Comments received on poems by nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)
A GHOST STORY
sorenbarrett said:
The unexplained has not only driven man to find a solution to his curiosity but has raised hairs on the back of the neck of many a person. Well done and most timely.
October 31st, 2025 03:41
sorenbarrett said:
The unexplained has not only driven man to find a solution to his curiosity but has raised hairs on the back of the neck of many a person. Well done and most timely.
October 31st, 2025 03:41
WORDS UPON BREEZE
arqios said:
This one hit me with its quiet heaviness. I like how the imagery keeps circling back to contrasts, of flowers masking decay, moonlight chained, childhood play beside a casket. It feels like the poem is saying grief never really leaves; it just drifts around us like “words upon breeze.” That last line especially lands, memory and sorrow are weightless, but impossible to escape.
October 30th, 2025 20:23
arqios said:
This one hit me with its quiet heaviness. I like how the imagery keeps circling back to contrasts, of flowers masking decay, moonlight chained, childhood play beside a casket. It feels like the poem is saying grief never really leaves; it just drifts around us like “words upon breeze.” That last line especially lands, memory and sorrow are weightless, but impossible to escape.
October 30th, 2025 20:23
WORDS UPON BREEZE
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of falseness here in masks worn. Memories blown away with the wind. A sad poem
October 30th, 2025 04:04
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of falseness here in masks worn. Memories blown away with the wind. A sad poem
October 30th, 2025 04:04
ONE MINUTE
NafisaSB said:
Parting is such sweet sorrow indeed.
The sad longing and the final goodbye is described exquisitely
October 29th, 2025 12:10
NafisaSB said:
Parting is such sweet sorrow indeed.
The sad longing and the final goodbye is described exquisitely
October 29th, 2025 12:10
A DARKENED ROOM
sorenbarrett said:
It is the style of this poem that gets the fave. short lines each like a repeated but failed effort, the lack of identification of who this person is depersonalizes but told in such a personal way that draws all attention inward as depression does. Annoyance with others everything else a disregarded or irritating mess. This captures well the mood. Well done
October 29th, 2025 04:21
sorenbarrett said:
It is the style of this poem that gets the fave. short lines each like a repeated but failed effort, the lack of identification of who this person is depersonalizes but told in such a personal way that draws all attention inward as depression does. Annoyance with others everything else a disregarded or irritating mess. This captures well the mood. Well done
October 29th, 2025 04:21
NO PRINCESS
arqios said:
This is a really moving piece. The imagery of the earth as a green carpet and a blanket is both tender and heartbreaking. It captures the peace of rest while reminding us of the tragedy that led there. The shift from warmth and comfort to the stark reality of drugs and a life cut short is powerful. The closing lines, especially ‘another victim / as if life cared,’ leave a bitter echo that lingers. Thank you for sharing something so raw and honest. 🕊️🙏
October 28th, 2025 04:33
arqios said:
This is a really moving piece. The imagery of the earth as a green carpet and a blanket is both tender and heartbreaking. It captures the peace of rest while reminding us of the tragedy that led there. The shift from warmth and comfort to the stark reality of drugs and a life cut short is powerful. The closing lines, especially ‘another victim / as if life cared,’ leave a bitter echo that lingers. Thank you for sharing something so raw and honest. 🕊️🙏
October 28th, 2025 04:33
NO PRINCESS
sorenbarrett said:
This poem draws attention to the problem and one has to ask, what is it about life that is so unpleasant that one has to numb it or enhance it to make it worth living. Well written.
October 28th, 2025 03:59
sorenbarrett said:
This poem draws attention to the problem and one has to ask, what is it about life that is so unpleasant that one has to numb it or enhance it to make it worth living. Well written.
October 28th, 2025 03:59
A VIOLENT DAY
Lorenz said:
A seasonal urban atmosphere that makes you long for the hereafter !
October 27th, 2025 03:59
Lorenz said:
A seasonal urban atmosphere that makes you long for the hereafter !
October 27th, 2025 03:59
A VIOLENT DAY
sorenbarrett said:
Set on a tearful day, sky\'s face of grey it can not help but be melancholy. The metaphor is nicely painted and the ending foreshadowed. Well done
October 27th, 2025 03:54
sorenbarrett said:
Set on a tearful day, sky\'s face of grey it can not help but be melancholy. The metaphor is nicely painted and the ending foreshadowed. Well done
October 27th, 2025 03:54
FUNERAL SUIT
Friendship said:
Well written, the poem \"Funeral Suit\" revolves around the inevitability of death and the emotional weight associated with mourning. The funeral suit symbolizes the preparations for death and the somber reality that it brings to life. It reflects on the cycle of life, loss, and the familial and societal expectations tied to death.
October 26th, 2025 08:22
Friendship said:
Well written, the poem \"Funeral Suit\" revolves around the inevitability of death and the emotional weight associated with mourning. The funeral suit symbolizes the preparations for death and the somber reality that it brings to life. It reflects on the cycle of life, loss, and the familial and societal expectations tied to death.
October 26th, 2025 08:22
FUNERAL SUIT
sorenbarrett said:
I liked the cadence and meter, the metaphor and setting in this poem. It read like the ticking of a clock counting down the seconds in a life. Well worded and foreboding it reads as dark as the suit. A fave
October 26th, 2025 04:21
sorenbarrett said:
I liked the cadence and meter, the metaphor and setting in this poem. It read like the ticking of a clock counting down the seconds in a life. Well worded and foreboding it reads as dark as the suit. A fave
October 26th, 2025 04:21
WINDFALLS
Lorenz said:
That sounds like a grim prophecy or a dark warning ...
October 25th, 2025 06:12
Lorenz said:
That sounds like a grim prophecy or a dark warning ...
