Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Masking. (Senryu).
Cheeky Missy said:
Nah. The eyes are the windows to the soul, which is precisely the reason so many souls insist and demand the \"right\" to wear sunglasses even indoors. There\'s little or no other means to hide the windows otherwise. This is likewise the reason our Secret Service is known to search the eyes of everyone, while themselves hide behind sunglasses. \"Oh the tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive \"! Beautifully rendered in brevity with excellent imagery and a necessarily haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 29th, 2025 15:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Nah. The eyes are the windows to the soul, which is precisely the reason so many souls insist and demand the \"right\" to wear sunglasses even indoors. There\'s little or no other means to hide the windows otherwise. This is likewise the reason our Secret Service is known to search the eyes of everyone, while themselves hide behind sunglasses. \"Oh the tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive \"! Beautifully rendered in brevity with excellent imagery and a necessarily haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 29th, 2025 15:00
Masking. (Senryu).
Damaso said:
The cruel truth is many times caught by its trap. Hopefully the wise words warn us on time on the path. Thank you very much for sharing it. Kind regards
July 29th, 2025 11:46
Damaso said:
The cruel truth is many times caught by its trap. Hopefully the wise words warn us on time on the path. Thank you very much for sharing it. Kind regards
July 29th, 2025 11:46
Masking. (Senryu).
Friendship said:
Okay, I kinda understand the poem, but on the other hand, I kind of don\'t, so could you explain something to me? You wrote the word \'masking\' and in parentheses (Senryu), so I had to look it up to see what it meant. Adding this to the poem made it seem like something else! Cause I was reading other people\'s comments, and the only two that were kinda on point were Sorenbarrett and Tristan Robert Lange. Their comments would be correct to me about this poem. I\'m lost, but whatever it is, I hope your day gets better.
July 29th, 2025 08:13
Friendship said:
Okay, I kinda understand the poem, but on the other hand, I kind of don\'t, so could you explain something to me? You wrote the word \'masking\' and in parentheses (Senryu), so I had to look it up to see what it meant. Adding this to the poem made it seem like something else! Cause I was reading other people\'s comments, and the only two that were kinda on point were Sorenbarrett and Tristan Robert Lange. Their comments would be correct to me about this poem. I\'m lost, but whatever it is, I hope your day gets better.
July 29th, 2025 08:13
Masking. (Senryu).
Jerry Reynolds said:
A lot hides in those three lines, Tobani. Well done.
July 29th, 2025 06:55
Jerry Reynolds said:
A lot hides in those three lines, Tobani. Well done.
July 29th, 2025 06:55
Masking. (Senryu).
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The beautiful thing about the Senryu form is that, in its brevity when done right, it speaks for itself. This does just that my friend. Well done! 🌹👏🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 29th, 2025 06:23
Tristan Robert Lange said:
The beautiful thing about the Senryu form is that, in its brevity when done right, it speaks for itself. This does just that my friend. Well done! 🌹👏🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 29th, 2025 06:23
Masking. (Senryu).
sorenbarrett said:
I think here you have shown me how a senryu works better in Japanese than English it all has to do with characters rather than letters. Just a thought in that I don\'t know Japanese. Nicely done Tobani
July 29th, 2025 04:16
sorenbarrett said:
I think here you have shown me how a senryu works better in Japanese than English it all has to do with characters rather than letters. Just a thought in that I don\'t know Japanese. Nicely done Tobani
July 29th, 2025 04:16
Masking. (Senryu).
arqios said:
I find that the lighting in a powder room, boudoir, dressing room can be very affective of how we see ourselves, of course there is a link, bridge, and double meaning there as well... self-image and public projection are very sensitive matters. Moving read, here! 🕊️🙏🏻
July 29th, 2025 02:59
arqios said:
I find that the lighting in a powder room, boudoir, dressing room can be very affective of how we see ourselves, of course there is a link, bridge, and double meaning there as well... self-image and public projection are very sensitive matters. Moving read, here! 🕊️🙏🏻
July 29th, 2025 02:59
Soldier`s Remorse
NafisaSB said:
sad but true state of affairs - short but extremely relevant...well done
July 29th, 2025 00:24
NafisaSB said:
sad but true state of affairs - short but extremely relevant...well done
July 29th, 2025 00:24
Having a Bad Day.
