Comments received on poems by Neville
Forsaken
Fay Slimm. said:
Those who feel forsaken would be prey to sad memories and to despair - - you verse it so well here Nev with words like \"overstrung\" - -- a deep and dark read that gets under the skin.................. x
March 7th, 2020 11:58
Fay Slimm. said:
Those who feel forsaken would be prey to sad memories and to despair - - you verse it so well here Nev with words like \"overstrung\" - -- a deep and dark read that gets under the skin.................. x
March 7th, 2020 11:58
Broken
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful dark write Neville but once those clouds have passed the light will shine again.
Andy
March 7th, 2020 01:40
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful dark write Neville but once those clouds have passed the light will shine again.
Andy
March 7th, 2020 01:40
Broken
Michael Edwards said:
Really felt the weight of this - a finely crafted work.
March 6th, 2020 14:19
Michael Edwards said:
Really felt the weight of this - a finely crafted work.
March 6th, 2020 14:19
Broken
dusk arising said:
Streuth Neville this is a dark picture but oh my so beautifully painted/penned.
Though i don\'t imply that you are a \'dark\' minded personality, this is you at your best mate.
March 6th, 2020 10:50
dusk arising said:
Streuth Neville this is a dark picture but oh my so beautifully painted/penned.
Though i don\'t imply that you are a \'dark\' minded personality, this is you at your best mate.
March 6th, 2020 10:50
Broken
Neville said:
Hello Fay, what a very kind and encouraging little note you left for me earlier today... Many sincere thanks blowin your way 😎🍷x
March 6th, 2020 08:32
Neville said:
Hello Fay, what a very kind and encouraging little note you left for me earlier today... Many sincere thanks blowin your way 😎🍷x
March 6th, 2020 08:32
Broken
Fay Slimm. said:
You did again Nev. - - A sad medley of inventive imagery which captivates then culminates in achingly close togetherness - a tear-jerker for readers this intriguing read.
March 6th, 2020 08:02
Fay Slimm. said:
You did again Nev. - - A sad medley of inventive imagery which captivates then culminates in achingly close togetherness - a tear-jerker for readers this intriguing read.
March 6th, 2020 08:02
Sylvia\'s Mother Said
Goldfinch60 said:
The only certainty in life is death but each day we live must be enjoyed no matter what fate is in store for us.
Good write Neville.
Andy
March 5th, 2020 01:17
Goldfinch60 said:
The only certainty in life is death but each day we live must be enjoyed no matter what fate is in store for us.
Good write Neville.
Andy
March 5th, 2020 01:17
Sylvia\'s Mother Said
Fay Slimm. said:
A talented life ending the way that it did for Sylvia is such a sad and tragic happening.......... you pen the scene so realistically by delivering Mother\'s usual worry I was almost in that fateful room and was with every word to the finish. Brilliant writing again dear Neville.
March 4th, 2020 11:45
Fay Slimm. said:
A talented life ending the way that it did for Sylvia is such a sad and tragic happening.......... you pen the scene so realistically by delivering Mother\'s usual worry I was almost in that fateful room and was with every word to the finish. Brilliant writing again dear Neville.
March 4th, 2020 11:45
Sylvia\'s Mother Said
orchidee said:
I dunno Sylvia\'s mother, but we know a Miss Berles on this site - Cilla Berles (syllables!). Mentioned in my ramblings on comments to various poems. heehee.
March 4th, 2020 11:24
orchidee said:
I dunno Sylvia\'s mother, but we know a Miss Berles on this site - Cilla Berles (syllables!). Mentioned in my ramblings on comments to various poems. heehee.
March 4th, 2020 11:24
Sylvia\'s Mother Said
dusk arising said:
Something for us all waits at the end of the earthly existence we call life. A faith in the hereafter almost negates a good or bad way to pass though we all wish it painless.
A very sad tale from you today. Your poetic patchwork of a life\'s snippets encourages me to thunk it relates to your own experience. It is certainly deep in that i feel drawn in and thoughtful. I cautiously look forward to a response to my words here.
March 4th, 2020 08:42
dusk arising said:
Something for us all waits at the end of the earthly existence we call life. A faith in the hereafter almost negates a good or bad way to pass though we all wish it painless.
A very sad tale from you today. Your poetic patchwork of a life\'s snippets encourages me to thunk it relates to your own experience. It is certainly deep in that i feel drawn in and thoughtful. I cautiously look forward to a response to my words here.
