Comments received on poems by Neville



Upon Learning to Fly
L. B. Mek said:

(that thread of paradox in existence
live boldly
or survive, watching-on as other\'s
...fly)
\'if Icarus, lived long enough to date\'
lol
such a fun read, thank you Hyung

March 31st, 2023 02:16

A Question of Waste
L. B. Mek said:

makes me sad
how modernity celebrates
all those flaunting their wealth
and wasting billions
on supposed missions to Mars
yet \'OUR\' children
are marginalised more n more
and left to fend for themselves...
(sobering to contemplate
that this succinctly worded
\'wake up call\'
will be relevant, till the end of time
still
thank you! dear Poet supreme
for boldly stating
what we all, try to willingly ignore!)


March 31st, 2023 02:07

The Marks on Our Ceiling
Goldfinch60 said:

Sorry Neville I am not allowed to tell you what they are. LOL

Andy

March 31st, 2023 01:49

Storked
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

🙏Good write👌

March 31st, 2023 01:00

The Marks on Our Ceiling
arqios said:

Tempted to ask how high these ceilings are.
Mum always had us never eat in the bedroom lest the tomato sauce or any other sauce fall and stain.

March 30th, 2023 07:02

The Marks on Our Ceiling
Fay Slimm. said:

Ooooh -- could be old blood or tomato sauce maybe - why not ask one of those ghosts that must haunt your ancient dwelling.........x

March 30th, 2023 05:56

The Marks on Our Ceiling
Doggerel Dave said:

The joys of communal living....I live on the top floor, so what goes down stays down.....

March 30th, 2023 05:11

No Reason Required
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

Good write❤️

March 30th, 2023 03:56

The Marks on Our Ceiling
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

\"The Marks on Our Ceiling\" is a poem that captures the speaker\'s reflection on the stains on their dining room ceiling. The speaker uses irony and humor to convey their uneasy thoughts about the origins of the stains. The poem\'s title itself sets the tone for a contemplative, reflective piece that ultimately turns out to be an amusing take on an unpleasant experience.

March 30th, 2023 03:45

The Marks on Our Ceiling
orchidee said:

Fido will come round and sniff things out, to find out what it is! lol.

March 30th, 2023 01:53

Upon Learning to Fly
orchidee said:

Cooeee! ignore me - talking rubbish. Fido wants to be a Bird-Dog! He is making some wings. lol.

March 29th, 2023 14:46

Upon Learning to Fly
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

The poem\'s themes of risk-taking and fear of the unknown are relatable and universal. The speaker\'s hesitation in the face of something as uncertain and potentially dangerous as flying is something that many people can relate to when facing new challenges or taking risks in their lives.

March 29th, 2023 13:08

Upon Learning to Fly
MendedFences27 said:

Here\'s an opposite type of risk: I was part of the crew of a submarine repair ship. I went inro their radio room and saw all these coffee cans hanging from the overhead. I asked what their purpose was and was told, \"To catch the leaks.\" Funny how your poem about flying at great risk brought back that memory. More important in your poem is the question on living. One must take a few risks in order to live a full life. Relationships too can depend on one\'s willingness to risk it all. - Phil A,

March 29th, 2023 09:41

A Question of Waste
Doggerel Dave said:

Apologies Neville - I\'ve just deleted my commentary here which had no place under you neat shortie. I\'ve taken it away to develop the argument and let it stand or fall under my own name.

March 29th, 2023 08:12

Upon Learning to Fly
orchidee said:

Ahh, I recognise this as The Adventures of Birdman! heehee.

March 29th, 2023 07:48

Upon Learning to Fly
Doggerel Dave said:

Agreed, Neville: safety should not always be the preeminent criterion for a good life... risk to be managed.
Enjoyed the metaphor - and if I enjoyed it, then for me it wasn\'t too obscure....

March 29th, 2023 07:33

Upon Learning to Fly
Fay Slimm. said:

Still smiling at your lateral views here on the meaning of free-flying. Life is adored when we get air-borne
with a lover methinks.....x

March 29th, 2023 05:20

A Question of Waste
arqios said:

Indeed N! There is no need for that. Sadly too many look the other way.

March 28th, 2023 17:40

A Question of Waste
Bella Shepard said:

Dear friend you pose a question to which there should be a simple answer. We solve problems of technology everyday, have teams of experts and scientiests working to improve everything in our world, except the human condition. I question whether we have always been this way, or did we lose ourselves somewhere along the way. Thank you for these three lines of conscience and compassion, it is sorely missing in our world.

March 28th, 2023 16:08

A Question of Waste
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

The use of the word \"waste\" in the title of the poem is significant, as it draws attention to the fact that the world produces more than enough food to feed every person, but much of it is lost or thrown away due to inefficiencies in the food production and distribution system. The poet implies that the problem is not so much the lack of resources but the failure to use them effectively

March 28th, 2023 07:03

A Question of Waste
orchidee said:

Do they do liposuction - and literally lips - for old trouts?! I do go on. lol.

March 28th, 2023 05:46

A Question of Waste
orchidee said:

Meanwhile in Fantasy Land - it\'s KP\'s fault, she scoffs everything. She weighs about 30 stone now. Ain\'t no Botox can help that! lol.

March 28th, 2023 05:36

A Question of Waste
orchidee said:

Yes - it\'s piling of butter mountains, etc. There\'s terrible waste around.
I admit Buddhists and some others may think about these things more than some Christians do, though some of them run Food Banks, Energy Banks, etc.

March 28th, 2023 05:35

A Question of Waste
Fay Slimm. said:

Good and needed point made mon ami. A question that should be put and answered by those who could make a difference and that means all of those living in the plentiful side of the world - including us....x

March 28th, 2023 04:36

In a Moment of Poetry
MendedFences27 said:

At first, I thought this would turn out to be an Enlightenment era painting of a woman by the sea, but no, it is your vision, your way of finding beauty in the simpler forms of life. Thank you for posting this and lifting my spirits, - Phil A.

March 27th, 2023 19:30

In a Moment of Poetry
Accidental Poet said:

Sounds like someone I know N. Wonderful write.

March 27th, 2023 19:25

Upon the Very Cusp of Spring
Accidental Poet said:

The smile of Spring always shines through N. 😉

March 27th, 2023 19:22

In a Moment of Poetry
Doggerel Dave said:

Just a moment? No aftermath?
I have a moment like that - sans shore... sans sandals... sans shawl... sans - sorry It\'s private.
An enjoyable thought you provoked, Neville - worth the read.

March 27th, 2023 19:17

In a Moment of Poetry
Bella Shepard said:

The perfect moment, how many do we have over a lifetime? Bundle them up, and keep them safe for they do inspire. A lovely write dear friend.

March 27th, 2023 15:17

In a Moment of Poetry
arqios said:

Life does come across as a series of poetic moments and some of which are so exhilarating we wish them not to end!

March 27th, 2023 06:53



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