Comments received on poems by Neville
On finding Truth
Fay Slimm. said:
Had to delete through a typo - my apologies Nev..........
And a poet of both you really are with your canvas and brush painting oceans of linguistic delight..... so keep going my friend......x Fay
July 30th, 2019 03:50
Fay Slimm. said:
Had to delete through a typo - my apologies Nev..........
And a poet of both you really are with your canvas and brush painting oceans of linguistic delight..... so keep going my friend......x Fay
July 30th, 2019 03:50
On finding Truth
orchidee said:
Yep, I remember you - and here you are now - one hopefully finding truth.
July 30th, 2019 03:25
orchidee said:
Yep, I remember you - and here you are now - one hopefully finding truth.
July 30th, 2019 03:25
Cold Under The Coat
dusk arising said:
Outstanding Neville! This is you at your very best. There is so much here that i really like and admire so much. Such a wonderful read. A story of glorious emotion carried across years of acceptance and knowing. The love of what once was and couldn\'t continue, yet it lingers and has become a distant and unconditional emotion which is love itself.
July 29th, 2019 15:49
dusk arising said:
Outstanding Neville! This is you at your very best. There is so much here that i really like and admire so much. Such a wonderful read. A story of glorious emotion carried across years of acceptance and knowing. The love of what once was and couldn\'t continue, yet it lingers and has become a distant and unconditional emotion which is love itself.
July 29th, 2019 15:49
Cold Under The Coat
MendedFences27 said:
Here it comes! No, seriously. I thoroughly enjoyed this. We\'ve all been there, when the girl of your dreams spurns you or becomes not what you dreamed of. It makes a great tale to watch the romance develope and then \"fail.\"
Okay, here\'s a bit for you- Drop the \"and\" in the last line of the first and last stanzas. It leaves the reader waiting and then realizing \"Oh, that\'s it.\" Without it the poem flows more freely. If you want a pause with no expectation of further development, maybe a few ellipses would do. also in Stanza 6 Maybe change \"have\" to \"had\" for you are reflecting on past times.
Seems \"we have both changed\" is the answer to why such things happen. In days or weeks or years that changing can occur. I\'ve seen couples split in both short or extensive time frames.This poem conveys the feelings of both parties, one chilly, the other left longing. Beneath the coat lies a broken heart would be my guess. - Phil A.
July 29th, 2019 15:20
MendedFences27 said:
Here it comes! No, seriously. I thoroughly enjoyed this. We\'ve all been there, when the girl of your dreams spurns you or becomes not what you dreamed of. It makes a great tale to watch the romance develope and then \"fail.\"
Okay, here\'s a bit for you- Drop the \"and\" in the last line of the first and last stanzas. It leaves the reader waiting and then realizing \"Oh, that\'s it.\" Without it the poem flows more freely. If you want a pause with no expectation of further development, maybe a few ellipses would do. also in Stanza 6 Maybe change \"have\" to \"had\" for you are reflecting on past times.
Seems \"we have both changed\" is the answer to why such things happen. In days or weeks or years that changing can occur. I\'ve seen couples split in both short or extensive time frames.This poem conveys the feelings of both parties, one chilly, the other left longing. Beneath the coat lies a broken heart would be my guess. - Phil A.
July 29th, 2019 15:20
Cold Under The Coat
Suresh said:
SHE walked away-
thus the reason for these memories that your heart still yearn
a poetic rendition, that I still silently sing
July 29th, 2019 10:29
Suresh said:
SHE walked away-
thus the reason for these memories that your heart still yearn
a poetic rendition, that I still silently sing
July 29th, 2019 10:29
Cold Under The Coat
Christina8 said:
This is one heck of a write! There are spots of sensuality in it that I did not miss--and that you kept your corduroy coat all these years.....And I really like the last stanza. Haven\'t we all failed at love? It\'s great.
July 29th, 2019 10:16
Christina8 said:
This is one heck of a write! There are spots of sensuality in it that I did not miss--and that you kept your corduroy coat all these years.....And I really like the last stanza. Haven\'t we all failed at love? It\'s great.
