Comments received on poems by dusk arising
big old moon (paranoia)
Suresh said:
That\'s what moonshine whiskey does, it spills all the beans - HUH!!!! - better not to disclose my inner secrets.
It would be nice to get into the writers head, to feel what encourages them to write such alluring songs.
August 24th, 2019 09:55
Suresh said:
That\'s what moonshine whiskey does, it spills all the beans - HUH!!!! - better not to disclose my inner secrets.
It would be nice to get into the writers head, to feel what encourages them to write such alluring songs.
August 24th, 2019 09:55
big old moon (paranoia)
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FOR SHARING THIS DA ! Very instructive ! The MOON operates between dusk & dawn and sees everything so it knows who*s been playing loose who*s faithful ! It has its time cut out with Angela & I ~ 24/7 ! We are not only 11,500 miles apart but also 11 hours ! So when its NIGHT for ANGELA its DAY for ME and vice-versa. So far the MOON has not reported any shenanakins despite a year apart !
Love your Poem / Song ! Every SONG normally starts with a POETIC LYRIC ~ except YESTERDAY which started for Paul Mc with a tune ! A lyric has to SCAN and normally has some form of Rhyme Pattern ! Many *POEMS* on MPS lack both and fall (down) into the genre of *MODERN POETRY* ! Love the structure & subject. Vs 1 2 3 iform us how the MOON informs on observed infidelity and this is amplified in Choruses 1 & 2. Great SONG & great POETRY !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA 💙💙🧡💙🧡💙💙💙
August 24th, 2019 04:07
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
THANKS FOR SHARING THIS DA ! Very instructive ! The MOON operates between dusk & dawn and sees everything so it knows who*s been playing loose who*s faithful ! It has its time cut out with Angela & I ~ 24/7 ! We are not only 11,500 miles apart but also 11 hours ! So when its NIGHT for ANGELA its DAY for ME and vice-versa. So far the MOON has not reported any shenanakins despite a year apart !
Love your Poem / Song ! Every SONG normally starts with a POETIC LYRIC ~ except YESTERDAY which started for Paul Mc with a tune ! A lyric has to SCAN and normally has some form of Rhyme Pattern ! Many *POEMS* on MPS lack both and fall (down) into the genre of *MODERN POETRY* ! Love the structure & subject. Vs 1 2 3 iform us how the MOON informs on observed infidelity and this is amplified in Choruses 1 & 2. Great SONG & great POETRY !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA 💙💙🧡💙🧡💙💙💙
August 24th, 2019 04:07
big old moon (paranoia)
Goldfinch60 said:
Great read d a. Would be good to hear it.
August 24th, 2019 00:30
Goldfinch60 said:
Great read d a. Would be good to hear it.
August 24th, 2019 00:30
big old moon (paranoia)
Christina8 said:
Never get tired of reading your songs and thinking up a tune! It does have that funky feel to it! :-)
August 23rd, 2019 12:03
Christina8 said:
Never get tired of reading your songs and thinking up a tune! It does have that funky feel to it! :-)
August 23rd, 2019 12:03
big old moon (paranoia)
Neville said:
reads good .. Hendrix eh... now ya talking.. N
August 23rd, 2019 09:23
Neville said:
reads good .. Hendrix eh... now ya talking.. N
August 23rd, 2019 09:23
big old moon (paranoia)
Fay Slimm. said:
Was tapping my feet reading this threat to usurpers D.A. - - \'tis good keep the right side of you methinks.
August 23rd, 2019 04:07
Fay Slimm. said:
Was tapping my feet reading this threat to usurpers D.A. - - \'tis good keep the right side of you methinks.
August 23rd, 2019 04:07
just one more dancer
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful piece of poetry for your brother, I hope all is well with him now.
August 22nd, 2019 14:10
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful piece of poetry for your brother, I hope all is well with him now.
August 22nd, 2019 14:10
just one more dancer
Fay Slimm. said:
A brotherly piece of comfort in poetic style and full of common sense to get motivation on moving again..... good read D.A. for breakups come heavy to some.
August 22nd, 2019 03:05
Fay Slimm. said:
A brotherly piece of comfort in poetic style and full of common sense to get motivation on moving again..... good read D.A. for breakups come heavy to some.
August 22nd, 2019 03:05
just one more dancer
Neville said:
this could easily have been written for my brother.... not by me tho... how strange is that.... fine words DA and true..... Neville
August 22nd, 2019 02:32
Neville said:
this could easily have been written for my brother.... not by me tho... how strange is that.... fine words DA and true..... Neville
August 22nd, 2019 02:32
catching raindrops
Goldfinch60 said:
What an emotive write d a, those lost loves can mean so much to us.
August 22nd, 2019 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
What an emotive write d a, those lost loves can mean so much to us.
August 22nd, 2019 00:49
catching raindrops
Neville said:
dont ya just hate it when this happens... and ya gotta keep a smile on your face all the way home, dont ya....... Nice one my friend.... Neville
August 21st, 2019 11:20
Neville said:
dont ya just hate it when this happens... and ya gotta keep a smile on your face all the way home, dont ya....... Nice one my friend.... Neville
August 21st, 2019 11:20
catching raindrops
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh I can feel the shock of a love lost D.A. - - - we never get over hope until news like that comes along. A heart-rending read.
