Comments received on poems by Dolphine29
Transformation
BattleChrist said:
I liked the strong sense of optimism conveyed through the last lines. We all desire worldly brotherhood but often hesitate to take the first step.It would have been easier to blur the lines and disparities if we could transform our psychology to have a holistic view of the world!
Beautifully presented,honestly enjoyed reading it!
February 9th, 2011 12:47
BattleChrist said:
I liked the strong sense of optimism conveyed through the last lines. We all desire worldly brotherhood but often hesitate to take the first step.It would have been easier to blur the lines and disparities if we could transform our psychology to have a holistic view of the world!
Beautifully presented,honestly enjoyed reading it!
February 9th, 2011 12:47
Why do we dream?
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image is very nicely fitting. As I am something of an incurable dreamer, I'm wondering which dreams you are referring to...the nighttime ones or the day? I believe from what the Bible says, our dreams are more often/typically only the fabrication of our wishes and only rarely were visions from God, long since ceased, seeing the Word of God is finished. This is a very interesting expose and fascinating.
February 8th, 2011 22:30
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image is very nicely fitting. As I am something of an incurable dreamer, I'm wondering which dreams you are referring to...the nighttime ones or the day? I believe from what the Bible says, our dreams are more often/typically only the fabrication of our wishes and only rarely were visions from God, long since ceased, seeing the Word of God is finished. This is a very interesting expose and fascinating.
February 8th, 2011 22:30
Why do we dream?
dbremner said:
Well written. You often have a philisophical aspect to your poems which lends them real depth. This one has that but I've always been rather afraid of dreams/dreaming!
February 8th, 2011 17:15
dbremner said:
Well written. You often have a philisophical aspect to your poems which lends them real depth. This one has that but I've always been rather afraid of dreams/dreaming!
February 8th, 2011 17:15
The Angel of Life
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting....and your image is so perfect. I am unfamiliar with the character you are talking about....as well as the concept that life simply transforms itself after death,...here is where our beliefs clash, and I do not wish to strive at all with you....so am trying to be careful in responding....please be patient with me....this "angel of life" carrying love and messages but not all is welcome...therein seems to lie the reason for the doubts and fears....what way does the angel show?...how are we certain that existence does prevail after folk are buried?....I hope I have not vexed you with my questions...it is a fascinating poem...thank you for it.
January 14th, 2011 22:35
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting....and your image is so perfect. I am unfamiliar with the character you are talking about....as well as the concept that life simply transforms itself after death,...here is where our beliefs clash, and I do not wish to strive at all with you....so am trying to be careful in responding....please be patient with me....this "angel of life" carrying love and messages but not all is welcome...therein seems to lie the reason for the doubts and fears....what way does the angel show?...how are we certain that existence does prevail after folk are buried?....I hope I have not vexed you with my questions...it is a fascinating poem...thank you for it.
January 14th, 2011 22:35
Eyes
jerrypat said:
I see this poem as a progression of life. The eyes which are supposed to be the mirrors of our souls are also the hiders of sadness, angst and downright misery.
I found the adult stanza the most compelling because so often we pretend to be alive as you suggested. In other words we just go along to get along, an awful way to have to live. It destroys the inner you and something inside you dies.
Great mind-examining poetry.
January 10th, 2011 22:53
jerrypat said:
I see this poem as a progression of life. The eyes which are supposed to be the mirrors of our souls are also the hiders of sadness, angst and downright misery.
I found the adult stanza the most compelling because so often we pretend to be alive as you suggested. In other words we just go along to get along, an awful way to have to live. It destroys the inner you and something inside you dies.
Great mind-examining poetry.
January 10th, 2011 22:53
Eyes
dbremner said:
Very true and very well written. Posing the last line of part 3 as a question gives it extra significance to to the reader, in fact a considerable amount of extra significance. Does the poem a lot of good in my most humble opinion!
January 10th, 2011 15:47
dbremner said:
Very true and very well written. Posing the last line of part 3 as a question gives it extra significance to to the reader, in fact a considerable amount of extra significance. Does the poem a lot of good in my most humble opinion!
January 10th, 2011 15:47
Eyes
Cheeky Missy said:
It is fascinating, for it reminds me of the saying "the eyes are the window to the soul" or somesuch, which you have well expressed....and in light of that, can your concluding stanza really be true....i.e. can we really manage to hide our hearts? We hide our eyes to do so, seems to me. And I agree with your explanatory comment that if we forgive ourselves we will better see....instead of being blinded by our mistakes (and those of others?) I love the concluding two lines,...it is a serious warning....I hope we may all heed it.
