Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
APTITUDE.
Michael Edwards said:
Super structure Fay - even without the second line in each stanza it reads well but with it - well an excellent write.
August 13th, 2018 09:14
Michael Edwards said:
Super structure Fay - even without the second line in each stanza it reads well but with it - well an excellent write.
August 13th, 2018 09:14
CROWNED.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ the symbiosis of the Poem \'n Picture ~ paints the ending of a perfect day as it morphs into the NIGHT ~ AMEN. Yours as always BRIAN & ANGELA
August 10th, 2018 05:03
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ the symbiosis of the Poem \'n Picture ~ paints the ending of a perfect day as it morphs into the NIGHT ~ AMEN. Yours as always BRIAN & ANGELA
August 10th, 2018 05:03
CROWNED.
orchidee said:
A lovely write Fay. I\'m a doom-and gloom merchant. Only a bit over 4 months before we draw the curtains at 4pm again! heehee.
August 10th, 2018 03:21
orchidee said:
A lovely write Fay. I\'m a doom-and gloom merchant. Only a bit over 4 months before we draw the curtains at 4pm again! heehee.
August 10th, 2018 03:21
BIRTH RITES.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN FAY ~ Like Angela\'s poem a Sonnet of seven doublets. I love CORWALL ~ It has an air of the SUPERNATURAL. Pixies ~ Tintagel and The Spirits of Cornwall ! I love the story, your Poem relates, of the CELTIC PRINCESS ~ her presents to the SPIRITS ~ and their present to the Princess of Painless Childbirth ! We plan to visit the SW Coast next year ~ One always finds the unexpected ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours as always BRIAN.
August 10th, 2018 02:16
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN FAY ~ Like Angela\'s poem a Sonnet of seven doublets. I love CORWALL ~ It has an air of the SUPERNATURAL. Pixies ~ Tintagel and The Spirits of Cornwall ! I love the story, your Poem relates, of the CELTIC PRINCESS ~ her presents to the SPIRITS ~ and their present to the Princess of Painless Childbirth ! We plan to visit the SW Coast next year ~ One always finds the unexpected ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours as always BRIAN.
August 10th, 2018 02:16
BIRTH RITES.
Heartwriter said:
Most certainly a fav for me. Loved it Fay!!!!!!!
August 9th, 2018 09:47
Heartwriter said:
Most certainly a fav for me. Loved it Fay!!!!!!!
August 9th, 2018 09:47
COMPLIANCE.
Michael Edwards said:
Some read Fay - and I read it twice which is rare for me as there so many posted at the moment.
August 8th, 2018 14:21
Michael Edwards said:
Some read Fay - and I read it twice which is rare for me as there so many posted at the moment.
August 8th, 2018 14:21
COMPLIANCE.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW FAY ~ This frightens me (don\'t let Angela read it !) is this really how many Housewives (in the 20th C actually comply & suffer & feel ? I\'ve never been married so I can\'t speak from personal experience. Angela & I (now we are engaged) share all things and decisions. It is hard for me ANGELA being in NZ for Year (at least) but we both agreed that it was an opportunity not to be missed ! Knowing something about NZ I was happy for her to go knowing she would be both SAFE & FAITHFUL as I would be in the UK ~ because we are both committed Christians ~ AMEN. My Parents are also committed Christians and their Marriage is based on Love and a 50/50 responsibility. My MUM is a Confectioner so she still baked lots of Cakes and baked and made Cakes for all occasions ~ so in effect she was able to raise a Family and maintain her trade. When we were all at School ~ My Dad was happy for her to do two days a week in a local Bakery. My DAD still does a lot in the HOME and only works (Newspaper Man) part time. When I\'m married I want to be just like my DAD ~ AMEN ~ Thanks for caring ~ Yours as always ~ Your FRIEND BRIAN ! PS. Angela loves my Dad and tells me I\'m just like HIM !
