Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
Forsaken.
Pintu Mahakul said:
Poverty provokes thought and brings sorrow in mind and spirit. We fear for their future and think much more in worries. When will this cruel insane world yield to the needs of these forsaken children ? Question asked in last stanza fills mind of a reader in deep thought. No fearless pages to painless future we witness in such condition. Poverty takes these children in to tragic path. This is brought up wonderfully and people across this world should get awareness to save children and their futures with proper knowledge. An Amazing poem this is.
March 2nd, 2017 17:33
Pintu Mahakul said:
Poverty provokes thought and brings sorrow in mind and spirit. We fear for their future and think much more in worries. When will this cruel insane world yield to the needs of these forsaken children ? Question asked in last stanza fills mind of a reader in deep thought. No fearless pages to painless future we witness in such condition. Poverty takes these children in to tragic path. This is brought up wonderfully and people across this world should get awareness to save children and their futures with proper knowledge. An Amazing poem this is.
March 2nd, 2017 17:33
Coveted.
Pintu Mahakul said:
Clutching large seeds of glimmery gold they have brought half of this world in to alive condition by working hard to the hot comfort of flame keeping away winter\'s cold. Their possession is wonderful really. This poem is a beautiful tribute poem.
March 2nd, 2017 17:25
Pintu Mahakul said:
Clutching large seeds of glimmery gold they have brought half of this world in to alive condition by working hard to the hot comfort of flame keeping away winter\'s cold. Their possession is wonderful really. This poem is a beautiful tribute poem.
March 2nd, 2017 17:25
Live Silver.
Pintu Mahakul said:
Primitive gulls are riding very high with waves of life. There is storm on the horizon and this is just along with fishing. To fasten the entrances to the lower part of a ship using wooden boards. to prepare for a difficult situation is wonderfully managed here for protective life. Knives are flashing at harbour\'s side. Earning their crust from wild sea is amazing and this mesmerizes mind and this is meant for togetherness. They are brave like ocean. May God bless them all! A brilliant poem this is. This reflects life very well.
March 2nd, 2017 17:09
Pintu Mahakul said:
Primitive gulls are riding very high with waves of life. There is storm on the horizon and this is just along with fishing. To fasten the entrances to the lower part of a ship using wooden boards. to prepare for a difficult situation is wonderfully managed here for protective life. Knives are flashing at harbour\'s side. Earning their crust from wild sea is amazing and this mesmerizes mind and this is meant for togetherness. They are brave like ocean. May God bless them all! A brilliant poem this is. This reflects life very well.
March 2nd, 2017 17:09
Still Climbing.
Pintu Mahakul said:
Legacy of light\'s departure confronts the tail-end of innocence and carefree life. Calmness is thrown far with force. This is so sad that life acts with changes with merciless views. Getting betrayal is painful and this leaves wounds and scars in mind. Offence scribbles memory. Uncontrolled strength is gathered. Forgiveness has taste in life to solve many problems. This is wise to climb up from stage of bitter betrayal to a moment of fortune, joy and success. Very thought provoking and thoughtful poem is shared here with excellent expression.
March 2nd, 2017 16:58
Pintu Mahakul said:
Legacy of light\'s departure confronts the tail-end of innocence and carefree life. Calmness is thrown far with force. This is so sad that life acts with changes with merciless views. Getting betrayal is painful and this leaves wounds and scars in mind. Offence scribbles memory. Uncontrolled strength is gathered. Forgiveness has taste in life to solve many problems. This is wise to climb up from stage of bitter betrayal to a moment of fortune, joy and success. Very thought provoking and thoughtful poem is shared here with excellent expression.
March 2nd, 2017 16:58
Still Climbing.
MendedFences27 said:
Love it. A very graphic description of the pain and hurt felt from betrayal. A ray of hope in the strength of her to keep on climbing. Well spoken. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2017 13:01
MendedFences27 said:
Love it. A very graphic description of the pain and hurt felt from betrayal. A ray of hope in the strength of her to keep on climbing. Well spoken. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2017 13:01
Still Climbing.
Augustus said:
\"Innocence and calm hurled away\". You have such a unique descriptive pen. There is so much we learn about ourselves and others when trust is violated. Great write.
March 2nd, 2017 12:30
Augustus said:
\"Innocence and calm hurled away\". You have such a unique descriptive pen. There is so much we learn about ourselves and others when trust is violated. Great write.
March 2nd, 2017 12:30
Still Climbing.
WriteBeLight said:
Betrayal is terrible, and hopefully something to recover from. Great job Fay.
March 2nd, 2017 12:07
WriteBeLight said:
Betrayal is terrible, and hopefully something to recover from. Great job Fay.
March 2nd, 2017 12:07
Still Climbing.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank you FAY for another poem elegant in both structure and subject. The hallmark of a Good Poet. The sentiments in your poem exactly complement the angst and resolve in the poster. Thanks for caring B.
March 2nd, 2017 11:13
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank you FAY for another poem elegant in both structure and subject. The hallmark of a Good Poet. The sentiments in your poem exactly complement the angst and resolve in the poster. Thanks for caring B.
March 2nd, 2017 11:13
Still Climbing.
willyweed said:
lash out first ask questions later? lots of that going around, my daughter reads to poor children after work a day or two a week, they are very needy and all want my attention Dad she says... I said go figure Kim?
March 2nd, 2017 07:29
willyweed said:
lash out first ask questions later? lots of that going around, my daughter reads to poor children after work a day or two a week, they are very needy and all want my attention Dad she says... I said go figure Kim?