January 10th, 2011 13:00
Cheeky Missy said:
It is fascinating, for it reminds me of the saying "the eyes are the window to the soul" or somesuch, which you have well expressed....and in light of that, can your concluding stanza really be true....i.e. can we really manage to hide our hearts? We hide our eyes to do so, seems to me. And I agree with your explanatory comment that if we forgive ourselves we will better see....instead of being blinded by our mistakes (and those of others?) I love the concluding two lines,...it is a serious warning....I hope we may all heed it.
January 10th, 2011 13:00
Even then, the sun rises
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent.....you hit me where I am sitting right now, head in hands, wishing to cease existing, knowing I won't for all that is sickening me....watching the sun rise on others, even as I taste what I never dreamed....crumbling....my hopes as I perhaps misunderstand you, shattered, defeated....and yet the sun rises and the world goes round. I too hope, as you seem to say, to see it rise and be happy to greet it...but for the moment, the initial or entirety of this poem of yours expressed what I am struggling with. I quite appreciated it. Keep writing, as I saw you mentioned elsewhere, do keep pen and paper perpetually handy, and I look forward to more!
January 9th, 2011 12:26
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent.....you hit me where I am sitting right now, head in hands, wishing to cease existing, knowing I won't for all that is sickening me....watching the sun rise on others, even as I taste what I never dreamed....crumbling....my hopes as I perhaps misunderstand you, shattered, defeated....and yet the sun rises and the world goes round. I too hope, as you seem to say, to see it rise and be happy to greet it...but for the moment, the initial or entirety of this poem of yours expressed what I am struggling with. I quite appreciated it. Keep writing, as I saw you mentioned elsewhere, do keep pen and paper perpetually handy, and I look forward to more!
January 9th, 2011 12:26
Even then, the sun rises
dbremner said:
Hi there, I've read this poem a few times through today, I like it very well, it says a great deal. This is my interpretation of it. I like the end two lines very much as it has an optimistic feel about it as well as a lot of reality. The sun indeed rises each day with or without us and I suppose it is better that it's 'with'.
The 4th part of your poem also speaks to me of the awfull and weighty responsibility that falls upon us to make something of our lives and achieve something, particularly if we feel we should do so to live up to others peoples expectations of us. Often the 'closer' those people are to us the greater we feel the need to come up to their expectations, thereby increasing the weight of responsibility we have.
The second part of part 2 (indeed all the poem up to that point) has me thinking of the common feeling that we fail compared to others, but I sometimes counter that in my mind by thinking that perhaps others are living in a degree of self-denial, maybe seeing material wealth as a mark of their 'sucess' for example. There are other examples of such self-denial.
Anyway best wishes, I enjoyed your poem, this is only my interpretation of it which may be wildly different from yours. Incidentally your piece 'Existence' had a hand in my submission today!
January 9th, 2011 12:12
dbremner said:
Hi there, I've read this poem a few times through today, I like it very well, it says a great deal. This is my interpretation of it. I like the end two lines very much as it has an optimistic feel about it as well as a lot of reality. The sun indeed rises each day with or without us and I suppose it is better that it's 'with'.
The 4th part of your poem also speaks to me of the awfull and weighty responsibility that falls upon us to make something of our lives and achieve something, particularly if we feel we should do so to live up to others peoples expectations of us. Often the 'closer' those people are to us the greater we feel the need to come up to their expectations, thereby increasing the weight of responsibility we have.
The second part of part 2 (indeed all the poem up to that point) has me thinking of the common feeling that we fail compared to others, but I sometimes counter that in my mind by thinking that perhaps others are living in a degree of self-denial, maybe seeing material wealth as a mark of their 'sucess' for example. There are other examples of such self-denial.
Anyway best wishes, I enjoyed your poem, this is only my interpretation of it which may be wildly different from yours. Incidentally your piece 'Existence' had a hand in my submission today!
January 9th, 2011 12:12
Existence
dbremner said:
I feel like that sometimes. I think your poem is excellently written and the picture is hard to look away from. Your closing lines however remind me of the Sartre quote 'Existence preceeds essence' which I have, for a while, thought of as a very powerful concept for humans to try and comprehend. It was a concept he laid out in a number of his books...well you probably know that. I hope you keep writing more poems.
January 8th, 2011 02:57
dbremner said:
I feel like that sometimes. I think your poem is excellently written and the picture is hard to look away from. Your closing lines however remind me of the Sartre quote 'Existence preceeds essence' which I have, for a while, thought of as a very powerful concept for humans to try and comprehend. It was a concept he laid out in a number of his books...well you probably know that. I hope you keep writing more poems.
