Comments received on poems by Neville
Tongue Spillage
L. B. Mek said:
so true dear Poet supreme!
\'toxicity\' is a most subtle
yet debilitating, ingredient of love...
(certain relationships seem to be vacuum sealed
in their own cyclical despair
too invested for either party to walk away
yet, within a week of that now
well practised make-up routine
both are playing that cagey assassin game
waiting to see, which lie
will stab deeper
and which betrayal, will eventually
deal that final blow
till then, they\'re left restlessly squirming
fidgeting, trying to gage the threat
of every kiss and embrace...)
August 4th, 2023 03:57
L. B. Mek said:
so true dear Poet supreme!
\'toxicity\' is a most subtle
yet debilitating, ingredient of love...
(certain relationships seem to be vacuum sealed
in their own cyclical despair
too invested for either party to walk away
yet, within a week of that now
well practised make-up routine
both are playing that cagey assassin game
waiting to see, which lie
will stab deeper
and which betrayal, will eventually
deal that final blow
till then, they\'re left restlessly squirming
fidgeting, trying to gage the threat
of every kiss and embrace...)
August 4th, 2023 03:57
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Goldfinch60 said:
Those memories bring back such wonderful memories Neville.
Andy
August 4th, 2023 00:41
Goldfinch60 said:
Those memories bring back such wonderful memories Neville.
Andy
August 4th, 2023 00:41
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
MendedFences27 said:
The girl may have forgotten you but the elephant sure as hell hasn\'t.
A most intriguing poem. A memory from the past relived and now memorialized forever. Life\'s crossroads cause the most colorful meetings. This is a classic, - Phil A.
August 3rd, 2023 15:20
MendedFences27 said:
The girl may have forgotten you but the elephant sure as hell hasn\'t.
A most intriguing poem. A memory from the past relived and now memorialized forever. Life\'s crossroads cause the most colorful meetings. This is a classic, - Phil A.
August 3rd, 2023 15:20
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
orchidee said:
KP\'s got a naughty elephant joke, but she can\'t repeat it in public - requests for it via e-mail, please! lol.
August 3rd, 2023 12:58
orchidee said:
KP\'s got a naughty elephant joke, but she can\'t repeat it in public - requests for it via e-mail, please! lol.
August 3rd, 2023 12:58
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
jarcher54 said:
My wife had an uncle who ran away in his mid-teens and joined the circus back in the 1930\'s. He was apparently a clown and a roadie. If I recall, you\'ve had an eye issue that affects colors? Well, maybe that clown career is off the table, but you are now MPS\'s court jester so there\'s that!
August 3rd, 2023 09:13
jarcher54 said:
My wife had an uncle who ran away in his mid-teens and joined the circus back in the 1930\'s. He was apparently a clown and a roadie. If I recall, you\'ve had an eye issue that affects colors? Well, maybe that clown career is off the table, but you are now MPS\'s court jester so there\'s that!
August 3rd, 2023 09:13
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
Bella Shepard said:
Love is such a tangled web, that if we had the power to lay straight, every strand, would we? It\'s the unpredictibility that keeps us on our toes, as does the weather. Beautifully crafted and a joy to read dear Nev. Wishing you fair skies!
August 3rd, 2023 08:13
Bella Shepard said:
Love is such a tangled web, that if we had the power to lay straight, every strand, would we? It\'s the unpredictibility that keeps us on our toes, as does the weather. Beautifully crafted and a joy to read dear Nev. Wishing you fair skies!
August 3rd, 2023 08:13
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Doggerel Dave said:
Loved the circus...and the fantasies I had about the lady on the flying trapeze... until the sawdust got the better of my asthma.
Never mind - the evocation was all...
August 3rd, 2023 05:55
Doggerel Dave said:
Loved the circus...and the fantasies I had about the lady on the flying trapeze... until the sawdust got the better of my asthma.
Never mind - the evocation was all...
August 3rd, 2023 05:55
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Parisab said:
I just imagined a boy looking at a vintage circus post card…this poem seems subliminal and I wonder what Jung would have said! So beautiful…
August 3rd, 2023 01:42
Parisab said:
I just imagined a boy looking at a vintage circus post card…this poem seems subliminal and I wonder what Jung would have said! So beautiful…
August 3rd, 2023 01:42
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Bobby O said:
That’s true treasure.
The wheel snd the write.
August 3rd, 2023 01:37
Bobby O said:
That’s true treasure.
The wheel snd the write.
August 3rd, 2023 01:37
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
orchidee said:
Good write Gold.
KP was an elephant-rider in a circus. One day she fell off. The elephant stepped on her, but its foot bounced off her, as she is full of botox! lol.
Don\'t ya just love it when she\'s taken down a peg or two.
August 3rd, 2023 01:34
orchidee said:
Good write Gold.
KP was an elephant-rider in a circus. One day she fell off. The elephant stepped on her, but its foot bounced off her, as she is full of botox! lol.
Don\'t ya just love it when she\'s taken down a peg or two.
