Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Secrets (Senryu)
ElizabethMoroz said:
The last line is such a profound insight! So very true and pertinent. I love how brevity can be so powerful & effective. Very insightful & cleverly written. Elizabeth
July 25th, 2025 07:03
ElizabethMoroz said:
The last line is such a profound insight! So very true and pertinent. I love how brevity can be so powerful & effective. Very insightful & cleverly written. Elizabeth
July 25th, 2025 07:03
Secrets (Senryu)
arqios said:
We have cloudy days and rain for over a week now. Wow! secrets do tend to breed a fearsome inner terror. Superb write.
July 25th, 2025 06:51
arqios said:
We have cloudy days and rain for over a week now. Wow! secrets do tend to breed a fearsome inner terror. Superb write.
July 25th, 2025 06:51
Secrets (Senryu)
sorenbarrett said:
This poem contains a secret. In search of it I found it and it is in the last line. A fave
July 25th, 2025 04:17
sorenbarrett said:
This poem contains a secret. In search of it I found it and it is in the last line. A fave
July 25th, 2025 04:17
Wonderful Day!!!.
Goldfinch60 said:
If we have enough in our lives to get by Tobani we are very lucky, many do not.
Andy
July 25th, 2025 01:51
Goldfinch60 said:
If we have enough in our lives to get by Tobani we are very lucky, many do not.
Andy
July 25th, 2025 01:51
Wonderful Day!!!.
Dan Williams said:
Seems like a plan. You are a good example of \'be careful what you wish for\'. Works for me.
July 25th, 2025 00:18
Dan Williams said:
Seems like a plan. You are a good example of \'be careful what you wish for\'. Works for me.
July 25th, 2025 00:18
Wonderful Day!!!.
Damaso said:
Sometimes you just have to walk away with what you\'re wearing. Thank you so much for sharing. I really enjoyed it. Best regards.
July 24th, 2025 13:43
Damaso said:
Sometimes you just have to walk away with what you\'re wearing. Thank you so much for sharing. I really enjoyed it. Best regards.
July 24th, 2025 13:43
Wonderful Day!!!.
orchidee said:
A fine write PL. I might get shot, cos I played Russian roulette and only left one chamber of the gun empty. I didn\'t get the hang of it! lol.
July 24th, 2025 11:47
orchidee said:
A fine write PL. I might get shot, cos I played Russian roulette and only left one chamber of the gun empty. I didn\'t get the hang of it! lol.
July 24th, 2025 11:47
Wonderful Day!!!.
Cheeky Missy said:
It\'s never how much one has as it is what one has, the most crucial case in point rendered thus, \"...But one thing is needful: and Mary hath chosen that good part, which shall not be taken away from her.\"(Luke 10:42)--my aspiration. Beautifully rendered with an irresistible humor and charming humility, too, too perfect, complemented by excellent imagery with a haunting poignancy. I love it. Thank you for sharing.
July 24th, 2025 11:33
Cheeky Missy said:
It\'s never how much one has as it is what one has, the most crucial case in point rendered thus, \"...But one thing is needful: and Mary hath chosen that good part, which shall not be taken away from her.\"(Luke 10:42)--my aspiration. Beautifully rendered with an irresistible humor and charming humility, too, too perfect, complemented by excellent imagery with a haunting poignancy. I love it. Thank you for sharing.
July 24th, 2025 11:33
Wonderful Day!!!.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this cuts through all the fake gratitude noise...as it should. Each line lands and you said what most people won’t. Which is why I respect you so much, my friend. As one who has about what you have...and I presume most of us on here land somewhere on that spectrum, this lands true to me and will countless others. Judging from the faves...that is proving to be right. Wonderful job, my friend. Have a great day! 🌹👏
July 24th, 2025 08:16
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this cuts through all the fake gratitude noise...as it should. Each line lands and you said what most people won’t. Which is why I respect you so much, my friend. As one who has about what you have...and I presume most of us on here land somewhere on that spectrum, this lands true to me and will countless others. Judging from the faves...that is proving to be right. Wonderful job, my friend. Have a great day! 🌹👏
July 24th, 2025 08:16
Soldier`s Remorse
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this delivers hard in such few lines. It’s stripped down, bare...no escape hatch or easy answer. The final act isn’t redemption. Very powerful piece and a fave. 🌹👏
July 24th, 2025 07:12
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this delivers hard in such few lines. It’s stripped down, bare...no escape hatch or easy answer. The final act isn’t redemption. Very powerful piece and a fave. 🌹👏
July 24th, 2025 07:12
Soldier`s Remorse
RSM0812 said:
The realization of the hoorors of war. Very intersting. Well done.
