Comments received on poems by Marius
the day we'll meet
Alexandre Landsley said:
Sound like love at first sight.....nice write!!
April 2nd, 2011 10:16
Alexandre Landsley said:
Sound like love at first sight.....nice write!!
April 2nd, 2011 10:16
rain walk
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating metaphorical representation. Excellent! A tad intriguing, but delightfully expressed, bitterly beautiful. I like it.
March 19th, 2011 21:35
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating metaphorical representation. Excellent! A tad intriguing, but delightfully expressed, bitterly beautiful. I like it.
March 19th, 2011 21:35
the fight
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet! I love how you used the heavenly rulers to depict the situation you concluded with....in such a delightful little tercet. Beautifully done. I enjoyed it.
March 1st, 2011 23:20
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet! I love how you used the heavenly rulers to depict the situation you concluded with....in such a delightful little tercet. Beautifully done. I enjoyed it.
March 1st, 2011 23:20
Unhope
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Impressive how you've excellently depicted longing hopeless desire....I love how well you did it...and your concluding couplet is so perfect....the great distance, chill, fervent passion, hope, light, allure, discouragement, subtle effort, soaring, sinking, dreaming futilely....your metaphorical depiction is delightfully apt. I quite enjoyed this.
February 23rd, 2011 23:01
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Impressive how you've excellently depicted longing hopeless desire....I love how well you did it...and your concluding couplet is so perfect....the great distance, chill, fervent passion, hope, light, allure, discouragement, subtle effort, soaring, sinking, dreaming futilely....your metaphorical depiction is delightfully apt. I quite enjoyed this.
February 23rd, 2011 23:01
I Have Decided
Cheeky Missy said:
Whoa! It got rather erotic in the second stanza. Sweet....I love the progression of thought; delightful that she painted you on her heart....too romantic! Beautiful and delightful!
February 17th, 2011 00:42
Cheeky Missy said:
Whoa! It got rather erotic in the second stanza. Sweet....I love the progression of thought; delightful that she painted you on her heart....too romantic! Beautiful and delightful!
February 17th, 2011 00:42
Drowning
Cheeky Missy said:
Oooh. I like it. You are losing yourself, drowning in love, as it were, falling hopelessly in love, to lose the life you knew and find it in love, right? Fascinating! Rather delightful contemplation.
February 13th, 2011 20:05
Cheeky Missy said:
Oooh. I like it. You are losing yourself, drowning in love, as it were, falling hopelessly in love, to lose the life you knew and find it in love, right? Fascinating! Rather delightful contemplation.
February 13th, 2011 20:05
Love’s Prisoner
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful and fascinating....love's prisoner...impressive. I like all you used to express the delicious bondage....almost erotic....sweet. This was very enjoyable!
February 13th, 2011 20:01
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful and fascinating....love's prisoner...impressive. I like all you used to express the delicious bondage....almost erotic....sweet. This was very enjoyable!
February 13th, 2011 20:01
Forgive Me
Marius said:
This poem was published, along with other authors, in an anthology of poetry and fiction called Winter Canons https://www.createspace.com/3537298
I am the 7th from the end of book three :)
February 11th, 2011 15:04
Marius said:
This poem was published, along with other authors, in an anthology of poetry and fiction called Winter Canons https://www.createspace.com/3537298
I am the 7th from the end of book three :)
February 11th, 2011 15:04
Who you are
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Marvelous the enticing description you've given to express your desire for her....very fascinating! A study in ecstasy with a touch of frustration, of illegality, and eroticism, very passionate....I loved all the images you used to express your desire....it's so perfect. I quite enjoyed it!
February 8th, 2011 15:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Marvelous the enticing description you've given to express your desire for her....very fascinating! A study in ecstasy with a touch of frustration, of illegality, and eroticism, very passionate....I loved all the images you used to express your desire....it's so perfect. I quite enjoyed it!
February 8th, 2011 15:00
Congruence
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, so delightfully romantic! I hope she likes it. Such an alluring, enticing, endearing call of love, all-consuming forever love....your symbolism is so delightful, all the things you poetically want to be, loving her.....very, very nicely expressed. Excellent!!! Delightful, beautiful, well-written. I quite enjoyed picturing all you described,...it's a sweet poem!
February 6th, 2011 18:40
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, so delightfully romantic! I hope she likes it. Such an alluring, enticing, endearing call of love, all-consuming forever love....your symbolism is so delightful, all the things you poetically want to be, loving her.....very, very nicely expressed. Excellent!!! Delightful, beautiful, well-written. I quite enjoyed picturing all you described,...it's a sweet poem!
