Comments received on poems by Neville
Love is ..
L. B. Mek said:
ha! so true dear Poet
a new relationship, or even
a new day, of a relationship
is never
a new chapter of a book
more like a new, movie
or song, or picture book
that has us trying to rewind
Time, since
minute we think we\'ve got it
sussed
that left hook comes, to greet
without deigning to inform us
our romance, dance
has now evolved in-to that
battlefield of love
lol
April 28th, 2023 04:47
L. B. Mek said:
ha! so true dear Poet
a new relationship, or even
a new day, of a relationship
is never
a new chapter of a book
more like a new, movie
or song, or picture book
that has us trying to rewind
Time, since
minute we think we\'ve got it
sussed
that left hook comes, to greet
without deigning to inform us
our romance, dance
has now evolved in-to that
battlefield of love
lol
April 28th, 2023 04:47
Girl With a Blue Vase
L. B. Mek said:
who needs, immersion software
when poetry can offer
such vivid tangibility, in but a few
choice lines:
\'the scorching
red sand and occasional
contrasting
patches, of respite cool,
crisp, fallen leaves ..
She might find on her
way back again ..\'
the Poet supreme, is back
with a resounding, bang
Brilliant!
(I read and learn, Hyung)
thank you
April 28th, 2023 04:42
L. B. Mek said:
who needs, immersion software
when poetry can offer
such vivid tangibility, in but a few
choice lines:
\'the scorching
red sand and occasional
contrasting
patches, of respite cool,
crisp, fallen leaves ..
She might find on her
way back again ..\'
the Poet supreme, is back
with a resounding, bang
Brilliant!
(I read and learn, Hyung)
thank you
April 28th, 2023 04:42
Girl With a Blue Vase
Bobby O said:
Sunlight caught, played, the silver buckles, descriptive style stays within the story never gratuitous and I’m certain the amount of punctuating phrase that describe is certain to be guilty in most hands of extra and muddied nut never in how you write. I hope to be that accomplished one day. Many props.
April 28th, 2023 04:35
Bobby O said:
Sunlight caught, played, the silver buckles, descriptive style stays within the story never gratuitous and I’m certain the amount of punctuating phrase that describe is certain to be guilty in most hands of extra and muddied nut never in how you write. I hope to be that accomplished one day. Many props.
April 28th, 2023 04:35
The Ghost of My Self That Was
Bobby O said:
I felt the heartfelt reminiscence.
April 28th, 2023 02:32
Bobby O said:
I felt the heartfelt reminiscence.
April 28th, 2023 02:32
Love is ..
Doggerel Dave said:
\"The poem is an excellent example of how\" (see above) you tell or ask us nowt, Neville.
April 27th, 2023 05:23
Doggerel Dave said:
\"The poem is an excellent example of how\" (see above) you tell or ask us nowt, Neville.
April 27th, 2023 05:23
Love is ..
orchidee said:
Can you beat life and love, as you can beat an egg?! lol.
April 27th, 2023 04:50
orchidee said:
Can you beat life and love, as you can beat an egg?! lol.
April 27th, 2023 04:50
Love is ..
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is an excellent example of how simplicity can sometimes be the most powerful tool in poetry.
April 27th, 2023 04:34
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is an excellent example of how simplicity can sometimes be the most powerful tool in poetry.
April 27th, 2023 04:34
Girl With a Blue Vase
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Neville and so very true in too many instances on our world.
Andy
April 27th, 2023 01:14
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful words Neville and so very true in too many instances on our world.
Andy
April 27th, 2023 01:14
Girl With a Blue Vase
Doggerel Dave said:
A vivid mental picture is evoked by your words, Neville. Rich in detail, the background would imply Africa – correct?
Now curious, I gave Prof Google a spin. Keywords ‘drought 2016’ yielded many claims, with Africa well down the list.
Reentry ‘drought 2016 africa’… apparently large swathes of Africa have and are suffering long term drought, although 2016 was particularly severe…
Great painting there. Word strokes more than do the job.
April 26th, 2023 20:18
Doggerel Dave said:
A vivid mental picture is evoked by your words, Neville. Rich in detail, the background would imply Africa – correct?
Now curious, I gave Prof Google a spin. Keywords ‘drought 2016’ yielded many claims, with Africa well down the list.
Reentry ‘drought 2016 africa’… apparently large swathes of Africa have and are suffering long term drought, although 2016 was particularly severe…
Great painting there. Word strokes more than do the job.
