Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
THIRST.
Neville said:
a thirst quenched, a sorrow drowned... a most welcome read to contemplate and digest more fully before retiring this super frosty eve... thank you dear friend and poet... N
December 4th, 2018 16:49
Neville said:
a thirst quenched, a sorrow drowned... a most welcome read to contemplate and digest more fully before retiring this super frosty eve... thank you dear friend and poet... N
December 4th, 2018 16:49
THIRST.
Michael Edwards said:
Some really great word associations make this quite special - a grand write Fay.
December 4th, 2018 15:29
Michael Edwards said:
Some really great word associations make this quite special - a grand write Fay.
December 4th, 2018 15:29
GROWTH..
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wise words Fay, every child must be allowed to explore their lives but as Michael has said guided not dominated.
December 4th, 2018 00:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wise words Fay, every child must be allowed to explore their lives but as Michael has said guided not dominated.
December 4th, 2018 00:47
WITH YOU.
Neville said:
I would be hard pushed to say it any better than many of my reviewing predecessors... A lovely poem and filled with correspondingly lovely imagery and concepts... I can\'t remember the last full English I enjoyed.. but am gonna have one first thing tomorrow, I can tell ya..... Neville
December 3rd, 2018 14:37
Neville said:
I would be hard pushed to say it any better than many of my reviewing predecessors... A lovely poem and filled with correspondingly lovely imagery and concepts... I can\'t remember the last full English I enjoyed.. but am gonna have one first thing tomorrow, I can tell ya..... Neville
December 3rd, 2018 14:37
GROWTH..
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
Your sagacious penned poem is a delightful read!
I totally agree with Michael!
“Guidance not Dominance”!
Children should not be stifled in “bubble wrapping” forevermore! Allow them to fall and pick themselves up!
~Laura~
December 3rd, 2018 10:17
Laura🌻 said:
My Dear Fay,
Your sagacious penned poem is a delightful read!
I totally agree with Michael!
“Guidance not Dominance”!
Children should not be stifled in “bubble wrapping” forevermore! Allow them to fall and pick themselves up!
~Laura~
December 3rd, 2018 10:17
GROWTH..
Michael Edwards said:
Oh so true and so nwell expressed. Guidance not dominance.
December 3rd, 2018 05:24
Michael Edwards said:
Oh so true and so nwell expressed. Guidance not dominance.
December 3rd, 2018 05:24
GROWTH..
Classicmister said:
Wise words Faye ... Let nature and not nurture rule the child!
December 3rd, 2018 04:36
Classicmister said:
Wise words Faye ... Let nature and not nurture rule the child!
December 3rd, 2018 04:36
YIELDING.
Neville said:
I sense you have a particularly harmonious and otherwise joyous relationship with your own poetic muse... these words are not simply beautiful, they are indeed timeless.....Neville
December 2nd, 2018 15:12
Neville said:
I sense you have a particularly harmonious and otherwise joyous relationship with your own poetic muse... these words are not simply beautiful, they are indeed timeless.....Neville
December 2nd, 2018 15:12
YIELDING.
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful Fay, just beautiful.
Calliope looks down on me as I write, I have a picture of her on my wall.
December 1st, 2018 01:25
Goldfinch60 said:
Beautiful Fay, just beautiful.
Calliope looks down on me as I write, I have a picture of her on my wall.
December 1st, 2018 01:25
YIELDING.
lasergraph said:
We are in the mists of soul bearers here and you bare yours very well. Good write Fay.
November 30th, 2018 10:19
lasergraph said:
We are in the mists of soul bearers here and you bare yours very well. Good write Fay.
November 30th, 2018 10:19
YIELDING.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m silly! I swoon at some love poems. Maybe they are \'lurve\' poems, as they say. I should \'leave my sheltered life a bit, get my coat, and get out more\', as they say! lol.
November 30th, 2018 05:06
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. I\'m silly! I swoon at some love poems. Maybe they are \'lurve\' poems, as they say. I should \'leave my sheltered life a bit, get my coat, and get out more\', as they say! lol.
November 30th, 2018 05:06
YIELDING.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
This is really beautiful FAY : It expresses perfectly how a Love Poem develops in my mind : and then into draft on paper ! The draft then FERMENTS (writing a perfect poem is like making perfect wine : I have lots of drafts fermenting !). When i write a LOVE POEM I do bare my heart. I pray that I might have your : Way With Words : to fully express (in a sonnet) the depth : height : breadth of my deep love for BRIAN ! Thanks for caring : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 30th, 2018 04:27
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
This is really beautiful FAY : It expresses perfectly how a Love Poem develops in my mind : and then into draft on paper ! The draft then FERMENTS (writing a perfect poem is like making perfect wine : I have lots of drafts fermenting !). When i write a LOVE POEM I do bare my heart. I pray that I might have your : Way With Words : to fully express (in a sonnet) the depth : height : breadth of my deep love for BRIAN ! Thanks for caring : Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 30th, 2018 04:27
GONE.
Goldfinch60 said:
A wonderful write showing so much despair but the last line is the most important and life affirming.
November 30th, 2018 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
A wonderful write showing so much despair but the last line is the most important and life affirming.
November 30th, 2018 01:53
GONE.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks FAY : Angela here. This (as usual) is an elegantly presented Poem. Four balanced Quatrains with a consistent (xaxa xbxb etc) rhyme pattern and metre (Brian is teaching me how to analyse poetic structure !) However the message is rather melancholy (not your usual optimism ?). V 1. Sad Present haunted by pleasant past. V 2. AWAKE @ night because dreams of past memories are too bitter sweet ! V 3. CRYING : in my pillow : because the SAD present has eclipsed the HAPPY past V 4. Loss of a Loved One does leave us half-empty. Yet one has to learn to begin to enshrine the past and press on resolutely ! (In my experience never easy !)
