Comments received on poems by dusk arising
when demons know me
L. B. Mek said:
I think one of the features of MPS that\'s taken for granted is the wide array of quality music we are introduced to,
wonderful write
August 31st, 2020 04:04
L. B. Mek said:
I think one of the features of MPS that\'s taken for granted is the wide array of quality music we are introduced to,
wonderful write
August 31st, 2020 04:04
The tale of Louise rabbit and Roland the hedgehog
Neville said:
This is a most endearing tale DA and you really should try and get the whole thing published as a children\'s book ... I dont have any grandchildren as yet, but I do know that if I did, they would absolutely love this ....
Neville
August 31st, 2020 03:47
Neville said:
This is a most endearing tale DA and you really should try and get the whole thing published as a children\'s book ... I dont have any grandchildren as yet, but I do know that if I did, they would absolutely love this ....
Neville
August 31st, 2020 03:47
The tale of Louise rabbit and Roland the hedgehog
L. B. Mek said:
Roland works fast! lol
wonderfully rhythmic and enjoyed the small characterisation details, quirky and fun
\'\"Good morning dear mr hedgehog\"
said louise whilst sniffing a rose
she\'d noticed Rolands cutest of eyes
and his wiggle-de-piggle-de nose.\'
August 31st, 2020 03:42
L. B. Mek said:
Roland works fast! lol
wonderfully rhythmic and enjoyed the small characterisation details, quirky and fun
\'\"Good morning dear mr hedgehog\"
said louise whilst sniffing a rose
she\'d noticed Rolands cutest of eyes
and his wiggle-de-piggle-de nose.\'
August 31st, 2020 03:42
The tale of Louise rabbit and Roland the hedgehog
orchidee said:
A lovely write dusk.
August 31st, 2020 02:16
orchidee said:
A lovely write dusk.
August 31st, 2020 02:16
when demons know me
Goldfinch60 said:
A dark poem as promise d a.May that satisfaction of joy come into your heart.
Just played that album a few days ago, cracking album.
As you have mentioned Miles Davis I though you would like to know that I have nearly all his recordings and I am going through them in the car when I go out - there is a long way to go yet before I hear them all.
Andy
August 31st, 2020 00:38
Goldfinch60 said:
A dark poem as promise d a.May that satisfaction of joy come into your heart.
Just played that album a few days ago, cracking album.
As you have mentioned Miles Davis I though you would like to know that I have nearly all his recordings and I am going through them in the car when I go out - there is a long way to go yet before I hear them all.
Andy
August 31st, 2020 00:38
when demons know me
Neville said:
deceptively psychologically orientated.. this is also an exceptionally noir poem that is desperately deep and maybe even significantly insightful ...
August 30th, 2020 16:43
Neville said:
deceptively psychologically orientated.. this is also an exceptionally noir poem that is desperately deep and maybe even significantly insightful ...
August 30th, 2020 16:43
Looney Limerics
Neville said:
Is this one three verse whole or three single limericks stacked atop each other .. at the end of the day, it doesn\'t really matter does it because it, or they, whichever, work either which way .. ..
and furthermore, your decision to post limericks today as I know you have done in the past serves to demonstrate how versatile you are when it comes to this writing malarkey .....
August 30th, 2020 16:39
Neville said:
Is this one three verse whole or three single limericks stacked atop each other .. at the end of the day, it doesn\'t really matter does it because it, or they, whichever, work either which way .. ..
and furthermore, your decision to post limericks today as I know you have done in the past serves to demonstrate how versatile you are when it comes to this writing malarkey .....
August 30th, 2020 16:39
Looney Limerics
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Morning Dusk! They say that MIMICRY is the highest form of FLATTERY and you sure have flattered UNCLE MIKE with this one! He sure deserves it. For ME - With His Daubs & Odd Odes He is one of the LOVLIEST Poets on MPS. Thanks for showcasing a TRUE GENTLEMAN!
Love - Peace & Joy
ANGELA 💛💛💛
August 30th, 2020 03:38
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA HERE - Good Morning Dusk! They say that MIMICRY is the highest form of FLATTERY and you sure have flattered UNCLE MIKE with this one! He sure deserves it. For ME - With His Daubs & Odd Odes He is one of the LOVLIEST Poets on MPS. Thanks for showcasing a TRUE GENTLEMAN!
Love - Peace & Joy
ANGELA 💛💛💛
August 30th, 2020 03:38
Looney Limerics
Goldfinch60 said:
Three good limericks d a, as Michael said, looking forward to more.
Andy
August 30th, 2020 00:23
Goldfinch60 said:
Three good limericks d a, as Michael said, looking forward to more.
Andy
August 30th, 2020 00:23
Looney Limerics
Michael Edwards said:
Well you know I enjoyed these - keep writing them - I look forward to more.
August 29th, 2020 16:04
Michael Edwards said:
Well you know I enjoyed these - keep writing them - I look forward to more.
August 29th, 2020 16:04
peacemaker
Neville said:
No additional words required ...
... this is a remarkable tribute to a remarkable man ..