July 24th, 2025 06:49
RSM0812 said:
The realization of the hoorors of war. Very intersting. Well done.
July 24th, 2025 06:49
I Don`t Have To Agree.
ElizabethMoroz said:
What a wonderful rhyming meditation on personal expression, democracy, freedom of speech, principals of kindness, the right to hold differing opinions yet still have a friendly conversation about it, gun violence, political division and coming together to debate. This piece is a wonderful diplomatic musing on the times that we live in. Very much enjoyed the themes and subject matter & especially the rhythmical cadence of the piece! Thankyou & well written ! Elizabeth
July 24th, 2025 06:04
ElizabethMoroz said:
What a wonderful rhyming meditation on personal expression, democracy, freedom of speech, principals of kindness, the right to hold differing opinions yet still have a friendly conversation about it, gun violence, political division and coming together to debate. This piece is a wonderful diplomatic musing on the times that we live in. Very much enjoyed the themes and subject matter & especially the rhythmical cadence of the piece! Thankyou & well written ! Elizabeth
July 24th, 2025 06:04
Wonderful Day!!!.
sorenbarrett said:
Having little is most liberating. As long as one has the basics of food, water, shelter and love. A far deeper write than what it appears on the surface. Nicely done Tobani.
July 24th, 2025 03:57
sorenbarrett said:
Having little is most liberating. As long as one has the basics of food, water, shelter and love. A far deeper write than what it appears on the surface. Nicely done Tobani.
July 24th, 2025 03:57
Wonderful Day!!!.
Friendship said:
The poet seems to address an internal audience—perhaps themselves or those who may feel similarly trapped between gratitude for survival and the weight of their emotions. The poem’s exploration of these themes suggests a contemporary relevance, possibly in a world grappling with the complexities of mental health against a backdrop of privilege and survival.
July 24th, 2025 03:51
Friendship said:
The poet seems to address an internal audience—perhaps themselves or those who may feel similarly trapped between gratitude for survival and the weight of their emotions. The poem’s exploration of these themes suggests a contemporary relevance, possibly in a world grappling with the complexities of mental health against a backdrop of privilege and survival.
July 24th, 2025 03:51
Wonderful Day!!!.
arqios said:
That many of us are familiar with and still there be those that seek out to take what’s over little we have.
July 24th, 2025 02:56
arqios said:
That many of us are familiar with and still there be those that seek out to take what’s over little we have.
July 24th, 2025 02:56
Soldier`s Remorse
Goldfinch60 said:
Sad words Tobani but could be very true.
Andy
July 24th, 2025 01:46
Goldfinch60 said:
Sad words Tobani but could be very true.
Andy
July 24th, 2025 01:46
Soldier`s Remorse
Kevin Hulme said:
Best if the Leaders of these Countries put the Cloves on and fought it out . Leave out the Middle Man and Innocents. Good Write.
July 23rd, 2025 18:49
Kevin Hulme said:
Best if the Leaders of these Countries put the Cloves on and fought it out . Leave out the Middle Man and Innocents. Good Write.
July 23rd, 2025 18:49
Soldier`s Remorse
Doggerel Dave said:
Well documented, or perhaps apocryphal, or somewhere between the two are accounts of solders deliberately failing to shoot combatants on the other side.
Same idea, yours expressed in more stark but effective poetic form, Tobani - good stuff.
July 23rd, 2025 18:42
Doggerel Dave said:
Well documented, or perhaps apocryphal, or somewhere between the two are accounts of solders deliberately failing to shoot combatants on the other side.
Same idea, yours expressed in more stark but effective poetic form, Tobani - good stuff.
