Comments received on poems by Neville
Two Weeks in July
dusk arising said:
There is so much in here and plain to see it contains references which are unique the the relationship. Great word play in verse one.
With trowel in hand methinks this was a relationship one would never cement though time would tell if there remained a bond.
Fun and fondness of this reminiscence shine from your post. So good to put a memory into words where it come alive again with every read as we fade into our later years.
Again, reading your work is a pleasure.
July 27th, 2020 08:44
dusk arising said:
There is so much in here and plain to see it contains references which are unique the the relationship. Great word play in verse one.
With trowel in hand methinks this was a relationship one would never cement though time would tell if there remained a bond.
Fun and fondness of this reminiscence shine from your post. So good to put a memory into words where it come alive again with every read as we fade into our later years.
Again, reading your work is a pleasure.
July 27th, 2020 08:44
Two Weeks in July
orchidee said:
Good write Neville.
I was somewhat bothered about the timing - would it be the first two weeks of July, or the last two weeks? The latter maybe, as it moves on to August.
Oh I dunno - it\'s a quarter past Summer already this year! lol. Hope I can meet her?!
July 27th, 2020 08:44
orchidee said:
Good write Neville.
I was somewhat bothered about the timing - would it be the first two weeks of July, or the last two weeks? The latter maybe, as it moves on to August.
Oh I dunno - it\'s a quarter past Summer already this year! lol. Hope I can meet her?!
July 27th, 2020 08:44
Two Weeks in July
Fay Slimm. said:
The painful realization of temporary oneness shoots all through this read when discovered in the last line is the rubble of ill-met abandon. I love the clever usage of \"mortar\" and \"cement\" as understandable slang - - top notch writing again Nev............x
July 27th, 2020 07:48
Fay Slimm. said:
The painful realization of temporary oneness shoots all through this read when discovered in the last line is the rubble of ill-met abandon. I love the clever usage of \"mortar\" and \"cement\" as understandable slang - - top notch writing again Nev............x
July 27th, 2020 07:48
Old One Eye
jarcher54 said:
Love the flowing short lines, like a clear stream bubbling images as you glide along downstream, literally nervous about coming face to face of a sudden with your saber-toothed leviathan. He may not fear us, but I darned sure fear him!
July 27th, 2020 02:43
jarcher54 said:
Love the flowing short lines, like a clear stream bubbling images as you glide along downstream, literally nervous about coming face to face of a sudden with your saber-toothed leviathan. He may not fear us, but I darned sure fear him!
July 27th, 2020 02:43
Old One Eye
Barry Hodges said:
A nice poem about the famous one-eyed trouser snake.
July 26th, 2020 10:11
Barry Hodges said:
A nice poem about the famous one-eyed trouser snake.
July 26th, 2020 10:11
Old One Eye
Fay Slimm. said:
A perfectly lyrical piece of poemed excitement lies in local shallows and reeled in with your usual stylish intrigue my friend. - - most fishy tales grow bigger by telling but what an adventure Ol\' One Eye leads those who would catch and de-fame his legendary waiting for toes etc. - - moreover dear Nev. \'tis the last time I paddle in shallows of trout-streams round here............ x
July 26th, 2020 06:22
Fay Slimm. said:
A perfectly lyrical piece of poemed excitement lies in local shallows and reeled in with your usual stylish intrigue my friend. - - most fishy tales grow bigger by telling but what an adventure Ol\' One Eye leads those who would catch and de-fame his legendary waiting for toes etc. - - moreover dear Nev. \'tis the last time I paddle in shallows of trout-streams round here............ x
July 26th, 2020 06:22
Old One Eye
orchidee said:
A fine wrtie Neville. There tales of \'The Holy Brook Pike\' near(ish) to us. Maybe someone has caught it by now - and released it back in the brook.
July 26th, 2020 01:46
orchidee said:
A fine wrtie Neville. There tales of \'The Holy Brook Pike\' near(ish) to us. Maybe someone has caught it by now - and released it back in the brook.
July 26th, 2020 01:46
Mullins Yard
Suresh said:
Anything I say would only dilute the true appreciation expressed by others, but I must add that I thoroughly enjoyed reading these words again and again to absorb the scene so poetically laid out.
July 23rd, 2020 09:40
Suresh said:
Anything I say would only dilute the true appreciation expressed by others, but I must add that I thoroughly enjoyed reading these words again and again to absorb the scene so poetically laid out.
July 23rd, 2020 09:40
Mullins Yard
Goldfinch60 said:
I could see those boats of yore floating down the river with the old ferry men using their own power to move them.
