Comments received on poems by Neville
Laccaria Amethystina
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
how I envy your poetry\'s subtle touch, Hyung
voicing everyday life\'s \'relationship ikiness\'
in three lines
while I can barely scratch surfaces
after hundreds of poems..
thank you! for inspiring me, yet again
(\'amethyst deceiver\'
and the deception?
a scenic wordles promise, that love will continue to mushroom
and grow in each other\'s hearts,
and for some, it will
so i guess not a false promise
but for us
all that was left was the purple stain
on that chest pocket
of once untainted shirt\'s and shawl\'s
no finger pointing or loud voices
just that overindulgent assumption
all is ok
because smiles are on display
only
that purple poison, has set-in
and all we can do
is ink it in poetry lines, release it
to wash our hopes clean
awaiting another chance
where lasting trees can be planted
instead, in those
delicate pulsing gardens
where love dwells
and then our promises, can be rooted
to much more resilient, serendipity\'s..)
October 31st, 2022 08:27
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
how I envy your poetry\'s subtle touch, Hyung
voicing everyday life\'s \'relationship ikiness\'
in three lines
while I can barely scratch surfaces
after hundreds of poems..
thank you! for inspiring me, yet again
(\'amethyst deceiver\'
and the deception?
a scenic wordles promise, that love will continue to mushroom
and grow in each other\'s hearts,
and for some, it will
so i guess not a false promise
but for us
all that was left was the purple stain
on that chest pocket
of once untainted shirt\'s and shawl\'s
no finger pointing or loud voices
just that overindulgent assumption
all is ok
because smiles are on display
only
that purple poison, has set-in
and all we can do
is ink it in poetry lines, release it
to wash our hopes clean
awaiting another chance
where lasting trees can be planted
instead, in those
delicate pulsing gardens
where love dwells
and then our promises, can be rooted
to much more resilient, serendipity\'s..)
October 31st, 2022 08:27
Laccaria Amethystina
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh Laccaria Amethystina -- take care if you meet her - she\'s an arson absorber but with a name like that how could she do anything but beautifully deceive - - love the way you play with her colourful nature...............x
October 31st, 2022 08:05
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh Laccaria Amethystina -- take care if you meet her - she\'s an arson absorber but with a name like that how could she do anything but beautifully deceive - - love the way you play with her colourful nature...............x
October 31st, 2022 08:05
Laccaria Amethystina
Doggerel Dave said:
\'Darling\' never worked, whereas \'Laccaria Amethystina\' threw her into a frenzy.....
October 31st, 2022 08:04
Doggerel Dave said:
\'Darling\' never worked, whereas \'Laccaria Amethystina\' threw her into a frenzy.....
October 31st, 2022 08:04
Primroses and Kites
Goldfinch60 said:
Kites are wonderful birds to see, they appear over our croquet lawn very often.
Andy
October 31st, 2022 02:48
Goldfinch60 said:
Kites are wonderful birds to see, they appear over our croquet lawn very often.
Andy
October 31st, 2022 02:48
Primroses and Kites
Bella Shepard said:
When I was a child March winds brought kite season, and the sky was full of them. I rarely see one these days, mores the pity. But I can enjoy the primroses, so all is not lost. So nice that we may all share these lovely, simple joys. Thank you dear friend.
October 30th, 2022 14:32
Bella Shepard said:
When I was a child March winds brought kite season, and the sky was full of them. I rarely see one these days, mores the pity. But I can enjoy the primroses, so all is not lost. So nice that we may all share these lovely, simple joys. Thank you dear friend.
October 30th, 2022 14:32
Primroses and Kites
arqios said:
Oh, those kites! My word what an awesome pairing the primroses and kites!
October 30th, 2022 09:31
arqios said:
Oh, those kites! My word what an awesome pairing the primroses and kites!
October 30th, 2022 09:31
Primroses and Kites
Fay Slimm. said:
Play-days are ever remembered when kites dance the blue in my daily wanderings Nev - - your write set me off looking back on those gone springtimes of picked bunches of yellowness too. Great that more folk now play and grow in those same places though eh ? ...................x
October 30th, 2022 06:12
Fay Slimm. said:
Play-days are ever remembered when kites dance the blue in my daily wanderings Nev - - your write set me off looking back on those gone springtimes of picked bunches of yellowness too. Great that more folk now play and grow in those same places though eh ? ...................x
October 30th, 2022 06:12
Primroses and Kites
Caring dove said:
Nice writing )) I once wrote a poem about a kite .
October 30th, 2022 05:39
Caring dove said:
Nice writing )) I once wrote a poem about a kite .
