Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
New Generation.
sorenbarrett said:
Every generation speaks of how the next one is different, usually in a pejorative manner. This poem speaks of it changing the rules of the game. Nicely worded.
July 31st, 2025 03:24
sorenbarrett said:
Every generation speaks of how the next one is different, usually in a pejorative manner. This poem speaks of it changing the rules of the game. Nicely worded.
July 31st, 2025 03:24
Masking. (Senryu).
Kevin Hulme said:
Quite a lot said in three lines. Good one.
July 30th, 2025 18:37
Kevin Hulme said:
Quite a lot said in three lines. Good one.
July 30th, 2025 18:37
The Killing Kind.
Bella Shepard said:
We live in a gun culture, especially in the USA, and it sickens me to see how it is revered by so many as a means to whatever end they choose. Thank you for this most relevant piece.
July 30th, 2025 10:17
Bella Shepard said:
We live in a gun culture, especially in the USA, and it sickens me to see how it is revered by so many as a means to whatever end they choose. Thank you for this most relevant piece.
July 30th, 2025 10:17
The Killing Kind.
Cheeky Missy said:
Good questions. What about: \"are you able to live with yourself if you take the life of another?\" There was a rendition on YouTube about a rather unfortunate modern incident which never should have happened, and yet was virtually unavoidable in this horrendously uncivil and foolish society: one of those fools on the road who believe you\'re not free to get out from behind their slowness and drive freely retaliated as their wont. However she very sadly accidentally retaliated against a human machine. [Soldiers are trained to shoot first, ask questions later, because anything less on the battlefield would both be suicide and also lose the battle.] The soldier behaved unconsciously as he was trained, however his conscience killed him internally for what his training provoked him to do. Ergo the query I suggested. Excellently rendered with exceptional good sense, imagery and a subtly haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 30th, 2025 09:43
Cheeky Missy said:
Good questions. What about: \"are you able to live with yourself if you take the life of another?\" There was a rendition on YouTube about a rather unfortunate modern incident which never should have happened, and yet was virtually unavoidable in this horrendously uncivil and foolish society: one of those fools on the road who believe you\'re not free to get out from behind their slowness and drive freely retaliated as their wont. However she very sadly accidentally retaliated against a human machine. [Soldiers are trained to shoot first, ask questions later, because anything less on the battlefield would both be suicide and also lose the battle.] The soldier behaved unconsciously as he was trained, however his conscience killed him internally for what his training provoked him to do. Ergo the query I suggested. Excellently rendered with exceptional good sense, imagery and a subtly haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 30th, 2025 09:43
The Killing Kind.
Priya Tomar said:
Brilliant work
.\".. obedient sheep\" is a clever metaphor.
July 30th, 2025 07:04
Priya Tomar said:
Brilliant work
.\".. obedient sheep\" is a clever metaphor.
July 30th, 2025 07:04
The Killing Kind.
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well done, Tobani. My mind will come back to this one from time to time.
July 30th, 2025 06:18
Jerry Reynolds said:
Well done, Tobani. My mind will come back to this one from time to time.
July 30th, 2025 06:18
The Killing Kind.
sorenbarrett said:
Many full of fear, some full of anger, fewer still full of lust point their guns. But if not guns they would point their knives. These people need help. Good write.
July 30th, 2025 03:44
sorenbarrett said:
Many full of fear, some full of anger, fewer still full of lust point their guns. But if not guns they would point their knives. These people need help. Good write.
July 30th, 2025 03:44
Masking. (Senryu).
Neville said:
Strictly speaking, this is something else .. but hey, who\'s counting .. and I love it even more for all its understated excesses .. tis brill PL .. and no kidding, write on .. Neville
July 30th, 2025 02:09
Neville said:
Strictly speaking, this is something else .. but hey, who\'s counting .. and I love it even more for all its understated excesses .. tis brill PL .. and no kidding, write on .. Neville
July 30th, 2025 02:09
Masking. (Senryu).
Cheeky Missy said:
Nah. The eyes are the windows to the soul, which is precisely the reason so many souls insist and demand the \"right\" to wear sunglasses even indoors. There\'s little or no other means to hide the windows otherwise. This is likewise the reason our Secret Service is known to search the eyes of everyone, while themselves hide behind sunglasses. \"Oh the tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive \"! Beautifully rendered in brevity with excellent imagery and a necessarily haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 29th, 2025 15:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Nah. The eyes are the windows to the soul, which is precisely the reason so many souls insist and demand the \"right\" to wear sunglasses even indoors. There\'s little or no other means to hide the windows otherwise. This is likewise the reason our Secret Service is known to search the eyes of everyone, while themselves hide behind sunglasses. \"Oh the tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive \"! Beautifully rendered in brevity with excellent imagery and a necessarily haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 29th, 2025 15:00
Masking. (Senryu).
