Comments received on poems by Neville
When They Would Lose Their Shadows
jarcher54 said:
You brought that figure to life... a true gift my friend. This is moving and playful and memorable. Bravo.
April 7th, 2023 18:16
jarcher54 said:
You brought that figure to life... a true gift my friend. This is moving and playful and memorable. Bravo.
April 7th, 2023 18:16
When They Would Lose Their Shadows
Fay Slimm. said:
Some of those statues have a lot to answer for mi amigo - - love the way you pen the suspense ahead with comparative personification. Great read............x
April 7th, 2023 06:18
Fay Slimm. said:
Some of those statues have a lot to answer for mi amigo - - love the way you pen the suspense ahead with comparative personification. Great read............x
April 7th, 2023 06:18
When They Would Lose Their Shadows
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
This poem, \"When They Would Lose Their Shadows\", captures the sensuality and intimacy of a relationship through vivid imagery and subtle language.
April 7th, 2023 04:36
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
This poem, \"When They Would Lose Their Shadows\", captures the sensuality and intimacy of a relationship through vivid imagery and subtle language.
April 7th, 2023 04:36
When They Would Lose Their Shadows
orchidee said:
Good write Neville.
KP has a certain whiff - of a sewage farm! lol.
When will you stop being horrible to her? says Fido.
April 7th, 2023 04:29
orchidee said:
Good write Neville.
KP has a certain whiff - of a sewage farm! lol.
When will you stop being horrible to her? says Fido.
April 7th, 2023 04:29
When They Would Lose Their Shadows
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(Unearthed
we delve free of restraint
a touch, a glimpse
a shared intimacy devoid of reason
seeking, that which fantasy fails to imagine
I remember, warmth
in cold eyes, daring me to dream
my fingers
trembling, and ice dancing cacophonous
as I approached
a glass in each hand, a stutter in every step
wordless, knowing
she was already sipping on wine
I offered her a glass
statuesque, we stared
life pressed play, around us
she and i, lost
to existence\'s influence
only that winking moon, teased us
it all felt like it lasted a lifetime
.. then she took my glass
emptied her wine, right there on the grass
by my shoes, some dropped on the leather
I looked down, tagged by her scent
and I smiled, wide as a gaping cloud
and offered my glass, to toast
a new chapter in our life
she, merely blinked
in-time, with our shared pulsating beat
...
that night, we hardly moved
all night
merely spoke till silence, rudely interrupted
by alerting us
to the absence of everyone else
that night
our shadows, danced naked
as that knowing moon, serenaded us
...)
April 7th, 2023 04:00
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(Unearthed
we delve free of restraint
a touch, a glimpse
a shared intimacy devoid of reason
seeking, that which fantasy fails to imagine
I remember, warmth
in cold eyes, daring me to dream
my fingers
trembling, and ice dancing cacophonous
as I approached
a glass in each hand, a stutter in every step
wordless, knowing
she was already sipping on wine
I offered her a glass
statuesque, we stared
life pressed play, around us
she and i, lost
to existence\'s influence
only that winking moon, teased us
it all felt like it lasted a lifetime
.. then she took my glass
emptied her wine, right there on the grass
by my shoes, some dropped on the leather
I looked down, tagged by her scent
and I smiled, wide as a gaping cloud
and offered my glass, to toast
a new chapter in our life
she, merely blinked
in-time, with our shared pulsating beat
...
that night, we hardly moved
all night
merely spoke till silence, rudely interrupted
by alerting us
to the absence of everyone else
that night
our shadows, danced naked
as that knowing moon, serenaded us
...)
April 7th, 2023 04:00
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
L. B. Mek said:
(progression, without assimilation
is that \'folly\' of youthful verve
quick, to look for that next
move-on, move past n forget..
we, older souls
tend to take our time, consolidate
whatever we may have gleaned
before we set our mind, to cauterising
that hurt, we\'re so eager to shed...)
