Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Cereal To Eat.
Goldfinch60 said:
Strong words Tobani, life must have been hard but you c=have come through it.
Andy
July 17th, 2025 01:10
Goldfinch60 said:
Strong words Tobani, life must have been hard but you c=have come through it.
Andy
July 17th, 2025 01:10
Cereal To Eat.
Bella Shepard said:
A truly sad reflection on neglect, one that no child should ever have to bear, and yet many do as you did. You tell it honestly, as only a young boy could feel it at the time, what else could you do but the best you were able. Kudos my friend!
July 16th, 2025 12:44
Bella Shepard said:
A truly sad reflection on neglect, one that no child should ever have to bear, and yet many do as you did. You tell it honestly, as only a young boy could feel it at the time, what else could you do but the best you were able. Kudos my friend!
July 16th, 2025 12:44
Cereal To Eat.
Cheeky Missy said:
A graphic image of harlotry in action, the poverty seems nearly passé, while the misery looks on without a blink, and that common denominator known as cereal is the poster child. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a painfully haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 16th, 2025 10:35
Cheeky Missy said:
A graphic image of harlotry in action, the poverty seems nearly passé, while the misery looks on without a blink, and that common denominator known as cereal is the poster child. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a painfully haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 16th, 2025 10:35
Cereal To Eat.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This is heartbreaking, Nataiella. You’ve captured a child’s voice with painful clarity...the quiet strength, the forced maturity, the yearning for stability in a world that keeps shifting underfoot. The repetition of the cereal is devastating in its simplicity. A powerful, necessary poem. Thank you for sharing this truth. 🌹👏
July 16th, 2025 07:58
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This is heartbreaking, Nataiella. You’ve captured a child’s voice with painful clarity...the quiet strength, the forced maturity, the yearning for stability in a world that keeps shifting underfoot. The repetition of the cereal is devastating in its simplicity. A powerful, necessary poem. Thank you for sharing this truth. 🌹👏
July 16th, 2025 07:58
Cereal To Eat.
Friendship said:
The poem \"Cereal to Eat\" presents a stark and poignant portrayal of a child\'s experience living in a dysfunctional home. It revolves around neglect, instability, and the longing for basic needs amidst chaos. includes familial relationships, the impact of adult behaviors on children, and the struggle for emotional and physical sustenance in a home where parental figures prioritize their desires over their children\'s well-being.
July 16th, 2025 07:27
Friendship said:
The poem \"Cereal to Eat\" presents a stark and poignant portrayal of a child\'s experience living in a dysfunctional home. It revolves around neglect, instability, and the longing for basic needs amidst chaos. includes familial relationships, the impact of adult behaviors on children, and the struggle for emotional and physical sustenance in a home where parental figures prioritize their desires over their children\'s well-being.
July 16th, 2025 07:27
Cereal To Eat.
Doggerel Dave said:
Desperately difficult (not a good word - must be a better one out there) situation to find yourself in, Tobani. Only thought , perhaps possible to have would be something like \"one day I\'ll grow up and get out of here.....\"
July 16th, 2025 07:04
Doggerel Dave said:
Desperately difficult (not a good word - must be a better one out there) situation to find yourself in, Tobani. Only thought , perhaps possible to have would be something like \"one day I\'ll grow up and get out of here.....\"
July 16th, 2025 07:04
Cereal To Eat.
Tony Grannell said:
Such a simple thing, the breakfast cereal and for a child to be denied this morning treat is in no uncertain terms, child abuse as is most of the content in this insightful and harrowing poem. Very well exposed in a down-to-earth narrative.
Wishing you all the best,
Tony.
July 16th, 2025 06:55
Tony Grannell said:
Such a simple thing, the breakfast cereal and for a child to be denied this morning treat is in no uncertain terms, child abuse as is most of the content in this insightful and harrowing poem. Very well exposed in a down-to-earth narrative.
Wishing you all the best,
Tony.
July 16th, 2025 06:55
Cereal To Eat.
sorenbarrett said:
A confusing world for a child. This poem tells of a child\'s priorities neglected by adults. The confusion of relationship roles and unfulfilled physical needs. A difficult poem to read of so called modern relationships. Nicely written Nataiella
July 16th, 2025 03:50
sorenbarrett said:
A confusing world for a child. This poem tells of a child\'s priorities neglected by adults. The confusion of relationship roles and unfulfilled physical needs. A difficult poem to read of so called modern relationships. Nicely written Nataiella
July 16th, 2025 03:50
Standing Alone.
Goldfinch60 said:
Today is here once more Tobani and may there be many more.
Andy
July 16th, 2025 00:52
Goldfinch60 said:
Today is here once more Tobani and may there be many more.
Andy
July 16th, 2025 00:52
Standing Alone.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This poem cuts right through the noise...no pretense, just truth. The final line hits hardest of all for me...not because it ends in despair, but because it didn’t. You’re still standing. Still writing. And that matters so very much! I am personally glad and blessed by that! 🌹👏 Rock on, Nataiella! A fave for sure.
