Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Butterfly.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani…this one touched something deep. 🦋 That first half? Felt like my mirror. That second? Like a hope I still dare to hold. You captured both truths with such tenderness and clarity. Quietly powerful, my friend. Truly beautiful. 🌹👏
July 7th, 2025 09:07
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani…this one touched something deep. 🦋 That first half? Felt like my mirror. That second? Like a hope I still dare to hold. You captured both truths with such tenderness and clarity. Quietly powerful, my friend. Truly beautiful. 🌹👏
July 7th, 2025 09:07
Butterfly.
arqios said:
The awesome beauty and symbolism of the butterfly, superbly enjoyable🕊️🙏🏻
July 7th, 2025 05:38
arqios said:
The awesome beauty and symbolism of the butterfly, superbly enjoyable🕊️🙏🏻
July 7th, 2025 05:38
Butterfly.
David Wakeling said:
A wonderful journey poem.The butterfly is seen as madly flying in circles at first and then gracefully dancing in the air.The author changes from questioning if the butterfly mimics his life to wanted to be the butterfly.Wonderful philosphical question here.Enjoyed reading
July 7th, 2025 04:27
David Wakeling said:
A wonderful journey poem.The butterfly is seen as madly flying in circles at first and then gracefully dancing in the air.The author changes from questioning if the butterfly mimics his life to wanted to be the butterfly.Wonderful philosphical question here.Enjoyed reading
July 7th, 2025 04:27
Butterfly.
sorenbarrett said:
The two sides of a coin being the same coin but seen differently. I love this dichotomy that you have depicted in this poem. And the image of a butterfly so well chosen image of metamorphosis, subject of the ancient story of the wise man\'s dream of being a butterfly and now not knowing if he is a butterfly dreaming he is a person or a person that dreamed he was a butterfly. A fave
July 7th, 2025 04:19
sorenbarrett said:
The two sides of a coin being the same coin but seen differently. I love this dichotomy that you have depicted in this poem. And the image of a butterfly so well chosen image of metamorphosis, subject of the ancient story of the wise man\'s dream of being a butterfly and now not knowing if he is a butterfly dreaming he is a person or a person that dreamed he was a butterfly. A fave
July 7th, 2025 04:19
Hello or Goodbye.
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh delicious conundrums! Oh sweetly twisting pretty number. Oh irresistible mystery! Charming and superbly rendered with gorgeous imagery and a deeply haunting poignancy. Thank you, thank you for sharing.
July 6th, 2025 09:55
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh delicious conundrums! Oh sweetly twisting pretty number. Oh irresistible mystery! Charming and superbly rendered with gorgeous imagery and a deeply haunting poignancy. Thank you, thank you for sharing.
July 6th, 2025 09:55
Fondly Remembered.
Cheeky Missy said:
Whether or not thy wish is granted I canna say certainly, however, history is a very, very fascinating study, whence my favorite authors in highschool: Sir Walter Scott, James Fenimore Cooper, and Jane Austen. More power to you, delving into that most engaging subject. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a delightfully haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 6th, 2025 09:53
Cheeky Missy said:
Whether or not thy wish is granted I canna say certainly, however, history is a very, very fascinating study, whence my favorite authors in highschool: Sir Walter Scott, James Fenimore Cooper, and Jane Austen. More power to you, delving into that most engaging subject. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a delightfully haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 6th, 2025 09:53
Gaza (Help).
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
all this and the world turns a blind eye
July 6th, 2025 06:40
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
all this and the world turns a blind eye
July 6th, 2025 06:40
Gaza (Help).
Goldfinch60 said:
Those who can do things to create peace do nothing as there is no power or money in peace.
Andy
July 6th, 2025 02:02
Goldfinch60 said:
Those who can do things to create peace do nothing as there is no power or money in peace.
Andy
July 6th, 2025 02:02
Gaza (Help).