February 6th, 2011 18:40
Forbidden Love
Cheeky Missy said:
Intriguing, fascinating, enticing, provocative,....rather fearful in that it is forbidden and we can only pretend when we want so very much....we want ALL....except...what?...we don't want all, only now, forever is unthinkable...is that what it is? I quite enjoyed it, yet one feels wary for the implied naughtiness of it.
February 5th, 2011 12:20
Cheeky Missy said:
Intriguing, fascinating, enticing, provocative,....rather fearful in that it is forbidden and we can only pretend when we want so very much....we want ALL....except...what?...we don't want all, only now, forever is unthinkable...is that what it is? I quite enjoyed it, yet one feels wary for the implied naughtiness of it.
February 5th, 2011 12:20
The Offer
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw. This is soo good...and still 10/9 days 'til the lover's holiday of Valentines Day...la, you should've saved this sweet piece...or is there more honeyed poetry in store for that day? I quite enjoyed this tribute to adoring love! Beautiful, made me smile happily (even now), delightful! Loved it!!! Every stanza with fresh images in honour of the beauty you worship....so delightfully poetic......Excellent!
February 4th, 2011 17:45
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw. This is soo good...and still 10/9 days 'til the lover's holiday of Valentines Day...la, you should've saved this sweet piece...or is there more honeyed poetry in store for that day? I quite enjoyed this tribute to adoring love! Beautiful, made me smile happily (even now), delightful! Loved it!!! Every stanza with fresh images in honour of the beauty you worship....so delightfully poetic......Excellent!
February 4th, 2011 17:45
I can’t give you more
Cheeky Missy said:
This is so very beautiful, enticing, alluring....and yet....is it wrong for her to ask the promise of forever...never letting her go...belonging in truth to him, before she blythely yields all to him in the ecstasy of his unbounded love, as expressed herein? I very much enjoyed this delightfully rather enchanting call of the heart to the heart, and thus are my misgivings. Excellent....so very well expressed, you have the reader in your palm.
February 3rd, 2011 11:43
Cheeky Missy said:
This is so very beautiful, enticing, alluring....and yet....is it wrong for her to ask the promise of forever...never letting her go...belonging in truth to him, before she blythely yields all to him in the ecstasy of his unbounded love, as expressed herein? I very much enjoyed this delightfully rather enchanting call of the heart to the heart, and thus are my misgivings. Excellent....so very well expressed, you have the reader in your palm.
February 3rd, 2011 11:43
Broken
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating. Delightful. Beautiful, bitterSWEET. Heartbroken with love for the elusive her....who apparently can string him along so promisingly, yet so dishearteningly. But he is so passionately taken that he virtually vows to love her forever, regardless.....ah, how romantic! I quite enjoyed your symbolism, how you so eloquently expressed the situatio, and your wonderfully poetic conclusion....absolutely delightful!!!
February 2nd, 2011 18:57
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating. Delightful. Beautiful, bitterSWEET. Heartbroken with love for the elusive her....who apparently can string him along so promisingly, yet so dishearteningly. But he is so passionately taken that he virtually vows to love her forever, regardless.....ah, how romantic! I quite enjoyed your symbolism, how you so eloquently expressed the situatio, and your wonderfully poetic conclusion....absolutely delightful!!!
February 2nd, 2011 18:57
Control
Cheeky Missy said:
"Control Freaks." La, but you described the ugly character so delightfully rythmically, it was a pleasure to read, in spite of the chilling, conclusive condemning description. I hope I never fall into those shoes, for you've denounced them so excellently. I love your concluding stanza....such a fitting warning against falling into this temptation to screw oneself screwing others. Excellent!!! I enjoyed this!
February 1st, 2011 15:24
Cheeky Missy said:
"Control Freaks." La, but you described the ugly character so delightfully rythmically, it was a pleasure to read, in spite of the chilling, conclusive condemning description. I hope I never fall into those shoes, for you've denounced them so excellently. I love your concluding stanza....such a fitting warning against falling into this temptation to screw oneself screwing others. Excellent!!! I enjoyed this!