July 29th, 2019 10:16
Cold Under The Coat
Fay Slimm. said:
A garment and its smell can have such a permanent significance and the coat your verse mentions can bring back many memories. The hint of pathos makes this read special as does the tenderness expressed in each line and oh those few final words.............. Fay
July 29th, 2019 06:59
Fay Slimm. said:
A garment and its smell can have such a permanent significance and the coat your verse mentions can bring back many memories. The hint of pathos makes this read special as does the tenderness expressed in each line and oh those few final words.............. Fay
July 29th, 2019 06:59
Cold Under The Coat
Michael Edwards said:
Never had a mandolin nor a meerschaum pipe but I do have a bowler hat. In all seriousness this is one hell of a write - one of the few here on MPS which I could read again and again - in fact I\'ll keep it as a fav.
July 29th, 2019 03:10
Michael Edwards said:
Never had a mandolin nor a meerschaum pipe but I do have a bowler hat. In all seriousness this is one hell of a write - one of the few here on MPS which I could read again and again - in fact I\'ll keep it as a fav.
July 29th, 2019 03:10
Cold Under The Coat
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write Neville. Those times past with the lady of your life are always so special.
I used to smoke a Meerschaum pipe many years ago.
July 29th, 2019 02:08
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write Neville. Those times past with the lady of your life are always so special.
I used to smoke a Meerschaum pipe many years ago.
July 29th, 2019 02:08
Cold Under The Coat
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville. Did she \'get her coat\' , as they say, cos she overstayed her welcome, as in \"I\'ll get my coat\"?
July 29th, 2019 01:46
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville. Did she \'get her coat\' , as they say, cos she overstayed her welcome, as in \"I\'ll get my coat\"?
July 29th, 2019 01:46
And They Called Her Iris
Goldfinch60 said:
That beauty matches the words in your poem Neville.
July 28th, 2019 15:19
Goldfinch60 said:
That beauty matches the words in your poem Neville.
July 28th, 2019 15:19
And They Called Her Iris
Suresh said:
If this is what you come up with when you give up, maybe you should give up more often and let the creative juices flow, and flow and flow some more
July 28th, 2019 12:06
Suresh said:
If this is what you come up with when you give up, maybe you should give up more often and let the creative juices flow, and flow and flow some more
July 28th, 2019 12:06
And They Called Her Iris
Christina8 said:
A beautiful poem...I love the ending! I really wish I could come up with a more educated comment to do this justice but \"beautiful\" is all I have beyond whats been said...C
July 28th, 2019 10:07
Christina8 said:
A beautiful poem...I love the ending! I really wish I could come up with a more educated comment to do this justice but \"beautiful\" is all I have beyond whats been said...C
July 28th, 2019 10:07
And They Called Her Iris
dusk arising said:
I\'ll stick with the rainbow mate. A different coloured lady for each day of the week and always vibrant. Besides i get to nuzzle the crock of gold down there at rainbows end..... Iris - shhmirishh my boy.... variety.
July 28th, 2019 08:52
dusk arising said:
I\'ll stick with the rainbow mate. A different coloured lady for each day of the week and always vibrant. Besides i get to nuzzle the crock of gold down there at rainbows end..... Iris - shhmirishh my boy.... variety.
July 28th, 2019 08:52
And They Called Her Iris
orchidee said:
A fine write N. I will leave my mark for all eternity - in singing - but that can\'t be helped! lol.
I\'ll pop in more than momentarily. I\'m a pest! lol.
July 28th, 2019 07:38
orchidee said:
A fine write N. I will leave my mark for all eternity - in singing - but that can\'t be helped! lol.
I\'ll pop in more than momentarily. I\'m a pest! lol.
July 28th, 2019 07:38
And They Called Her Iris
Poetic Dan said:
You just made me cry, rainbow sprinkles.
Thank you!
July 28th, 2019 06:22
Poetic Dan said:
You just made me cry, rainbow sprinkles.
Thank you!
July 28th, 2019 06:22
And They Called Her Iris
sylviasearcher said:
It reminded me of the u2 song iris.
