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Behind
Doggerel Dave said:
I like this a lot AS, because it is disciplined verse which covers the discontent many feel. You have confessed it is ‘preachy’, so I hope you won’t mind if I engage in a little preachyness in return:
Try ‘alienation’ as a descriptor – it once (and maybe still does) cover it.
Words used and their context affect the way a problem is perceived. Thus you have sheeted these problems home to the individual, the ‘we’ and the ‘us’. The reality is that this society is dominated by a political system over which the individual , ‘we’ and ‘us’ have little or no control. If or how this situation is resolved, is something about which I sometimes think long and hard – with no solutions in sight. But one thing I’m sure of is that the frame has to change from ‘we’ and ’us’.
BTW, as everyone knows, the Dickens novel referred to in your first stanza is in all probability A Tale of Two Cities, opening Para:
“It was the best of times, it was the worst of times,….....in short, the period was so far like the present…….”
You stay safe too, AS.
August 10th, 2022 20:15
Doggerel Dave said:
I like this a lot AS, because it is disciplined verse which covers the discontent many feel. You have confessed it is ‘preachy’, so I hope you won’t mind if I engage in a little preachyness in return:
Try ‘alienation’ as a descriptor – it once (and maybe still does) cover it.
Words used and their context affect the way a problem is perceived. Thus you have sheeted these problems home to the individual, the ‘we’ and the ‘us’. The reality is that this society is dominated by a political system over which the individual , ‘we’ and ‘us’ have little or no control. If or how this situation is resolved, is something about which I sometimes think long and hard – with no solutions in sight. But one thing I’m sure of is that the frame has to change from ‘we’ and ’us’.
BTW, as everyone knows, the Dickens novel referred to in your first stanza is in all probability A Tale of Two Cities, opening Para:
“It was the best of times, it was the worst of times,….....in short, the period was so far like the present…….”
You stay safe too, AS.
August 10th, 2022 20:15
Behind
Bella Shepard said:
The message of your poem is so very relevant in our world today. It seems we are in a race, and pushing or tripping our competitors is perfectly acceptable to win the prize. But what a hollow victory when we stand alone at the end, with no one to cheer, because the joy of winning is in the sharing, and being happy for everyone\'s success. A great write my friend, and fav!
August 10th, 2022 14:43
Bella Shepard said:
The message of your poem is so very relevant in our world today. It seems we are in a race, and pushing or tripping our competitors is perfectly acceptable to win the prize. But what a hollow victory when we stand alone at the end, with no one to cheer, because the joy of winning is in the sharing, and being happy for everyone\'s success. A great write my friend, and fav!
August 10th, 2022 14:43
Fire Drill
Goddess of the Mist said:
Quite warm here in Florida USA, too! Always enjoy your poems...
July 25th, 2022 14:29
Goddess of the Mist said:
Quite warm here in Florida USA, too! Always enjoy your poems...
July 25th, 2022 14:29
Socrates Impression
Goldfinch60 said:
Great words Ben, I\'ll meet you at the pub one day and we can both recite our words.
Andy
July 24th, 2022 01:40
Goldfinch60 said:
Great words Ben, I\'ll meet you at the pub one day and we can both recite our words.
Andy
July 24th, 2022 01:40
Socrates Impression
Bella Shepard said:
Would that I could be in a place where someone would wander in and recite poetry. Social venues are so noisy these days that you have to scream to speak the mundane, and people do just often nod and smile. It\'s a shame to think that beautiful words are lost on those who do not truly hear and appreciate. Socrates would be proud of you, just don\'t do it in a toga. Great write my friend!
July 23rd, 2022 12:33
Bella Shepard said:
Would that I could be in a place where someone would wander in and recite poetry. Social venues are so noisy these days that you have to scream to speak the mundane, and people do just often nod and smile. It\'s a shame to think that beautiful words are lost on those who do not truly hear and appreciate. Socrates would be proud of you, just don\'t do it in a toga. Great write my friend!
July 23rd, 2022 12:33
Fire Drill
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Ben, I too have just out up a poem about the heat.
Andy
July 19th, 2022 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Ben, I too have just out up a poem about the heat.
Andy
July 19th, 2022 01:16
Fire Drill
Bella Shepard said:
Such a wise, cautionary and well penned write. The sad thing is, there will be little satisfaction in saying \"I told you so\" when we\'re all roasting together. Keep the faith alive, and just maybe we\'ll survive.