August 3rd, 2023 01:34
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Teddy.15 said:
Just beautiful in every way, pain can bring such art as this. 💖
August 3rd, 2023 01:32
Teddy.15 said:
Just beautiful in every way, pain can bring such art as this. 💖
August 3rd, 2023 01:32
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
LIZ said:
I love this one!! Days when things were simple and innocent!! ❤️
August 3rd, 2023 01:25
LIZ said:
I love this one!! Days when things were simple and innocent!! ❤️
August 3rd, 2023 01:25
A Girl in the Red Bowler Hat
Bobby O said:
That’s true treasure.
The wheel snd the write.
August 3rd, 2023 01:14
Bobby O said:
That’s true treasure.
The wheel snd the write.
August 3rd, 2023 01:14
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
Christina8 said:
Well, I\'m smiling! A beautifully penned write! x
August 3rd, 2023 00:44
Christina8 said:
Well, I\'m smiling! A beautifully penned write! x
August 3rd, 2023 00:44
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
orchidee said:
And now some words that do have something to do with the weather - sun, rain, wind, whatever ya fancy! lol.
It\'s educational on \'ere, as I\'ve said!
August 2nd, 2023 12:36
orchidee said:
And now some words that do have something to do with the weather - sun, rain, wind, whatever ya fancy! lol.
It\'s educational on \'ere, as I\'ve said!
August 2nd, 2023 12:36
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
MendedFences27 said:
Some folks change with the weather, some are sunny all the time, others live under a cloud. Then, there are the realists, who get snowed, get sunburnt, or carried away on winds of promise.
This poem, it seems to me, is about a relationship that is on and off, again and again. Perhaps a stormy one, where she brings the rain. Enjoyed it. - phil A.
August 2nd, 2023 10:08
MendedFences27 said:
Some folks change with the weather, some are sunny all the time, others live under a cloud. Then, there are the realists, who get snowed, get sunburnt, or carried away on winds of promise.
This poem, it seems to me, is about a relationship that is on and off, again and again. Perhaps a stormy one, where she brings the rain. Enjoyed it. - phil A.
August 2nd, 2023 10:08
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
Teddy.15 said:
I see an image of a love that once was, peeping in and out again,. I often wonder why people are cruel when it comes to love, I have come somewhat to the conclusion it\'s pure selfishness with an ugly ego mixed in. lol 💖🤣 sorry to go on dear boy!
August 2nd, 2023 02:43
Teddy.15 said:
I see an image of a love that once was, peeping in and out again,. I often wonder why people are cruel when it comes to love, I have come somewhat to the conclusion it\'s pure selfishness with an ugly ego mixed in. lol 💖🤣 sorry to go on dear boy!
August 2nd, 2023 02:43
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I say this to KP:\' Not now, KP, I\'ve got a headache; or \'Not now, KP, it\'s raining - though we are indoors!\' Any excuse to not...... TMI (Too Much Info) to tell you more! lol.
August 2nd, 2023 02:15
orchidee said:
Good write N.
I say this to KP:\' Not now, KP, I\'ve got a headache; or \'Not now, KP, it\'s raining - though we are indoors!\' Any excuse to not...... TMI (Too Much Info) to tell you more! lol.
August 2nd, 2023 02:15
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
LIZ said:
Well, it\'s the full moon 🌚....it highlights emotions that need healing, and things we need to release!! Happy Wednesday!!!
August 2nd, 2023 02:15
LIZ said:
Well, it\'s the full moon 🌚....it highlights emotions that need healing, and things we need to release!! Happy Wednesday!!!
August 2nd, 2023 02:15
These Words Have Absolutely Nothing to Do With the Weather
Parisab said:
The weather seems hazy and a bit shady-yet you still make it the most interesting read, poet friend…
August 2nd, 2023 01:48
Parisab said:
The weather seems hazy and a bit shady-yet you still make it the most interesting read, poet friend…
August 2nd, 2023 01:48
Tongue Spillage
Parisab said:
I’ve never heard a masculine brand of annoyances to sound so delightful… Must be the English humor…
August 1st, 2023 22:03
Parisab said:
I’ve never heard a masculine brand of annoyances to sound so delightful… Must be the English humor…
August 1st, 2023 22:03
Smeared With Affection
Bella Shepard said:
I confess I am beguiled and bewildered in the most delightful way. I read this poem four times, and reading it aloud the last time, I paused to think about \"without any doubt whatsoever..\" , and its\' implication, that perhaps the words are meant in the moment, \"at the mercy of such intimate liars and fools\" such as we? I may have it all wrong, but the enjoyment of this poem was digging to find treasure, which is in abundance. A wonderfully delicious poem dear Nev!
August 1st, 2023 14:38
Bella Shepard said:
I confess I am beguiled and bewildered in the most delightful way. I read this poem four times, and reading it aloud the last time, I paused to think about \"without any doubt whatsoever..\" , and its\' implication, that perhaps the words are meant in the moment, \"at the mercy of such intimate liars and fools\" such as we? I may have it all wrong, but the enjoyment of this poem was digging to find treasure, which is in abundance. A wonderfully delicious poem dear Nev!