January 8th, 2011 02:57
Existence
Cheeky Missy said:
The picture is so perfect......existence finds its substance in the heart of someone else? If nobody cares, then we are nothing? I guess when I struggle with such thoughts I contemplate ceasing to exist. And thus love is the reason to exist? We exist because we ARE loved and because we do love? I enjoyed contemplating this....finding it intriguing, and am unsure I made sense of it. But I liked it.
January 4th, 2011 20:41
Cheeky Missy said:
The picture is so perfect......existence finds its substance in the heart of someone else? If nobody cares, then we are nothing? I guess when I struggle with such thoughts I contemplate ceasing to exist. And thus love is the reason to exist? We exist because we ARE loved and because we do love? I enjoyed contemplating this....finding it intriguing, and am unsure I made sense of it. But I liked it.
January 4th, 2011 20:41
Transformation
dbremner said:
Your well written poem reminded me of the quote 'Freedom is the expression of the creative in life. It is neither an inherent right nor a hard-won value. It is a law of being, lacking which there would be no evolution, no progress, no civilisation, only primal chaos set in permanence.'
January 4th, 2011 12:56
dbremner said:
Your well written poem reminded me of the quote 'Freedom is the expression of the creative in life. It is neither an inherent right nor a hard-won value. It is a law of being, lacking which there would be no evolution, no progress, no civilisation, only primal chaos set in permanence.'
January 4th, 2011 12:56
Transformation
StormyDay said:
I love the message conveyed. It strikes a chord in all humanity, universally. Prejudice is the root of division (so is my belief), and if everyone were taught love and tolerance, Earth might be a more peaceful world.
January 4th, 2011 11:51
StormyDay said:
I love the message conveyed. It strikes a chord in all humanity, universally. Prejudice is the root of division (so is my belief), and if everyone were taught love and tolerance, Earth might be a more peaceful world.
January 4th, 2011 11:51
Transformation
Cheeky Missy said:
I agree, that you shouldn't let hatred or fear destroy the precious, and yet and all, there are lines drawn, without trying, by the differences in beliefs, like one another though we may, sadly.
January 3rd, 2011 00:41
Cheeky Missy said:
I agree, that you shouldn't let hatred or fear destroy the precious, and yet and all, there are lines drawn, without trying, by the differences in beliefs, like one another though we may, sadly.
January 3rd, 2011 00:41
CHRISTMAS MEANS...
Cheeky Missy said:
Late but very nice too. The picture is reminiscent of Christmas time with the snowy firs. My childhood Christmas tree was definitely a sight to see, being old and but a tinsel tree, which slowly revolved to faint sounds of carols, while a coloured light display lit the corner it was in; and I so loved to lay on the floor in the dim room looking up a the changing colours on the ceiling, listening to the faint music, and dreaming.....
January 3rd, 2011 00:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Late but very nice too. The picture is reminiscent of Christmas time with the snowy firs. My childhood Christmas tree was definitely a sight to see, being old and but a tinsel tree, which slowly revolved to faint sounds of carols, while a coloured light display lit the corner it was in; and I so loved to lay on the floor in the dim room looking up a the changing colours on the ceiling, listening to the faint music, and dreaming.....
January 3rd, 2011 00:17
Forgive
dbremner said:
Really good this one. The second last line is very evocative, a really strong set of words for a short line. It fits well within a very good whole piece.
January 2nd, 2011 14:54
dbremner said:
Really good this one. The second last line is very evocative, a really strong set of words for a short line. It fits well within a very good whole piece.
January 2nd, 2011 14:54
Forgive
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image seems so fitting/perfect....and it is an interesting consideration...."love and repel be one of the same"....like..."the more I love you, the less I be loved"? And forgiveness seems such a vital part in love...can it come in words? It is so much more than mere words.....and I for one so often need it...would that I might generously give it freely.
January 1st, 2011 22:39
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image seems so fitting/perfect....and it is an interesting consideration...."love and repel be one of the same"....like..."the more I love you, the less I be loved"? And forgiveness seems such a vital part in love...can it come in words? It is so much more than mere words.....and I for one so often need it...would that I might generously give it freely.
January 1st, 2011 22:39
YOU ARE
Cheeky Missy said:
The image is sweet and fascinating, especially paired with the poem. I do not quite understand it. Is "love" answering what "you" are?
January 1st, 2011 21:22
Cheeky Missy said:
The image is sweet and fascinating, especially paired with the poem. I do not quite understand it. Is "love" answering what "you" are?
January 1st, 2011 21:22
SEE BEYOND THE UNSEEN
Cheeky Missy said:
Your title reminds me of like what the Bible says (if you don't mind my saying so?) of Moses, that "he endured as seeing Him Who is invisible..." The waters, the vision of the unseen, your plea,....is it to look ahead and see the "bigger picture" and not be lost in the little world as we personally see it?