Damaso said:
The cruel truth is many times caught by its trap. Hopefully the wise words warn us on time on the path. Thank you very much for sharing it. Kind regards
July 29th, 2025 11:46
Damaso said:
The cruel truth is many times caught by its trap. Hopefully the wise words warn us on time on the path. Thank you very much for sharing it. Kind regards
July 29th, 2025 11:46
Masking. (Senryu).
Friendship said:
Okay, I kinda understand the poem, but on the other hand, I kind of don\'t, so could you explain something to me? You wrote the word \'masking\' and in parentheses (Senryu), so I had to look it up to see what it meant. Adding this to the poem made it seem like something else! Cause I was reading other people\'s comments, and the only two that were kinda on point were Sorenbarrett and Tristan Robert Lange. Their comments would be correct to me about this poem. I\'m lost, but whatever it is, I hope your day gets better.
July 29th, 2025 08:13
Friendship said:
Okay, I kinda understand the poem, but on the other hand, I kind of don\'t, so could you explain something to me? You wrote the word \'masking\' and in parentheses (Senryu), so I had to look it up to see what it meant. Adding this to the poem made it seem like something else! Cause I was reading other people\'s comments, and the only two that were kinda on point were Sorenbarrett and Tristan Robert Lange. Their comments would be correct to me about this poem. I\'m lost, but whatever it is, I hope your day gets better.
July 29th, 2025 08:13
Masking. (Senryu).
Jerry Reynolds said:
A lot hides in those three lines, Tobani. Well done.
July 29th, 2025 06:55
Jerry Reynolds said:
A lot hides in those three lines, Tobani. Well done.
July 29th, 2025 06:55
Masking. (Senryu).
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The beautiful thing about the Senryu form is that, in its brevity when done right, it speaks for itself. This does just that my friend. Well done! 🌹👏🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 29th, 2025 06:23
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The beautiful thing about the Senryu form is that, in its brevity when done right, it speaks for itself. This does just that my friend. Well done! 🌹👏🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 29th, 2025 06:23
Masking. (Senryu).
sorenbarrett said:
I think here you have shown me how a senryu works better in Japanese than English it all has to do with characters rather than letters. Just a thought in that I don\'t know Japanese. Nicely done Tobani
July 29th, 2025 04:16
sorenbarrett said:
I think here you have shown me how a senryu works better in Japanese than English it all has to do with characters rather than letters. Just a thought in that I don\'t know Japanese. Nicely done Tobani
July 29th, 2025 04:16
Masking. (Senryu).
arqios said:
I find that the lighting in a powder room, boudoir, dressing room can be very affective of how we see ourselves, of course there is a link, bridge, and double meaning there as well... self-image and public projection are very sensitive matters. Moving read, here! 🕊️🙏🏻
July 29th, 2025 02:59
arqios said:
I find that the lighting in a powder room, boudoir, dressing room can be very affective of how we see ourselves, of course there is a link, bridge, and double meaning there as well... self-image and public projection are very sensitive matters. Moving read, here! 🕊️🙏🏻
July 29th, 2025 02:59
Soldier`s Remorse
NafisaSB said:
sad but true state of affairs - short but extremely relevant...well done
July 29th, 2025 00:24
NafisaSB said:
sad but true state of affairs - short but extremely relevant...well done
July 29th, 2025 00:24
Having a Bad Day.
Cheeky Missy said:
How on earth you manage to turn the rendition of an abominable dawn into a humorous perspective on reality is why James Thurber and etc were so popular. There\'s a subtle glimmer of laughter winking despite the dark and dire atmosphere, akin to a storm whose flashes both are ghastly in their light yet also have a twinkling note of a better morrow. Yes, that inexplicable ire which renders the passage of time in too many as cantankerous, and we\'re all privy to its influences sooner or later. How I want to put on the kettle for you and offer you a hearty cuppa Barry\'s to soothe the nameless irritant out of existence! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 28th, 2025 12:03
Cheeky Missy said:
How on earth you manage to turn the rendition of an abominable dawn into a humorous perspective on reality is why James Thurber and etc were so popular. There\'s a subtle glimmer of laughter winking despite the dark and dire atmosphere, akin to a storm whose flashes both are ghastly in their light yet also have a twinkling note of a better morrow. Yes, that inexplicable ire which renders the passage of time in too many as cantankerous, and we\'re all privy to its influences sooner or later. How I want to put on the kettle for you and offer you a hearty cuppa Barry\'s to soothe the nameless irritant out of existence! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 28th, 2025 12:03
Having a Bad Day.
