Comments received on poems by Neville
Premature Evacuation
arqios said:
What you did there brings the two events into alignment one metaphorising the other without the other ever being mentioned, only alluded to, and that only partially. An amelioration of the guttered mind. Proficiat!
October 28th, 2022 19:02
arqios said:
What you did there brings the two events into alignment one metaphorising the other without the other ever being mentioned, only alluded to, and that only partially. An amelioration of the guttered mind. Proficiat!
October 28th, 2022 19:02
Premature Evacuation
orchidee said:
I might have swooned if the title was - woof - Fido won\'t let me say it! (that\'s my excuse. lol).
October 28th, 2022 12:28
orchidee said:
I might have swooned if the title was - woof - Fido won\'t let me say it! (that\'s my excuse. lol).
October 28th, 2022 12:28
Premature Evacuation
Fay Slimm. said:
How often angry words uttered leave seeds of regret - - your spirited lines veer close to female
need to voice frustration until that is she finds her evacuation was a bit premature. - - all in the game eh
- - - - but that\'s how the cookie falls in most love affairs - - imagine the making up afterwards tho\'. .............x
October 28th, 2022 11:17
Fay Slimm. said:
How often angry words uttered leave seeds of regret - - your spirited lines veer close to female
need to voice frustration until that is she finds her evacuation was a bit premature. - - all in the game eh
- - - - but that\'s how the cookie falls in most love affairs - - imagine the making up afterwards tho\'. .............x
October 28th, 2022 11:17
Ciao
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(In a blink she\'s back at my hip
linked
like we were at first glimpse
all teeth and fingers entwined
in a fate we once knew, designed
for us to ever-walk as just the two of us...
then a new blink, and reality
washes away all that dreamy yearning
a shake of the head, a sigh of released regret
and take a step to what awaits
but away
from that we wish could be reclaimed,
and-on we trudge - on
in hopes of finally finding that permanence
we seek...)
October 28th, 2022 04:39
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(In a blink she\'s back at my hip
linked
like we were at first glimpse
all teeth and fingers entwined
in a fate we once knew, designed
for us to ever-walk as just the two of us...
then a new blink, and reality
washes away all that dreamy yearning
a shake of the head, a sigh of released regret
and take a step to what awaits
but away
from that we wish could be reclaimed,
and-on we trudge - on
in hopes of finally finding that permanence
we seek...)
October 28th, 2022 04:39
Internally Yours
L. B. Mek said:
\'simultaneous flexing
the pulsing,
the squeezing and those
delicious
after shock spasms\'
you missed your calling, dear Poet
I\'m sure there\'s a few \'Fifty Shades of Lava heat on a page\'
waiting to entice the world, if ever you feel liking putting it down in risqué ink..
lol
(Dylan must have been fun)
October 28th, 2022 04:30
L. B. Mek said:
\'simultaneous flexing
the pulsing,
the squeezing and those
delicious
after shock spasms\'
you missed your calling, dear Poet
I\'m sure there\'s a few \'Fifty Shades of Lava heat on a page\'
waiting to entice the world, if ever you feel liking putting it down in risqué ink..
lol
(Dylan must have been fun)
October 28th, 2022 04:30
Ciao
orchidee said:
Where ya going? When will ya be back? Will ya be back at all?
So many questions. Have ya already gone? Have ya been and gone and are ya back by now?
Do shut up Orchi, says Fido. You\'re giving me a headache prattling on.
October 28th, 2022 02:16
orchidee said:
Where ya going? When will ya be back? Will ya be back at all?
So many questions. Have ya already gone? Have ya been and gone and are ya back by now?
Do shut up Orchi, says Fido. You\'re giving me a headache prattling on.
October 28th, 2022 02:16
Ciao
arqios said:
Ah! Arrested breath and stunned thought process. The finality is brutal. The word \'once\' though, lingers and fuels thoughts into the distance. Provocative and packs a punch.
October 28th, 2022 00:46
arqios said:
Ah! Arrested breath and stunned thought process. The finality is brutal. The word \'once\' though, lingers and fuels thoughts into the distance. Provocative and packs a punch.
October 28th, 2022 00:46
Ciao
Doggerel Dave said:
You made it, by virtue of it\'s brevity a piece which didn\'t leave me in suspenders for too long, Nev.
Initial hypothesis formed during the first lines was: an Adios to all at MPS.
Reassured latterly.