August 8th, 2018 12:46
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW FAY ~ This frightens me (don\'t let Angela read it !) is this really how many Housewives (in the 20th C actually comply & suffer & feel ? I\'ve never been married so I can\'t speak from personal experience. Angela & I (now we are engaged) share all things and decisions. It is hard for me ANGELA being in NZ for Year (at least) but we both agreed that it was an opportunity not to be missed ! Knowing something about NZ I was happy for her to go knowing she would be both SAFE & FAITHFUL as I would be in the UK ~ because we are both committed Christians ~ AMEN. My Parents are also committed Christians and their Marriage is based on Love and a 50/50 responsibility. My MUM is a Confectioner so she still baked lots of Cakes and baked and made Cakes for all occasions ~ so in effect she was able to raise a Family and maintain her trade. When we were all at School ~ My Dad was happy for her to do two days a week in a local Bakery. My DAD still does a lot in the HOME and only works (Newspaper Man) part time. When I\'m married I want to be just like my DAD ~ AMEN ~ Thanks for caring ~ Yours as always ~ Your FRIEND BRIAN ! PS. Angela loves my Dad and tells me I\'m just like HIM !
August 8th, 2018 12:46
COMPLIANCE.
dusk arising said:
Is this lady now trapped by circumstance to continue? Love for those children spurs her onto conformity. What lesson does her sacrifice unknowingly teach?
On the face of it, so unfair, but ... so few facts upon which to make such a judgement.
A really needling thought provoking jab at married conformity today Fay.
August 8th, 2018 10:44
dusk arising said:
Is this lady now trapped by circumstance to continue? Love for those children spurs her onto conformity. What lesson does her sacrifice unknowingly teach?
On the face of it, so unfair, but ... so few facts upon which to make such a judgement.
A really needling thought provoking jab at married conformity today Fay.
August 8th, 2018 10:44
COMPLIANCE.
Heartwriter said:
An amazing write and read. There\'s always more than what is shown at the surface! Love it.
August 8th, 2018 09:42
Heartwriter said:
An amazing write and read. There\'s always more than what is shown at the surface! Love it.
August 8th, 2018 09:42
COMPLIANCE.
sylviasearcher said:
I read your poem and then your comments.
I did not think it was about a housewife in particular until the end.
I thought it could be about any woman denied the opportunity to be her soul self. You captured the sad notion of folding away dreams which I often wonder about. How many people settle.
I read an article the other day that the notion of \'the one\' destroys marriages. I guess it is much easier now to explore finding \'the one\'
In my younger years perhaps this was my dream. It is not now. It is just to be able to be me without interrogation or derision.
I get out my dream when my husband is not watching.
I pack it away carefully when he returns.
Oh I wear many many hats. I\'m not sure id give any up... Except perhaps \'wife\' but that is easier said than done.
Hmm. Some reflection prompted here. Thanks Fay 💜
August 8th, 2018 03:39
sylviasearcher said:
I read your poem and then your comments.
I did not think it was about a housewife in particular until the end.
I thought it could be about any woman denied the opportunity to be her soul self. You captured the sad notion of folding away dreams which I often wonder about. How many people settle.
I read an article the other day that the notion of \'the one\' destroys marriages. I guess it is much easier now to explore finding \'the one\'
In my younger years perhaps this was my dream. It is not now. It is just to be able to be me without interrogation or derision.
I get out my dream when my husband is not watching.
I pack it away carefully when he returns.
Oh I wear many many hats. I\'m not sure id give any up... Except perhaps \'wife\' but that is easier said than done.
Hmm. Some reflection prompted here. Thanks Fay 💜
August 8th, 2018 03:39
COMPLIANCE.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. For one thing, if both parents work, they have to cover childminder, nursery costs, etc too. So it backfires on them a bit.
Then annoying things like:
\'This job requires 110% output from you\' (impossible).
\'Must be able to multi-task (maybe at the same time, which is impossible again. Can only do one thing at a time).
\'Working hours are 8.30am to 6.30pm.\' (Hardly worth going home. I shall bring my camp-bed in to work).
August 8th, 2018 03:31
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. For one thing, if both parents work, they have to cover childminder, nursery costs, etc too. So it backfires on them a bit.
Then annoying things like:
\'This job requires 110% output from you\' (impossible).
\'Must be able to multi-task (maybe at the same time, which is impossible again. Can only do one thing at a time).
\'Working hours are 8.30am to 6.30pm.\' (Hardly worth going home. I shall bring my camp-bed in to work).
August 8th, 2018 03:31
DEADLY INTENT.
Heartwriter said:
A beautiful write. Birds are majestic. So was your poem!
August 7th, 2018 05:01
Heartwriter said:
A beautiful write. Birds are majestic. So was your poem!