April 26th, 2023 20:18
Girl With a Blue Vase
MendedFences27 said:
Seems more like a memory of the girl and not the vase, but that may be intentional. Somehow, I think, there is a connection between unavailability of water and the same of the girl. Someone from a memory now fading to \"silhouette.\"
Not long forgotten nor fresh and alive either. A poem that is recollection mixed with desire? Or a long-ago memory slowly being lost to time? Thoroughly enjoyable. - Phil A
April 26th, 2023 18:32
MendedFences27 said:
Seems more like a memory of the girl and not the vase, but that may be intentional. Somehow, I think, there is a connection between unavailability of water and the same of the girl. Someone from a memory now fading to \"silhouette.\"
Not long forgotten nor fresh and alive either. A poem that is recollection mixed with desire? Or a long-ago memory slowly being lost to time? Thoroughly enjoyable. - Phil A
April 26th, 2023 18:32
Girl With a Blue Vase
orchidee said:
Good write N. I was carrying a blue vase, but I tripped over Fido and it smashed!
How much of my waffle can ya believe? lol
April 26th, 2023 10:58
orchidee said:
Good write N. I was carrying a blue vase, but I tripped over Fido and it smashed!
How much of my waffle can ya believe? lol
April 26th, 2023 10:58
Girl With a Blue Vase
orchidee said:
Good write N. I was carrying a blue vase, but I tripped over Fido and it smashed!
How much of my waffle can ya believe? lol
April 26th, 2023 10:58
orchidee said:
Good write N. I was carrying a blue vase, but I tripped over Fido and it smashed!
How much of my waffle can ya believe? lol
April 26th, 2023 10:58
Girl With a Blue Vase
Accidental Poet said:
A very clear and vivid memory you have N. Welcome back from your little getaway..
April 26th, 2023 10:03
Accidental Poet said:
A very clear and vivid memory you have N. Welcome back from your little getaway..
April 26th, 2023 10:03
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(we regurgitate, societal mindset chains
accosted, by external opinions
before
we\'ve learnt, to compose
thought
\'I think therefore I...\' wat bulshit
for what, is thought
how free
those insipid cacophonous, images and words
we\'re subjected, to
by our environment\'s, insidious intent...
intellect, as pathological back-stories
to neurotically, elitist mindsets;
empathetical heart\'s, decimated by the trust
they foolishly gift, to those
who view kindness, as a weakness to exploit;
Nature\'s callous indifference
that veracity of existence, we crave
to forget
those birds, we depict our notion of freedom
upon
living life, while ever
dodging looming shadows, of fate\'s
skydiving hunters
no dear Poet supreme
threads to that, true
emancipation of self
exists in your poetry\'s, veracity
of vulnerability:
\'As free
as the wind
but with nowhere
to blow ..\'
who needs, wings
when we can soar, weightless
by just looking within
excavating, within self reflection
that we most cherish, in life
not
what we\'ve been, programmed
to blindly, value and trust!)
April 21st, 2023 05:11
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(we regurgitate, societal mindset chains
accosted, by external opinions
before
we\'ve learnt, to compose
thought
\'I think therefore I...\' wat bulshit
for what, is thought
how free
those insipid cacophonous, images and words
we\'re subjected, to
by our environment\'s, insidious intent...
intellect, as pathological back-stories
to neurotically, elitist mindsets;
empathetical heart\'s, decimated by the trust
they foolishly gift, to those
who view kindness, as a weakness to exploit;
Nature\'s callous indifference
that veracity of existence, we crave
to forget
those birds, we depict our notion of freedom
upon
living life, while ever
dodging looming shadows, of fate\'s
skydiving hunters
no dear Poet supreme
threads to that, true
emancipation of self
exists in your poetry\'s, veracity
of vulnerability:
\'As free
as the wind
but with nowhere
to blow ..\'
who needs, wings
when we can soar, weightless
by just looking within
excavating, within self reflection
that we most cherish, in life
not
what we\'ve been, programmed
to blindly, value and trust!)
April 21st, 2023 05:11
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
Bella Shepard said:
You always fly high and free my friend, such a lovely parting gift you have left with us. Safe travels.
April 18th, 2023 14:20
Bella Shepard said:
You always fly high and free my friend, such a lovely parting gift you have left with us. Safe travels.
April 18th, 2023 14:20
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem\'s conclusion suggests that true freedom may not be found in the absence of constraints, but in the ability to transcend them and move beyond the limits of our physical existence.
April 18th, 2023 11:06
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem\'s conclusion suggests that true freedom may not be found in the absence of constraints, but in the ability to transcend them and move beyond the limits of our physical existence.
April 18th, 2023 11:06
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
MendedFences27 said:
Someone once said, when asked about his commitments, \"I\'m retired, I don\'t have commitments.\" Sort of aligns with your sense of freedom. We don\'t truly want to be \"birds\" (short life span) but to enjoy their freedom of flight. Well expressed and relevant. - Phil A.
April 18th, 2023 10:27
MendedFences27 said:
Someone once said, when asked about his commitments, \"I\'m retired, I don\'t have commitments.\" Sort of aligns with your sense of freedom. We don\'t truly want to be \"birds\" (short life span) but to enjoy their freedom of flight. Well expressed and relevant. - Phil A.
