Comments received on poems by dusk arising
bullshit
L. B. Mek said:
(your words inspired
my feeble effort of a reply, below
and for that, I wholeheartedly and humbly
thank you! dear poet)..
\'or, she simply chose to believe, foolishly maybe
there\'s more to you
than that pitiful minimum, you project to the world
and is attempting to project, into your horizon
promise: of what better future she can offer;
so that misery worshiping self-loathing, you harbour
because you\'ve decided, you\'ve seen it all already
and you wont ever let another ignite those ashes
of gravely breath\'s, embers
to only end-up, once more - bereft
left grappling with that cold embrace
of belated failure\'s: enraged regret;
no, just maybe: she\'s willingly choosing to believe
that she may have - enough, to overcome
your shattered heart
because, in you: she gleans a path
towards salvaging, her own broken heart...!\'
June 17th, 2021 06:30
L. B. Mek said:
(your words inspired
my feeble effort of a reply, below
and for that, I wholeheartedly and humbly
thank you! dear poet)..
\'or, she simply chose to believe, foolishly maybe
there\'s more to you
than that pitiful minimum, you project to the world
and is attempting to project, into your horizon
promise: of what better future she can offer;
so that misery worshiping self-loathing, you harbour
because you\'ve decided, you\'ve seen it all already
and you wont ever let another ignite those ashes
of gravely breath\'s, embers
to only end-up, once more - bereft
left grappling with that cold embrace
of belated failure\'s: enraged regret;
no, just maybe: she\'s willingly choosing to believe
that she may have - enough, to overcome
your shattered heart
because, in you: she gleans a path
towards salvaging, her own broken heart...!\'
June 17th, 2021 06:30
bullshit
Goldfinch60 said:
Another potential failed relationship then d a.
Andy
June 17th, 2021 03:18
Goldfinch60 said:
Another potential failed relationship then d a.
Andy
June 17th, 2021 03:18
a walk
Fay Slimm. said:
OOooh love that expression Dusk - - \"cornfield nakedness\" takes me back I must admit - - and when I read about Dusk arising I now think I know why - - or am I being naughty....... such a romantic walk with your memories dear friend.
June 16th, 2021 15:51
Fay Slimm. said:
OOooh love that expression Dusk - - \"cornfield nakedness\" takes me back I must admit - - and when I read about Dusk arising I now think I know why - - or am I being naughty....... such a romantic walk with your memories dear friend.
June 16th, 2021 15:51
a walk
SureshG said:
When fire is burning at both ends, lust takes over, as imaginatively emphasized
June 16th, 2021 12:47
SureshG said:
When fire is burning at both ends, lust takes over, as imaginatively emphasized
June 16th, 2021 12:47
a walk
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Dusk.
You have taken us to that cornfield before.
June 16th, 2021 09:10
Jerry Reynolds said:
Good write, Dusk.
You have taken us to that cornfield before.
June 16th, 2021 09:10
a walk
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely penned Dusk.
\'the dusk arising\' so many meanings in one. line.
June 16th, 2021 02:05
Saxon Crow said:
Nicely penned Dusk.
\'the dusk arising\' so many meanings in one. line.
June 16th, 2021 02:05
spoken
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh this touches such tender heart-strings - - a fine love story and poemed by lines to remember.
June 15th, 2021 13:34
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh this touches such tender heart-strings - - a fine love story and poemed by lines to remember.
June 15th, 2021 13:34
spoken
Laura🌻 said:
Dusk,
A wonderful read…
insightful…
powerful…
meaningful…
Thank you for sharing.
Laura🌻
June 15th, 2021 06:48
Laura🌻 said:
Dusk,
A wonderful read…
insightful…
powerful…
meaningful…
Thank you for sharing.
Laura🌻
June 15th, 2021 06:48
spoken
Saxon Crow said:
Tres romantic Dusk. Especially the last two lines my friend
June 15th, 2021 06:00
Saxon Crow said:
Tres romantic Dusk. Especially the last two lines my friend
June 15th, 2021 06:00
spoken
Jayasree said:
Such a romantic poem. Short and sweet. Love the last 2 lines :)
June 15th, 2021 05:38
Jayasree said:
Such a romantic poem. Short and sweet. Love the last 2 lines :)
June 15th, 2021 05:38
the operation
L. B. Mek said:
I couldn\'t help but involuntarily wince
brilliantly worded, dear poet
June 15th, 2021 03:29
L. B. Mek said:
I couldn\'t help but involuntarily wince
brilliantly worded, dear poet
June 15th, 2021 03:29
the operation
Goldfinch60 said:
Your tomorrow arrived and each new tomorrow will be wonderful d a.
Andy
June 15th, 2021 00:40
Goldfinch60 said:
Your tomorrow arrived and each new tomorrow will be wonderful d a.
Andy
June 15th, 2021 00:40
the operation
Fay Slimm. said:
A terrible ouch of a write dear Dusk - your pen described well the repercussions of intrusive surgery and am glad that was back in 2018 and hoping things are now better.
June 14th, 2021 13:54
Fay Slimm. said:
A terrible ouch of a write dear Dusk - your pen described well the repercussions of intrusive surgery and am glad that was back in 2018 and hoping things are now better.
June 14th, 2021 13:54
the operation
Neville said:
Ouch ... this was no splinter removal.. this one is truly felt ...
June 14th, 2021 12:42
Neville said:
Ouch ... this was no splinter removal.. this one is truly felt ...
June 14th, 2021 12:42
the operation
SureshG said:
A vassal recounting of event endured. A superb writing
June 14th, 2021 11:56
SureshG said:
A vassal recounting of event endured. A superb writing
June 14th, 2021 11:56
the operation
AuburnScribbler said:
A powerful write here dusk arising, I felt your pain, especially whilst reading the second stanza, but the last line is testament to the strength you have.
Bravo, and I hope that there are no long-term malingering after effects.
Stay safe!
June 14th, 2021 11:05
AuburnScribbler said:
A powerful write here dusk arising, I felt your pain, especially whilst reading the second stanza, but the last line is testament to the strength you have.
Bravo, and I hope that there are no long-term malingering after effects.
Stay safe!
June 14th, 2021 11:05
the operation
Laura🌻 said:
Dusk,
Thank you for sharing your poem.
I can relate to your written words…
more than I’d like to;
but, your last line says it best…
“come on tomorrow!”
Laura🌻
June 14th, 2021 10:10
Laura🌻 said:
Dusk,
Thank you for sharing your poem.
I can relate to your written words…
more than I’d like to;
but, your last line says it best…
“come on tomorrow!”
Laura🌻
June 14th, 2021 10:10
the operation
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well written, Dusk.
Had a sense of being there. So many experienced memories.
June 14th, 2021 09:26
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well written, Dusk.
Had a sense of being there. So many experienced memories.
June 14th, 2021 09:26
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