Nice one DA ...
... Neville
August 27th, 2020 07:36
Neville said:
No additional words required ...
... this is a remarkable tribute to a remarkable man ..
Nice one DA ...
... Neville
August 27th, 2020 07:36
Johann Sebastion Woof
Neville said:
gotta take the woof with the smoothe dont\'cha ..... :)
August 26th, 2020 08:16
Neville said:
gotta take the woof with the smoothe dont\'cha ..... :)
August 26th, 2020 08:16
sheep
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Haha excellent reminded me of...
One day I was counting clouds to put myself to sleep
The clouds had eyes and ears and legs my god! I\'m counting sheep!
Love this one DA \"when sleep turns to dreams\" are we asleep? oh so many questions
August 26th, 2020 01:28
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Haha excellent reminded me of...
One day I was counting clouds to put myself to sleep
The clouds had eyes and ears and legs my god! I\'m counting sheep!
Love this one DA \"when sleep turns to dreams\" are we asleep? oh so many questions
August 26th, 2020 01:28
sheep
Goldfinch60 said:
You just didn\'t want to count me did you, I was number 71.
You know that you have absolutely hit the spot with the music today. The 50s cool mainstream jazz is at the top of my long list of jazz I like.
Andy
August 26th, 2020 00:28
Goldfinch60 said:
You just didn\'t want to count me did you, I was number 71.
You know that you have absolutely hit the spot with the music today. The 50s cool mainstream jazz is at the top of my long list of jazz I like.
Andy
August 26th, 2020 00:28
sheep
orchidee said:
Did that sheep wake you up? Did you have to start counting over again?
August 25th, 2020 09:45
orchidee said:
Did that sheep wake you up? Did you have to start counting over again?
August 25th, 2020 09:45
sheep
Neville said:
No doubt about it he say\'s somewhat sheepishly .. ewe still got it D.A ..
You can beat an egg, but ewe just can\'t beat a good chuckle can ya ...
... Neville
August 25th, 2020 09:12
Neville said:
No doubt about it he say\'s somewhat sheepishly .. ewe still got it D.A ..
You can beat an egg, but ewe just can\'t beat a good chuckle can ya ...
... Neville
August 25th, 2020 09:12
sheep
Michael Edwards said:
Ha - love it - we are but two who write with a sense of fun and long may we continue to do so.
August 25th, 2020 07:36
Michael Edwards said:
Ha - love it - we are but two who write with a sense of fun and long may we continue to do so.
August 25th, 2020 07:36
sheep
Fay Slimm. said:
Ha - try counting backwards next time my friend -- am right now being taken to dance in the dark with that wonderful sax and oh how I adore it.
August 25th, 2020 07:15
Fay Slimm. said:
Ha - try counting backwards next time my friend -- am right now being taken to dance in the dark with that wonderful sax and oh how I adore it.
August 25th, 2020 07:15
giggle strips
L. B. Mek said:
like the playful rhythm that reinforces the witty tone and highlights the fun aspects of this write,
effortlessly executed
August 25th, 2020 03:22
L. B. Mek said:
like the playful rhythm that reinforces the witty tone and highlights the fun aspects of this write,
effortlessly executed
August 25th, 2020 03:22
giggle strips
Goldfinch60 said:
Those years have now fallen away with your words d a, I am now back to my younger self - \"Who\'s for tag!.
Andy
August 25th, 2020 00:53
Goldfinch60 said:
Those years have now fallen away with your words d a, I am now back to my younger self - \"Who\'s for tag!.
Andy
August 25th, 2020 00:53
about Lisa
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI DUSK - A & B here - Yes we both had different views about who Lisa was but Angela & I both agreed that SHE was packing her bag to leave HE because of LISA and also that because SHEs MUM was in a Locket she was probably deceased ? Also - because SHEs MUM had such distinctive EYES SHE assumed LISA was a blood relation ? We are not told the age of LISA which would have helped !
I (BRIAN) assumed HE & SHE were Husband & Wife and that LISA ~ HEs new Lady Friend who has just come on the scene ~ presumably Younger than SHE (They usually are). LISA is (because of the EYES) possibly related to SHEs Mother ~ even though previously SHE has never never met Lisa ~ a niece perhaps. Perhaps Brian didnt know who she was either and had met her at Work or in the Gym or whatever ? The *EYES* are too much for She & She has to pack her bags & LEAVE !
I - Angela - being a WOMAN see a much more intriguing and heart-breaking Scenario. HE & SHE are co-habiting and one Day she discovers a photo of a Young Lady in His Wallet with an inscription *All My Love LISA and seven kisses* Men are such fools HE should have left it @ work! LISA is horrified because looking back at her - from the photo - are her own DEAD MOTHERS EYES - Who is LISA? When She confronts He - He turns Pale and tries to Laugh it off saying *Its Nothing - just a Girl at Work* She hires a Private Detective to look into who actually LISA is. To her added HORROR she discovers LISA is her own SISTER and a Secret Love Child between HE & HER Mother. Shes Mother was divorced when SHE met HE! She resolved to KILL both LISA & HE .......... To be continued!