August 21st, 2019 04:19
Fay Slimm. said:
Ooooh I can feel the shock of a love lost D.A. - - - we never get over hope until news like that comes along. A heart-rending read.
August 21st, 2019 04:19
blot on the page
Goldfinch60 said:
What a wonderful but sad emotional write, the line
\" i think i\'ll write it all down in a letter and send it with my heart for you\"
really got to me, such hurt.
From your replies I know it is fictional but it was written in reality.
Another rare occasion where it goes into my favourites.
August 21st, 2019 01:24
Goldfinch60 said:
What a wonderful but sad emotional write, the line
\" i think i\'ll write it all down in a letter and send it with my heart for you\"
really got to me, such hurt.
From your replies I know it is fictional but it was written in reality.
Another rare occasion where it goes into my favourites.
August 21st, 2019 01:24
blot on the page
Sindhuja said:
Emotional things always starts with tears either its happiness or sad. Its really gud
August 20th, 2019 15:09
Sindhuja said:
Emotional things always starts with tears either its happiness or sad. Its really gud
August 20th, 2019 15:09
blot on the page
Christina8 said:
Very good Da! An excellent read, very emotional.
August 20th, 2019 09:58
Christina8 said:
Very good Da! An excellent read, very emotional.
August 20th, 2019 09:58
blot on the page
Neville said:
one would expect an emotional reaction to what is essentially an emotionally charged song......well enjoyed by me today....... Nice one DA
August 20th, 2019 09:45
Neville said:
one would expect an emotional reaction to what is essentially an emotionally charged song......well enjoyed by me today....... Nice one DA
August 20th, 2019 09:45
blot on the page
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Great Song DA ~ Thanks for sharing ! I (BRIAN) know from experience that SORRY is the hardest word. Im 35 now and very very happy with ANGELA (and She with Me !) and in 7 months we will be married ! However over the last 20 Years in the *Journey Though Love* I have several times lived your lovely (but sad) song. I discovered (even as a Teen) that when you have hurt (unwitingly ?) the *One you Love* saying *I LOVE YOU* just adds insult to injury ~ and you have to move on ! I should have been *A Pa de Deux* by now ~ but C\'est la Vie ! Thanks for sharing very reflective !
Blessings & Peace
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
💙 🧡 💙 🧡 💙
August 20th, 2019 09:08
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
Great Song DA ~ Thanks for sharing ! I (BRIAN) know from experience that SORRY is the hardest word. Im 35 now and very very happy with ANGELA (and She with Me !) and in 7 months we will be married ! However over the last 20 Years in the *Journey Though Love* I have several times lived your lovely (but sad) song. I discovered (even as a Teen) that when you have hurt (unwitingly ?) the *One you Love* saying *I LOVE YOU* just adds insult to injury ~ and you have to move on ! I should have been *A Pa de Deux* by now ~ but C\'est la Vie ! Thanks for sharing very reflective !
Blessings & Peace
Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
💙 🧡 💙 🧡 💙
August 20th, 2019 09:08
if i fall
Neville said:
I got a tune in my head but would love to hear the original version... seems like a great song to me......... very catchy.. kinda.... N :)
August 20th, 2019 01:30
Neville said:
I got a tune in my head but would love to hear the original version... seems like a great song to me......... very catchy.. kinda.... N :)
August 20th, 2019 01:30
if i fall
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write, so emotive but remember this, if you do fall we are all here to catch you.
August 20th, 2019 00:36
Goldfinch60 said:
Super write, so emotive but remember this, if you do fall we are all here to catch you.
August 20th, 2019 00:36
if i fall
Christina8 said:
the last line is a question we all want answered before we fall in love. Brilliant. I echo the thought of those before me that I would love to hear it sung.
August 19th, 2019 12:43
Christina8 said:
the last line is a question we all want answered before we fall in love. Brilliant. I echo the thought of those before me that I would love to hear it sung.
August 19th, 2019 12:43
the actress
Goldfinch60 said:
Another great set of lyrics, that woman is certainly best left in the past.
August 19th, 2019 01:00
Goldfinch60 said:
Another great set of lyrics, that woman is certainly best left in the past.
August 19th, 2019 01:00
the actress
Neville said:
Another one that sounds good in the head when read aloud... a catchy little number that either got away, or you threw back.... Nice one whatever the case....... N
August 18th, 2019 12:14
Neville said:
Another one that sounds good in the head when read aloud... a catchy little number that either got away, or you threw back.... Nice one whatever the case....... N
August 18th, 2019 12:14
the actress
Fay Slimm. said:
This tale of a female who abuses what life and love offers makes for a song many relate to in this age of unhappy relationships - - it pays not to be naive - -- good read D.A.
August 18th, 2019 11:42
Fay Slimm. said:
This tale of a female who abuses what life and love offers makes for a song many relate to in this age of unhappy relationships - - it pays not to be naive - -- good read D.A.
August 18th, 2019 11:42
the actress
FineB said:
Hello Dusk Arising,
What a wonderful write.
The actress is definitely the kind of woman every man should be beware of.
Keep writing FineB
August 18th, 2019 10:15
FineB said:
Hello Dusk Arising,
What a wonderful write.
The actress is definitely the kind of woman every man should be beware of.
Keep writing FineB
August 18th, 2019 10:15
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