Comments received on poems by Neville
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
SureshG said:
I can totally relate to the intense emotions you have exposed, for I have witnessed first hand the mental trauma they experience, and my abject failure in getting through to them. Though poetic, yet powerful
July 6th, 2021 12:43
SureshG said:
I can totally relate to the intense emotions you have exposed, for I have witnessed first hand the mental trauma they experience, and my abject failure in getting through to them. Though poetic, yet powerful
July 6th, 2021 12:43
No Mean Feet
dusk arising said:
So how are your feet now Neville? LOL
The maintenance of a good lady\'s esteem requires more than the occasional, out of the blue, turn up. The emphasis here upon the word \'good\'.
July 6th, 2021 07:08
dusk arising said:
So how are your feet now Neville? LOL
The maintenance of a good lady\'s esteem requires more than the occasional, out of the blue, turn up. The emphasis here upon the word \'good\'.
July 6th, 2021 07:08
No Mean Feet
Doggerel Dave said:
A wee bit of tension going on there? They\'ve got one hell of a past, Neville, and he may need his feet in good condition to get out in a hurry....
July 6th, 2021 06:38
Doggerel Dave said:
A wee bit of tension going on there? They\'ve got one hell of a past, Neville, and he may need his feet in good condition to get out in a hurry....
July 6th, 2021 06:38
No Mean Feet
Fay Slimm. said:
Was it Louis Armstrong who sang \"I dunt luv ya cos ya feets too big\" - -or did I dream that one up after reading your exposure of a weak excuse for not gettin\' in touch - whatever amigo I giggled until the last line - then saw how volatile your ladies are gettin\' lately - - all in the game of love tho\' eh .......... x
July 6th, 2021 06:16
Fay Slimm. said:
Was it Louis Armstrong who sang \"I dunt luv ya cos ya feets too big\" - -or did I dream that one up after reading your exposure of a weak excuse for not gettin\' in touch - whatever amigo I giggled until the last line - then saw how volatile your ladies are gettin\' lately - - all in the game of love tho\' eh .......... x
July 6th, 2021 06:16
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Goldfinch60 said:
Such sadness in these words, I too have spoken to a young girl whose only way out seemed to be self harming, I hope that my words helped her.
Self harming seems so prevalent nowadays in young people so what is going wrong in these days are they not being treated well by their parents/guardians.
Strange world.
Andy
July 6th, 2021 00:41
Goldfinch60 said:
Such sadness in these words, I too have spoken to a young girl whose only way out seemed to be self harming, I hope that my words helped her.
Self harming seems so prevalent nowadays in young people so what is going wrong in these days are they not being treated well by their parents/guardians.
Strange world.
Andy
July 6th, 2021 00:41
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Neville.
An interesting character to write about. What was the source of her tension?
July 5th, 2021 08:40
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Neville.
An interesting character to write about. What was the source of her tension?
July 5th, 2021 08:40
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Accidental Poet said:
I had often heard of young people cutting themselves, and never understood why they could do such a thing. Now, after reading your poem here N, I feel like I do understand why they cut themselves, and that they can learn to not do so. To value their life and future. Great write N. ; )
July 5th, 2021 08:31
Accidental Poet said:
I had often heard of young people cutting themselves, and never understood why they could do such a thing. Now, after reading your poem here N, I feel like I do understand why they cut themselves, and that they can learn to not do so. To value their life and future. Great write N. ; )
July 5th, 2021 08:31
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Neville said:
The following individual response is specifically for Doggerel Dave .. but anyone else too if interested ..
Hello DD,
Am so glad you asked that question ..
The inspiration for this little scribble actually sprang from one of the very last clinical sessions I had with a young South American patient of mine who used to cut her beautiful self terribly as a means of tension release ...
I am in fact both proud and pleased to report she has never admitted (and I believe her) having cut her self since ... I get a card each year both for Christmas (she does not know I am Buddhist) and my birthday ....
All Good Things,
Neville :)
July 5th, 2021 07:51
Neville said:
The following individual response is specifically for Doggerel Dave .. but anyone else too if interested ..
Hello DD,
Am so glad you asked that question ..
The inspiration for this little scribble actually sprang from one of the very last clinical sessions I had with a young South American patient of mine who used to cut her beautiful self terribly as a means of tension release ...
I am in fact both proud and pleased to report she has never admitted (and I believe her) having cut her self since ... I get a card each year both for Christmas (she does not know I am Buddhist) and my birthday ....