October 27th, 2022 18:03
Doggerel Dave said:
You made it, by virtue of it\'s brevity a piece which didn\'t leave me in suspenders for too long, Nev.
Initial hypothesis formed during the first lines was: an Adios to all at MPS.
Reassured latterly.
October 27th, 2022 18:03
Ciao
Fay Slimm. said:
Oooh Nev - - - this reads like the saddest of final farewells and in just a few lines you capture the untenable pain of a love that strong it takes over every aspect of life - - - sighing big here - ........x
October 27th, 2022 15:14
Fay Slimm. said:
Oooh Nev - - - this reads like the saddest of final farewells and in just a few lines you capture the untenable pain of a love that strong it takes over every aspect of life - - - sighing big here - ........x
October 27th, 2022 15:14
Internally Yours
Goldfinch60 said:
You certainly left us with a BANG Neville, enjoy your time away.
Andy
October 26th, 2022 01:02
Goldfinch60 said:
You certainly left us with a BANG Neville, enjoy your time away.
Andy
October 26th, 2022 01:02
Internally Yours
Bella Shepard said:
Hot, sensual, evocative, whew! I especially love the witty, double entendre at the end, so I think I know where you\'re coming from. Don\'t forget to tell Bob hi from me.
October 25th, 2022 13:13
Bella Shepard said:
Hot, sensual, evocative, whew! I especially love the witty, double entendre at the end, so I think I know where you\'re coming from. Don\'t forget to tell Bob hi from me.
October 25th, 2022 13:13
Dirty Linen
Rocky Lagou said:
You are literally one of my favorite poets in the universe! Neville your undeniable aptitude to gracefully craft words into pure works of artistry is captivating. Just with the first line you already had me breathless, \"Few men know pain like a poet knows pain.\" Preach and amen!
October 25th, 2022 09:21
Rocky Lagou said:
You are literally one of my favorite poets in the universe! Neville your undeniable aptitude to gracefully craft words into pure works of artistry is captivating. Just with the first line you already had me breathless, \"Few men know pain like a poet knows pain.\" Preach and amen!
October 25th, 2022 09:21
Internally Yours
Doggerel Dave said:
Wow Nev - that was a sweaty ride. Enjoy your trip - who knows, they might still be shagging when you get back.....🤣
October 25th, 2022 06:00
Doggerel Dave said:
Wow Nev - that was a sweaty ride. Enjoy your trip - who knows, they might still be shagging when you get back.....🤣
October 25th, 2022 06:00
Internally Yours
Fay Slimm. said:
Sounds like some sort of pickling or stuffing a chicken - but whatever or which it reads tastily hot - - enjoy Bob Dylon mon fortunate ami - - he- has always been one of my faves so see if you can get him to sing \"If Not For You\" - -- for me..........x
October 25th, 2022 05:32
Fay Slimm. said:
Sounds like some sort of pickling or stuffing a chicken - but whatever or which it reads tastily hot - - enjoy Bob Dylon mon fortunate ami - - he- has always been one of my faves so see if you can get him to sing \"If Not For You\" - -- for me..........x
October 25th, 2022 05:32
Internally Yours
orchidee said:
Will Bob (Dylan) cause you to write less swoony poems?! I won\'t recover from my latest swoon until you return. lol.
October 25th, 2022 01:55
orchidee said:
Will Bob (Dylan) cause you to write less swoony poems?! I won\'t recover from my latest swoon until you return. lol.
October 25th, 2022 01:55
Dirty Linen
dusk arising said:
In my time i have experienced enough white garments turned pink by accident to know this suffering.
I rarely dare wear white these days.
October 24th, 2022 15:58
dusk arising said:
In my time i have experienced enough white garments turned pink by accident to know this suffering.
I rarely dare wear white these days.
October 24th, 2022 15:58
Dirty Linen
Bella Shepard said:
It has occurred to me that there is possibly something else she is not telling you. Just a thought, I could be wrong. Very intriguing, and thought provoking!!
October 24th, 2022 15:41
Bella Shepard said:
It has occurred to me that there is possibly something else she is not telling you. Just a thought, I could be wrong. Very intriguing, and thought provoking!!
October 24th, 2022 15:41
Dirty Linen
orchidee said:
I thought you was washing this in public! lol.
And now tales of my \'dirty washing\'. Woof! Not now, says Fido! I knew he would stop me. lol.
October 24th, 2022 10:26
orchidee said:
I thought you was washing this in public! lol.
And now tales of my \'dirty washing\'. Woof! Not now, says Fido! I knew he would stop me. lol.