July 23rd, 2025 18:42
Soldier`s Remorse
Neville said:
I have seen similar unexpected (but not quite as extreme behaviours occurring) and without any warning shots or other indications being apparent before the event .. furthermore, I am very impressed by todays offering .. Neville
July 23rd, 2025 13:15
Neville said:
I have seen similar unexpected (but not quite as extreme behaviours occurring) and without any warning shots or other indications being apparent before the event .. furthermore, I am very impressed by todays offering .. Neville
July 23rd, 2025 13:15
Soldier`s Remorse
Jeremy Leach said:
Makes a bullet-like point very well. I think soldiers are torn apart psychologically, let alone in other ways.
July 23rd, 2025 12:30
Jeremy Leach said:
Makes a bullet-like point very well. I think soldiers are torn apart psychologically, let alone in other ways.
July 23rd, 2025 12:30
Soldier`s Remorse
Priya Tomar said:
In this short but sharp poem you highlighted trauma faced by soldiers....
Nicely done.
July 23rd, 2025 10:33
Priya Tomar said:
In this short but sharp poem you highlighted trauma faced by soldiers....
Nicely done.
July 23rd, 2025 10:33
Soldier`s Remorse
Cheeky Missy said:
\"Two wrongs don\'t make a right,\" yet this fairly encapsulates in a nutshell why I still don\'t bother with that instrument. Beautifully rendered in deeply poignant brevity with gorgeous imagery. Thank you very much for sharing.
July 23rd, 2025 10:07
Cheeky Missy said:
\"Two wrongs don\'t make a right,\" yet this fairly encapsulates in a nutshell why I still don\'t bother with that instrument. Beautifully rendered in deeply poignant brevity with gorgeous imagery. Thank you very much for sharing.
July 23rd, 2025 10:07
Soldier`s Remorse
Tony Grannell said:
Hello, Tobani,
Short, sharp, shock and straight to the reader\'s senses in an outstanding verse. The complete and utter trauma of soldiers in the heat and heart of battle losing all sense of who and why they are in the prison of ptsd, their only way out, by their own hand. Very well done indeed.
Kind regards,
Tony.
July 23rd, 2025 08:22
Tony Grannell said:
Hello, Tobani,
Short, sharp, shock and straight to the reader\'s senses in an outstanding verse. The complete and utter trauma of soldiers in the heat and heart of battle losing all sense of who and why they are in the prison of ptsd, their only way out, by their own hand. Very well done indeed.
Kind regards,
Tony.
July 23rd, 2025 08:22
Soldier`s Remorse
Friendship said:
I have to piggyback off of Soren Barrett because he is so correct. I have never piggybacked on anybody in my life. Well, what wonderful writing in a short poem! Your poem \"Soldiers Remorse\" explores the profound psychological impact of war on soldiers and the moral dilemmas they face. It highlights the burden of guilt and the devastating consequences of violence, culminating in a tragic act of self-harm as a form of remorse.
July 23rd, 2025 07:13
Friendship said:
I have to piggyback off of Soren Barrett because he is so correct. I have never piggybacked on anybody in my life. Well, what wonderful writing in a short poem! Your poem \"Soldiers Remorse\" explores the profound psychological impact of war on soldiers and the moral dilemmas they face. It highlights the burden of guilt and the devastating consequences of violence, culminating in a tragic act of self-harm as a form of remorse.
July 23rd, 2025 07:13
Soldier`s Remorse
sorenbarrett said:
Self reflection may be the only way to stop violence that resides in all of us, physical, perbal, psychological, spiritual. We all find it easy to dehumanize and blame others but a mirror is hard to look into. A wonderful write and metaphor Tobani
July 23rd, 2025 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
Self reflection may be the only way to stop violence that resides in all of us, physical, perbal, psychological, spiritual. We all find it easy to dehumanize and blame others but a mirror is hard to look into. A wonderful write and metaphor Tobani
July 23rd, 2025 03:46
Loving Hate
Goldfinch60 said:
Very true Tobani, love can solve all problems.
Andy
July 23rd, 2025 01:23
Goldfinch60 said:
Very true Tobani, love can solve all problems.
Andy
July 23rd, 2025 01:23
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