October 30th, 2022 05:39
Primroses and Kites
Doggerel Dave said:
Wadyamean, \'maybe\'? Best news of the week surely, Neville!
October 30th, 2022 04:46
Doggerel Dave said:
Wadyamean, \'maybe\'? Best news of the week surely, Neville!
October 30th, 2022 04:46
Looking Forward to Change
Goldfinch60 said:
May your wishes be true Neville and she has grown into a wonderful woman.
Andy
October 30th, 2022 02:41
Goldfinch60 said:
May your wishes be true Neville and she has grown into a wonderful woman.
Andy
October 30th, 2022 02:41
Looking Forward to Change
Bella Shepard said:
In our youth, time is here and now. It becomes a commodity to consume, and then move on. But time will also allow growth and reflection. And the selfishness of youth can be replaced by a greater depth of understanding. There is always hope that it may be so. Excellent analogy of flakes in a snow globe. A very thoughtful write dear friend.
October 29th, 2022 14:36
Bella Shepard said:
In our youth, time is here and now. It becomes a commodity to consume, and then move on. But time will also allow growth and reflection. And the selfishness of youth can be replaced by a greater depth of understanding. There is always hope that it may be so. Excellent analogy of flakes in a snow globe. A very thoughtful write dear friend.
October 29th, 2022 14:36
Looking Forward to Change
orchidee said:
Could I meet her?! lol.
I was \'looking forward\' or was it \'backward\' in that the shopping precinct clock went back an hour LAST week. Hope they don\'t change it again. Some dunce changed it a week early. Doh!
October 29th, 2022 11:24
orchidee said:
Could I meet her?! lol.
I was \'looking forward\' or was it \'backward\' in that the shopping precinct clock went back an hour LAST week. Hope they don\'t change it again. Some dunce changed it a week early. Doh!
October 29th, 2022 11:24
Looking Forward to Change
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve had a troubled love life, haven\'t you, Nev? I hope that, apart from providing plentiful poetic material, it hasn\'t damaged you irretrievably. 🙂
October 29th, 2022 07:20
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve had a troubled love life, haven\'t you, Nev? I hope that, apart from providing plentiful poetic material, it hasn\'t damaged you irretrievably. 🙂
October 29th, 2022 07:20
Looking Forward to Change
Fay Slimm. said:
A child eventually grows into self-knowing and often surprises onlookers meanwhile - - time itself is so fragile and transient my friend - --
such a wise penning on coping with change..............x
October 29th, 2022 06:03
Fay Slimm. said:
A child eventually grows into self-knowing and often surprises onlookers meanwhile - - time itself is so fragile and transient my friend - --
such a wise penning on coping with change..............x
October 29th, 2022 06:03
Looking Forward to Change
Poetic Dan said:
You was at the top of the list so got first pick I have much to admit and may I of out grown all the childhood memories that keep my stomach churning!
May that breeze of change take us where we need to be, keep writing on!
Thanks for sharing
October 29th, 2022 05:45
Poetic Dan said:
You was at the top of the list so got first pick I have much to admit and may I of out grown all the childhood memories that keep my stomach churning!
May that breeze of change take us where we need to be, keep writing on!
Thanks for sharing
October 29th, 2022 05:45
Premature Evacuation
arqios said:
What you did there brings the two events into alignment one metaphorising the other without the other ever being mentioned, only alluded to, and that only partially. An amelioration of the guttered mind. Proficiat!
October 28th, 2022 19:02
arqios said:
What you did there brings the two events into alignment one metaphorising the other without the other ever being mentioned, only alluded to, and that only partially. An amelioration of the guttered mind. Proficiat!
October 28th, 2022 19:02
Premature Evacuation
orchidee said:
I might have swooned if the title was - woof - Fido won\'t let me say it! (that\'s my excuse. lol).
October 28th, 2022 12:28
orchidee said:
I might have swooned if the title was - woof - Fido won\'t let me say it! (that\'s my excuse. lol).
