Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
THIRST.
Michael Edwards said:
Some really great word associations make this quite special - a grand write Fay.
December 4th, 2018 15:29
Michael Edwards said:
Some really great word associations make this quite special - a grand write Fay.
December 4th, 2018 15:29
GROWTH..
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Yes, Fay, you have penned the words of wisdom. Children exposed to nature, through adult guidance, in early life are so much more well-rounded and it is evident in the elementary school setting.
Great poem and thank you for sharing this knowledge. :-)
December 4th, 2018 13:58
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Yes, Fay, you have penned the words of wisdom. Children exposed to nature, through adult guidance, in early life are so much more well-rounded and it is evident in the elementary school setting.
Great poem and thank you for sharing this knowledge. :-)
December 4th, 2018 13:58
THIRST.
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Super write, Fay. Writing letters of friendship in the early morn does indeed wake the senses to the fragrance of the flowers.
I can appreciate your sentiment, especially at this time of year. :-)
December 4th, 2018 13:54
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Super write, Fay. Writing letters of friendship in the early morn does indeed wake the senses to the fragrance of the flowers.
I can appreciate your sentiment, especially at this time of year. :-)
December 4th, 2018 13:54
GROWTH..
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wise words Fay, every child must be allowed to explore their lives but as Michael has said guided not dominated.
December 4th, 2018 00:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wise words Fay, every child must be allowed to explore their lives but as Michael has said guided not dominated.
December 4th, 2018 00:47
WITH YOU.
Neville said:
I would be hard pushed to say it any better than many of my reviewing predecessors... A lovely poem and filled with correspondingly lovely imagery and concepts... I can\'t remember the last full English I enjoyed.. but am gonna have one first thing tomorrow, I can tell ya..... Neville
December 3rd, 2018 14:37
Neville said:
I would be hard pushed to say it any better than many of my reviewing predecessors... A lovely poem and filled with correspondingly lovely imagery and concepts... I can\'t remember the last full English I enjoyed.. but am gonna have one first thing tomorrow, I can tell ya..... Neville
December 3rd, 2018 14:37
GROWTH..
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
Your sagacious penned poem is a delightful read!
I totally agree with Michael!
“Guidance not Dominance”!
Children should not be stifled in “bubble wrapping” forevermore! Allow them to fall and pick themselves up!
~Laura~
December 3rd, 2018 10:17
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
Your sagacious penned poem is a delightful read!
I totally agree with Michael!
“Guidance not Dominance”!
Children should not be stifled in “bubble wrapping” forevermore! Allow them to fall and pick themselves up!
~Laura~
December 3rd, 2018 10:17
GROWTH..
Michael Edwards said:
Oh so true and so nwell expressed. Guidance not dominance.
December 3rd, 2018 05:24
Michael Edwards said:
Oh so true and so nwell expressed. Guidance not dominance.
December 3rd, 2018 05:24
GROWTH..
Classicmister said:
Wise words Faye ... Let nature and not nurture rule the child!
December 3rd, 2018 04:36
Classicmister said:
Wise words Faye ... Let nature and not nurture rule the child!
December 3rd, 2018 04:36
YIELDING.
Neville said:
I sense you have a particularly harmonious and otherwise joyous relationship with your own poetic muse... these words are not simply beautiful, they are indeed timeless.....Neville
December 2nd, 2018 15:12
Neville said:
I sense you have a particularly harmonious and otherwise joyous relationship with your own poetic muse... these words are not simply beautiful, they are indeed timeless.....Neville
December 2nd, 2018 15:12
YIELDING.
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful Fay, just beautiful.
Calliope looks down on me as I write, I have a picture of her on my wall.
December 1st, 2018 01:25
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful Fay, just beautiful.
Calliope looks down on me as I write, I have a picture of her on my wall.
December 1st, 2018 01:25
YIELDING.
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Wonderfully expressed poem, Fay. The line \"Exposing raw heart to the eyes of the world,\" says it all.
Love is a double-edged sword. :-)
November 30th, 2018 16:35
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Wonderfully expressed poem, Fay. The line \"Exposing raw heart to the eyes of the world,\" says it all.