I want to be a better Poet and I am advised by Reading & Tutors & Brian : To read and analyse the Works of Good Poets : like yourself ! Was my analysis OK ? Thanks for posting poems on emotionally difficult areas
Love You & all your POEMS : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 29th, 2018 17:28
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Thanks FAY : Angela here. This (as usual) is an elegantly presented Poem. Four balanced Quatrains with a consistent (xaxa xbxb etc) rhyme pattern and metre (Brian is teaching me how to analyse poetic structure !) However the message is rather melancholy (not your usual optimism ?). V 1. Sad Present haunted by pleasant past. V 2. AWAKE @ night because dreams of past memories are too bitter sweet ! V 3. CRYING : in my pillow : because the SAD present has eclipsed the HAPPY past V 4. Loss of a Loved One does leave us half-empty. Yet one has to learn to begin to enshrine the past and press on resolutely ! (In my experience never easy !)
I want to be a better Poet and I am advised by Reading & Tutors & Brian : To read and analyse the Works of Good Poets : like yourself ! Was my analysis OK ? Thanks for posting poems on emotionally difficult areas
Love You & all your POEMS : ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 29th, 2018 17:28
GONE.
kevin browne said:
Bless you, Fay Slimm. I\'m quite sure you have the intelligence to resolve these matter in order to warm your heart up a little. Wonderful write my dear friend.
November 29th, 2018 05:42
kevin browne said:
Bless you, Fay Slimm. I\'m quite sure you have the intelligence to resolve these matter in order to warm your heart up a little. Wonderful write my dear friend.
November 29th, 2018 05:42
GONE.
Michael Edwards said:
Oh such a woeful write but such a good one dear Fay.
November 29th, 2018 04:46
Michael Edwards said:
Oh such a woeful write but such a good one dear Fay.
November 29th, 2018 04:46
DOING.
kevin browne said:
l\'ll follow you and your dreamy doings without a doubt in my mind. A well captured though to leave us pondering over. Nicely executed.
November 28th, 2018 21:19
kevin browne said:
l\'ll follow you and your dreamy doings without a doubt in my mind. A well captured though to leave us pondering over. Nicely executed.
November 28th, 2018 21:19
DOING.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FAY : Its THURSDAY MORNING here ! BRIAN & I are both DOERS in our Work : Communities : Church & Recreation.
V 1. We do often fulfill our dreams V 2. We do aim high and sometimes hit the target. V 3. We strive to be our best and are NEVER Complacent ! V 4. We seldom PRETEND : we are both WYSIWYG\'S What you see is what you get ! Thanks for making us think :
Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
We have both decided to put MPS on hold in the first week in December in order to catch up with Responsibilities @ Work & Preparations in the run up to Christmas ! Please dont think we have deserted you on MONDAY ! Love A !
November 28th, 2018 13:54
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FAY : Its THURSDAY MORNING here ! BRIAN & I are both DOERS in our Work : Communities : Church & Recreation.
V 1. We do often fulfill our dreams V 2. We do aim high and sometimes hit the target. V 3. We strive to be our best and are NEVER Complacent ! V 4. We seldom PRETEND : we are both WYSIWYG\'S What you see is what you get ! Thanks for making us think :
Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
We have both decided to put MPS on hold in the first week in December in order to catch up with Responsibilities @ Work & Preparations in the run up to Christmas ! Please dont think we have deserted you on MONDAY ! Love A !
November 28th, 2018 13:54
DOING.
Goldfinch60 said:
\"If your dreams don\'t scare you they are not big enough\"
Good true write Fay.
November 28th, 2018 03:12
Goldfinch60 said:
\"If your dreams don\'t scare you they are not big enough\"
Good true write Fay.
November 28th, 2018 03:12
ALTERATION.
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FAY : It\'s Tuesday morning here already. When I spoke to BRIAN (SKYPE) He promised Me this one for comment ! It is so so elegant : it recites like silk and I will use it (and acknowledge) at the next Poetry reading @ Church : OK. I adore Sunsets and the visual adds emphasis to the Poem !
V 1. Love the metaphor \"Sky fading like an old Love Affair\" YES !
V 2. Sunset for Me is always a Magical Time and the dome (of cloud ?) as the Sun defers to the Crescent Moon !
V 3. The alteration is complete as darkness descends as Sister Moon (dependent on Brother Sun for her reflected Glory) takes centre stage : AMEN
Thanks for caring : LOVE ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 26th, 2018 15:48
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD EVENING FAY : It\'s Tuesday morning here already. When I spoke to BRIAN (SKYPE) He promised Me this one for comment ! It is so so elegant : it recites like silk and I will use it (and acknowledge) at the next Poetry reading @ Church : OK. I adore Sunsets and the visual adds emphasis to the Poem !
V 1. Love the metaphor \"Sky fading like an old Love Affair\" YES !
V 2. Sunset for Me is always a Magical Time and the dome (of cloud ?) as the Sun defers to the Crescent Moon !
V 3. The alteration is complete as darkness descends as Sister Moon (dependent on Brother Sun for her reflected Glory) takes centre stage : AMEN
Thanks for caring : LOVE ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
November 26th, 2018 15:48
ALTERATION.
Syd said:
Beautiful poem about the changing of the seasons Faye. Great descriptions.
- Syd
November 26th, 2018 06:04
Syd said:
Beautiful poem about the changing of the seasons Faye. Great descriptions.
- Syd
November 26th, 2018 06:04
ALTERATION.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. That dark throne\'s moon has got about another month, then gradually lighter again!
November 26th, 2018 05:38
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. That dark throne\'s moon has got about another month, then gradually lighter again!
November 26th, 2018 05:38
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