April 18th, 2023 10:27
In So Few Words Gone
Christina8 said:
I could take the meaning of the poem several ways and I think you are just gone, as in leaving. I\'m so glad you\'ll be back!!
April 18th, 2023 06:02
Christina8 said:
I could take the meaning of the poem several ways and I think you are just gone, as in leaving. I\'m so glad you\'ll be back!!
April 18th, 2023 06:02
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
Christina8 said:
Very nice, be free as a bird on your trip! Safe flight!
April 18th, 2023 06:00
Christina8 said:
Very nice, be free as a bird on your trip! Safe flight!
April 18th, 2023 06:00
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
Accidental Poet said:
As you fly away in said business trip, take care and this may now know you will be missed with anticipated return of our fine feathered friend. 🐦
April 18th, 2023 05:28
Accidental Poet said:
As you fly away in said business trip, take care and this may now know you will be missed with anticipated return of our fine feathered friend. 🐦
April 18th, 2023 05:28
As Free As a Proverbial Bird
Goldfinch60 said:
Fly on into the glory of life Neville.
See you in a week (and a day?)
Andy
April 18th, 2023 01:48
Goldfinch60 said:
Fly on into the glory of life Neville.
See you in a week (and a day?)
Andy
April 18th, 2023 01:48
In So Few Words Gone
MendedFences27 said:
Sounds like a bitter end to a relationship, by text no less. Your poem paints a clear image of one anxious to get out of town, and hopeful to leave behind a bit of bitterness. Love that he wants her to look in the mirror. A bit of reflection never hurts. - Phil A.
April 17th, 2023 15:55
MendedFences27 said:
Sounds like a bitter end to a relationship, by text no less. Your poem paints a clear image of one anxious to get out of town, and hopeful to leave behind a bit of bitterness. Love that he wants her to look in the mirror. A bit of reflection never hurts. - Phil A.
April 17th, 2023 15:55
In So Few Words Gone
arqios said:
Sounds like having to drop something and be farthest away possible from ground zero!
April 17th, 2023 08:59
arqios said:
Sounds like having to drop something and be farthest away possible from ground zero!
April 17th, 2023 08:59
In So Few Words Gone
Accidental Poet said:
Gone and Neville I sincerely hope are exclusive of each other. 😉
April 17th, 2023 08:26
Accidental Poet said:
Gone and Neville I sincerely hope are exclusive of each other. 😉
April 17th, 2023 08:26
In So Few Words Gone
orchidee said:
Ohh, why do I turn up sometimes to comment, and talk rubbish?! There are some educated comments here. What would I know about them?! lol.
April 17th, 2023 05:40
orchidee said:
Ohh, why do I turn up sometimes to comment, and talk rubbish?! There are some educated comments here. What would I know about them?! lol.
April 17th, 2023 05:40
In So Few Words Gone
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"In So Few Words Gone\" is a beautifully crafted poem that explores the themes of legacy, memory, and mortality.
April 17th, 2023 05:00
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"In So Few Words Gone\" is a beautifully crafted poem that explores the themes of legacy, memory, and mortality.
April 17th, 2023 05:00
In So Few Words Gone
L. B. Mek said:
\'compelled
to stand before
your great
grandmothers
tall cheval mirror
and read
each word aloud ..
Louder
than a whisper
or indeed
a prayer even ..\'
pulls at those empathy heartstrings
even devoid of full clarity to meaning
the electric intimacy and sparkling imagery
insures these words resonate, deep
brilliantly executed, Hyung
(I read and learn)
April 17th, 2023 02:42
L. B. Mek said:
\'compelled
to stand before
your great
grandmothers
tall cheval mirror
and read
each word aloud ..
Louder
than a whisper
or indeed
a prayer even ..\'
pulls at those empathy heartstrings
even devoid of full clarity to meaning
the electric intimacy and sparkling imagery
insures these words resonate, deep
brilliantly executed, Hyung
(I read and learn)
April 17th, 2023 02:42
Bucket List
L. B. Mek said:
(this, a poetic recipe for overcoming
that ephemerality in our harsh reality)
Brilliant!
dear Poet supreme
April 17th, 2023 02:36
L. B. Mek said:
(this, a poetic recipe for overcoming
that ephemerality in our harsh reality)
Brilliant!
dear Poet supreme
April 17th, 2023 02:36
Charming
L. B. Mek said:
lol
an invitation is what i \'choose\' to hear...
we men, can be so brilliantly simple
\'survival mindset, 101\'
(thanks for the chuckle Hyung)
April 17th, 2023 02:33
L. B. Mek said:
lol
an invitation is what i \'choose\' to hear...
we men, can be so brilliantly simple
\'survival mindset, 101\'
(thanks for the chuckle Hyung)
April 17th, 2023 02:33
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