Love is a double-edged sword. :-)
November 30th, 2018 16:35
YIELDING.
lasergraph said:
We are in the mists of soul bearers here and you bare yours very well. Good write Fay.
November 30th, 2018 10:19
lasergraph said:
We are in the mists of soul bearers here and you bare yours very well. Good write Fay.
November 30th, 2018 10:19
YIELDING.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m silly! I swoon at some love poems. Maybe they are \'lurve\' poems, as they say. I should \'leave my sheltered life a bit, get my coat, and get out more\', as they say! lol.
November 30th, 2018 05:06
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m silly! I swoon at some love poems. Maybe they are \'lurve\' poems, as they say. I should \'leave my sheltered life a bit, get my coat, and get out more\', as they say! lol.
November 30th, 2018 05:06
YIELDING.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
This is really beautiful FAY : It expresses perfectly how a Love Poem develops in my mind : and then into draft on paper ! The draft then FERMENTS (writing a perfect poem is like making perfect wine : I have lots of drafts fermenting !). When i write a LOVE POEM I do bare my heart. I pray that I might have your : Way With Words : to fully express (in a sonnet) the depth : height : breadth of my deep love for BRIAN ! Thanks for caring : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 30th, 2018 04:27
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
This is really beautiful FAY : It expresses perfectly how a Love Poem develops in my mind : and then into draft on paper ! The draft then FERMENTS (writing a perfect poem is like making perfect wine : I have lots of drafts fermenting !). When i write a LOVE POEM I do bare my heart. I pray that I might have your : Way With Words : to fully express (in a sonnet) the depth : height : breadth of my deep love for BRIAN ! Thanks for caring : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 30th, 2018 04:27
GONE.
Goldfinch60 said:
A wonderful write showing so much despair but the last line is the most important and life affirming.
November 30th, 2018 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
A wonderful write showing so much despair but the last line is the most important and life affirming.
November 30th, 2018 01:53
GONE.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks FAY : Angela here. This (as usual) is an elegantly presented Poem. Four balanced Quatrains with a consistent (xaxa xbxb etc) rhyme pattern and metre (Brian is teaching me how to analyse poetic structure !) However the message is rather melancholy (not your usual optimism ?). V 1. Sad Present haunted by pleasant past. V 2. AWAKE @ night because dreams of past memories are too bitter sweet ! V 3. CRYING : in my pillow : because the SAD present has eclipsed the HAPPY past V 4. Loss of a Loved One does leave us half-empty. Yet one has to learn to begin to enshrine the past and press on resolutely ! (In my experience never easy !)
I want to be a better Poet and I am advised by Reading & Tutors & Brian : To read and analyse the Works of Good Poets : like yourself ! Was my analysis OK ? Thanks for posting poems on emotionally difficult areas
Love You & all your POEMS : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 29th, 2018 17:28
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks FAY : Angela here. This (as usual) is an elegantly presented Poem. Four balanced Quatrains with a consistent (xaxa xbxb etc) rhyme pattern and metre (Brian is teaching me how to analyse poetic structure !) However the message is rather melancholy (not your usual optimism ?). V 1. Sad Present haunted by pleasant past. V 2. AWAKE @ night because dreams of past memories are too bitter sweet ! V 3. CRYING : in my pillow : because the SAD present has eclipsed the HAPPY past V 4. Loss of a Loved One does leave us half-empty. Yet one has to learn to begin to enshrine the past and press on resolutely ! (In my experience never easy !)
I want to be a better Poet and I am advised by Reading & Tutors & Brian : To read and analyse the Works of Good Poets : like yourself ! Was my analysis OK ? Thanks for posting poems on emotionally difficult areas
Love You & all your POEMS : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 29th, 2018 17:28
GONE.
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Fay, this is an honest journey (in poetic form) from past to present. Your hurt is felt by the reader, but it\'s good to know you\'ve realized, although painful, it\'s finally time to move on with life.
Great expressive poem. Thanks for sharing. :-)
November 29th, 2018 17:11
Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet said:
Fay, this is an honest journey (in poetic form) from past to present. Your hurt is felt by the reader, but it\'s good to know you\'ve realized, although painful, it\'s finally time to move on with life.