Damaso said:
Excellent text, Master. I completely agree with you impartially. War and its consequences hurt, but truthfully, what hurts me more is that the economic interests of the gun owner are indifferent or even excuse themselves, eternally lost in cynicism. It hurts to see my brothers fight. Thank you for sharing. Regards.
July 5th, 2025 14:39
Damaso said:
Excellent text, Master. I completely agree with you impartially. War and its consequences hurt, but truthfully, what hurts me more is that the economic interests of the gun owner are indifferent or even excuse themselves, eternally lost in cynicism. It hurts to see my brothers fight. Thank you for sharing. Regards.
July 5th, 2025 14:39
Gaza (Help).
orchidee said:
Some are going to be repaid for the horrors. It won\'t be in the misunderstood sense of \'suffer little children to come unto me\'. In that case, it simply means \'allow little children.....\' We can only hope some will suffer for it in judgement in the \'punishment\' sense, not merely in the sense of \'use your own judgement\' in making choices, etc.
July 5th, 2025 09:52
orchidee said:
Some are going to be repaid for the horrors. It won\'t be in the misunderstood sense of \'suffer little children to come unto me\'. In that case, it simply means \'allow little children.....\' We can only hope some will suffer for it in judgement in the \'punishment\' sense, not merely in the sense of \'use your own judgement\' in making choices, etc.
July 5th, 2025 09:52
Gaza (Help).
Tristan Robert Lange said:
No...you are not antiSemitic. And in this scenario YOU CANNOT BE as both the Israelis and the Palestinians are Semites and therefore Semitic. There, that solves that faux issue! Six feet under. Laid to rest. 🤣 You are welcome, my friend!
Again, you are not antiSemitic, you are discerning. No one I know supports Hamas or what they stand for, but who are getting maimed and killed here? And how many? Your poem speaks to this and I, for one, applaud it no matter what anyone else might think. 🌹👏
July 5th, 2025 08:33
Tristan Robert Lange said:
No...you are not antiSemitic. And in this scenario YOU CANNOT BE as both the Israelis and the Palestinians are Semites and therefore Semitic. There, that solves that faux issue! Six feet under. Laid to rest. 🤣 You are welcome, my friend!
Again, you are not antiSemitic, you are discerning. No one I know supports Hamas or what they stand for, but who are getting maimed and killed here? And how many? Your poem speaks to this and I, for one, applaud it no matter what anyone else might think. 🌹👏
July 5th, 2025 08:33
Fondly Remembered.
Kevin Hulme said:
There\'s a lot in what you say. The flow of time; that old enigma.
July 5th, 2025 07:54
Kevin Hulme said:
There\'s a lot in what you say. The flow of time; that old enigma.
July 5th, 2025 07:54
Gaza (Help).
arqios said:
Each generation has its burden and its scars, for those that straddle the ages and centuries, they carry more. An apt sentiment in today\'s terrible hostilities.
July 5th, 2025 07:25
arqios said:
Each generation has its burden and its scars, for those that straddle the ages and centuries, they carry more. An apt sentiment in today\'s terrible hostilities.
July 5th, 2025 07:25
Gaza (Help).
Doggerel Dave said:
Couldn’t agree more with most of your sentiments, Tobani. I have stated many times that innocent people die in war, and (despite a very vacuous ‘poet’ here attempting to pervert my intention) I maintain that I should utilize that in any antiwar rhetoric I may produce.
Nor can I better your statement: ‘I do not support or condone Hamas or am I anti-semitic, I hate to see the murdering of any people.’
However a number of elements:
The history (and it is always history) which goes well back before the Hamas attack on Israel has evolved into this current situation. Israel sees Hamas as a threat and why should it not? The logic is to eliminate Hamas, which I understand was voted for by the Palestinians and is imbedded deep in the population.
And please, leave the children out of it – they shouldn’t (how many times should I have to mention this?) have been pumped out in the first place.
Great write though.