Which version do you prefer?
Love - Joy & Peace
Angela & Brian 🧡💙
August 24th, 2020 18:00
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI DUSK - A & B here - Yes we both had different views about who Lisa was but Angela & I both agreed that SHE was packing her bag to leave HE because of LISA and also that because SHEs MUM was in a Locket she was probably deceased ? Also - because SHEs MUM had such distinctive EYES SHE assumed LISA was a blood relation ? We are not told the age of LISA which would have helped !
I (BRIAN) assumed HE & SHE were Husband & Wife and that LISA ~ HEs new Lady Friend who has just come on the scene ~ presumably Younger than SHE (They usually are). LISA is (because of the EYES) possibly related to SHEs Mother ~ even though previously SHE has never never met Lisa ~ a niece perhaps. Perhaps Brian didnt know who she was either and had met her at Work or in the Gym or whatever ? The *EYES* are too much for She & She has to pack her bags & LEAVE !
I - Angela - being a WOMAN see a much more intriguing and heart-breaking Scenario. HE & SHE are co-habiting and one Day she discovers a photo of a Young Lady in His Wallet with an inscription *All My Love LISA and seven kisses* Men are such fools HE should have left it @ work! LISA is horrified because looking back at her - from the photo - are her own DEAD MOTHERS EYES - Who is LISA? When She confronts He - He turns Pale and tries to Laugh it off saying *Its Nothing - just a Girl at Work* She hires a Private Detective to look into who actually LISA is. To her added HORROR she discovers LISA is her own SISTER and a Secret Love Child between HE & HER Mother. Shes Mother was divorced when SHE met HE! She resolved to KILL both LISA & HE .......... To be continued!
Which version do you prefer?
Love - Joy & Peace
Angela & Brian 🧡💙
August 24th, 2020 18:00
giggle strips
Fay Slimm. said:
What a great flow to this little bit of gentle erotica - - being young in mind and heart certainly \"strips the years clean away\" - - your verses D.A. are full of exciting movement and your way with short- line is always alluring to verbose poets like me.......... great read.
August 24th, 2020 09:36
Fay Slimm. said:
What a great flow to this little bit of gentle erotica - - being young in mind and heart certainly \"strips the years clean away\" - - your verses D.A. are full of exciting movement and your way with short- line is always alluring to verbose poets like me.......... great read.
August 24th, 2020 09:36
giggle strips
jarcher54 said:
You\'ve nailed it for those of us over 50 (or whatever) with this:
A young man
walking in an
old mans shoes.
I feel like a college kid every day as I head to work on my bike, ride through the university neighborhoods getting passed by gaggles of kids on electric scooters, dodging the coeds on their phones crossing the street without looking up... they see an old guy with gray hair sticking out the back of his helmet... I feel like I fit right in... sigh.
August 24th, 2020 08:35
jarcher54 said:
You\'ve nailed it for those of us over 50 (or whatever) with this:
A young man
walking in an
old mans shoes.
I feel like a college kid every day as I head to work on my bike, ride through the university neighborhoods getting passed by gaggles of kids on electric scooters, dodging the coeds on their phones crossing the street without looking up... they see an old guy with gray hair sticking out the back of his helmet... I feel like I fit right in... sigh.
August 24th, 2020 08:35
giggle strips
Neville said:
apart from the obvious .. and that is both the nature & quality of this little whimsey .. I love the fact that you are so versatile DA ... and on that note, I note certain similarities between my own and your approach to our posted poetry today ....
.... Neville :)
August 24th, 2020 07:07
Neville said:
apart from the obvious .. and that is both the nature & quality of this little whimsey .. I love the fact that you are so versatile DA ... and on that note, I note certain similarities between my own and your approach to our posted poetry today ....
.... Neville :)
August 24th, 2020 07:07
pulsing fluff
Neville said:
I must have been away when you first posted \'pulsing fluff\' ..
the title intrigued me and the body of this gift certainly did not disappoint ...
August 23rd, 2020 16:20
Neville said:
I must have been away when you first posted \'pulsing fluff\' ..
the title intrigued me and the body of this gift certainly did not disappoint ...
August 23rd, 2020 16:20
for VJ Day
FineB said:
Hi Dusk Arising,
A wonderful, brilliant write.
We should definitely respect our armed forces more.
The soldiers from WW1 and WW2 I hold up with deepest respect and admiration.
Thanks for this wonderful tribute
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
August 23rd, 2020 13:35
FineB said:
Hi Dusk Arising,
A wonderful, brilliant write.
We should definitely respect our armed forces more.
The soldiers from WW1 and WW2 I hold up with deepest respect and admiration.
Thanks for this wonderful tribute
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
August 23rd, 2020 13:35
if
Goldfinch60 said:
That pain can sometimes be so hurtful if people anger us.
Andy
August 23rd, 2020 00:07
Goldfinch60 said:
That pain can sometimes be so hurtful if people anger us.
Andy
August 23rd, 2020 00:07
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