October 25th, 2025 06:12
WINDFALLS
sorenbarrett said:
A deep metaphor that leaves a feeling of sadness and loss that can not be recovered. Lost fruit, lost souls and a sense of determinism where one wonders if their purpose is to plant seeds, provide nourishment for the ecosystem of the race. Everything has its purpose. Very nicely written a fave
October 25th, 2025 04:12
sorenbarrett said:
A deep metaphor that leaves a feeling of sadness and loss that can not be recovered. Lost fruit, lost souls and a sense of determinism where one wonders if their purpose is to plant seeds, provide nourishment for the ecosystem of the race. Everything has its purpose. Very nicely written a fave
October 25th, 2025 04:12
CONVERSATION WITH A DEMON
sorenbarrett said:
Demonic and deeply seasonal this poem speaks out of darkness and as if from the grave. It is a fun read
October 24th, 2025 04:57
sorenbarrett said:
Demonic and deeply seasonal this poem speaks out of darkness and as if from the grave. It is a fun read
October 24th, 2025 04:57
CONVERSATION WITH A DEMON
Lorenz said:
O sublime Aleister accept me into this inspired body !
October 24th, 2025 04:05
Lorenz said:
O sublime Aleister accept me into this inspired body !
October 24th, 2025 04:05
DESCENT INTO MEDIOCRITY
NafisaSB said:
and so it is with so many geniuses - their true worth is recognized much too late, when they cannot enjoy the fruits of their labour..
October 24th, 2025 01:16
NafisaSB said:
and so it is with so many geniuses - their true worth is recognized much too late, when they cannot enjoy the fruits of their labour..
October 24th, 2025 01:16
NEVER THE SAME
sorenbarrett said:
It is most sad when though the body has a home the heart does not. A homeless heart receives no alms on the street corner. Well written
October 23rd, 2025 03:59
sorenbarrett said:
It is most sad when though the body has a home the heart does not. A homeless heart receives no alms on the street corner. Well written
October 23rd, 2025 03:59
NEVER THE SAME
Lorenz said:
This strangely echoes the thoughts I just jotted in my notebook . Perhaps halloween mood ?
October 23rd, 2025 03:51
Lorenz said:
This strangely echoes the thoughts I just jotted in my notebook . Perhaps halloween mood ?
October 23rd, 2025 03:51
DESCENT INTO MEDIOCRITY
gray0328 said:
Pioneers in the innovators are always overlooked by those who conform. Nicely done
October 22nd, 2025 11:35
gray0328 said:
Pioneers in the innovators are always overlooked by those who conform. Nicely done
October 22nd, 2025 11:35
WRITERS BLOCK
Paul Bell said:
Why does writers block end at four in the morning?
Is this to get you up, or is your mind taking the Michael.
October 22nd, 2025 05:05
Paul Bell said:
Why does writers block end at four in the morning?
Is this to get you up, or is your mind taking the Michael.
October 22nd, 2025 05:05
WRITERS BLOCK
sorenbarrett said:
I love the metaphor of winter and spring to the issue of writer\'s block. I have had in on numerous occasions and the worst poems are written when trying to force it. A good read
October 22nd, 2025 04:33
sorenbarrett said:
I love the metaphor of winter and spring to the issue of writer\'s block. I have had in on numerous occasions and the worst poems are written when trying to force it. A good read
October 22nd, 2025 04:33
TO FALL A WARRIOR
sorenbarrett said:
It is the images and metaphor that first caught my attention in this poem upon second read the meter contributed considerably. Very nicely done a fave.
October 21st, 2025 04:39
sorenbarrett said:
It is the images and metaphor that first caught my attention in this poem upon second read the meter contributed considerably. Very nicely done a fave.
October 21st, 2025 04:39
THROUGH THE LENS
sorenbarrett said:
This to me evokes images forming a metaphor. An old photograph, a memory that is disregarded and a life the same lost in war both covered with dust the dead and old photograph lost in the past. A lovely and soft but sad reminder that neither the dead or photos have any worth in the present a fave
October 20th, 2025 05:01
sorenbarrett said:
This to me evokes images forming a metaphor. An old photograph, a memory that is disregarded and a life the same lost in war both covered with dust the dead and old photograph lost in the past. A lovely and soft but sad reminder that neither the dead or photos have any worth in the present a fave
October 20th, 2025 05:01
ONE MINUTE
Poetic_Princess said:
I\'m not exactly sure how to put this but...this is an amazing poem! Good job!
October 19th, 2025 08:26
Poetic_Princess said:
I\'m not exactly sure how to put this but...this is an amazing poem! Good job!
October 19th, 2025 08:26
AUSTERITY BY ANOTHER NAME
arqios said:
This poem lays bare how austerity isn’t just economics but a quiet form of violence.
By showing policies as “signatures laced” with harm, it exposes how detached leaders can devastate lives without ever facing those who suffer. The imagery of the vulnerable as “falling leaves” drives home the human cost hidden behind official language.
October 19th, 2025 06:43
arqios said:
This poem lays bare how austerity isn’t just economics but a quiet form of violence.
By showing policies as “signatures laced” with harm, it exposes how detached leaders can devastate lives without ever facing those who suffer. The imagery of the vulnerable as “falling leaves” drives home the human cost hidden behind official language.
October 19th, 2025 06:43
LETTER IN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE
Lorenz said:
Pen dipped in the tear of a fleeting eternity ...
October 18th, 2025 05:52
Lorenz said:
Pen dipped in the tear of a fleeting eternity ...
October 18th, 2025 05:52
LETTER IN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a charming flow that is created by short rhyming lines. The message is consistent that aids the flow as well. Sad but well written
October 18th, 2025 04:22
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a charming flow that is created by short rhyming lines. The message is consistent that aids the flow as well. Sad but well written
October 18th, 2025 04:22
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