Wonderful words Neville.
Andy
July 16th, 2020 00:07
Goldfinch60 said:
I could see those boats of yore floating down the river with the old ferry men using their own power to move them.
Wonderful words Neville.
Andy
July 16th, 2020 00:07
Mullins Yard
MendedFences27 said:
I read this as aging out or becoming obsolete. Or maybe you just like women with \"flat bottoms.\" Yeah, I suppose it\'s just about boats. They don\'t build \'em like they used to. I was down by the river\'s mouth today, watching the plastic, sail by. Then read this and wondered \"Where did they all go?\" - Phil A
July 15th, 2020 15:23
MendedFences27 said:
I read this as aging out or becoming obsolete. Or maybe you just like women with \"flat bottoms.\" Yeah, I suppose it\'s just about boats. They don\'t build \'em like they used to. I was down by the river\'s mouth today, watching the plastic, sail by. Then read this and wondered \"Where did they all go?\" - Phil A
July 15th, 2020 15:23
Mullins Yard
Michael Edwards said:
Simple premise so elegantly expressed. As Fay says, you have a great way of saying so much in such short lined prose. And the comments are a great bonus.
July 15th, 2020 11:03
Michael Edwards said:
Simple premise so elegantly expressed. As Fay says, you have a great way of saying so much in such short lined prose. And the comments are a great bonus.
July 15th, 2020 11:03
Mullins Yard
dusk arising said:
It were all we could do when i were a lad see, that there turf surfin. Course we had to do some prep so we\'d spend all mornin drinkin Tizer then when we wuz fit to bust we\'d all pee on the turfs, make em slippery like. So you could get a good old glide going, corse you didnt wanna be fallin over or youd stink of Tizer pee which didnt go down to well with me mam.
I aint got a clue what yer post is about today but it brought back those days of Tizer with Rosie to me.
As always though yours was a pleasure to read.
July 15th, 2020 10:22
dusk arising said:
It were all we could do when i were a lad see, that there turf surfin. Course we had to do some prep so we\'d spend all mornin drinkin Tizer then when we wuz fit to bust we\'d all pee on the turfs, make em slippery like. So you could get a good old glide going, corse you didnt wanna be fallin over or youd stink of Tizer pee which didnt go down to well with me mam.
I aint got a clue what yer post is about today but it brought back those days of Tizer with Rosie to me.
As always though yours was a pleasure to read.
July 15th, 2020 10:22
Mullins Yard
Neville said:
Bless you and truly my dear lady Fay... I had you in the back of me head when I was scribbling away, knowing full well our local dialect might contain similar wording and to the uninitiated & emmit‘s, might sound similar x
July 15th, 2020 08:53
Neville said:
Bless you and truly my dear lady Fay... I had you in the back of me head when I was scribbling away, knowing full well our local dialect might contain similar wording and to the uninitiated & emmit‘s, might sound similar x
July 15th, 2020 08:53
Mullins Yard
Fay Slimm. said:
I had to read this flowing ballad out loud and twice to get the wonderful way of short-line tale-telling that your pen seems to find so easy my friend. First class poem and thanks too for the interpretive comments
- - Old Mullins Yard has the Cornish equivalent but this one a fave has to be for me..............
July 15th, 2020 08:44
Fay Slimm. said:
I had to read this flowing ballad out loud and twice to get the wonderful way of short-line tale-telling that your pen seems to find so easy my friend. First class poem and thanks too for the interpretive comments
- - Old Mullins Yard has the Cornish equivalent but this one a fave has to be for me..............
July 15th, 2020 08:44
Ego\'s Down
Goldfinch60 said:
Good words Neville, as with many in power all they are looking for is what they can get out of it without a thought for anybody else.
Andy
July 14th, 2020 00:01
Goldfinch60 said:
Good words Neville, as with many in power all they are looking for is what they can get out of it without a thought for anybody else.
Andy
July 14th, 2020 00:01
Ego\'s Down
Suresh said:
With your permission-
To defile the lowest human denominator (TRUMP), only saps our own precious energy. Even the Devil needs its army of hapless buffoons to be elevated and that\'s where lie the stench.
Well writ my friend
July 13th, 2020 15:23
Suresh said:
With your permission-
To defile the lowest human denominator (TRUMP), only saps our own precious energy. Even the Devil needs its army of hapless buffoons to be elevated and that\'s where lie the stench.