July 18th, 2022 11:59
Bella Shepard said:
Such a wise, cautionary and well penned write. The sad thing is, there will be little satisfaction in saying \"I told you so\" when we\'re all roasting together. Keep the faith alive, and just maybe we\'ll survive.
July 18th, 2022 11:59
The Road
Goldfinch60 said:
I am sure that road will take you and me into the wonderful places in our lives Ben.
Andy
July 13th, 2022 00:37
Goldfinch60 said:
I am sure that road will take you and me into the wonderful places in our lives Ben.
Andy
July 13th, 2022 00:37
The Road
orchidee said:
This has posted twice. I said \'This has posted....\' Do shut up now Orchi. lol
July 12th, 2022 13:03
orchidee said:
This has posted twice. I said \'This has posted....\' Do shut up now Orchi. lol
July 12th, 2022 13:03
The Road
orchidee said:
You know that book \'The Road Less Travelled\'? Or you reply \'Erm, dunno, not travelled it!\' heehee.
If we dunno where we\'re going, how will we know when we\'ve got there? Doh!
July 12th, 2022 13:02
orchidee said:
You know that book \'The Road Less Travelled\'? Or you reply \'Erm, dunno, not travelled it!\' heehee.
If we dunno where we\'re going, how will we know when we\'ve got there? Doh!
July 12th, 2022 13:02
The Road
orchidee said:
You know that book \'The Road Less Travelled\'? Or you reply \'Erm, dunno, not travelled it!\' heehee.
If we dunno where we\'re going, how will we know when we\'ve got there? Doh!
July 12th, 2022 13:02
orchidee said:
You know that book \'The Road Less Travelled\'? Or you reply \'Erm, dunno, not travelled it!\' heehee.
If we dunno where we\'re going, how will we know when we\'ve got there? Doh!
July 12th, 2022 13:02
Blood-Foot
Goldfinch60 said:
Sometime it happens that work overtakes your life but you must always find time for yourself, I hope that will be with you soon Ben.
Andy
June 17th, 2022 00:36
Goldfinch60 said:
Sometime it happens that work overtakes your life but you must always find time for yourself, I hope that will be with you soon Ben.
Andy
June 17th, 2022 00:36
The Tingling Squid
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful fun write Ben, I hope it did not not burn too much and that the loo did not catch fire. LOL
Andy
June 1st, 2022 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful fun write Ben, I hope it did not not burn too much and that the loo did not catch fire. LOL
Andy
June 1st, 2022 00:49
The Tingling Squid
Paul Bell said:
Some can take the burn, some wish it would to go away, but the Tingling Squid is here to stay.
May 31st, 2022 11:32
Paul Bell said:
Some can take the burn, some wish it would to go away, but the Tingling Squid is here to stay.
May 31st, 2022 11:32
The Foreman Robin (A Loose Homage to William Blake)
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful words Ben, nature is so glorious.
Andy
May 8th, 2022 02:05
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful words Ben, nature is so glorious.
Andy
May 8th, 2022 02:05
The Foreman Robin (A Loose Homage to William Blake)
Rozina said:
Such an enjoyable read. I will go and work in my garden now. Thank you.
May 7th, 2022 18:16
Rozina said:
Such an enjoyable read. I will go and work in my garden now. Thank you.
May 7th, 2022 18:16
The Foreman Robin (A Loose Homage to William Blake)
Bella Shepard said:
This is so beautifully written. A robin in the tree, hands in the soil, total immersion in the beauty of nature. It is timeless whilst you work.
May 7th, 2022 13:43
Bella Shepard said:
This is so beautifully written. A robin in the tree, hands in the soil, total immersion in the beauty of nature. It is timeless whilst you work.
May 7th, 2022 13:43
There’s a Wildfire in Hollywood
Eugene S. said:
Couldn\'t have chronicled it any better. 👍😁 Great write!
March 31st, 2022 16:32
Eugene S. said:
Couldn\'t have chronicled it any better. 👍😁 Great write!
