Comments received on poems by Neville
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
Jerry Reynolds said:
A fine write, Neville. Nature does not reward children who won\'t learn.
May 13th, 2023 10:30
Jerry Reynolds said:
A fine write, Neville. Nature does not reward children who won\'t learn.
May 13th, 2023 10:30
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
orchidee said:
A sensitive write N - though I don\'t know anything about Smokey R.
May 13th, 2023 10:09
orchidee said:
A sensitive write N - though I don\'t know anything about Smokey R.
May 13th, 2023 10:09
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
Bobby O said:
“What began as a trickle.” Your phrase conjures visceral and tactile image and as you build the story we journey with and we learn. Nice write, great read. You got it going on.
P. S. I took the Title as a play on that famous Smokey Robinson song. “Just like Pagliacci did, I try to keep my sadness hid, smilin’ in the public eye , while in my lonely room I cry”
May 13th, 2023 04:08
Bobby O said:
“What began as a trickle.” Your phrase conjures visceral and tactile image and as you build the story we journey with and we learn. Nice write, great read. You got it going on.
P. S. I took the Title as a play on that famous Smokey Robinson song. “Just like Pagliacci did, I try to keep my sadness hid, smilin’ in the public eye , while in my lonely room I cry”
May 13th, 2023 04:08
The Tears of a Crowd Forming
Fay Slimm. said:
That horror resurrected in prosaic clarity will bring shudders and more to those reading your avidly penned descriptions of the thirties with its despicable behaviour of uncaring insanity - - with lessons learnt the future should never produce sights and sounds of such crowds forming again --- or at least we hope so with all our heart............x
May 13th, 2023 04:00
Fay Slimm. said:
That horror resurrected in prosaic clarity will bring shudders and more to those reading your avidly penned descriptions of the thirties with its despicable behaviour of uncaring insanity - - with lessons learnt the future should never produce sights and sounds of such crowds forming again --- or at least we hope so with all our heart............x
May 13th, 2023 04:00
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
MendedFences27 said:
Amen!!
I\'ll add this though, \"in a world where no two things are ever the same, twins, clones, copies, any two things. I think we are lucky to just keep on spinning.
I hope the sentiment of your poem becomes universal. If we humans could just accept each other as human, then maybe we could move forward. But large egos get in the way and the \"self\" overtakes all other concerns. Love, Peace and Harmony. - Phil A.
May 12th, 2023 12:56
MendedFences27 said:
Amen!!
I\'ll add this though, \"in a world where no two things are ever the same, twins, clones, copies, any two things. I think we are lucky to just keep on spinning.
I hope the sentiment of your poem becomes universal. If we humans could just accept each other as human, then maybe we could move forward. But large egos get in the way and the \"self\" overtakes all other concerns. Love, Peace and Harmony. - Phil A.
May 12th, 2023 12:56
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
Christina8 said:
Oh wouldn\'t that be wonderful if those things were just dark memories? I don\'t think we\'ll see this happen in our lifetimes, but I enjoyed the write very much! x
May 12th, 2023 12:32
Christina8 said:
Oh wouldn\'t that be wonderful if those things were just dark memories? I don\'t think we\'ll see this happen in our lifetimes, but I enjoyed the write very much! x
May 12th, 2023 12:32
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
orchidee said:
A fine write N.
My dilemma of course is: \'Why did I, what if I never, perhaps I shouldn\'t have, married KP! lol.
Do shut up Orch, says Fido.
I might allow one whale to be culled. A beached whale. Oh, it was KP sun-bathing! heehee.
May 12th, 2023 10:59
orchidee said:
A fine write N.
My dilemma of course is: \'Why did I, what if I never, perhaps I shouldn\'t have, married KP! lol.
Do shut up Orch, says Fido.
I might allow one whale to be culled. A beached whale. Oh, it was KP sun-bathing! heehee.
May 12th, 2023 10:59
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
Fay Slimm. said:
Oh YES my dear friend - -- such a wonderful world that would be and as load applause and a big SNAP comes from me I am sure you know I agree wholeheartedly to those final few lines...........x
May 12th, 2023 06:04
Fay Slimm. said:
Oh YES my dear friend - -- such a wonderful world that would be and as load applause and a big SNAP comes from me I am sure you know I agree wholeheartedly to those final few lines...........x
May 12th, 2023 06:04
Just a Series of What ifs And a Maybe
arqios said:
It\'s all we are saying.... have said... and will continue to say...
May 12th, 2023 06:00
arqios said:
It\'s all we are saying.... have said... and will continue to say...
May 12th, 2023 06:00
Livestock Holiday
L. B. Mek said:
lmao
such fun, a great read
\'cheesecloth dress\'
that\'s just...
well
anyway, I\'ll be \'borrowing\' that
lol
thank you for the chuckle Hyung
hope you have a FUN weekend!
May 12th, 2023 02:46
L. B. Mek said:
lmao
such fun, a great read
\'cheesecloth dress\'
that\'s just...
well
anyway, I\'ll be \'borrowing\' that
lol
thank you for the chuckle Hyung
hope you have a FUN weekend!