August 7th, 2018 05:01
DEADLY INTENT.
sylviasearcher said:
Thanks for reposting. I watched a kestrel swoop the other day. You took me back. They are magnificent but I did feel sad at the little mouse in his/her claws that day 😪
August 7th, 2018 03:10
sylviasearcher said:
Thanks for reposting. I watched a kestrel swoop the other day. You took me back. They are magnificent but I did feel sad at the little mouse in his/her claws that day 😪
August 7th, 2018 03:10
DEADLY INTENT.
Michael Edwards said:
Great work which truly captures the majesty of these birds.
August 7th, 2018 03:06
Michael Edwards said:
Great work which truly captures the majesty of these birds.
August 7th, 2018 03:06
DEADLY INTENT.
Goldfinch60 said:
Kestrels are majestic birds, as are all raptors. I have seen many of them in my life including a sea eagle, the biggest eagle in the UK but much to my chagrin I have not see a golden eagle in the wild. I have had one on my wrist at a falconry centre but never seen them where they should be.
August 7th, 2018 02:38
Goldfinch60 said:
Kestrels are majestic birds, as are all raptors. I have seen many of them in my life including a sea eagle, the biggest eagle in the UK but much to my chagrin I have not see a golden eagle in the wild. I have had one on my wrist at a falconry centre but never seen them where they should be.
August 7th, 2018 02:38
STIMULATION.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
BEAUTIFUL FAY ~ I love it when a PICTURE stirs the MUSE and in his instance a PERFECT PICTURE (early Anime ?) has spawned a PERFECT POEM. I love the fact that you have penned a warning to hose who have become (over) stimulated ! Romance ~ enmeshes, Emotion ~ consumes, Bliss ~ bewilders, \"Chasing the Dream\" is akin to insanity and rattles sensations (I like the sound of that !), Vincibility ~ exposes, Love grips so tight it ~ Cleaves as does VIGOROUS VIVACIOUSNESS ~ AMEN ! Thanks for Sharing & Scaring both of us ~ Thanks for seeing so so much in a beautiful Picture of True Love Devotion ~ Peace & Joy ~ BRIAN & ANGELA WE have saved as a FAVE !
August 6th, 2018 17:58
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
BEAUTIFUL FAY ~ I love it when a PICTURE stirs the MUSE and in his instance a PERFECT PICTURE (early Anime ?) has spawned a PERFECT POEM. I love the fact that you have penned a warning to hose who have become (over) stimulated ! Romance ~ enmeshes, Emotion ~ consumes, Bliss ~ bewilders, \"Chasing the Dream\" is akin to insanity and rattles sensations (I like the sound of that !), Vincibility ~ exposes, Love grips so tight it ~ Cleaves as does VIGOROUS VIVACIOUSNESS ~ AMEN ! Thanks for Sharing & Scaring both of us ~ Thanks for seeing so so much in a beautiful Picture of True Love Devotion ~ Peace & Joy ~ BRIAN & ANGELA WE have saved as a FAVE !
August 6th, 2018 17:58
STIMULATION.
Heartwriter said:
Another beauty of a write Fay. Like Michael said only you can do. You are unique my dear.
August 6th, 2018 16:15
Heartwriter said:
Another beauty of a write Fay. Like Michael said only you can do. You are unique my dear.
August 6th, 2018 16:15
STIMULATION.
Michael Edwards said:
Fay this a lovely sensitive write written as only you could.
August 6th, 2018 10:17
Michael Edwards said:
Fay this a lovely sensitive write written as only you could.
August 6th, 2018 10:17
STIMULATION.
orchidee said:
A \'swoony\' write Fay. But I swoon at the least thing! lol.
August 6th, 2018 09:49
orchidee said:
A \'swoony\' write Fay. But I swoon at the least thing! lol.
August 6th, 2018 09:49
VIBES.
Laura🌻 said:
My dear Fay,
A masterfully written poem exhibiting the beauty of the English language!
Are you a university professor who teaches the beauty of the English language?
As an English Language Learner, I admire and appreciate how you so eloquently express yourself throughout your writings!
~Laura~
August 4th, 2018 00:11
Laura🌻 said:
My dear Fay,
A masterfully written poem exhibiting the beauty of the English language!
Are you a university professor who teaches the beauty of the English language?
As an English Language Learner, I admire and appreciate how you so eloquently express yourself throughout your writings!
~Laura~
August 4th, 2018 00:11
VIBES.
Michael Edwards said:
A masterclass in the use of the language dear Fay
August 3rd, 2018 14:10
Michael Edwards said:
A masterclass in the use of the language dear Fay
August 3rd, 2018 14:10
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