March 4th, 2020 08:42
Global Warning
Fay Slimm. said:
An impressive title which drew me into its powerful body - versed with lots of stings this outcry for listening ears and a warning to read over again Nev - so into my favourite list.
March 3rd, 2020 09:24
Fay Slimm. said:
An impressive title which drew me into its powerful body - versed with lots of stings this outcry for listening ears and a warning to read over again Nev - so into my favourite list.
March 3rd, 2020 09:24
Global Warning
orchidee said:
Warming (in title bar) or warning (title in text)? A fine write Neville.
March 3rd, 2020 09:07
orchidee said:
Warming (in title bar) or warning (title in text)? A fine write Neville.
March 3rd, 2020 09:07
Global Warning
dusk arising said:
Meanwhile several million voices cried out as if in a silence of impotence for worldly leaders were counting cash.
March 3rd, 2020 08:45
dusk arising said:
Meanwhile several million voices cried out as if in a silence of impotence for worldly leaders were counting cash.
March 3rd, 2020 08:45
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Goldfinch60 said:
The words of love can be so simple yet so meaningful.
Andy
March 3rd, 2020 01:14
Goldfinch60 said:
The words of love can be so simple yet so meaningful.
Andy
March 3rd, 2020 01:14
Some Words Are Too Heavy
MendedFences27 said:
It appears to me that \"Cumbersome\" is both heavy\" and \"long\" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. \"To weave\" it through this love song would be a \"heavy\" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm\'s sake consider dropping the word \"single.\" No \'Love song\" should ever have the word \"single\" in it. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2020 23:33
MendedFences27 said:
It appears to me that \"Cumbersome\" is both heavy\" and \"long\" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. \"To weave\" it through this love song would be a \"heavy\" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm\'s sake consider dropping the word \"single.\" No \'Love song\" should ever have the word \"single\" in it. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2020 23:33
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
March 2nd, 2020 16:03
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
March 2nd, 2020 16:03
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Clara said:
Oh but we should say them anyway! Always enjoy reading them! Clever poem!
March 2nd, 2020 13:18
Clara said:
Oh but we should say them anyway! Always enjoy reading them! Clever poem!
March 2nd, 2020 13:18
Some Words Are Too Heavy
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
I know - them pesky \'evermore\'\'s\' are too long. have to shorten them to \'e\'ermore\'! lol. Such are poet\'s problems.
March 2nd, 2020 12:10
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
I know - them pesky \'evermore\'\'s\' are too long. have to shorten them to \'e\'ermore\'! lol. Such are poet\'s problems.
March 2nd, 2020 12:10
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
So many truths in your wonderful poem!
An enjoyable read indeed!
~Laura~🌻
March 2nd, 2020 11:31
Laura🌻 said:
Neville,
So many truths in your wonderful poem!
An enjoyable read indeed!
~Laura~🌻
March 2nd, 2020 11:31
Some Words Are Too Heavy
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
March 2nd, 2020 10:51
Fay Slimm. said:
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
March 2nd, 2020 10:51
Some Words Are Too Heavy
dusk arising said:
Ha! You\'re a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
March 2nd, 2020 07:30
dusk arising said:
Ha! You\'re a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
March 2nd, 2020 07:30
Together
Goldfinch60 said:
Entwined for ever as they sail the world for eternity. Great write and tribute.
Andy
February 29th, 2020 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Entwined for ever as they sail the world for eternity. Great write and tribute.
Andy
February 29th, 2020 01:16
Together
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a sad challenge this write Nev. An important and emotional place for you now and ever will be for memories of happy times there will mark the spot and remain in the family\'s heart. May they both side by side rest in peace .
February 28th, 2020 09:50
Fay Slimm. said:
Such a sad challenge this write Nev. An important and emotional place for you now and ever will be for memories of happy times there will mark the spot and remain in the family\'s heart. May they both side by side rest in peace .
February 28th, 2020 09:50
Together
dusk arising said:
Without a traditional gravestone or plaque it is fitting to have words which mark an occasion such as you describe. Nobody can instill more feeling or meaning into the chosen words than those who feel the loss most.
Here i read such words which contain ample depth of meaning for this occasion.
Short and powerful.
February 28th, 2020 09:48
dusk arising said:
Without a traditional gravestone or plaque it is fitting to have words which mark an occasion such as you describe. Nobody can instill more feeling or meaning into the chosen words than those who feel the loss most.
Here i read such words which contain ample depth of meaning for this occasion.
Short and powerful.
February 28th, 2020 09:48
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