Cheeky Missy said:
How on earth you manage to turn the rendition of an abominable dawn into a humorous perspective on reality is why James Thurber and etc were so popular. There\'s a subtle glimmer of laughter winking despite the dark and dire atmosphere, akin to a storm whose flashes both are ghastly in their light yet also have a twinkling note of a better morrow. Yes, that inexplicable ire which renders the passage of time in too many as cantankerous, and we\'re all privy to its influences sooner or later. How I want to put on the kettle for you and offer you a hearty cuppa Barry\'s to soothe the nameless irritant out of existence! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 28th, 2025 12:03
Cheeky Missy said:
How on earth you manage to turn the rendition of an abominable dawn into a humorous perspective on reality is why James Thurber and etc were so popular. There\'s a subtle glimmer of laughter winking despite the dark and dire atmosphere, akin to a storm whose flashes both are ghastly in their light yet also have a twinkling note of a better morrow. Yes, that inexplicable ire which renders the passage of time in too many as cantankerous, and we\'re all privy to its influences sooner or later. How I want to put on the kettle for you and offer you a hearty cuppa Barry\'s to soothe the nameless irritant out of existence! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 28th, 2025 12:03
Having a Bad Day.
Neville said:
Affective disorders & associated emotionality are write up my alley .. I know and understand where you are coming from .. Hold on to that insight & write on ..
I have no doubt there will be many who will or could very easily relate .. Have a wonderful week too buddy .. Neville
July 28th, 2025 11:01
Neville said:
Affective disorders & associated emotionality are write up my alley .. I know and understand where you are coming from .. Hold on to that insight & write on ..
I have no doubt there will be many who will or could very easily relate .. Have a wonderful week too buddy .. Neville
July 28th, 2025 11:01
Having a Bad Day.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this is unfiltered pain...laid bare without apology. As it should be. We should not be apologetic for feeling pain (something I need to remind myself). The repetition, the looping dread...it’s all too familiar. I love how are honest you are in the way you name what most people hide. This poem doesn’t ask for answers...just for someone to see. And I do, my friend. Hope that dark day is far behind you but if not, know I and many others are sending you our hug-filled love. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 28th, 2025 09:04
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Nataiella, this is unfiltered pain...laid bare without apology. As it should be. We should not be apologetic for feeling pain (something I need to remind myself). The repetition, the looping dread...it’s all too familiar. I love how are honest you are in the way you name what most people hide. This poem doesn’t ask for answers...just for someone to see. And I do, my friend. Hope that dark day is far behind you but if not, know I and many others are sending you our hug-filled love. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 28th, 2025 09:04
Having a Bad Day.
Friendship said:
Oh, Nataiella, hits a core.... your poem explores the theme of mental anguish, emotional turmoil, and the cyclical nature of depression. The Poet recounts a struggle with anger, irritability, and feelings of hopelessness, grappling with internal conflicts and a sense of despair. That revolves around the poet\'s daily battles with mental health, characterized by physical pain and emotional distress. The poem captures a sense of isolation and the repetitive nature of such days, suggesting an ongoing struggle without resolution. I hope your day gets better, my friend.
July 28th, 2025 06:54
Friendship said:
Oh, Nataiella, hits a core.... your poem explores the theme of mental anguish, emotional turmoil, and the cyclical nature of depression. The Poet recounts a struggle with anger, irritability, and feelings of hopelessness, grappling with internal conflicts and a sense of despair. That revolves around the poet\'s daily battles with mental health, characterized by physical pain and emotional distress. The poem captures a sense of isolation and the repetitive nature of such days, suggesting an ongoing struggle without resolution. I hope your day gets better, my friend.
July 28th, 2025 06:54
Having a Bad Day.
Jerry Reynolds said:
18 justified lines.
From a poet friend of mine
feeling less than fine
Good write, Nataiellai.
July 28th, 2025 06:09
Jerry Reynolds said:
18 justified lines.
From a poet friend of mine
feeling less than fine
Good write, Nataiellai.
July 28th, 2025 06:09
Having a Bad Day.
Lorna said:
And so... after days like this.... when the light comes back on it feels soooo good......
July 28th, 2025 05:31
Lorna said:
And so... after days like this.... when the light comes back on it feels soooo good......
July 28th, 2025 05:31
Having a Bad Day.
sorenbarrett said:
This poem does show a dark side that we all have from time to time but this one contines dark throughout. It speaks to me of frustration, a feeling of lack of control over ones thoughts and feelings, deterioration and gives a feeling of hopelessness. It shows good rhyme and flow that indicate control in action. Nicely written Nataliella
July 28th, 2025 04:26
sorenbarrett said:
This poem does show a dark side that we all have from time to time but this one contines dark throughout. It speaks to me of frustration, a feeling of lack of control over ones thoughts and feelings, deterioration and gives a feeling of hopelessness. It shows good rhyme and flow that indicate control in action. Nicely written Nataliella
July 28th, 2025 04:26
Having a Bad Day.