All Good Things,
Neville :)
July 5th, 2021 07:51
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
L. B. Mek said:
its an archaic, yet ageless tradition
to let our poisonous roots - bleed, to heal
although
the drippings, that trail our regrets
follow us, long - long: after our poem\'s
tableau...
what a brilliant, subtle
and heart wrenchingly acute depiction, my friend
\'so - so relatable
that infuriating: suddenness
of too, fuckin late!\'
July 5th, 2021 07:32
L. B. Mek said:
its an archaic, yet ageless tradition
to let our poisonous roots - bleed, to heal
although
the drippings, that trail our regrets
follow us, long - long: after our poem\'s
tableau...
what a brilliant, subtle
and heart wrenchingly acute depiction, my friend
\'so - so relatable
that infuriating: suddenness
of too, fuckin late!\'
July 5th, 2021 07:32
Geraldine
L. B. Mek said:
I always liked the word \'Passing\'
in this context
see, between Nature and \'We\'
of sentient awareness, what\'s unquestionable
is that gentle resonance, we feel
intuitively - mostly;
where, what we see - has a role
in what we feel, and
what we - celebrate, has a tether
to what we let go...
so this here words of dedication, serenade
that timeless tradition
where Nature salutes, and winks
to comfortingly let us know, there may
be more to our story
after those final blinked curtains
open our passageway
to that encore of relativity, awaiting
our realisation
of unbreakable connectivity, to all things
deemed existence
in that endless - matter, of our universe.
(I\'m sorry for you loss brother
and I thank you
for creating sometime so beautiful
out of the Phoenix: of your unwavering Love)
July 5th, 2021 07:21
L. B. Mek said:
I always liked the word \'Passing\'
in this context
see, between Nature and \'We\'
of sentient awareness, what\'s unquestionable
is that gentle resonance, we feel
intuitively - mostly;
where, what we see - has a role
in what we feel, and
what we - celebrate, has a tether
to what we let go...
so this here words of dedication, serenade
that timeless tradition
where Nature salutes, and winks
to comfortingly let us know, there may
be more to our story
after those final blinked curtains
open our passageway
to that encore of relativity, awaiting
our realisation
of unbreakable connectivity, to all things
deemed existence
in that endless - matter, of our universe.
(I\'m sorry for you loss brother
and I thank you
for creating sometime so beautiful
out of the Phoenix: of your unwavering Love)
July 5th, 2021 07:21
Three T’s
L. B. Mek said:
\'selfless, selfish and surreal
three S\'s, that distractedly insure
we\'re all hindered, just enough\'
to be left at the mercy
of your Tyrannical: T\'s..
a thought provoking shorty, thanks for the insight
dear poet
July 5th, 2021 07:05
L. B. Mek said:
\'selfless, selfish and surreal
three S\'s, that distractedly insure
we\'re all hindered, just enough\'
to be left at the mercy
of your Tyrannical: T\'s..
a thought provoking shorty, thanks for the insight
dear poet
July 5th, 2021 07:05
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
orchidee said:
If she leaves, send her to me. or will she be too much for me?!
You\'ve stunned me into silence - no singing! I heard horrific stores about cutting. *shudders*.
I only use razor blades for shaving. It\'s Too Much Info to tell you cutting details I heard.
July 5th, 2021 04:35
orchidee said:
If she leaves, send her to me. or will she be too much for me?!
You\'ve stunned me into silence - no singing! I heard horrific stores about cutting. *shudders*.
I only use razor blades for shaving. It\'s Too Much Info to tell you cutting details I heard.
July 5th, 2021 04:35
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
Fay Slimm. said:
Seems like no compatible answer to this familiar request my friend...... your title depicts a well known phrase --- but I do hope it turned out right in the end for those two.
July 5th, 2021 04:12
Fay Slimm. said:
Seems like no compatible answer to this familiar request my friend...... your title depicts a well known phrase --- but I do hope it turned out right in the end for those two.
July 5th, 2021 04:12
Maybe One of Us Should Leave
dusk arising said:
Deja vu. Those words mean it\'s all over mate. She\'s saying one of us (you) should piss off but couched in female guile.
< sings> Gimmie the moonlight, gimmie the guile....
July 5th, 2021 02:53
dusk arising said:
Deja vu. Those words mean it\'s all over mate. She\'s saying one of us (you) should piss off but couched in female guile.
< sings> Gimmie the moonlight, gimmie the guile....
July 5th, 2021 02:53
Geraldine
dusk arising said:
To physically mark the paasing of an aniversay with the action as you did can be a release of the pain we feel on these occasions. You post today tells of deep emotional feelings of loss.