October 28th, 2022 12:28
Premature Evacuation
Fay Slimm. said:
How often angry words uttered leave seeds of regret - - your spirited lines veer close to female
need to voice frustration until that is she finds her evacuation was a bit premature. - - all in the game eh
- - - - but that\'s how the cookie falls in most love affairs - - imagine the making up afterwards tho\'. .............x
October 28th, 2022 11:17
Fay Slimm. said:
How often angry words uttered leave seeds of regret - - your spirited lines veer close to female
need to voice frustration until that is she finds her evacuation was a bit premature. - - all in the game eh
- - - - but that\'s how the cookie falls in most love affairs - - imagine the making up afterwards tho\'. .............x
October 28th, 2022 11:17
Ciao
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(In a blink she\'s back at my hip
linked
like we were at first glimpse
all teeth and fingers entwined
in a fate we once knew, designed
for us to ever-walk as just the two of us...
then a new blink, and reality
washes away all that dreamy yearning
a shake of the head, a sigh of released regret
and take a step to what awaits
but away
from that we wish could be reclaimed,
and-on we trudge - on
in hopes of finally finding that permanence
we seek...)
October 28th, 2022 04:39
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(In a blink she\'s back at my hip
linked
like we were at first glimpse
all teeth and fingers entwined
in a fate we once knew, designed
for us to ever-walk as just the two of us...
then a new blink, and reality
washes away all that dreamy yearning
a shake of the head, a sigh of released regret
and take a step to what awaits
but away
from that we wish could be reclaimed,
and-on we trudge - on
in hopes of finally finding that permanence
we seek...)
October 28th, 2022 04:39
Internally Yours
L. B. Mek said:
\'simultaneous flexing
the pulsing,
the squeezing and those
delicious
after shock spasms\'
you missed your calling, dear Poet
I\'m sure there\'s a few \'Fifty Shades of Lava heat on a page\'
waiting to entice the world, if ever you feel liking putting it down in risqué ink..
lol
(Dylan must have been fun)
October 28th, 2022 04:30
L. B. Mek said:
\'simultaneous flexing
the pulsing,
the squeezing and those
delicious
after shock spasms\'
you missed your calling, dear Poet
I\'m sure there\'s a few \'Fifty Shades of Lava heat on a page\'
waiting to entice the world, if ever you feel liking putting it down in risqué ink..
lol
(Dylan must have been fun)
October 28th, 2022 04:30
Ciao
orchidee said:
Where ya going? When will ya be back? Will ya be back at all?
So many questions. Have ya already gone? Have ya been and gone and are ya back by now?
Do shut up Orchi, says Fido. You\'re giving me a headache prattling on.
October 28th, 2022 02:16
orchidee said:
Where ya going? When will ya be back? Will ya be back at all?
So many questions. Have ya already gone? Have ya been and gone and are ya back by now?
Do shut up Orchi, says Fido. You\'re giving me a headache prattling on.
October 28th, 2022 02:16
Ciao
arqios said:
Ah! Arrested breath and stunned thought process. The finality is brutal. The word \'once\' though, lingers and fuels thoughts into the distance. Provocative and packs a punch.
October 28th, 2022 00:46
arqios said:
Ah! Arrested breath and stunned thought process. The finality is brutal. The word \'once\' though, lingers and fuels thoughts into the distance. Provocative and packs a punch.
October 28th, 2022 00:46
Ciao
Doggerel Dave said:
You made it, by virtue of it\'s brevity a piece which didn\'t leave me in suspenders for too long, Nev.
Initial hypothesis formed during the first lines was: an Adios to all at MPS.
Reassured latterly.
October 27th, 2022 18:03
Doggerel Dave said:
You made it, by virtue of it\'s brevity a piece which didn\'t leave me in suspenders for too long, Nev.
Initial hypothesis formed during the first lines was: an Adios to all at MPS.
Reassured latterly.
October 27th, 2022 18:03
Ciao
Fay Slimm. said:
Oooh Nev - - - this reads like the saddest of final farewells and in just a few lines you capture the untenable pain of a love that strong it takes over every aspect of life - - - sighing big here - ........x
October 27th, 2022 15:14
Fay Slimm. said:
Oooh Nev - - - this reads like the saddest of final farewells and in just a few lines you capture the untenable pain of a love that strong it takes over every aspect of life - - - sighing big here - ........x
October 27th, 2022 15:14
Internally Yours
Goldfinch60 said:
You certainly left us with a BANG Neville, enjoy your time away.
Andy
October 26th, 2022 01:02
Goldfinch60 said:
You certainly left us with a BANG Neville, enjoy your time away.
Andy
October 26th, 2022 01:02
Internally Yours
Bella Shepard said:
Hot, sensual, evocative, whew! I especially love the witty, double entendre at the end, so I think I know where you\'re coming from. Don\'t forget to tell Bob hi from me.
October 25th, 2022 13:13
Bella Shepard said:
Hot, sensual, evocative, whew! I especially love the witty, double entendre at the end, so I think I know where you\'re coming from. Don\'t forget to tell Bob hi from me.
October 25th, 2022 13:13
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