Comments received on poems by sylviasearcher
Wasted
Neville said:
say it like ya mean it why dont ya
this reads more like self loathing in its own write , rather than just depression...
Of course not liking or loving oneself often also goes hand in hand with depression...
and a whole heap of other affective disorders.. Your words here feel like you are trying desperately to beat a black cloud with a blunt instrument...
Now from an analytical perspective.. it would be far too easy to arrive at the conclusion you see yourself as both the blunt instrument and black cloud.....
Whereas I think that is bollocks... You are a very talented writer who needs to learn how to format poetry such as this to make it sit better on the page...... My rant is over... sheesh, do I love the odd rant..... Neville
August 8th, 2019 07:07
Neville said:
say it like ya mean it why dont ya
this reads more like self loathing in its own write , rather than just depression...
Of course not liking or loving oneself often also goes hand in hand with depression...
and a whole heap of other affective disorders.. Your words here feel like you are trying desperately to beat a black cloud with a blunt instrument...
Now from an analytical perspective.. it would be far too easy to arrive at the conclusion you see yourself as both the blunt instrument and black cloud.....
Whereas I think that is bollocks... You are a very talented writer who needs to learn how to format poetry such as this to make it sit better on the page...... My rant is over... sheesh, do I love the odd rant..... Neville
August 8th, 2019 07:07
Candles
Neville said:
These words seem to tell an almost complete story... the bit that is missing, at least in my mind.. is the satisfactory conclusion to the take... having said that, or rather felt that.. it would be very easy to accept the ending as poetically stated.... I just reckon your poem begs the reader to arrive at their own conclusion... and that my friend is one of the hallmarks of a good poet.....
Neville
July 29th, 2019 08:06
Neville said:
These words seem to tell an almost complete story... the bit that is missing, at least in my mind.. is the satisfactory conclusion to the take... having said that, or rather felt that.. it would be very easy to accept the ending as poetically stated.... I just reckon your poem begs the reader to arrive at their own conclusion... and that my friend is one of the hallmarks of a good poet.....
Neville
July 29th, 2019 08:06
Candles
Fay Slimm. said:
Oh this is so beautifully rhymed and so appealing in texture and eloquence - never say you are not suited to poems of love my friend. A delightful read.
July 29th, 2019 08:00
Fay Slimm. said:
Oh this is so beautifully rhymed and so appealing in texture and eloquence - never say you are not suited to poems of love my friend. A delightful read.
July 29th, 2019 08:00
Dead
Suresh said:
The worst kind of trouble is the one, one has with oneself.
Mind bending, well done
July 25th, 2019 16:23
Suresh said:
The worst kind of trouble is the one, one has with oneself.
Mind bending, well done
July 25th, 2019 16:23
Dead
dusk arising said:
A fear which surely haunts all womankind expressed here. Vibrant, tragic, deathly.
July 24th, 2019 01:41
dusk arising said:
A fear which surely haunts all womankind expressed here. Vibrant, tragic, deathly.
July 24th, 2019 01:41
Dead
Neville said:
In trying to avoid platitudes, I am presently struggling to find words that might go some way to describe just how good this particular poem is.... Neville
July 23rd, 2019 04:48
Neville said:
In trying to avoid platitudes, I am presently struggling to find words that might go some way to describe just how good this particular poem is.... Neville
July 23rd, 2019 04:48
Away!
Neville said:
I found myself having to read these words through slower than I initially wanted to... because my tongue kind of ripped over itself.... not sure whether I explained that very well.. it is certainly not a criticism .. I found that when I took more time, they flowed better in my head.... which probably says more about my head than anything else... maybe..... Neville
July 21st, 2019 03:57
Neville said:
I found myself having to read these words through slower than I initially wanted to... because my tongue kind of ripped over itself.... not sure whether I explained that very well.. it is certainly not a criticism .. I found that when I took more time, they flowed better in my head.... which probably says more about my head than anything else... maybe..... Neville
July 21st, 2019 03:57
Away!
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow elegant musing in awesome word choice, poetic and soulful, I can see why it mesmerises. Kudos.
Would you pls pleez give your thoughts/ comments on my newest poem too?
July 18th, 2019 02:28
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow elegant musing in awesome word choice, poetic and soulful, I can see why it mesmerises. Kudos.
Would you pls pleez give your thoughts/ comments on my newest poem too?
