Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.



WOMAN-FED.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:

BRIAN here ~ Thanks FAY for another GEM fashioned in the ingenuity of your Mind. The COOK BOOK looks Early 20th Century and reflects (My MOTHERS memory) of my Maternal Great-Grandma (b. 1900) ~ The scales ~ the range ~ the Milk Jug etc ! Life was much harder in the early 1900\'s but in many ways was less stressful before WW1 (1914 - 18) over 1OO years ago ! Few peple had mortgages or owned a petrol driven vehicle ! Travelling by Pony & Trap must have been more soothing & less polluting. No TV etc to worry one ~ wholesome food and plenty of exercise ! The value of close Extended Families etc etc. You paint a real but in some ways an idyllic picture ~ very NOSTALGIC ! All Families up & down the Country ~ were in fact WOMAN FED from the Cradle to the Grave ! Thanks for sharing & caring !

Blessings & Peace & Love
Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡🧡🧡🧡

May 20th, 2019 10:35

WOMAN-FED.
Andrew Charles Forrest said:

Love this Fay
There hasn\'t been a time when women were lesser than men in my mind
My dad came from Arbroath (The smokies)where there are stories of the women who carried the men out to their boats in the morning to save them being wet all day.
This reminded me of them.

Wonderful tale and tribute piece BRAVO!

May 20th, 2019 05:24

WOMAN-FED.
Michael Edwards said:

Oh yes this takes me back to my wonderful gentle Mum who was filled with love and was so adept in the kitchen with good old fashioned food. Thank you Fay for invoking the memories.

May 20th, 2019 03:44

WOMAN-FED.
Neville said:

yes... I reckon them were the day, when men were men and many of the women too were, or rather filled the rolls and role of men... forget vacuum packed and ready meals, you can beat an egg but ya can\'t beat the age of muscle and steam.. This is a brilliant work Fay.. thoroughly enjoyed and no kiddin.... Neville

May 20th, 2019 03:14

WOMAN-FED.
Poetic Dan said:

What a trip, I should of packed some sandwiches!
Always a delightful read

May 20th, 2019 03:12

WOMAN-FED.
dusk arising said:

Wonderful taken for granted days of yore. You give initially a really warm, comforting \'home\' feeling. A place my childhood memories rely upon as the bedrock of security and love, all as i said, taken for granted.
As you will know, the scene is not totally gone as there are a minority of homes similarly managed by a mum.
Really a warm and enjoyable read bringing to mind my mum and her devotion to me and my siblings.

May 20th, 2019 02:59

WOMAN-FED.
orchidee said:

A good Cornish write and scene Fay.

May 20th, 2019 02:28

ALTERATION.
Neville said:

here it seems you have managed to capture those fleeting shifts of light and shade and all the many hues that occur at the handover from night to day and vice versa .. those that when seen shall never be forgot..... despite the fact that each is so remarkably different...... Neville

May 19th, 2019 16:44

STONES KNOW.
MendedFences27 said:

Must have been a harrowing if not death-defying occupation. I cannot imagine being down in a hole in the ground.
This is the second poem I\'ve read today that mentions food, and now I\'m growing hungry for some British grub. a pasty or a meat pie, and a pint would do just fine.
Oh yeah, poetry. that\'s why we\'re here. Loved your poem. Was thrown by some of the language, but you saved me at the end. How long did this mining continue? When did it stop? Liked the way you formatted this poem, breaking it as you did. I think it adds emphasis to the individual ideas you were conveying. Much enjoyed this read. _ Phil A.

May 19th, 2019 16:14

Today.
rew4er2nail said:

Wracked With Ratiocination
When Writing

no shortage of familiar metier real
(material) aye attest
welling up within thy breast
merely a predicament
how to winnow

junk bonded barnacled
accretion encrusted
amidst gems buried
within treasure chest,

yet vigilant to sift,
viz figurative fine tooth comb
uprooting excrescence
laired plethora
incognito, sans faux

couture doggerel
habiliment dressed
necessitating painstaking
poetic rock climbing
ala scaling Mount Everest

imbedding, hooking, grappling
fingered duple crampons
aye confessed
to myself, the futility

to wrest Shakespearean nuggets,
which analogy
hyperbole you guessed
nor does modesty allow
me feeble effort
(trite) on par with August bard,

who would rank him,
the highest allotted value
upon assigned (absolute)
value of playing card,

hence tis the gold standard thee
verse a tile scribe based
at Stratford on Avon
this here wordsmith wields

his own literary might
always on guard
to stave reprehensible tar tarred plaque
like encrustation glued hard
akin to a geode methodical
mother lode extraction jarred

by the slightest distraction,
thus with boldness sigh hermetically
seal off every cerebral fold
vectors against
superfluous mind chatter
can upend fragile tenuous hold

when merest wisp of nearly
elusive mental thread escapes,
I feign scold
ding this paperback
bestseller wannabe with told

apt to captcha bliss so Harris, thus
keep dreaming envisioning
an green acred Edenic demesne
sprawling across
wide webbed wold.

adieu - Matthew Scott Harris
alias duyeer93@aol.com


May 19th, 2019 15:55

UNANSWERABLE.
SerenWise said:

Nicely written bundle of metaphor and divine wording

May 19th, 2019 08:37

YESTERDAY.
Neville said:

there is a certain special something that one tends to experience after it has rained... and you have captured that so well here amongst of course , so many other things.... Neville

May 19th, 2019 05:50

SELFHOOD.
Neville said:

A fine write indeed, and not only that.. packed with common sense and universal truths..... Neville

May 19th, 2019 04:16

UNANSWERABLE.
Neville said:

perfectly understandable Fay a bril poem in many more ways than one.... very much and thoroughly enjoyed.... Neville

May 18th, 2019 05:34

STONES KNOW.
Goldfinch60 said:

What a wonderful write Fay, those days of mining were so hard. Great to see local dialect in words.

