Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
FINALITY.
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
A poignant reminder of the loss of a child! Reading your poem, reminded me of a friend of mine whose one year old son died of cancer. You have captured her in your write as only you, my dear poetess, can do! She has never recovered from her loss. She visits his burial site every day. She has aged beyond her years! So sad to see her in such pain.
~Laura~
August 28th, 2018 05:08
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
A poignant reminder of the loss of a child! Reading your poem, reminded me of a friend of mine whose one year old son died of cancer. You have captured her in your write as only you, my dear poetess, can do! She has never recovered from her loss. She visits his burial site every day. She has aged beyond her years! So sad to see her in such pain.
~Laura~
August 28th, 2018 05:08
FINALITY.
kevin browne said:
I love this, Fay, you bring out. The first line caught me and I flowed through the rest with compassion towards the finality of your life. A deep and enchanting piece of work. Nicely written, too.
August 28th, 2018 04:24
kevin browne said:
I love this, Fay, you bring out. The first line caught me and I flowed through the rest with compassion towards the finality of your life. A deep and enchanting piece of work. Nicely written, too.
August 28th, 2018 04:24
DUET.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for caring FAY. Nature is full of harmony ~ wherever you are in the World. However it is often drowned out ~ drowned out by the cacophony of the 21st C ! I love to camp away from Towns & Cities and Natures pure harmonies have no discordance from Technological Man. Your as ever ~ Love BRAIN & ANGELA XXXX
August 24th, 2018 17:30
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for caring FAY. Nature is full of harmony ~ wherever you are in the World. However it is often drowned out ~ drowned out by the cacophony of the 21st C ! I love to camp away from Towns & Cities and Natures pure harmonies have no discordance from Technological Man. Your as ever ~ Love BRAIN & ANGELA XXXX
August 24th, 2018 17:30
DUET.
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Poetess Fay,
You never fail to amaze me.
Another stupendous poem!
There’s such beauty in your choice of words.
“...describe such creamy white, pinned-to-the-sky
magic of brilliant
diamond star-brooches bent on joining
this listening scene...”
Undeniably brilliant!
Hugs 🤗
~Laura~
August 24th, 2018 14:07
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Poetess Fay,
You never fail to amaze me.
Another stupendous poem!
There’s such beauty in your choice of words.
“...describe such creamy white, pinned-to-the-sky
magic of brilliant
diamond star-brooches bent on joining
this listening scene...”
Undeniably brilliant!
Hugs 🤗
~Laura~
August 24th, 2018 14:07
DUET.
Netashi said:
Very beautiful write Fay as always describing the scene so pin point i can feel myself there. Have a nice day
-Theta
August 24th, 2018 12:28
Netashi said:
Very beautiful write Fay as always describing the scene so pin point i can feel myself there. Have a nice day
-Theta
August 24th, 2018 12:28
DUET.
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful write once more Fay, I could see the scene.
August 24th, 2018 03:31
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful write once more Fay, I could see the scene.
August 24th, 2018 03:31
DUET.
Michael Edwards said:
You paint such an atmospheric scene I am there with you
August 24th, 2018 02:46
Michael Edwards said:
You paint such an atmospheric scene I am there with you
August 24th, 2018 02:46
DREAMT DREAMS..
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
GOOD AFTERNOON FAY: Angela here from NZ. Just when I think I got you sussed, you riposte with six elegant triplets on the subject of DREAMS. I love DREAMS. You will always be my Mentor. When I saw the Maori Poi Dancers I dreamt on day I would be one! Now my dream has come true (see my Poem!).
DREAMS
ONCE DREAMT : EVER TAKE
SUPERCEDENCE
Love you : ANGELA XXXX
August 23rd, 2018 08:29
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
GOOD AFTERNOON FAY: Angela here from NZ. Just when I think I got you sussed, you riposte with six elegant triplets on the subject of DREAMS. I love DREAMS. You will always be my Mentor. When I saw the Maori Poi Dancers I dreamt on day I would be one! Now my dream has come true (see my Poem!).
DREAMS
ONCE DREAMT : EVER TAKE
SUPERCEDENCE
Love you : ANGELA XXXX
August 23rd, 2018 08:29
DREAMT DREAMS..
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. A church has \'Dream Interpretations\' and \'Peace Treatments\'. Could do with that - couldn\'t we all?!
August 23rd, 2018 06:15
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. A church has \'Dream Interpretations\' and \'Peace Treatments\'. Could do with that - couldn\'t we all?!