July 18th, 2019 02:28
Away!
Suresh said:
In differing forms, differing contemplation. A mesmerizing poem
July 17th, 2019 11:15
Suresh said:
In differing forms, differing contemplation. A mesmerizing poem
July 17th, 2019 11:15
Witch
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write Sylvia and as Neville said final two lines say it all.
July 16th, 2019 00:45
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write Sylvia and as Neville said final two lines say it all.
July 16th, 2019 00:45
Witch
Suresh said:
Sometimes when I have an itch, I go crazy like a witch, scratching myself like a bitch, by the way which....
July 15th, 2019 09:09
Suresh said:
Sometimes when I have an itch, I go crazy like a witch, scratching myself like a bitch, by the way which....
July 15th, 2019 09:09
Witch
Neville said:
many a true word written in haste
I imagine you are not a witch, but neither are ya fucking chaste... well constructed Sylviasearcher and with an unexpected but equally powerful and necessary conclusion..... Neville
July 15th, 2019 02:21
Neville said:
many a true word written in haste
I imagine you are not a witch, but neither are ya fucking chaste... well constructed Sylviasearcher and with an unexpected but equally powerful and necessary conclusion..... Neville
July 15th, 2019 02:21
Will I ever?
sylviasearcher said:
Thanks for enjoying it. Endings are hard. I guess there’s a poem in that notion...
July 12th, 2019 01:32
sylviasearcher said:
Thanks for enjoying it. Endings are hard. I guess there’s a poem in that notion...
July 12th, 2019 01:32
Will I ever?
Unobtrusive Sun said:
As the others have said, this is great stuff! I loved it.
Also, I have the same problem with ending my works. It is so much easier to continue adding to the moment of inspiration, and to coherently wrap it all up in a couple of sentences can be a real challenge. You succeeded with a very nice conclusion.
July 10th, 2019 02:40
Unobtrusive Sun said:
As the others have said, this is great stuff! I loved it.
Also, I have the same problem with ending my works. It is so much easier to continue adding to the moment of inspiration, and to coherently wrap it all up in a couple of sentences can be a real challenge. You succeeded with a very nice conclusion.
July 10th, 2019 02:40
Healing
Heather Hoffman said:
A nice read. I enjoyed your use of rhyme. Well done.
July 7th, 2019 20:03
Heather Hoffman said:
A nice read. I enjoyed your use of rhyme. Well done.
July 7th, 2019 20:03
Healing
Suresh said:
Healing comes with acceptance and not allowing the event to rob you of any more moments.
A very fine write indeed
July 7th, 2019 10:12
Suresh said:
Healing comes with acceptance and not allowing the event to rob you of any more moments.
A very fine write indeed
July 7th, 2019 10:12
Healing
Goldfinch60 said:
Healing comes when you accept the wonder in your life is real, that wonder WILL be there within you.
July 7th, 2019 09:59
Goldfinch60 said:
Healing comes when you accept the wonder in your life is real, that wonder WILL be there within you.
July 7th, 2019 09:59
Marked
Poetic Dan said:
Wow great vulnerability and strength, you are in your way to where you want to go.
Thank you for sharing
Always appreciated
July 7th, 2019 04:50
Poetic Dan said:
Wow great vulnerability and strength, you are in your way to where you want to go.
Thank you for sharing
Always appreciated
July 7th, 2019 04:50
Unbeing
Goldfinch60 said:
Very emotive write. I am sure that you do not lose when you win, use that winning to go to a better place.
July 5th, 2019 02:37
Goldfinch60 said:
Very emotive write. I am sure that you do not lose when you win, use that winning to go to a better place.
July 5th, 2019 02:37
Marked
Christina8 said:
Now this was surely written by a poet that was left \"brandished\"......but not defeated. An excellent write to be sure!!--Christina
July 2nd, 2019 21:47
Christina8 said:
Now this was surely written by a poet that was left \"brandished\"......but not defeated. An excellent write to be sure!!--Christina
July 2nd, 2019 21:47
Marked
Michael Edwards said:
A well woven work - and Neville is right - you do melancholy so well - not a case of being better but of being just as good.
July 2nd, 2019 09:30
Michael Edwards said:
A well woven work - and Neville is right - you do melancholy so well - not a case of being better but of being just as good.
July 2nd, 2019 09:30
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