ominous.
July 21st, 2023 07:44
arqios said:
Brings to mind the red coats and the blue (?) the history of it is getting vaguer as the days go by. The \'very last autumn\' sounds a bit ominous.
July 21st, 2023 07:44
The Mess They Leave Behind
Christina8 said:
The fact that she killed someone whether she was injured or not should send her straight to prison.....no compensation for that kind of dumbassery in America!
July 21st, 2023 06:00
Christina8 said:
The fact that she killed someone whether she was injured or not should send her straight to prison.....no compensation for that kind of dumbassery in America!
July 21st, 2023 06:00
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Christina8 said:
A wonderful and tender write, N! Loved it till the very end....C
July 21st, 2023 05:53
Christina8 said:
A wonderful and tender write, N! Loved it till the very end....C
July 21st, 2023 05:53
Requiem For a Lost Cause
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
from title to pinprick last dots
this was profoundly sobering
contemplation needed, as preparation
for those inevitable tear stains, in life
(I read and learn)
thank you! Hyung
July 21st, 2023 02:51
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
from title to pinprick last dots
this was profoundly sobering
contemplation needed, as preparation
for those inevitable tear stains, in life
(I read and learn)
thank you! Hyung
July 21st, 2023 02:51
In the Wake of New Gods
L. B. Mek said:
funny, every other word I read
mentions, people\'s
demons and life\'s devilish temptations
I thought western secular society assassinated all deity\'s
how convenient, we choose to keep
the demonic around;
\'American gods\', a book that\'s
as prophetic as it is steeped
in mythological fantasy;
we be contrary creatures, that duality
necessity
of self betraying contradiction
in our every choice...)
July 21st, 2023 02:47
L. B. Mek said:
funny, every other word I read
mentions, people\'s
demons and life\'s devilish temptations
I thought western secular society assassinated all deity\'s
how convenient, we choose to keep
the demonic around;
\'American gods\', a book that\'s
as prophetic as it is steeped
in mythological fantasy;
we be contrary creatures, that duality
necessity
of self betraying contradiction
in our every choice...)
July 21st, 2023 02:47
Two Ants One Question
L. B. Mek said:
sticky sweet..
explains why hollywod\'s
no1 profession, is a nose surgeon
we all need a release
some are powdery white and sweet
others... destroy!
an anthill\'s life, indeed
(a deeper read warranted of this
subtle gem
my very wise friend, loved this
such acute imagery
executed so subtly)
July 21st, 2023 02:37
L. B. Mek said:
sticky sweet..
explains why hollywod\'s
no1 profession, is a nose surgeon
we all need a release
some are powdery white and sweet
others... destroy!
an anthill\'s life, indeed
(a deeper read warranted of this
subtle gem
my very wise friend, loved this
such acute imagery
executed so subtly)
July 21st, 2023 02:37
The Mess They Leave Behind
L. B. Mek said:
Hyung,
I bow to your empathetic endurance
I can barely handle my own sht
let alone walk through life, wading
through other people\'s, mire...
(escapism as our artform of ignorance
we assume, all is fair
in our neurotic crutches of life
even when those crutches are formed
of the goodwill ashes
of those who invested in us, or
the innocent collateral damage
of the
thoughtless choice we make in life..)
July 21st, 2023 02:33
L. B. Mek said:
Hyung,
I bow to your empathetic endurance
I can barely handle my own sht
let alone walk through life, wading
through other people\'s, mire...
(escapism as our artform of ignorance
we assume, all is fair
in our neurotic crutches of life
even when those crutches are formed
of the goodwill ashes
of those who invested in us, or
the innocent collateral damage
of the
thoughtless choice we make in life..)
July 21st, 2023 02:33
Requiem For a Lost Cause
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I dunno about tasty red apples, but KP and I share sour grapes. lol.
July 21st, 2023 01:48
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I dunno about tasty red apples, but KP and I share sour grapes. lol.
July 21st, 2023 01:48
Requiem For a Lost Cause
Bobby O said:
Thrilled as ever, wanting perhaps, but the universe knew you had the position that didn’t require any “ups”
July 21st, 2023 01:37
Bobby O said:
Thrilled as ever, wanting perhaps, but the universe knew you had the position that didn’t require any “ups”
July 21st, 2023 01:37
In the Wake of New Gods
Goldfinch60 said:
True words Neville, the latest new god should be treated with apathy.