Neville said:
Affective disorders & associated emotionality are write up my alley .. I know and understand where you are coming from .. Hold on to that insight & write on ..
I have no doubt there will be many who will or could very easily relate .. Have a wonderful week too buddy .. Neville
July 28th, 2025 11:01
Neville said:
Affective disorders & associated emotionality are write up my alley .. I know and understand where you are coming from .. Hold on to that insight & write on ..
I have no doubt there will be many who will or could very easily relate .. Have a wonderful week too buddy .. Neville
July 28th, 2025 11:01
Having a Bad Day.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this is unfiltered pain...laid bare without apology. As it should be. We should not be apologetic for feeling pain (something I need to remind myself). The repetition, the looping dread...it’s all too familiar. I love how are honest you are in the way you name what most people hide. This poem doesn’t ask for answers...just for someone to see. And I do, my friend. Hope that dark day is far behind you but if not, know I and many others are sending you our hug-filled love. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 28th, 2025 09:04
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this is unfiltered pain...laid bare without apology. As it should be. We should not be apologetic for feeling pain (something I need to remind myself). The repetition, the looping dread...it’s all too familiar. I love how are honest you are in the way you name what most people hide. This poem doesn’t ask for answers...just for someone to see. And I do, my friend. Hope that dark day is far behind you but if not, know I and many others are sending you our hug-filled love. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 28th, 2025 09:04
Having a Bad Day.
Friendship said:
Oh, Nataiella, hits a core.... your poem explores the theme of mental anguish, emotional turmoil, and the cyclical nature of depression. The Poet recounts a struggle with anger, irritability, and feelings of hopelessness, grappling with internal conflicts and a sense of despair. That revolves around the poet\'s daily battles with mental health, characterized by physical pain and emotional distress. The poem captures a sense of isolation and the repetitive nature of such days, suggesting an ongoing struggle without resolution. I hope your day gets better, my friend.
July 28th, 2025 06:54
Friendship said:
Oh, Nataiella, hits a core.... your poem explores the theme of mental anguish, emotional turmoil, and the cyclical nature of depression. The Poet recounts a struggle with anger, irritability, and feelings of hopelessness, grappling with internal conflicts and a sense of despair. That revolves around the poet\'s daily battles with mental health, characterized by physical pain and emotional distress. The poem captures a sense of isolation and the repetitive nature of such days, suggesting an ongoing struggle without resolution. I hope your day gets better, my friend.
July 28th, 2025 06:54
Having a Bad Day.
Jerry Reynolds said:
18 justified lines.
From a poet friend of mine
feeling less than fine
Good write, Nataiellai.
July 28th, 2025 06:09
Jerry Reynolds said:
18 justified lines.
From a poet friend of mine
feeling less than fine
Good write, Nataiellai.
July 28th, 2025 06:09
Having a Bad Day.
Lorna said:
And so... after days like this.... when the light comes back on it feels soooo good......
July 28th, 2025 05:31
Lorna said:
And so... after days like this.... when the light comes back on it feels soooo good......
July 28th, 2025 05:31
Having a Bad Day.
sorenbarrett said:
This poem does show a dark side that we all have from time to time but this one contines dark throughout. It speaks to me of frustration, a feeling of lack of control over ones thoughts and feelings, deterioration and gives a feeling of hopelessness. It shows good rhyme and flow that indicate control in action. Nicely written Nataliella
July 28th, 2025 04:26
sorenbarrett said:
This poem does show a dark side that we all have from time to time but this one contines dark throughout. It speaks to me of frustration, a feeling of lack of control over ones thoughts and feelings, deterioration and gives a feeling of hopelessness. It shows good rhyme and flow that indicate control in action. Nicely written Nataliella
July 28th, 2025 04:26
Having a Bad Day.
arqios said:
Thank you for sharing this raw moment of struggle; it takes real courage to put those dark thoughts into words. Remember that every hour you endure is proof of your strength, and you deserve to feel the light waiting just beyond today’s storm. ⛈️🕊️🙏🏻
July 28th, 2025 03:58
arqios said:
Thank you for sharing this raw moment of struggle; it takes real courage to put those dark thoughts into words. Remember that every hour you endure is proof of your strength, and you deserve to feel the light waiting just beyond today’s storm. ⛈️🕊️🙏🏻
July 28th, 2025 03:58
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