March 31st, 2022 16:32
There’s a Wildfire in Hollywood
Rocky Lagou said:
I literally adore this. Not only because I\'m American, but because it\'s so true. There\'s an American singer/songwriter, and more recently, poet, who I look up to a lot. Her name is Lana Del Rey. She\'s talked publicly about the corruption in America and if you ever have the chance I totally recommend reading her poetry book called \"Violet Bent Backwards Over the Grass.\" She literally talks directly to L.A. in her poem, \"LA, who am I to love you?\" She writes in such a fascinating way but I\'m talking about her because in both her music and her poetry she constantly speaks about the BS going on in the U.S. I mean she literally spotlights that as her major theme in her works, one of her most famous quotes is: \"I believe in the country America used to be.\" In her most critically-received album titled, \"Norman Fu@#ing Rockwell,\" she literally speaks up against the chaos going on (like the Cali wildfires that were prominent in the year of the album release and the THEN president, Trump.) I\'ll leave an excerpt from her poem titled, \"Paradise is Very Fragile:\"
\"Paradise is very fragile,
and it seems like it\'s only getting worse
Down here in Florida
We’re fighting red toxic tides
Mass of fish kills
Not to mention hurricanes and rising sea levels
Back in Los Angeles, things aren\'t looking much better
My treehouse that\'d been standing for 80 years succumbed to the woolsy fire
Who would’ve thought that this year at 33
You would\'ve been taken out from under me
After all those years?
Built from the ground up, by hand, by your very first owner
Quiet World War One, aviation pilot
I tried to save you but the German Shepherd seemed more important
Paradise is very fragile,
and it seems like it\'s only getting worse
Our leader is a megalomaniac,
And we\'ve seen that before
But never \'cause it was what the country deserved
My friends tell me to stop calling 911 on the culture,
but it\'s either that or I 5150 myself
They don\'t understand
I\'m a dreamer
And I had big dreams for the country
Not for what it could do, but how it could feel
How it could think, how it could dream\"
She\'s also spoken out about Trump in Instagram posts and honestly she\'s just such a bada$$. Like if she were president we\'d be in a better situation right now. Anywayssssssss, about your poem, you honestly speak so much truth. I\'d recommend reading my poem \"Vertigo,\" I also mention the Hollywood sign and the corruptness of it all. (WOW that was a lot, I\'m sorry, but you\'ve really piqued my interest.)
March 31st, 2022 13:33
Rocky Lagou said:
I literally adore this. Not only because I\'m American, but because it\'s so true. There\'s an American singer/songwriter, and more recently, poet, who I look up to a lot. Her name is Lana Del Rey. She\'s talked publicly about the corruption in America and if you ever have the chance I totally recommend reading her poetry book called \"Violet Bent Backwards Over the Grass.\" She literally talks directly to L.A. in her poem, \"LA, who am I to love you?\" She writes in such a fascinating way but I\'m talking about her because in both her music and her poetry she constantly speaks about the BS going on in the U.S. I mean she literally spotlights that as her major theme in her works, one of her most famous quotes is: \"I believe in the country America used to be.\" In her most critically-received album titled, \"Norman Fu@#ing Rockwell,\" she literally speaks up against the chaos going on (like the Cali wildfires that were prominent in the year of the album release and the THEN president, Trump.) I\'ll leave an excerpt from her poem titled, \"Paradise is Very Fragile:\"
\"Paradise is very fragile,
and it seems like it\'s only getting worse
Down here in Florida
We’re fighting red toxic tides
Mass of fish kills
Not to mention hurricanes and rising sea levels
Back in Los Angeles, things aren\'t looking much better
My treehouse that\'d been standing for 80 years succumbed to the woolsy fire
Who would’ve thought that this year at 33
You would\'ve been taken out from under me
After all those years?
Built from the ground up, by hand, by your very first owner
Quiet World War One, aviation pilot
I tried to save you but the German Shepherd seemed more important
Paradise is very fragile,
and it seems like it\'s only getting worse
Our leader is a megalomaniac,
And we\'ve seen that before
But never \'cause it was what the country deserved
My friends tell me to stop calling 911 on the culture,
but it\'s either that or I 5150 myself
They don\'t understand
I\'m a dreamer
And I had big dreams for the country
Not for what it could do, but how it could feel
How it could think, how it could dream\"
She\'s also spoken out about Trump in Instagram posts and honestly she\'s just such a bada$$. Like if she were president we\'d be in a better situation right now. Anywayssssssss, about your poem, you honestly speak so much truth. I\'d recommend reading my poem \"Vertigo,\" I also mention the Hollywood sign and the corruptness of it all. (WOW that was a lot, I\'m sorry, but you\'ve really piqued my interest.)
March 31st, 2022 13:33
There’s a Wildfire in Hollywood
DestinysPerspectives said:
I love your commentary on Hollywood! It\'s become so full of greed and rotted with imbalance of talentless hacks in power. It\'s lost the art and passion it once had through beautiful souls who had pure passion for the craft. Now you just need a pretty face or wealth to your name and they put you in a block buster. They then spread nothing but hate to the younger generations instead of being a worthy role model.