Hyung, I feel your words need to be shared
once a month
again n again
like prescription poetic therapy for all of humanity..
thank you!, dear Poet supreme
April 7th, 2023 02:01
L. B. Mek said:
(progression, without assimilation
is that \'folly\' of youthful verve
quick, to look for that next
move-on, move past n forget..
we, older souls
tend to take our time, consolidate
whatever we may have gleaned
before we set our mind, to cauterising
that hurt, we\'re so eager to shed...)
Hyung, I feel your words need to be shared
once a month
again n again
like prescription poetic therapy for all of humanity..
thank you!, dear Poet supreme
April 7th, 2023 02:01
Dance of The Wind Children
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful!!!
I shall come back to these words time n again
dear cherished friend
April 7th, 2023 01:55
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful!!!
I shall come back to these words time n again
dear cherished friend
April 7th, 2023 01:55
Folly
L. B. Mek said:
such an enigma
these words, that convey
a link to experiences n feelings
we though we\'d long forgotten..
wonderful flow Hyung
I really like your conversational tone
(half-truth\'s, do so entice
distance, as life\'s enamouring guile
folly as fallibility\'s, cousin
we wink at one
so as to decimate, regret
with our wilful, smiles
and on
till that next folly, reveals herself
we only know two gears in life
\'D\' for \'dive-in heart first\'
and
\'L\' for \'learning from our mistakes\')
April 7th, 2023 01:53
L. B. Mek said:
such an enigma
these words, that convey
a link to experiences n feelings
we though we\'d long forgotten..
wonderful flow Hyung
I really like your conversational tone
(half-truth\'s, do so entice
distance, as life\'s enamouring guile
folly as fallibility\'s, cousin
we wink at one
so as to decimate, regret
with our wilful, smiles
and on
till that next folly, reveals herself
we only know two gears in life
\'D\' for \'dive-in heart first\'
and
\'L\' for \'learning from our mistakes\')
April 7th, 2023 01:53
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
MendedFences27 said:
There is not a line long enough. You have exposed a great human trait. We all keep our secrets deeply hidden in our souls. Oh well, we\'ll just have to live with them. - Phil A.
April 6th, 2023 13:24
MendedFences27 said:
There is not a line long enough. You have exposed a great human trait. We all keep our secrets deeply hidden in our souls. Oh well, we\'ll just have to live with them. - Phil A.
April 6th, 2023 13:24
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
MysteryGhost said:
Wonderful poem with a nice deep meaning
April 6th, 2023 08:21
MysteryGhost said:
Wonderful poem with a nice deep meaning
April 6th, 2023 08:21
Dance of The Wind Children
MysteryGhost said:
Ngl I\'d expect this to be taught in my english class. Sad it isnt.
April 6th, 2023 08:19
MysteryGhost said:
Ngl I\'d expect this to be taught in my english class. Sad it isnt.
April 6th, 2023 08:19
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
Accidental Poet said:
I try to walk a fine line in life N. As my dog Satuit would say if he had the vocal cords, \"wag more, bark less\". 😎 Well penned Sir.
April 6th, 2023 08:11
Accidental Poet said:
I try to walk a fine line in life N. As my dog Satuit would say if he had the vocal cords, \"wag more, bark less\". 😎 Well penned Sir.
April 6th, 2023 08:11
Dance of The Wind Children
Rocky Lagou said:
Omg, \"dandelion children,\" literally so exact and evocative of my own childhood. Thanks Neville for your eternal wisdom.
April 6th, 2023 07:37
Rocky Lagou said:
Omg, \"dandelion children,\" literally so exact and evocative of my own childhood. Thanks Neville for your eternal wisdom.
April 6th, 2023 07:37
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
Christina8 said:
This is an incredible write, I love it. All the fine lines under our white lies make them a little more bearable, huh? Including, as you say \"the big dark secrets that we presently keep\". Moving..
April 6th, 2023 04:53
Christina8 said:
This is an incredible write, I love it. All the fine lines under our white lies make them a little more bearable, huh? Including, as you say \"the big dark secrets that we presently keep\". Moving..