August 23rd, 2018 06:15
DREAMT DREAMS..
sylviasearcher said:
Oh dreams they are a powerful messenger of what we try to hold back
August 23rd, 2018 05:21
sylviasearcher said:
Oh dreams they are a powerful messenger of what we try to hold back
August 23rd, 2018 05:21
NEWNESS.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Lovely Picture FAY: Its 10am Thursday here so we are now up and going sailing in \"The Bay of Islands\". We don\'t cohabit : but if we share a (twin) bedroom BRIAN likes me to wake him with a KISS and a cup of filter coffee! I always learn something from your poems. If this is spontaneous you must have a large vocabulary so Im reading more. The poem is \"one liners\" but with flow and cohesion. My fave line is 6 \"Use lights emergence to attire your inertia\". Please excuse the pun : but line 13 reminded me of TRUMP on the STUMP! Love the Picture and the Poem it spawned. Love ANGELA XXXX
August 22nd, 2018 17:33
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Lovely Picture FAY: Its 10am Thursday here so we are now up and going sailing in \"The Bay of Islands\". We don\'t cohabit : but if we share a (twin) bedroom BRIAN likes me to wake him with a KISS and a cup of filter coffee! I always learn something from your poems. If this is spontaneous you must have a large vocabulary so Im reading more. The poem is \"one liners\" but with flow and cohesion. My fave line is 6 \"Use lights emergence to attire your inertia\". Please excuse the pun : but line 13 reminded me of TRUMP on the STUMP! Love the Picture and the Poem it spawned. Love ANGELA XXXX
August 22nd, 2018 17:33
NEWNESS.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I was going to seize the day, but by the time I found out what \'Carpe Diem\' meant, the day was almost over. doh! It won\'t catch me out tomorrow though! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 07:16
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I was going to seize the day, but by the time I found out what \'Carpe Diem\' meant, the day was almost over. doh! It won\'t catch me out tomorrow though! lol.
August 22nd, 2018 07:16
DANCING.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
A MASTERPIECE FAY ~ In Structure & Subject. It is a FLUID POEM and the verses reflect this in their rhythm ~ rhyme ~ half rhyme & resonance. The verse length, looks random (4~2~3~3~5~2) BUT ~ when I recited it aloud it wasn\'t ! It was dictated, mystically, by the narrative and was perfect. At my age & stage poetically, I marvel, but never seek to compete !
WATER is an awesome COMPOUND on which all LIFE on EARTH depends ~ which is belied by the simplicity of its molecular structure H~O~H. Liquid water is fluid and adopts any shape ~ it also reflect light from its undulating surface ! It is these properties (and others) which produce all the mini-miracles which scintillate throughout your gem ! Sparky diamonds ~ Liquid glass ~ Sunbeams exposed stars ~ Quivers of brilliant glitter ~ Radiant winking jewels. I love the denouement \"Then breezes died and sun in hiding ~ meant the dancing was done ~ AMEN\". Your POETRY FAY is both an Inspiration and a Blessing to us all. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ I say to myself ~ What a Wonderful World ~ Yours as always BRIAN & ANGELA.
August 21st, 2018 14:47
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
A MASTERPIECE FAY ~ In Structure & Subject. It is a FLUID POEM and the verses reflect this in their rhythm ~ rhyme ~ half rhyme & resonance. The verse length, looks random (4~2~3~3~5~2) BUT ~ when I recited it aloud it wasn\'t ! It was dictated, mystically, by the narrative and was perfect. At my age & stage poetically, I marvel, but never seek to compete !
WATER is an awesome COMPOUND on which all LIFE on EARTH depends ~ which is belied by the simplicity of its molecular structure H~O~H. Liquid water is fluid and adopts any shape ~ it also reflect light from its undulating surface ! It is these properties (and others) which produce all the mini-miracles which scintillate throughout your gem ! Sparky diamonds ~ Liquid glass ~ Sunbeams exposed stars ~ Quivers of brilliant glitter ~ Radiant winking jewels. I love the denouement \"Then breezes died and sun in hiding ~ meant the dancing was done ~ AMEN\". Your POETRY FAY is both an Inspiration and a Blessing to us all. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ I say to myself ~ What a Wonderful World ~ Yours as always BRIAN & ANGELA.
August 21st, 2018 14:47
LEARNING.
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Poetess Fay,
An extraordinary write!
All five stanzas are superb.
I was especially attracted to the fourth one.