August 1st, 2023 14:38
Tongue Spillage
MendedFences27 said:
Liking this one, especially \"dandelion clocks.\" In and out of love seems to be a theme today. The language is light in this, but the message leaves a taste of longing. For maybe a better result? Makes one wonder why is she so indecisive? Anyhow, much enjoyed by me. - Phil A.
August 1st, 2023 14:10
MendedFences27 said:
Liking this one, especially \"dandelion clocks.\" In and out of love seems to be a theme today. The language is light in this, but the message leaves a taste of longing. For maybe a better result? Makes one wonder why is she so indecisive? Anyhow, much enjoyed by me. - Phil A.
August 1st, 2023 14:10
Smeared With Affection
Sunsetmet said:
The last lines calm and good again we can fix and work things out and mend
poor clouded rose tinted I love this lines lenses just great
August 1st, 2023 08:20
Sunsetmet said:
The last lines calm and good again we can fix and work things out and mend
poor clouded rose tinted I love this lines lenses just great
August 1st, 2023 08:20
Tongue Spillage
Teddy.15 said:
I only fave stuff from my heart and your poems as you well know speak volumes to a once upon a time first love of mine. Extraordinary beauty in your lines ❤️
August 1st, 2023 02:58
Teddy.15 said:
I only fave stuff from my heart and your poems as you well know speak volumes to a once upon a time first love of mine. Extraordinary beauty in your lines ❤️
August 1st, 2023 02:58
Tongue Spillage
orchidee said:
Me word is \'Pffft\' whatever that means! Good write N.
No danger of me falling out of love with KP. I never fell in love with her in the first place! heehee.
What stings? Don\'t answer that. I better ask Liz! lol.
August 1st, 2023 02:22
orchidee said:
Me word is \'Pffft\' whatever that means! Good write N.
No danger of me falling out of love with KP. I never fell in love with her in the first place! heehee.
What stings? Don\'t answer that. I better ask Liz! lol.
August 1st, 2023 02:22
Tongue Spillage
LIZ said:
Uffff leaking all over the place!!! The title is amazing! Lies, lies, lies! \"Like falling in and out of love\" They sting don\'t they?
August 1st, 2023 00:31
LIZ said:
Uffff leaking all over the place!!! The title is amazing! Lies, lies, lies! \"Like falling in and out of love\" They sting don\'t they?
August 1st, 2023 00:31
Smeared With Affection
Christina8 said:
I love that your combined DNA will be strewn about the place.....such a better comparison than \"fucking\' I think. Very good poem you have here! x
July 31st, 2023 07:47
Christina8 said:
I love that your combined DNA will be strewn about the place.....such a better comparison than \"fucking\' I think. Very good poem you have here! x
July 31st, 2023 07:47
Smeared With Affection
Caring dove said:
Great writing neville .. especially like these lines
‘Your eyes, are my
spring my love
those that force me
to see
beyond the blues
and the greens
( that’s beautiful )
Pinned, albeit loosely
between these
poor clouded,
rose tinted lenses
A well written poem and just like teddy I read it a few times too
July 31st, 2023 04:47
Caring dove said:
Great writing neville .. especially like these lines
‘Your eyes, are my
spring my love
those that force me
to see
beyond the blues
and the greens
( that’s beautiful )
Pinned, albeit loosely
between these
poor clouded,
rose tinted lenses
A well written poem and just like teddy I read it a few times too
July 31st, 2023 04:47
Smeared With Affection
L. B. Mek said:
I grant my fears, wings
free my tears to swim and serenade
fate\'s rain-starved clouds and hills
Within your fingers, life granted me
peace and harmony
enough for poetic lies to assuage
My every ambition
dear You, I\'ve learnt from these craters you gifted
and emptiness, you tattooed deep
Beyond my lungs capacity to hope
and yet, in a glance or stutter
of our synergetic heartbeats, I pause
Once more ready to dive, lust first
loyalty, not far behind
energised by a glint of your relapsing
Eyes...
approaching you slowly, tenderly
dear universe, I promise
Afford me this one mercy and I\'ll
guarantee
never will I ever need to seek
Another opportunity to get things right
now that I\'m pulsing to a beat, of
wedding rings and crimson vows
Bled with pride!
July 31st, 2023 04:37
L. B. Mek said:
I grant my fears, wings
free my tears to swim and serenade
fate\'s rain-starved clouds and hills
Within your fingers, life granted me
peace and harmony
enough for poetic lies to assuage
My every ambition
dear You, I\'ve learnt from these craters you gifted
and emptiness, you tattooed deep
Beyond my lungs capacity to hope
and yet, in a glance or stutter
of our synergetic heartbeats, I pause
Once more ready to dive, lust first
loyalty, not far behind
energised by a glint of your relapsing
Eyes...
approaching you slowly, tenderly
dear universe, I promise
Afford me this one mercy and I\'ll
guarantee
never will I ever need to seek
Another opportunity to get things right
now that I\'m pulsing to a beat, of
wedding rings and crimson vows
Bled with pride!
July 31st, 2023 04:37
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