arqios said:
Thank you for sharing this raw moment of struggle; it takes real courage to put those dark thoughts into words. Remember that every hour you endure is proof of your strength, and you deserve to feel the light waiting just beyond today’s storm. ⛈️🕊️🙏🏻
July 28th, 2025 03:58
arqios said:
Thank you for sharing this raw moment of struggle; it takes real courage to put those dark thoughts into words. Remember that every hour you endure is proof of your strength, and you deserve to feel the light waiting just beyond today’s storm. ⛈️🕊️🙏🏻
July 28th, 2025 03:58
Wise Man Say (22)
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re too fun and too clever, offering poignant tidbits of good sense in morsels which seem not unlike the \"spoonful of sugar helps the medicine go down!\" doctrine. Excellently rendered with lovely imagery and a delightful humour to offset the weightier poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 27th, 2025 10:31
Cheeky Missy said:
You\'re too fun and too clever, offering poignant tidbits of good sense in morsels which seem not unlike the \"spoonful of sugar helps the medicine go down!\" doctrine. Excellently rendered with lovely imagery and a delightful humour to offset the weightier poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
July 27th, 2025 10:31
Wise Man Say (22)
Tristan Robert Lange said:
You know how much I love this series, Tobani. In this one, the line about not condemning your own voice really stood out. We all do that, though, don\'t we? At least I have been known too...outside of poetry, of course...and even there for a time. Wise advice. Truly, an excellent job, my dear friend. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 27th, 2025 07:54
Tristan Robert Lange said:
You know how much I love this series, Tobani. In this one, the line about not condemning your own voice really stood out. We all do that, though, don\'t we? At least I have been known too...outside of poetry, of course...and even there for a time. Wise advice. Truly, an excellent job, my dear friend. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
July 27th, 2025 07:54
Wise Man Say (22)
Lorna said:
Why are these wise men always hiding on YouTube but you never see them in real life! Ah well............
July 27th, 2025 07:28
Lorna said:
Why are these wise men always hiding on YouTube but you never see them in real life! Ah well............
July 27th, 2025 07:28
Wise Man Say (22)
arqios said:
Wow! 22 instalments already! Now that\'s more than just a bit of fun... more like serious FUN!
July 27th, 2025 06:41
arqios said:
Wow! 22 instalments already! Now that\'s more than just a bit of fun... more like serious FUN!
July 27th, 2025 06:41
Wise Man Say (22)
sorenbarrett said:
Love your wise men say it starts my Sunday. Have a great day
July 27th, 2025 04:46
sorenbarrett said:
Love your wise men say it starts my Sunday. Have a great day
July 27th, 2025 04:46
Sticking Together
Goldfinch60 said:
That glue sticks all things Tobani. LOL
Andy
July 27th, 2025 01:50
Goldfinch60 said:
That glue sticks all things Tobani. LOL
Andy
July 27th, 2025 01:50
Sticking Together
NafisaSB said:
nice sense of humor - keep them coming
have a fun filled weekend
July 26th, 2025 23:27
NafisaSB said:
nice sense of humor - keep them coming
have a fun filled weekend
July 26th, 2025 23:27
Gaza (Help).
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Its really heartbreaking and heart-rending that these zionists are doing genocide pf even babies and women all just and only for land nothing else. The injured kids is shocking for this day and age ah.
Bravo to souls like you that can at least acknowledge their appalling plight!!
July 26th, 2025 15:16
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Its really heartbreaking and heart-rending that these zionists are doing genocide pf even babies and women all just and only for land nothing else. The injured kids is shocking for this day and age ah.
Bravo to souls like you that can at least acknowledge their appalling plight!!
July 26th, 2025 15:16
Sticking Together
Bella Shepard said:
Thank you for the laugh of the day, I sure needed one! lol
July 26th, 2025 14:44
Bella Shepard said:
Thank you for the laugh of the day, I sure needed one! lol
July 26th, 2025 14:44
Sticking Together
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh my--!!! I declare! Your punchline-- you got me. I couldn\'t help laughing too much. Thus is too good! There\'s nothing like repairing broken items, only to find your clumsy attempts have glued far more than the item at hand, oh me! Superb. I love it!!! Excellently rendered with awesome imagery and an irresistibly delightful poignancy... unless of course, we take it seriously. Thank you for sharing.
July 26th, 2025 14:07
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh my--!!! I declare! Your punchline-- you got me. I couldn\'t help laughing too much. Thus is too good! There\'s nothing like repairing broken items, only to find your clumsy attempts have glued far more than the item at hand, oh me! Superb. I love it!!! Excellently rendered with awesome imagery and an irresistibly delightful poignancy... unless of course, we take it seriously. Thank you for sharing.
July 26th, 2025 14:07
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