April 6th, 2023 04:53
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
Fay Slimm. said:
Those fine lines can become apt reminders mon ami that white lies can darken and secrets weigh heavy if mistakenly outed. Good ideas to consider before life gets darkened with too many lines...............x
April 6th, 2023 03:46
Fay Slimm. said:
Those fine lines can become apt reminders mon ami that white lies can darken and secrets weigh heavy if mistakenly outed. Good ideas to consider before life gets darkened with too many lines...............x
April 6th, 2023 03:46
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
Lorna said:
Whoa! Outrageous read - sooooooooo good.
April 6th, 2023 03:42
Lorna said:
Whoa! Outrageous read - sooooooooo good.
April 6th, 2023 03:42
When a Fine Line Might Just Make it Okay
orchidee said:
I dunno what botox secrets KP keeps from me, probably 1,001 secrets. lol.
April 6th, 2023 01:52
orchidee said:
I dunno what botox secrets KP keeps from me, probably 1,001 secrets. lol.
April 6th, 2023 01:52
Dance of The Wind Children
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true Neville, we must not stop them from going their own way.
Andy
April 6th, 2023 00:31
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true Neville, we must not stop them from going their own way.
Andy
April 6th, 2023 00:31
Dance of The Wind Children
MendedFences27 said:
\"Dandelion children,\" or our own they must all go... their separate ways.\" A great take on letting go. - Phil A.
April 5th, 2023 19:10
MendedFences27 said:
\"Dandelion children,\" or our own they must all go... their separate ways.\" A great take on letting go. - Phil A.
April 5th, 2023 19:10
Dance of The Wind Children
Christina8 said:
I like this short poem, so descriptive and well done!
April 5th, 2023 09:07
Christina8 said:
I like this short poem, so descriptive and well done!
April 5th, 2023 09:07
Dance of The Wind Children
orchidee said:
Good write N.
Wish KP would go her separate ways, but she always come back like a bad.... penny/apple/smell/ boomerang! lol.
April 5th, 2023 07:57
orchidee said:
Good write N.
Wish KP would go her separate ways, but she always come back like a bad.... penny/apple/smell/ boomerang! lol.
April 5th, 2023 07:57
Dance of The Wind Children
Accidental Poet said:
All children dance to the beat of a different drum. Let them dance on, and on, and on... 👍
April 5th, 2023 07:14
Accidental Poet said:
All children dance to the beat of a different drum. Let them dance on, and on, and on... 👍
April 5th, 2023 07:14
Dance of The Wind Children
arqios said:
Awesome image here and like a video playing in my head N! Let\'s join the dance though we remain at our corners.
April 5th, 2023 06:43
arqios said:
Awesome image here and like a video playing in my head N! Let\'s join the dance though we remain at our corners.
April 5th, 2023 06:43
Dance of The Wind Children
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"Dance of the Wind Children\" is a beautiful poem that celebrates the free-spirited nature of youth and the importance of individuality.
April 5th, 2023 04:09
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"Dance of the Wind Children\" is a beautiful poem that celebrates the free-spirited nature of youth and the importance of individuality.
April 5th, 2023 04:09
Dance of The Wind Children
Lorna said:
Love love this mighty shorty.............
April 5th, 2023 03:45
Lorna said:
Love love this mighty shorty.............
April 5th, 2023 03:45
Folly
Doggerel Dave said:
Mystique won the......err......day, I\'d say..........
April 4th, 2023 07:24
Doggerel Dave said:
Mystique won the......err......day, I\'d say..........
April 4th, 2023 07:24
Folly
orchidee said:
Ohhh, I know, KP aims to look perfect, but it\'s just too much botox! lol
April 4th, 2023 04:49
orchidee said:
Ohhh, I know, KP aims to look perfect, but it\'s just too much botox! lol
April 4th, 2023 04:49
Folly
Fay Slimm. said:
Methinks when perfection appears out of nowhere folly is often forgotten - - an intriguing situation in this alluringly half-exposed tale................x
April 4th, 2023 04:48
Fay Slimm. said:
Methinks when perfection appears out of nowhere folly is often forgotten - - an intriguing situation in this alluringly half-exposed tale................x
April 4th, 2023 04:48
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