May 12th, 2023 02:46
Still Some Way to Go
L. B. Mek said:
read your words and couldn\'t help
relating to them in a selfishly
personal manner
hence my rant below, forgive me Hyung
(those dictators love to state
Poetry, should be read out loud
a must
I ask,
what if we\'ve worded poetic
what could never be spoken
tried to poetically, express
in-place of a yearning to caress
what then, dear \'know it all\'
must poetry exist to entertain
only
what if it\'s a note, a confession
inked
with that sincerity of scarlet ink
intended to reach, just one
whose forgiveness, can never
be attained
yet still, that need to word something
and explain, necessitates
the existence if these poetic words)
May 12th, 2023 02:42
L. B. Mek said:
read your words and couldn\'t help
relating to them in a selfishly
personal manner
hence my rant below, forgive me Hyung
(those dictators love to state
Poetry, should be read out loud
a must
I ask,
what if we\'ve worded poetic
what could never be spoken
tried to poetically, express
in-place of a yearning to caress
what then, dear \'know it all\'
must poetry exist to entertain
only
what if it\'s a note, a confession
inked
with that sincerity of scarlet ink
intended to reach, just one
whose forgiveness, can never
be attained
yet still, that need to word something
and explain, necessitates
the existence if these poetic words)
May 12th, 2023 02:42
Duplicity
L. B. Mek said:
yeah...
in the past, my partner left her phone with me
so I can help her get something fixed
every night, around 1 am
some fool, would call her number
and detail their encounters
I simply posted back her phone
never said a word to her after
years later, we met
she thought I had found someone else
and dumped her...
(perspective, warps
which end of that duplicity
we find, looking back at us)
or it may just be me n my horrid luck...
lol
(such a relatable write, Hyung)
May 12th, 2023 02:32
L. B. Mek said:
yeah...
in the past, my partner left her phone with me
so I can help her get something fixed
every night, around 1 am
some fool, would call her number
and detail their encounters
I simply posted back her phone
never said a word to her after
years later, we met
she thought I had found someone else
and dumped her...
(perspective, warps
which end of that duplicity
we find, looking back at us)
or it may just be me n my horrid luck...
lol
(such a relatable write, Hyung)
May 12th, 2023 02:32
Upon Recalling Youth and Poetry
L. B. Mek said:
\'What I try not
to remember
now though ..
Is just how many
times we
each failed to
notice time ..\'
my tenth read, and these lines still get me
so love this one Hyung
May 12th, 2023 02:24
L. B. Mek said:
\'What I try not
to remember
now though ..
Is just how many
times we
each failed to
notice time ..\'
my tenth read, and these lines still get me
so love this one Hyung
May 12th, 2023 02:24
Livestock Holiday
orchidee said:
I thought it said cheese-log - them wood louse thingys! I won\'t squash them. It\'s part of me Save Snails crusade - don\'t step on them in damp weather. A complete digression there, to throw us off the theme of the poem. Doh!
May 11th, 2023 14:59
orchidee said:
I thought it said cheese-log - them wood louse thingys! I won\'t squash them. It\'s part of me Save Snails crusade - don\'t step on them in damp weather. A complete digression there, to throw us off the theme of the poem. Doh!
May 11th, 2023 14:59
Livestock Holiday
Fay Slimm. said:
Your personal comment after the poem creased me up even more than the tale of cheesecloth attire on a breathtaking female -- --only a mind like yours mon ami can conjour intrigue in nothing but a few lines. - - Great stuff................x
May 11th, 2023 02:01
Fay Slimm. said:
Your personal comment after the poem creased me up even more than the tale of cheesecloth attire on a breathtaking female -- --only a mind like yours mon ami can conjour intrigue in nothing but a few lines. - - Great stuff................x
May 11th, 2023 02:01
Livestock Holiday
orchidee said:
Yep, sounds like another adventure of KP and I!
May 11th, 2023 01:22
orchidee said:
Yep, sounds like another adventure of KP and I!
May 11th, 2023 01:22
Still Some Way to Go
Parisab said:
I see this as complete, you responded and chose the direction of your words and she was impacted with unintended consequence-great work about ambivalence, poet friend.
May 10th, 2023 14:10
Parisab said:
I see this as complete, you responded and chose the direction of your words and she was impacted with unintended consequence-great work about ambivalence, poet friend.
May 10th, 2023 14:10
Still Some Way to Go
Christina8 said:
\"A poem, uncompleted\"---Just adore that line when it comes to unrequited love, or an apology as you say. Great write, Neville! x
May 10th, 2023 10:35
Christina8 said:
\"A poem, uncompleted\"---Just adore that line when it comes to unrequited love, or an apology as you say. Great write, Neville! x
May 10th, 2023 10:35
Still Some Way to Go
arqios said:
The uncomplete-d sits there and can be returned to but that isn\'t always the easiest feat to accomplish. But Time it has been said is a great healer and when that time comes around a reconciliation restores and even lets soar. I pray for that for every uncomplete poem and every poet that they correspond to.