Great expressive poem. Thanks for sharing. :-)
November 29th, 2018 17:11
GONE.
kevin browne said:
Bless you, Fay Slimm. I\'m quite sure you have the intelligence to resolve these matter in order to warm your heart up a little. Wonderful write my dear friend.
November 29th, 2018 05:42
kevin browne said:
Bless you, Fay Slimm. I\'m quite sure you have the intelligence to resolve these matter in order to warm your heart up a little. Wonderful write my dear friend.
November 29th, 2018 05:42
GONE.
Michael Edwards said:
Oh such a woeful write but such a good one dear Fay.
November 29th, 2018 04:46
Michael Edwards said:
Oh such a woeful write but such a good one dear Fay.
November 29th, 2018 04:46
DOING.
kevin browne said:
l\'ll follow you and your dreamy doings without a doubt in my mind. A well captured though to leave us pondering over. Nicely executed.
November 28th, 2018 21:19
kevin browne said:
l\'ll follow you and your dreamy doings without a doubt in my mind. A well captured though to leave us pondering over. Nicely executed.
November 28th, 2018 21:19
DOING.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FAY : Its THURSDAY MORNING here ! BRIAN & I are both DOERS in our Work : Communities : Church & Recreation.
V 1. We do often fulfill our dreams V 2. We do aim high and sometimes hit the target. V 3. We strive to be our best and are NEVER Complacent ! V 4. We seldom PRETEND : we are both WYSIWYG\'S What you see is what you get ! Thanks for making us think :
Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
We have both decided to put MPS on hold in the first week in December in order to catch up with Responsibilities @ Work & Preparations in the run up to Christmas ! Please dont think we have deserted you on MONDAY ! Love A !
November 28th, 2018 13:54
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FAY : Its THURSDAY MORNING here ! BRIAN & I are both DOERS in our Work : Communities : Church & Recreation.
V 1. We do often fulfill our dreams V 2. We do aim high and sometimes hit the target. V 3. We strive to be our best and are NEVER Complacent ! V 4. We seldom PRETEND : we are both WYSIWYG\'S What you see is what you get ! Thanks for making us think :
Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
We have both decided to put MPS on hold in the first week in December in order to catch up with Responsibilities @ Work & Preparations in the run up to Christmas ! Please dont think we have deserted you on MONDAY ! Love A !
November 28th, 2018 13:54
DOING.
Goldfinch60 said:
\"If your dreams don\'t scare you they are not big enough\"
Good true write Fay.
November 28th, 2018 03:12
Goldfinch60 said:
\"If your dreams don\'t scare you they are not big enough\"
Good true write Fay.
November 28th, 2018 03:12
ALTERATION.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FAY : It\'s Tuesday morning here already. When I spoke to BRIAN (SKYPE) He promised Me this one for comment ! It is so so elegant : it recites like silk and I will use it (and acknowledge) at the next Poetry reading @ Church : OK. I adore Sunsets and the visual adds emphasis to the Poem !
V 1. Love the metaphor \"Sky fading like an old Love Affair\" YES !
V 2. Sunset for Me is always a Magical Time and the dome (of cloud ?) as the Sun defers to the Crescent Moon !
V 3. The alteration is complete as darkness descends as Sister Moon (dependent on Brother Sun for her reflected Glory) takes centre stage : AMEN
Thanks for caring : LOVE ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 26th, 2018 15:48
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FAY : It\'s Tuesday morning here already. When I spoke to BRIAN (SKYPE) He promised Me this one for comment ! It is so so elegant : it recites like silk and I will use it (and acknowledge) at the next Poetry reading @ Church : OK. I adore Sunsets and the visual adds emphasis to the Poem !
V 1. Love the metaphor \"Sky fading like an old Love Affair\" YES !
V 2. Sunset for Me is always a Magical Time and the dome (of cloud ?) as the Sun defers to the Crescent Moon !
V 3. The alteration is complete as darkness descends as Sister Moon (dependent on Brother Sun for her reflected Glory) takes centre stage : AMEN
Thanks for caring : LOVE ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 26th, 2018 15:48
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