March 2nd, 2017 07:29
Live Silver.
MendedFences27 said:
Images that jump from the paper to the reader: of herring, sails, boats, gulls, nets, hatches, knives and salt barrels. Olden times when going to sea was far more dangerous than it is today. All to earn a mere crust from the sea. What a great poem. Loved every word of it. - Phil A.
March 1st, 2017 20:50
MendedFences27 said:
Images that jump from the paper to the reader: of herring, sails, boats, gulls, nets, hatches, knives and salt barrels. Olden times when going to sea was far more dangerous than it is today. All to earn a mere crust from the sea. What a great poem. Loved every word of it. - Phil A.
March 1st, 2017 20:50
Live Silver.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ love the concept of the fish being \"live silver\" ! God hear us when we cry to thee for those in peril on the sea ! Thanks for caring 7 sharing ~ Yours B
March 1st, 2017 17:29
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ love the concept of the fish being \"live silver\" ! God hear us when we cry to thee for those in peril on the sea ! Thanks for caring 7 sharing ~ Yours B
March 1st, 2017 17:29
Live Silver.
Philip said:
Your poem conjures up a time gone by at sea and on the harbour excellently.
Phil.G.
March 1st, 2017 10:28
Philip said:
Your poem conjures up a time gone by at sea and on the harbour excellently.
Phil.G.
March 1st, 2017 10:28
Live Silver.
willyweed said:
I don\'t like fish & chips but there is nothing not to like with this poem nice one Fay! sweet ww
March 1st, 2017 10:21
willyweed said:
I don\'t like fish & chips but there is nothing not to like with this poem nice one Fay! sweet ww
March 1st, 2017 10:21
Coveted.
Augustus said:
Appreciated more by those of us who used wood and coal that we gathered to make our fires. Great tribute. Many of those men gave their lives.
February 28th, 2017 22:05
Augustus said:
Appreciated more by those of us who used wood and coal that we gathered to make our fires. Great tribute. Many of those men gave their lives.
February 28th, 2017 22:05
Coveted.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY and a wonderful tribute to COAL. It is a complex material ~ consisting mainly of carbon which is why it is such a good and practical solid fuel ! It is also a source of chemicals Coal gas ~ Coke ~ Benzene ~ Naphthalene (moth balls !) and Phenol etc. These are important chemicals for the synthesis of drugs ~ plastics etc. It is a shame to just burn it ! BRIAN
February 28th, 2017 17:57
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY and a wonderful tribute to COAL. It is a complex material ~ consisting mainly of carbon which is why it is such a good and practical solid fuel ! It is also a source of chemicals Coal gas ~ Coke ~ Benzene ~ Naphthalene (moth balls !) and Phenol etc. These are important chemicals for the synthesis of drugs ~ plastics etc. It is a shame to just burn it ! BRIAN
February 28th, 2017 17:57
Coveted.
MendedFences27 said:
A great write, full of history, and description of what was a very dangerous occupation. Without the miners the world would be a much different place, maybe still with maps half empty. Progress would certainly have been much slower. Loved this one. - Phil A.
February 28th, 2017 13:14
MendedFences27 said:
A great write, full of history, and description of what was a very dangerous occupation. Without the miners the world would be a much different place, maybe still with maps half empty. Progress would certainly have been much slower. Loved this one. - Phil A.
February 28th, 2017 13:14
Coveted.
Michael Edwards said:
You certainly know how to put words together Fay - great.
February 28th, 2017 11:46
Michael Edwards said:
You certainly know how to put words together Fay - great.
February 28th, 2017 11:46
Coveted.
willyweed said:
I have to wonder if or how many coal miners hit veins of gold...it could happen? nice story reminds me of one I wrote Gold rush. Ty Fay goodin\'
February 28th, 2017 07:10
willyweed said:
I have to wonder if or how many coal miners hit veins of gold...it could happen? nice story reminds me of one I wrote Gold rush. Ty Fay goodin\'
February 28th, 2017 07:10
Coveted.
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write of times now long gone. A dynasty of good workers, great community spirit gone forever.
February 28th, 2017 06:50
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write of times now long gone. A dynasty of good workers, great community spirit gone forever.
February 28th, 2017 06:50
Forsaken.
Augustus said:
Like drugs the monetary reward for the industry is incredibly rich. These young women are slaves. Like the drug cartel mafia chiefs the heads are hard to find as all the little,guys take the risk. I believe they come into the states by the plane loads. We do need more awareness.
February 27th, 2017 22:06
Augustus said:
Like drugs the monetary reward for the industry is incredibly rich. These young women are slaves. Like the drug cartel mafia chiefs the heads are hard to find as all the little,guys take the risk. I believe they come into the states by the plane loads. We do need more awareness.
February 27th, 2017 22:06
Forsaken.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Two things are very sad FAY ~ ONE that these babes are driven to this by Poverty and Pimps ~ TWO that Men (often with daughters of their own) abuse them (very much) and pay them (very little). Thanks for caring ~ Yours B
February 27th, 2017 16:59
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Two things are very sad FAY ~ ONE that these babes are driven to this by Poverty and Pimps ~ TWO that Men (often with daughters of their own) abuse them (very much) and pay them (very little). Thanks for caring ~ Yours B
February 27th, 2017 16:59
Forsaken.
WriteBeLight said:
A tragic subject matter. Great to shine a light on it Fay!
February 27th, 2017 12:05
WriteBeLight said:
A tragic subject matter. Great to shine a light on it Fay!
February 27th, 2017 12:05
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