My very first job back in the 1960s was as an analytical chemist at the Atomic Energy Authority at Harwell. Just off the site were two hostels for single people who worked there, there were over two hundred people in them, all scientists. They were from all over the country and the accents were all there, Jordie, Scouse, Glaswegian, Cockney, Welsh, Brummie etc and we could all understand each other until the time a guy from Cornwall turned up, we didn\'\'t have a clue what he was talking about !

May 18th, 2019 00:19

STONES KNOW.
Neville said:

Kernow personified.. I know a thing or two about them old mine shafts too... my Grandfather was lost in one...... A delight to find this, this eve..... Neville

May 17th, 2019 16:50

STONES KNOW.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:

THANKS FAY : For caring & sharing : ANGELA HERE !
WOW : This is a fine CORNISH IDYLL : Complete with glossary ! Lead mines long exhausted revive in POETRY ! Love the *Poetic Ladder* in V 2. very constructive ! Hazards of mining (like feet) laid
bare : bare rations : bare clothing : Bare necessities ! Our relative prosperity is built on the Ghosts of Industry past : AMEN !

Blessing & Love & Peace
Yours ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡

May 17th, 2019 15:44

STONES KNOW.
Suresh said:

I am a product of me go metropolises, but have seen many a movies about mining (coal) towns. Your poem which was very pleasant to read, has captured the plight of the townsfolk exceptionally well.

May 17th, 2019 09:37

STONES KNOW.
orchidee said:

A fine write Fay.

May 17th, 2019 06:34

STONES KNOW.
dusk arising said:

Long ago my family was from StBuryan in your fair Cornwall. All around that village are those with my surname, rare elsewhere. So i am glad you explained the local words long lost to my family.

At one time my forebears would have been in such toil as you describe, there is even a derelict mine which bears the family name.

No Fratch about it, a good write of a colourful scene.

May 17th, 2019 04:19

STONES KNOW.
Caleb.A said:

Wow... what a vivid piece - beautifully written.

May 17th, 2019 04:16

STONES KNOW.
SerenWise said:

Beautiful ode to Cornish history, the language is amazing and yet again your use of archaic slang is so fitting! Very unique and elegantly written :)

May 17th, 2019 03:48

UNANSWERABLE.
Goldfinch60 said:

What a wonderful write Fay, the spell of love is so obscure but so very powerful when it is cast.
I love the phrase \"lust\'s famous narcotic\".
I don\'t say this very often Fay but this is going into my favourites.

May 17th, 2019 00:08

UNANSWERABLE.
Michael Edwards said:

Keep playing Fay - somehow you have the knack to bring them together into fine writes like wot this is.

May 16th, 2019 12:51

UNANSWERABLE.
MendedFences27 said:

What is love, but obsession? There is no masquerading in love. Everything is exposed, no secrets, no lies, no misunderstandings or it ends. Then and only then is love true, and to get there one must be obsessed. Can one live without air? - No, without water?- No, without Nourishment? - No, without Love? - Yes, so it must be an obsession. Love borders on insanity and yet is considered normal. Yes, the world is full of crazy people. Maybe real and true Love is what keeps the world from becoming a lunatic asylum.
A wonderful poem Fay, loved all of it. Saving it for future considerations. - Phil A.

May 16th, 2019 11:38

UNANSWERABLE.
Suresh said:

Fay, you have named it well, and also framed it well.
Love - Lust - Hormones - Obsession

May 16th, 2019 11:30

UNANSWERABLE.
dusk arising said:

Oh it\'s clear enough Fay, for it is enigmatic.
My personal feelings are that life alone whilst satisfying (if you are of the right mind) it is somewhat hum-drum without the sharing. When love happens along it is such a lightening bolt of pleasureable contrast that we give it everything.
Some have obsession and hanker after it which is dangerous.
The fact is that most relationships go wrong. The older we get the more \'wise\' we CAN be, but do we act that way? Well that depends upon how sweet the fruit and how hungry we are at harvest time i guess.
Love remains magic and invites us to be young of spirit, careless and over indulgent. In a hum-drum existence i say.... \"Bring it on!\"

May 16th, 2019 07:02

UNANSWERABLE.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:

Thanks for sharing FAY : ANGELA HERE : Its 10pm : Now the Day is over : but lovely thoughts to go to my lonely BED with. You say you play with WORDS : but methinks you play with MEMORY TOO ! Thanks for caring !

BLESSINGS & LOVE
Yors as always ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
Please check my Tribute to La Mia Abuela ~ Gracias !

May 16th, 2019 04:02

YESTERDAY.
Poetic Dan said:

Wow....

May 16th, 2019 03:03

UNANSWERABLE.
Poetic Dan said:

Captured so well of the spell...

May 16th, 2019 02:37



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