March 31st, 2022 12:13
DestinysPerspectives said:
I love your commentary on Hollywood! It\'s become so full of greed and rotted with imbalance of talentless hacks in power. It\'s lost the art and passion it once had through beautiful souls who had pure passion for the craft. Now you just need a pretty face or wealth to your name and they put you in a block buster. They then spread nothing but hate to the younger generations instead of being a worthy role model.
March 31st, 2022 12:13
There’s a Wildfire in Hollywood
Bella Shepard said:
There\'s a reason they call it tinsel town and La La Land. Too much about egos and too little about substance. I also rarely go to the movies these days, frankly they put out very little that I would pay money to see. I\'m of the generation that still enjoys the venerated actors and comedians of the past. It was a different era, sadly gone forever. The medium of film, and for that matter of television with millions of streaming opportunities are changing things dramatically, and I think we have to accept that this is the future. As for Will Smith, I think he could have handled it in a more dignified way. Thoughtful words can often have more of a profound impact than a slap in the face. This was the Oscars, not an action movie. Hollywood deserves chastisement, and I think you did a great job.
March 31st, 2022 11:53
Bella Shepard said:
There\'s a reason they call it tinsel town and La La Land. Too much about egos and too little about substance. I also rarely go to the movies these days, frankly they put out very little that I would pay money to see. I\'m of the generation that still enjoys the venerated actors and comedians of the past. It was a different era, sadly gone forever. The medium of film, and for that matter of television with millions of streaming opportunities are changing things dramatically, and I think we have to accept that this is the future. As for Will Smith, I think he could have handled it in a more dignified way. Thoughtful words can often have more of a profound impact than a slap in the face. This was the Oscars, not an action movie. Hollywood deserves chastisement, and I think you did a great job.
March 31st, 2022 11:53
There’s a Wildfire in Hollywood
Christina8 said:
Very powerful poem indeed. What will smith did was unthinkable and he should have his award taken away. He should have handled it like a man. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem and picture!
March 31st, 2022 11:35
Christina8 said:
Very powerful poem indeed. What will smith did was unthinkable and he should have his award taken away. He should have handled it like a man. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem and picture!
March 31st, 2022 11:35
This is His Call (A Song, to the rhythm of “This is A Call” by Foo Fighters, one of Taylor Hawkins’ favourite Foo Fighters songs, For Taylor
Crowns4Christ said:
I heard about that this morning,so sad, I used to listen to them all the time
March 26th, 2022 11:04
Crowns4Christ said:
I heard about that this morning,so sad, I used to listen to them all the time
March 26th, 2022 11:04
This is His Call (A Song, to the rhythm of “This is A Call” by Foo Fighters, one of Taylor Hawkins’ favourite Foo Fighters songs, For Taylor
Bella Shepard said:
I just saw on the news this morning that he had passed, how very sad and at just 50. Being of the older persuasion I am, sadly not familiar with the Foo Fighters, however listening to this song and hearing his percussion, it must still be reverberating throughout the universe. The photo speaks volumes of how much he must have loved what he did. What a wonderful homage to an artist gone before his time.
March 26th, 2022 09:15
Bella Shepard said:
I just saw on the news this morning that he had passed, how very sad and at just 50. Being of the older persuasion I am, sadly not familiar with the Foo Fighters, however listening to this song and hearing his percussion, it must still be reverberating throughout the universe. The photo speaks volumes of how much he must have loved what he did. What a wonderful homage to an artist gone before his time.
March 26th, 2022 09:15
Cardboard Tombstone
Bella Shepard said:
Such a wonderful nostalgic poem. I love the allusion of a cardboard tombstone, putting to rest a part of your life always well remembered, and now looking to the future. I wish you joy wherever that future takes you!
March 22nd, 2022 11:17
Bella Shepard said:
Such a wonderful nostalgic poem. I love the allusion of a cardboard tombstone, putting to rest a part of your life always well remembered, and now looking to the future. I wish you joy wherever that future takes you!
March 22nd, 2022 11:17
Cardboard Tombstone
Goldfinch60 said:
It can be hard when you move but the home that you have built in that house will be there for you in your new house Ben, that will not change.
Andy
March 22nd, 2022 01:48
Goldfinch60 said:
It can be hard when you move but the home that you have built in that house will be there for you in your new house Ben, that will not change.
Andy
March 22nd, 2022 01:48
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