July 5th, 2025 07:10
Doggerel Dave said:
Couldn’t agree more with most of your sentiments, Tobani. I have stated many times that innocent people die in war, and (despite a very vacuous ‘poet’ here attempting to pervert my intention) I maintain that I should utilize that in any antiwar rhetoric I may produce.
Nor can I better your statement: ‘I do not support or condone Hamas or am I anti-semitic, I hate to see the murdering of any people.’
However a number of elements:
The history (and it is always history) which goes well back before the Hamas attack on Israel has evolved into this current situation. Israel sees Hamas as a threat and why should it not? The logic is to eliminate Hamas, which I understand was voted for by the Palestinians and is imbedded deep in the population.
And please, leave the children out of it – they shouldn’t (how many times should I have to mention this?) have been pumped out in the first place.
Great write though.
July 5th, 2025 07:10
Gaza (Help).
Cheeky Missy said:
It appears the newscasters are on your side, or what? There are at least a couple angles on this for me, my late mother noting too many years ago by now that this modern age has a rather odd seeming sanctity for life when you begin to compare the numbers with that of ancient times; on that same angle, more or less, atrocities and virtual massacres were apparently commonplace in ancient times, when I examine the record casually. Thirdly, there is no \"news\"-- all is simply propaganda (one of my brothers showed me that years ago.) Fourthly, if you read James Thurber, you\'ll learn (as I did several years ago) this is no new phenomenon-- the aka \"news\" has been horribly negative forever...another reminder it\'s not news, but rather propaganda-- in that light, another of my brothers too many years ago wisely advocated we leave off this preoccupation with the \"news\" [propaganda] because it IS negative, and it doesn\'t help our daily perspective and approach to life, which I tried out and found quite useful. But I\'ve talked too much. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a fitly haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 5th, 2025 05:49
Cheeky Missy said:
It appears the newscasters are on your side, or what? There are at least a couple angles on this for me, my late mother noting too many years ago by now that this modern age has a rather odd seeming sanctity for life when you begin to compare the numbers with that of ancient times; on that same angle, more or less, atrocities and virtual massacres were apparently commonplace in ancient times, when I examine the record casually. Thirdly, there is no \"news\"-- all is simply propaganda (one of my brothers showed me that years ago.) Fourthly, if you read James Thurber, you\'ll learn (as I did several years ago) this is no new phenomenon-- the aka \"news\" has been horribly negative forever...another reminder it\'s not news, but rather propaganda-- in that light, another of my brothers too many years ago wisely advocated we leave off this preoccupation with the \"news\" [propaganda] because it IS negative, and it doesn\'t help our daily perspective and approach to life, which I tried out and found quite useful. But I\'ve talked too much. Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a fitly haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 5th, 2025 05:49
Gaza (Help).
David Wakeling said:
I agree with the terrible things that are happening in gaza. You are right to highlight what is going on.This poem is extraordinary and important poem. Peace seems a long way away.
July 5th, 2025 04:36
David Wakeling said:
I agree with the terrible things that are happening in gaza. You are right to highlight what is going on.This poem is extraordinary and important poem. Peace seems a long way away.
July 5th, 2025 04:36
Gaza (Help).
sorenbarrett said:
Politics, greed, history, religion are a deadly mix. The Torah does not include the New Testament there is no turn the other cheek it remains an eye for an eye. In such situations it always the innocent that suffer on both sides. The guilty protect themselves. A sad situation for all.
July 5th, 2025 04:04
sorenbarrett said:
Politics, greed, history, religion are a deadly mix. The Torah does not include the New Testament there is no turn the other cheek it remains an eye for an eye. In such situations it always the innocent that suffer on both sides. The guilty protect themselves. A sad situation for all.
July 5th, 2025 04:04
Fondly Remembered.
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words beautifully capture the timeless dance between past, present, and future. The cyclical nature of history and legacy is so thoughtfully expressed. May your journey indeed be remembered fondly.