Andy
July 21st, 2023 00:42
Goldfinch60 said:
True words Neville, the latest new god should be treated with apathy.
Andy
July 21st, 2023 00:42
In the Wake of New Gods
MendedFences27 said:
Is worshipping the cell phone the latest cult.? Will they all walk into the sea at the same time?
There is a growing feeling that we are raising a generation that will be incapable of human interaction. They will walk around with their phones doing whatever it tells them to do. Scary!! - Phil A.
July 20th, 2023 15:07
MendedFences27 said:
Is worshipping the cell phone the latest cult.? Will they all walk into the sea at the same time?
There is a growing feeling that we are raising a generation that will be incapable of human interaction. They will walk around with their phones doing whatever it tells them to do. Scary!! - Phil A.
July 20th, 2023 15:07
In the Wake of New Gods
arqios said:
Back seat\'s the best spot for back seat driving. But otherwise destroying all that makes us look foolish is top order. The new and latest is for many but that could be seen as a badge of surface dwelling and a lack of much depth.
July 20th, 2023 06:21
arqios said:
Back seat\'s the best spot for back seat driving. But otherwise destroying all that makes us look foolish is top order. The new and latest is for many but that could be seen as a badge of surface dwelling and a lack of much depth.
July 20th, 2023 06:21
In the Wake of New Gods
Parisab said:
True description of the inception of technology and what the Apple Store looks like when a new iPhone comes out and everyone is rushing to be blessed
July 20th, 2023 02:17
Parisab said:
True description of the inception of technology and what the Apple Store looks like when a new iPhone comes out and everyone is rushing to be blessed
July 20th, 2023 02:17
Two Ants One Question
Goldfinch60 said:
Life can be so wonderfully sweet as mine is. Neville.
Andy
July 20th, 2023 00:42
Goldfinch60 said:
Life can be so wonderfully sweet as mine is. Neville.
Andy
July 20th, 2023 00:42
Two Ants One Question
MendedFences27 said:
The fewer \'ants dancing in\" sugar pots the \'sweeter\" it will be.
A very clever image created by you in this poem, happy ants dancing in sugar, setting up the final rhetorical question. But let\'s not encourage the ants. - Phil A,
July 19th, 2023 22:26
MendedFences27 said:
The fewer \'ants dancing in\" sugar pots the \'sweeter\" it will be.
A very clever image created by you in this poem, happy ants dancing in sugar, setting up the final rhetorical question. But let\'s not encourage the ants. - Phil A,
July 19th, 2023 22:26
The Mess They Leave Behind
Doggerel Dave said:
Well I just ain’t sure whether this is a tale or true reportage, and yeh I know a gentleman never tells. Thus I’m left to make my own mind up about that….
Either way, irony is something I’m well into, so thanks for a bit of dark entertainment, Neville.
July 19th, 2023 18:20
Doggerel Dave said:
Well I just ain’t sure whether this is a tale or true reportage, and yeh I know a gentleman never tells. Thus I’m left to make my own mind up about that….
Either way, irony is something I’m well into, so thanks for a bit of dark entertainment, Neville.
July 19th, 2023 18:20
Two Ants One Question
Garth Rakumakoe said:
It sure can... That\'s one sweet tooth you got there Poet! 🤟🏽
July 19th, 2023 14:20
Garth Rakumakoe said:
It sure can... That\'s one sweet tooth you got there Poet! 🤟🏽
July 19th, 2023 14:20
Two Ants One Question
Bella Shepard said:
Would it be trit to say \"short and sweet\"? It may be, but the image of two ants dancing in a sugar pot is the sweetest I can imagine. I\'d love it to be a waltz, but with all that suger it\'s probably a jitterbug. Now I\'m smiling in the sweetest way, thank you.
July 19th, 2023 12:43
Bella Shepard said:
Would it be trit to say \"short and sweet\"? It may be, but the image of two ants dancing in a sugar pot is the sweetest I can imagine. I\'d love it to be a waltz, but with all that suger it\'s probably a jitterbug. Now I\'m smiling in the sweetest way, thank you.
July 19th, 2023 12:43
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