May 10th, 2023 08:36
arqios said:
The uncomplete-d sits there and can be returned to but that isn\'t always the easiest feat to accomplish. But Time it has been said is a great healer and when that time comes around a reconciliation restores and even lets soar. I pray for that for every uncomplete poem and every poet that they correspond to.
May 10th, 2023 08:36
Still Some Way to Go
MendedFences27 said:
Yes, that someone long ago that maybe could have been a muse, and never realizing that the opposite was also true.
As such, an \"incomplete poem,\" lingers in his mind. Loved this one. - Phil A.
May 10th, 2023 07:55
MendedFences27 said:
Yes, that someone long ago that maybe could have been a muse, and never realizing that the opposite was also true.
As such, an \"incomplete poem,\" lingers in his mind. Loved this one. - Phil A.
May 10th, 2023 07:55
Still Some Way to Go
Fay Slimm. said:
An unfinished poem needs a completion and you have scribed an arresting apology for love unspoken
- --I among others can no doubt relate to being shy or scared when time comes for outing - -- glad to have read this one my friend............x
May 10th, 2023 05:17
Fay Slimm. said:
An unfinished poem needs a completion and you have scribed an arresting apology for love unspoken
- --I among others can no doubt relate to being shy or scared when time comes for outing - -- glad to have read this one my friend............x
May 10th, 2023 05:17
Still Some Way to Go
orchidee said:
A good write N.
Ahh, all about me and KP! lol.
May 10th, 2023 02:13
orchidee said:
A good write N.
Ahh, all about me and KP! lol.
May 10th, 2023 02:13
Duplicity
Bella Shepard said:
Ouch! Why is it that the sound of the word \"duplicity\" seems somewhat benign, it rhymes beautifully with felicity and domesticity. And yet there is its sinister side that can bring volatility and hostility. It is a duplicitous word that you have done justice to dear friend. Good write!
May 9th, 2023 12:13
Bella Shepard said:
Ouch! Why is it that the sound of the word \"duplicity\" seems somewhat benign, it rhymes beautifully with felicity and domesticity. And yet there is its sinister side that can bring volatility and hostility. It is a duplicitous word that you have done justice to dear friend. Good write!
May 9th, 2023 12:13
Duplicity
MendedFences27 said:
And he replied, \"We were just having coffee.\" And she replied, \" Yes, but with a lot of sugar on the side.\"
And \'Duplicity\" rhymes with stupidity. Never revisit where you\'ve been with another.
This poem is aptly titled for the title itself is duplicitous. I can\'t imagine one caught this outright, would ever be allowed to stay. You have given fair warning to those that consider love to be a game. Your poem is one of the hard lessons of life. Its realistic presentation, her vengeful attitude, and his silence, show where the moral high point lies. Loved it. - Phil A.
May 9th, 2023 12:09
MendedFences27 said:
And he replied, \"We were just having coffee.\" And she replied, \" Yes, but with a lot of sugar on the side.\"
And \'Duplicity\" rhymes with stupidity. Never revisit where you\'ve been with another.
This poem is aptly titled for the title itself is duplicitous. I can\'t imagine one caught this outright, would ever be allowed to stay. You have given fair warning to those that consider love to be a game. Your poem is one of the hard lessons of life. Its realistic presentation, her vengeful attitude, and his silence, show where the moral high point lies. Loved it. - Phil A.
May 9th, 2023 12:09
Duplicity
Christina8 said:
I love it, don\'t know any other way to say it, I really like the title as well....x
May 9th, 2023 11:30
Christina8 said:
I love it, don\'t know any other way to say it, I really like the title as well....x
May 9th, 2023 11:30
Duplicity
arqios said:
Oh wow. Cheating\'s never fine. As for duplicity, that\'s best left to duplicating machines, but never replicating such sordid behaviours.
May 9th, 2023 07:19
arqios said:
Oh wow. Cheating\'s never fine. As for duplicity, that\'s best left to duplicating machines, but never replicating such sordid behaviours.
May 9th, 2023 07:19
Duplicity
Fay Slimm. said:
Wording the end of a failing affair couldn\'t be better penned dear Nev. - -- gentle but telling this outing of truth. - -- - methinks concealment stirs feelings too deep for more intimacy after discovering any
intention to mislead .......x
May 9th, 2023 07:05
Fay Slimm. said:
Wording the end of a failing affair couldn\'t be better penned dear Nev. - -- gentle but telling this outing of truth. - -- - methinks concealment stirs feelings too deep for more intimacy after discovering any
intention to mislead .......x
May 9th, 2023 07:05
Duplicity
orchidee said:
A fine write N. I always says to KP that I have a headache! lol.
May 9th, 2023 01:35
orchidee said:
A fine write N. I always says to KP that I have a headache! lol.
May 9th, 2023 01:35
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