Each of your writings get better and better.
You are truly a gifted writer!
Thank you for sharing.
~Laura~
August 20th, 2018 16:03
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Poetess Fay,
An extraordinary write!
All five stanzas are superb.
I was especially attracted to the fourth one.
Each of your writings get better and better.
You are truly a gifted writer!
Thank you for sharing.
~Laura~
August 20th, 2018 16:03
LEARNING.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank you FAY: Angela here and Im 30 so Im still learning! V1. Enjoying being alive V2. Drinking in the delights! V3. Feeling the Invisible Joy V4. Swaying to lifes rhythm V5. Finding out who I really am? This is a challenging poem for me FAY : Im 30+ but still so much to learn and i have missed Brian so so much. I am sure the next two weeks will be a steeper Learning Curve. Thanks for sharin such a meaningful POEM : Love ANGELA XXXX
August 20th, 2018 13:59
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank you FAY: Angela here and Im 30 so Im still learning! V1. Enjoying being alive V2. Drinking in the delights! V3. Feeling the Invisible Joy V4. Swaying to lifes rhythm V5. Finding out who I really am? This is a challenging poem for me FAY : Im 30+ but still so much to learn and i have missed Brian so so much. I am sure the next two weeks will be a steeper Learning Curve. Thanks for sharin such a meaningful POEM : Love ANGELA XXXX
August 20th, 2018 13:59
LEARNING.
Michael Edwards said:
This is quite a subject. I have known someone who was instinctively wise and of little learning - how do you judge - I am not wise enough to answer that one. Lol Yet another super work from the pen of Fay.
August 20th, 2018 11:13
Michael Edwards said:
This is quite a subject. I have known someone who was instinctively wise and of little learning - how do you judge - I am not wise enough to answer that one. Lol Yet another super work from the pen of Fay.
August 20th, 2018 11:13
NOW-NESS.
MendedFences27 said:
LIve in the moment. Make every \"now-ness\" a \"WOW-ness.\" Beautiful and original words of wisdom in your poem struck me as sound advice for anyone. Loved it.- Phil A.
August 18th, 2018 22:57
MendedFences27 said:
LIve in the moment. Make every \"now-ness\" a \"WOW-ness.\" Beautiful and original words of wisdom in your poem struck me as sound advice for anyone. Loved it.- Phil A.
August 18th, 2018 22:57
NOW-NESS.
Goldfinch60 said:
Each moment in our now is so precious, treasure them.
August 18th, 2018 00:20
Goldfinch60 said:
Each moment in our now is so precious, treasure them.
August 18th, 2018 00:20
NOW-NESS.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. You having problems with finding \'now\' as I\'m having problems finding \'tomorrow?\' It never comes. When it gets here, it\'s \'today!\' Doh!
August 17th, 2018 06:19
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. You having problems with finding \'now\' as I\'m having problems finding \'tomorrow?\' It never comes. When it gets here, it\'s \'today!\' Doh!
August 17th, 2018 06:19
UNANSWERED.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS FAY ~ for a beautifully and sympathetically worded poem addressed to the plight of the stranded DOLPHINS. Had they been some ugly and deadly scavengers of the deep we might have been less empathetic ~ BUT ~ DOLPHINS the most beautiful & gentle of creatures and with a great empathy with HUMANS. But they have died ~ more sacrifices to the ANTHROPOGENIC RAPE of the environment. Global Warming ~ Climate Change ~ Sea Level Rise all take their toll on Nature ~ WHEN WILL WE EVER LEARN ~ WHEN WILL WE EVER LEARN. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Yours as always ~ BRIAN. Please check ANGELA\'s Poem for today NEW ZEALAND IS CALLING ME ~ Thanks B
August 16th, 2018 13:07
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS FAY ~ for a beautifully and sympathetically worded poem addressed to the plight of the stranded DOLPHINS. Had they been some ugly and deadly scavengers of the deep we might have been less empathetic ~ BUT ~ DOLPHINS the most beautiful & gentle of creatures and with a great empathy with HUMANS. But they have died ~ more sacrifices to the ANTHROPOGENIC RAPE of the environment. Global Warming ~ Climate Change ~ Sea Level Rise all take their toll on Nature ~ WHEN WILL WE EVER LEARN ~ WHEN WILL WE EVER LEARN. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Yours as always ~ BRIAN. Please check ANGELA\'s Poem for today NEW ZEALAND IS CALLING ME ~ Thanks B
August 16th, 2018 13:07
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