July 15th, 2025 14:21
Tristan Robert Lange said:
This poem cuts right through the noise...no pretense, just truth. The final line hits hardest of all for me...not because it ends in despair, but because it didn’t. You’re still standing. Still writing. And that matters so very much! I am personally glad and blessed by that! 🌹👏 Rock on, Nataiella! A fave for sure.
July 15th, 2025 14:21
Standing Alone.
Damaso said:
I sense a musicality in the words that only I can think of. I feel there\'s a playfulness in that final moral. Thank you so much for sharing. Best regards.
July 15th, 2025 09:52
Damaso said:
I sense a musicality in the words that only I can think of. I feel there\'s a playfulness in that final moral. Thank you so much for sharing. Best regards.
July 15th, 2025 09:52
Standing Alone.
Tony Grannell said:
Hello Tobani,
The misery of loneliness, that silent pain that can lead one to the most darkest place of all. A powerful poem from beginning to end.
Do take care now,
Tony.
July 15th, 2025 05:57
Tony Grannell said:
Hello Tobani,
The misery of loneliness, that silent pain that can lead one to the most darkest place of all. A powerful poem from beginning to end.
Do take care now,
Tony.
July 15th, 2025 05:57
Standing Alone.
sorenbarrett said:
Clever Tobani and with good meaning as well. Here the use of rhyme lures the reader to ignore the wisdom. Very well done. Never put off for tomorrow what can be done today unless it is death.
July 15th, 2025 04:27
sorenbarrett said:
Clever Tobani and with good meaning as well. Here the use of rhyme lures the reader to ignore the wisdom. Very well done. Never put off for tomorrow what can be done today unless it is death.
July 15th, 2025 04:27
Gaza (Help).
ElizabethMoroz said:
Your use of rhythm propels a sense of urgency in your words . Excellent work on a most devastating situation. Necessary words of the time that we live in . Well done Sincerely Elizabeth
July 14th, 2025 05:49
ElizabethMoroz said:
Your use of rhythm propels a sense of urgency in your words . Excellent work on a most devastating situation. Necessary words of the time that we live in . Well done Sincerely Elizabeth
July 14th, 2025 05:49
Just Because.
AwHec8 said:
Absolutely Love this Poem. Nice short and sweet words you put together.
July 13th, 2025 17:27
AwHec8 said:
Absolutely Love this Poem. Nice short and sweet words you put together.
July 13th, 2025 17:27
Half a Heart.
SureshG said:
No matter how you sliced it, there was no right half.
July 12th, 2025 11:50
SureshG said:
No matter how you sliced it, there was no right half.
July 12th, 2025 11:50
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Goldfinch60 said:
I will meet you Tobani and we will find our own way to the future.
Andy
July 11th, 2025 01:41
Goldfinch60 said:
I will meet you Tobani and we will find our own way to the future.
Andy
July 11th, 2025 01:41
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Cheeky Missy said:
Exquisitely poignant with excellent imagery and so beautifully and charmingly rendered I want to take you by the shoulders gently and remonstrate with you by name, pleading with you. Thank you very much for sharing.
July 10th, 2025 15:02
Cheeky Missy said:
Exquisitely poignant with excellent imagery and so beautifully and charmingly rendered I want to take you by the shoulders gently and remonstrate with you by name, pleading with you. Thank you very much for sharing.
July 10th, 2025 15:02
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MendedFences27 said:
Nice, PL. I don\'t know how far down that \'basement floor\' is, but I think I might end up there as well. You have encapsulated a lifetime into this poem, and i felt the last lines were referring to the final judgement. A most enjoyable read. - Phil A.
July 10th, 2025 13:43
MendedFences27 said:
Nice, PL. I don\'t know how far down that \'basement floor\' is, but I think I might end up there as well. You have encapsulated a lifetime into this poem, and i felt the last lines were referring to the final judgement. A most enjoyable read. - Phil A.
July 10th, 2025 13:43
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arqios said:
Much of us are quite befuddled by the afterlife 🕊️🙏🏻
July 10th, 2025 09:58
arqios said:
Much of us are quite befuddled by the afterlife 🕊️🙏🏻
July 10th, 2025 09:58
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2781 said:
The password is found in the tears of a repentant heart.
July 10th, 2025 09:31
2781 said:
The password is found in the tears of a repentant heart.
July 10th, 2025 09:31
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Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani…this one tore right through me. 😔 The pacing—line by line—mirrors the descent, the pleading, the hope, and finally…the blow. And the ending is cold. Crushing. Perfectly delivered. You gave voice to the quiet anguish so many carry but rarely articulate. Powerful, painful, and unforgettable. 🌹👏
July 10th, 2025 08:53
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani…this one tore right through me. 😔 The pacing—line by line—mirrors the descent, the pleading, the hope, and finally…the blow. And the ending is cold. Crushing. Perfectly delivered. You gave voice to the quiet anguish so many carry but rarely articulate. Powerful, painful, and unforgettable. 🌹👏
July 10th, 2025 08:53
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Doggerel Dave said:
Preemptive strike - I\'m always having fun one way or (sometimes obscure) another. One of several motivations for being here.
July 10th, 2025 08:24
Doggerel Dave said:
Preemptive strike - I\'m always having fun one way or (sometimes obscure) another. One of several motivations for being here.
July 10th, 2025 08:24
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