February 1st, 2011 15:24
Solitary Tree
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating...and for all it is sad, yet even so, delightful! Your symbolism/metaphors(?) carried my imagination to all these sorrowful images and scenes so like a photo album or movie, or better yet, a slow, wandering trek through all the lonely, forgotten places to just sit, mournfully alone, contemplating sorrowfully/hopelessly. Your image of the tree is of course only too fitting. All the images you conjured up were mournfully delightful to contemplate. Maybe it is like the mournful cry of the oboe which I so dearly love, but I enjoyed this poem very much.
January 31st, 2011 21:50
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating...and for all it is sad, yet even so, delightful! Your symbolism/metaphors(?) carried my imagination to all these sorrowful images and scenes so like a photo album or movie, or better yet, a slow, wandering trek through all the lonely, forgotten places to just sit, mournfully alone, contemplating sorrowfully/hopelessly. Your image of the tree is of course only too fitting. All the images you conjured up were mournfully delightful to contemplate. Maybe it is like the mournful cry of the oboe which I so dearly love, but I enjoyed this poem very much.
January 31st, 2011 21:50
Seconds
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. You do write lovely romantic poems! Your girl could fall for you, but she sounds so perfectly just out of reach to make you love her all the more for not being such an easy prey, yet hopefully not too aloof to spoil her own possible happiness. Ah, it's a dangerous piece. Excellent!!!!
January 30th, 2011 00:20
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. You do write lovely romantic poems! Your girl could fall for you, but she sounds so perfectly just out of reach to make you love her all the more for not being such an easy prey, yet hopefully not too aloof to spoil her own possible happiness. Ah, it's a dangerous piece. Excellent!!!!
January 30th, 2011 00:20
The Gift of Love
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightfully romantic call to your lady-love! I quite enjoyed it. You crafted it fascinatingly with the imaginative story...leading into the expression of your interest...very sweetly done...would she might not reject it. It seems a piece suitable for many a lover and you've written it beautifully. The title is so perfect...for indeed, love is truly a gift...Excellent!
January 29th, 2011 23:49
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightfully romantic call to your lady-love! I quite enjoyed it. You crafted it fascinatingly with the imaginative story...leading into the expression of your interest...very sweetly done...would she might not reject it. It seems a piece suitable for many a lover and you've written it beautifully. The title is so perfect...for indeed, love is truly a gift...Excellent!
January 29th, 2011 23:49
Nightwalk
Cheeky Missy said:
You drew the scene so very well that I was there, from the first stanza, half-loving the lonely stroll, trudging unseen meditatively longing....hearing and feeling it all. You expressed it so perfectly, that if it is only imaginary....congratulations! You made it so very real. I much enjoyed it....I love it so well, I hate to think it only a moment in my imagination.
January 28th, 2011 21:49
Cheeky Missy said:
You drew the scene so very well that I was there, from the first stanza, half-loving the lonely stroll, trudging unseen meditatively longing....hearing and feeling it all. You expressed it so perfectly, that if it is only imaginary....congratulations! You made it so very real. I much enjoyed it....I love it so well, I hate to think it only a moment in my imagination.
January 28th, 2011 21:49
Nightwalk
StormyDay said:
I'm moved to tears..absolutely beautiful. Wonderful job.
January 28th, 2011 13:18
StormyDay said:
I'm moved to tears..absolutely beautiful. Wonderful job.
January 28th, 2011 13:18
Impossible
Zojinjo said:
You show a life in pain, carrying a burden too much for one to hold. It's a way many people feel in life, only now, it's a poem that we read and we can like. Very good work indeed.
Only thing bothering me a bit is the title, for I believe "Impossible" doesn't exist. Everything is possible. Then again, so is failing...
January 27th, 2011 13:46
Zojinjo said:
You show a life in pain, carrying a burden too much for one to hold. It's a way many people feel in life, only now, it's a poem that we read and we can like. Very good work indeed.
Only thing bothering me a bit is the title, for I believe "Impossible" doesn't exist. Everything is possible. Then again, so is failing...
January 27th, 2011 13:46
Impossible
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. You very well depicted the situation of many so delightfully poetically. And the crushing burden is indeed only too much to bear, fit to destroy the burdened, except they be delivered by Him Who is mighty to save...the Lord Himself, as Belinda alludes. Excellent!
January 27th, 2011 12:06
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. You very well depicted the situation of many so delightfully poetically. And the crushing burden is indeed only too much to bear, fit to destroy the burdened, except they be delivered by Him Who is mighty to save...the Lord Himself, as Belinda alludes. Excellent!
January 27th, 2011 12:06
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