Clever write.
July 28th, 2019 04:57
sylviasearcher said:
It reminded me of the u2 song iris.
Clever write.
July 28th, 2019 04:57
And They Called Her Iris
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - my favourite shade is violet
and thanks for the info. on such a lovely Greek Goddess. Well maybe her beauty was revealed but that Iris used her tints of change to her own advantage methinks --- A tale told expertly as an intriguing weekend read but I then expect no other than alluring mystery from thee mon ami............... Fay
July 28th, 2019 03:46
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - my favourite shade is violet
and thanks for the info. on such a lovely Greek Goddess. Well maybe her beauty was revealed but that Iris used her tints of change to her own advantage methinks --- A tale told expertly as an intriguing weekend read but I then expect no other than alluring mystery from thee mon ami............... Fay
July 28th, 2019 03:46
Bring it On
Christina8 said:
This is a very good write, Neville! Such truth to it. Enjoy every moment...
July 27th, 2019 10:37
Christina8 said:
This is a very good write, Neville! Such truth to it. Enjoy every moment...
July 27th, 2019 10:37
Bring it On
FineB said:
Hello Neville,
Thanks for this good write!
Que Sera Sera, whatever will be, will be.
Keep writing FineB
July 27th, 2019 10:04
FineB said:
Hello Neville,
Thanks for this good write!
Que Sera Sera, whatever will be, will be.
Keep writing FineB
July 27th, 2019 10:04
Bring it On
Suresh said:
Memories may fade but they don\'t disappear, and so from time to time they jar us back to that moment, moments that are best forgotten. But how does one forget such poetic words.
July 27th, 2019 09:51
Suresh said:
Memories may fade but they don\'t disappear, and so from time to time they jar us back to that moment, moments that are best forgotten. But how does one forget such poetic words.
July 27th, 2019 09:51
Bring it On
dusk arising said:
In these my later days i have learned to write down such moments. On re-reading years from now i hope to mentally time travel through the few cloudy memory cells i shall have left.
I hope your words prompt others.
July 27th, 2019 06:11
dusk arising said:
In these my later days i have learned to write down such moments. On re-reading years from now i hope to mentally time travel through the few cloudy memory cells i shall have left.
I hope your words prompt others.
July 27th, 2019 06:11
Bring it On
Poetic Dan said:
Loving the sign post my friend, bring it on indeed!
July 27th, 2019 03:53
Poetic Dan said:
Loving the sign post my friend, bring it on indeed!
July 27th, 2019 03:53
Bring it On
orchidee said:
A good write Neville.
Yes - the moment of truth... when ya realised my singing was an impostor! lol
July 27th, 2019 01:47
orchidee said:
A good write Neville.
Yes - the moment of truth... when ya realised my singing was an impostor! lol
July 27th, 2019 01:47
Bring it On
Fay Slimm. said:
Happenings welcomed are to be treasured as that moment does not come again - stowing away truths in the memory is a wise conception Nev and you write it so very well.
July 27th, 2019 01:34
Fay Slimm. said:
Happenings welcomed are to be treasured as that moment does not come again - stowing away truths in the memory is a wise conception Nev and you write it so very well.
July 27th, 2019 01:34
Bring it On
Goldfinch60 said:
Every moment is special, enjoy them all as they will not come again.
Bring them on.
July 27th, 2019 00:44
Goldfinch60 said:
Every moment is special, enjoy them all as they will not come again.
Bring them on.
July 27th, 2019 00:44
Always & Forever
Goldfinch60 said:
So few words used but the complexity comes through showing how the complexity of love can enslave you. Brilliant.
July 27th, 2019 00:30
Goldfinch60 said:
So few words used but the complexity comes through showing how the complexity of love can enslave you. Brilliant.
July 27th, 2019 00:30
Captivating Games
Christina8 said:
This is a great poem! I think most of us want these things.....a fun read!--C
July 26th, 2019 23:42
Christina8 said:
This is a great poem! I think most of us want these things.....a fun read!--C
July 26th, 2019 23:42
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