Well writ my friend
July 13th, 2020 15:23
Ego\'s Down
MendedFences27 said:
In my first introduction to Marmite I spread it on the bread like peanut butter, one bite and I was retching. I had never met anything as repulsive, until Trump came along.Hopefully all will change come November, but how many will die until then. I have called him a fool, which he is, and yet I see far too many fellow citizens clamoring to his defense. It leaves me ever fearful for our future beyond November if it all goes wrong.
Your poem left me with increased hope. \"Oh , how the mighty they do fall\" Please be true. - Phil A.
July 13th, 2020 13:48
MendedFences27 said:
In my first introduction to Marmite I spread it on the bread like peanut butter, one bite and I was retching. I had never met anything as repulsive, until Trump came along.Hopefully all will change come November, but how many will die until then. I have called him a fool, which he is, and yet I see far too many fellow citizens clamoring to his defense. It leaves me ever fearful for our future beyond November if it all goes wrong.
Your poem left me with increased hope. \"Oh , how the mighty they do fall\" Please be true. - Phil A.
July 13th, 2020 13:48
Ego\'s Down
Michael Edwards said:
There\'s a line twixt self-confidence and ego and that nutter has only ever been one side of it.
July 13th, 2020 11:34
Michael Edwards said:
There\'s a line twixt self-confidence and ego and that nutter has only ever been one side of it.
July 13th, 2020 11:34
Ego\'s Down
Fay Slimm. said:
Love the clever play on words in this denunciation of all those ego-led....gotta have this in my favourites.
July 13th, 2020 10:54
Fay Slimm. said:
Love the clever play on words in this denunciation of all those ego-led....gotta have this in my favourites.
July 13th, 2020 10:54
Ego\'s Down
orchidee said:
They need Barack back - all was sensible then.
They did not listen to me. I told them never to appoint someone with such a dodgy barnet!
July 13th, 2020 06:39
orchidee said:
They need Barack back - all was sensible then.
They did not listen to me. I told them never to appoint someone with such a dodgy barnet!
July 13th, 2020 06:39
Ego\'s Down
dusk arising said:
Well, written into the constitution is the defence that a tyrant buffoon may only serve two terms maximum.
Looking far to the east no such people\'s power was ever established and we see arising a merciless control which our complacency bolsters.
July 13th, 2020 05:29
dusk arising said:
Well, written into the constitution is the defence that a tyrant buffoon may only serve two terms maximum.
Looking far to the east no such people\'s power was ever established and we see arising a merciless control which our complacency bolsters.
July 13th, 2020 05:29
Poor Git
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a telling write Neville and sadly so very true.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 01:00
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a telling write Neville and sadly so very true.
Andy
July 8th, 2020 01:00
Poor Git
Fay Slimm. said:
The speed which cross contamination can hit is expertly poemed in this short but powerful verse - - the whole account sounded to me like someone you knew Nev - but then that maybe not true for your pen is adequate to write appealingly mere imagination. Whatever - - the read had such a compelling dose of poignancy.........x
July 7th, 2020 13:01
Fay Slimm. said:
The speed which cross contamination can hit is expertly poemed in this short but powerful verse - - the whole account sounded to me like someone you knew Nev - but then that maybe not true for your pen is adequate to write appealingly mere imagination. Whatever - - the read had such a compelling dose of poignancy.........x
July 7th, 2020 13:01
Poor Git
dusk arising said:
The sadness of life\'s endings. Life must be a physical symphony for all our organs or the percussion stops.
July 7th, 2020 12:46
dusk arising said:
The sadness of life\'s endings. Life must be a physical symphony for all our organs or the percussion stops.
July 7th, 2020 12:46
Poor Git
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Aww, why they wish I would only sing half a song?! lol.
July 7th, 2020 10:35
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Aww, why they wish I would only sing half a song?! lol.
July 7th, 2020 10:35
Mid Summer Meadow
Goldfinch60 said:
We all had near misses - some of them we may still miss.
Andy
July 7th, 2020 00:16
Goldfinch60 said:
We all had near misses - some of them we may still miss.
Andy
July 7th, 2020 00:16
White Violets
MendedFences27 said:
**** \'Four stars\" for this one, \"pearlescent\" or otherwise. \"Breathing sighs\" of envy here. A very gentle memory of long ago lost but not forgotten beauty. But, hey, let\'s not try to blame poetry for everything. Loved this one. - Phil A.
July 6th, 2020 17:00
MendedFences27 said:
**** \'Four stars\" for this one, \"pearlescent\" or otherwise. \"Breathing sighs\" of envy here. A very gentle memory of long ago lost but not forgotten beauty. But, hey, let\'s not try to blame poetry for everything. Loved this one. - Phil A.
July 6th, 2020 17:00
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