July 4th, 2021 15:34
dusk arising said:
To physically mark the paasing of an aniversay with the action as you did can be a release of the pain we feel on these occasions. You post today tells of deep emotional feelings of loss.
July 4th, 2021 15:34
Geraldine
MendedFences27 said:
Strong emotions here in this poem, and your comments add to the symbolism of love. Sunflowers and dolphins to honor a loved ones\' passing. Is there a connection? A lovely tribute. - Phil A.
July 4th, 2021 12:46
MendedFences27 said:
Strong emotions here in this poem, and your comments add to the symbolism of love. Sunflowers and dolphins to honor a loved ones\' passing. Is there a connection? A lovely tribute. - Phil A.
July 4th, 2021 12:46
Geraldine
Doggerel Dave said:
A swim past to balance your tribute – even I have to admit that sometimes the world has a mysterious synchronicity, Neville.
July 4th, 2021 06:22
Doggerel Dave said:
A swim past to balance your tribute – even I have to admit that sometimes the world has a mysterious synchronicity, Neville.
July 4th, 2021 06:22
Geraldine
Fay Slimm. said:
This caring tribute to a much missed lady must have been hard to scribe my friend - but what a awesome message those dolphins brought you and right on cue dear Nev. -- am with you in the deep loss of a loved one and truly feel the emotion of your heartfelt and tender remembrance of Geraldine.
July 4th, 2021 04:28
Fay Slimm. said:
This caring tribute to a much missed lady must have been hard to scribe my friend - but what a awesome message those dolphins brought you and right on cue dear Nev. -- am with you in the deep loss of a loved one and truly feel the emotion of your heartfelt and tender remembrance of Geraldine.
July 4th, 2021 04:28
Geraldine
Accidental Poet said:
Meaningfully penned N. A strong pull on this heart. ; )
July 4th, 2021 03:47
Accidental Poet said:
Meaningfully penned N. A strong pull on this heart. ; )
July 4th, 2021 03:47
Three T’s
MendedFences27 said:
Of the three, \"time\" is the most consistent. Perpetually there, racing onward. Every second ticks away and we wonder, \"Have I wasted another?\"
and so we write as if to be useful.
A very concise yet haunting threat to all of us. I sit here asking myself \"What\'s next?\" - Phil A.
July 3rd, 2021 18:49
MendedFences27 said:
Of the three, \"time\" is the most consistent. Perpetually there, racing onward. Every second ticks away and we wonder, \"Have I wasted another?\"
and so we write as if to be useful.
A very concise yet haunting threat to all of us. I sit here asking myself \"What\'s next?\" - Phil A.
July 3rd, 2021 18:49
Three T’s
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - I like this three T take on what gets man to face his limits Nev. - - strange but it made me think of the she\'s and what their three T\'s may reveal - hope you will smile as you read my three liner stating there are risks that women too cannot deny taking ................x
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Talk of taste for tease
when males start courting ladies
gives ease to no man\'s ardour.
July 3rd, 2021 11:07
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - I like this three T take on what gets man to face his limits Nev. - - strange but it made me think of the she\'s and what their three T\'s may reveal - hope you will smile as you read my three liner stating there are risks that women too cannot deny taking ................x
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Talk of taste for tease
when males start courting ladies
gives ease to no man\'s ardour.
July 3rd, 2021 11:07
Three T’s
Doggerel Dave said:
I’m not about to wait Neville - I’ve seen.
What I’m about now is dancing, dodging and dilly dallying, but especially dodging…
July 3rd, 2021 08:25
Doggerel Dave said:
I’m not about to wait Neville - I’ve seen.
What I’m about now is dancing, dodging and dilly dallying, but especially dodging…
July 3rd, 2021 08:25
Three T’s
orchidee said:
Sounds like one of them gals I met.
Ahh, so I\'m meeting them now, am I?!
July 3rd, 2021 07:20
orchidee said:
Sounds like one of them gals I met.
Ahh, so I\'m meeting them now, am I?!
July 3rd, 2021 07:20
Three T’s
dusk arising said:
Been there... T-shirt etc.
Short and punchy, just as the best always are.
July 3rd, 2021 04:37
dusk arising said:
Been there... T-shirt etc.
Short and punchy, just as the best always are.
July 3rd, 2021 04:37
All the Best Words
myself and me said:
Waiting for more best words from you. May I borrow a few from you?
July 2nd, 2021 20:58
myself and me said:
Waiting for more best words from you. May I borrow a few from you?
July 2nd, 2021 20:58
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