December 30th, 2010 22:21
Cheeky Missy said:
Your title reminds me of like what the Bible says (if you don't mind my saying so?) of Moses, that "he endured as seeing Him Who is invisible..." The waters, the vision of the unseen, your plea,....is it to look ahead and see the "bigger picture" and not be lost in the little world as we personally see it?
December 30th, 2010 22:21
DREAM OF HOPE
Cheeky Missy said:
It is a sweet hopeful dream....only if the hope is the Lord Jesus Christ am I sure it will come to pass...He is the Hope of His people, and without Him we all are hopeless. I quite enjoyed this musing of your dream of hope...you presented it so very well from title to conclusion....it is all so much a dream.....
December 30th, 2010 22:15
Cheeky Missy said:
It is a sweet hopeful dream....only if the hope is the Lord Jesus Christ am I sure it will come to pass...He is the Hope of His people, and without Him we all are hopeless. I quite enjoyed this musing of your dream of hope...you presented it so very well from title to conclusion....it is all so much a dream.....
December 30th, 2010 22:15
DESIRE
Cheeky Missy said:
The image with it is so delightfully fitting in its contemplative/reflective tone. Desire, though enlivening, sometimes drives so maddeningly....seems to me.
December 30th, 2010 22:09
Cheeky Missy said:
The image with it is so delightfully fitting in its contemplative/reflective tone. Desire, though enlivening, sometimes drives so maddeningly....seems to me.
December 30th, 2010 22:09
SEE BEYOND THE UNSEEN
dbremner said:
Really good work. Seems that there could be a few messages contained in this piece. I think I certainly can see one. It make for an intiguing poem with a great picture to compliment it.
December 28th, 2010 12:59
dbremner said:
Really good work. Seems that there could be a few messages contained in this piece. I think I certainly can see one. It make for an intiguing poem with a great picture to compliment it.
December 28th, 2010 12:59
DESIRE
jvl narasimha rao said:
WITHOUT DESIRE THERE IS NO MEANING OF/FOR LIFE.I have rated with a 10
yours JVL
December 28th, 2010 08:56
jvl narasimha rao said:
WITHOUT DESIRE THERE IS NO MEANING OF/FOR LIFE.I have rated with a 10
yours JVL
December 28th, 2010 08:56
DREAM OF HOPE
jvl narasimha rao said:
Your poem is as beautiful as a sweet dream.I rated it with a 9
yours JVL
December 28th, 2010 08:53
jvl narasimha rao said:
Your poem is as beautiful as a sweet dream.I rated it with a 9
yours JVL
December 28th, 2010 08:53
DREAM OF HOPE
dbremner said:
The postive last part especially rounds the poem of well and fits the title (or vice versa) perfectly. Excellent picture too.
December 26th, 2010 18:31
dbremner said:
The postive last part especially rounds the poem of well and fits the title (or vice versa) perfectly. Excellent picture too.
December 26th, 2010 18:31
The light in your eyes
Cheeky Missy said:
The picture is interesting for the tone it gives to the poem.....the sentiment is so sweet, especially from a daughter to her mother, who probably like many mothers, dearly loves her. I like it. It is a fascinating description of a mother-daughter relationship and the unique bond between them. Did she enjoy the poem?
December 23rd, 2010 22:53
Cheeky Missy said:
The picture is interesting for the tone it gives to the poem.....the sentiment is so sweet, especially from a daughter to her mother, who probably like many mothers, dearly loves her. I like it. It is a fascinating description of a mother-daughter relationship and the unique bond between them. Did she enjoy the poem?
December 23rd, 2010 22:53
I SEE YOU
Cheeky Missy said:
You loved your grandmother....and this is a sweet adieu to her. Thinking about it, reminds me of when my maternal grandfather died....I so missed him, and was only consoled by the thought that the Bible says "...to be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord..." as well as, "....in Thy presence is fullness of joy...." and probably mistakenly (for I cannot now think I understood those Scriptures entirely correctly) was comforted in the thought that he was happier there than we ever shall be here. The image you used with it expresses your idea nicely.
December 21st, 2010 22:56
Cheeky Missy said:
You loved your grandmother....and this is a sweet adieu to her. Thinking about it, reminds me of when my maternal grandfather died....I so missed him, and was only consoled by the thought that the Bible says "...to be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord..." as well as, "....in Thy presence is fullness of joy...." and probably mistakenly (for I cannot now think I understood those Scriptures entirely correctly) was comforted in the thought that he was happier there than we ever shall be here. The image you used with it expresses your idea nicely.
December 21st, 2010 22:56
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