July 4th, 2025 13:44
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
Your words beautifully capture the timeless dance between past, present, and future. The cyclical nature of history and legacy is so thoughtfully expressed. May your journey indeed be remembered fondly.
July 4th, 2025 13:44
Fondly Remembered.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
EXCELLENT! SO MUCH SO I HAVE TO SHOUT IN ALL CAPS! 🤣 Seriously, and excellent poem from its conciseness, through its form, and to its message. 🌹👏
July 4th, 2025 12:15
Tristan Robert Lange said:
EXCELLENT! SO MUCH SO I HAVE TO SHOUT IN ALL CAPS! 🤣 Seriously, and excellent poem from its conciseness, through its form, and to its message. 🌹👏
July 4th, 2025 12:15
Fondly Remembered.
orchidee said:
Erm, who are ya? I forgot! (heehee). Note to self: Do shut up Orchi. lol.
July 4th, 2025 08:44
orchidee said:
Erm, who are ya? I forgot! (heehee). Note to self: Do shut up Orchi. lol.
July 4th, 2025 08:44
Fondly Remembered.
arqios said:
Reading this feels like an embrace; a gentle meditation on time, memory, and legacy. It honours the past for shaping who we are, and looks to the future as both a guide and a continuation of that story. With quiet strength, it reminds us that every action we take becomes part of history, and carries the hope that our lives will be remembered with warmth. It’s a soft-spoken reflection on the desire to leave behind something meaningful. 🕊️🙏🏻
July 4th, 2025 06:29
arqios said:
Reading this feels like an embrace; a gentle meditation on time, memory, and legacy. It honours the past for shaping who we are, and looks to the future as both a guide and a continuation of that story. With quiet strength, it reminds us that every action we take becomes part of history, and carries the hope that our lives will be remembered with warmth. It’s a soft-spoken reflection on the desire to leave behind something meaningful. 🕊️🙏🏻
July 4th, 2025 06:29
Fondly Remembered.
sorenbarrett said:
Beautifully balanced this poem has that ring to it that is remembered because it is complete and rolls like a ball down hill until it reaches the bottom. The end ties into the beginning and like the Ouroboros feeds on itself. A fave
July 4th, 2025 04:13
sorenbarrett said:
Beautifully balanced this poem has that ring to it that is remembered because it is complete and rolls like a ball down hill until it reaches the bottom. The end ties into the beginning and like the Ouroboros feeds on itself. A fave
July 4th, 2025 04:13
Hello or Goodbye.
Goldfinch60 said:
I will just keep saying hello Tobani. Hello!
Andy
July 4th, 2025 01:15
Goldfinch60 said:
I will just keep saying hello Tobani. Hello!
Andy
July 4th, 2025 01:15
Hello or Goodbye.
Kevin Hulme said:
The Whole of life is within this Poem: Good One.
There are no words for Dioga Jota and his Brother. Though our thoughts are with his Wife and family.
July 3rd, 2025 20:28
Kevin Hulme said:
The Whole of life is within this Poem: Good One.
There are no words for Dioga Jota and his Brother. Though our thoughts are with his Wife and family.
July 3rd, 2025 20:28
Born In A Dream.
Doggerel Dave said:
I truly hope they can provide the opportunity for the child to complete their life during which they are allowed to reach their full potential
July 3rd, 2025 17:12
Doggerel Dave said:
I truly hope they can provide the opportunity for the child to complete their life during which they are allowed to reach their full potential
July 3rd, 2025 17:12
Hello or Goodbye.
Damaso said:
Internal and external struggles in unison ring out the echo of this text like a ritual in my mind. Thank you, Lord, for sharing it. Best regards.
July 3rd, 2025 16:41
Damaso said:
Internal and external struggles in unison ring out the echo of this text like a ritual in my mind. Thank you, Lord, for sharing it. Best regards.
July 3rd, 2025 16:41
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