October 24th, 2022 10:26
Dirty Linen
Doggerel Dave said:
I have to confess, my friend........... I\'m sure of nothing here.... my pain threshold is all over the place.... I\'m unsure if your kite is a dicky bird or a contraption made of paper or other light material held together with a frame of likewise light material on the end of a long strong and light tether...... Finally (more or less) I was instructed by Mother to always soak/wash bloody clothing in cold water before said blood dried.. Perhaps the unidentified \'she\' in your piece needed a little more domestication and a little less discretion.
In Summary, I am forced to the conclusion that this was a very intriguing write - thank you...... 🙂
October 24th, 2022 06:22
Doggerel Dave said:
I have to confess, my friend........... I\'m sure of nothing here.... my pain threshold is all over the place.... I\'m unsure if your kite is a dicky bird or a contraption made of paper or other light material held together with a frame of likewise light material on the end of a long strong and light tether...... Finally (more or less) I was instructed by Mother to always soak/wash bloody clothing in cold water before said blood dried.. Perhaps the unidentified \'she\' in your piece needed a little more domestication and a little less discretion.
In Summary, I am forced to the conclusion that this was a very intriguing write - thank you...... 🙂
October 24th, 2022 06:22
Dirty Linen
L. B. Mek said:
simply Brilliant! oh Poet Supreme
and thank you for inspiring me to scribble a few lines in response
(you know it\'s true love
when they hide our shortcomings
and find a way to forget our indiscretions
then still find the strength to do our washing
while smiling at us
like we\'re shower clean, even beneath our skin...)
October 24th, 2022 06:07
L. B. Mek said:
simply Brilliant! oh Poet Supreme
and thank you for inspiring me to scribble a few lines in response
(you know it\'s true love
when they hide our shortcomings
and find a way to forget our indiscretions
then still find the strength to do our washing
while smiling at us
like we\'re shower clean, even beneath our skin...)
October 24th, 2022 06:07
Dirty Linen
Fay Slimm. said:
Thanking you truly mon ami for this gusty warning to whosoever when old clobber disposing and I sorely relate to resultant complains - - males who have preference for storing just-in-case- clothing create trouble in camp if just one is found missing - - hhhmm - methinks this maybe penned from the same bitter experience ? ..............x
October 24th, 2022 04:58
Fay Slimm. said:
Thanking you truly mon ami for this gusty warning to whosoever when old clobber disposing and I sorely relate to resultant complains - - males who have preference for storing just-in-case- clothing create trouble in camp if just one is found missing - - hhhmm - methinks this maybe penned from the same bitter experience ? ..............x
October 24th, 2022 04:58
elle était unique
Bella Shepard said:
There are those people we encounter who, as Nat King Cole sang, are \"Unforgettable\". Lucky us, for wonderful relationships that may be brief, but are forever etched upon our memory. Such a truly heart-felt poem dear friend.
October 23rd, 2022 13:31
Bella Shepard said:
There are those people we encounter who, as Nat King Cole sang, are \"Unforgettable\". Lucky us, for wonderful relationships that may be brief, but are forever etched upon our memory. Such a truly heart-felt poem dear friend.
October 23rd, 2022 13:31
Narrow Margins
Bella Shepard said:
There are those regrets that now and again rear their ugly heads and give pause for thought. Conflicted with past and present, it is a difficulty that often evades resolution. Powerfully worded my friend!
October 23rd, 2022 13:07
Bella Shepard said:
There are those regrets that now and again rear their ugly heads and give pause for thought. Conflicted with past and present, it is a difficulty that often evades resolution. Powerfully worded my friend!
October 23rd, 2022 13:07
Narrow Margins
Fay Slimm. said:
Regret for ever giving true love makes its telling so needed to those who broke every olive branch offered and are now losers. Hope the sting reaches home Nev. in this piercing piece...............x
October 23rd, 2022 09:33
Fay Slimm. said:
Regret for ever giving true love makes its telling so needed to those who broke every olive branch offered and are now losers. Hope the sting reaches home Nev. in this piercing piece...............x
October 23rd, 2022 09:33
Narrow Margins
Doggerel Dave said:
I do believe there may just conceivably be unresolved issues there, Nev..
October 23rd, 2022 05:19
Doggerel Dave said:
I do believe there may just conceivably be unresolved issues there, Nev..
October 23rd, 2022 05:19
Narrow Margins
arqios said:
A few of these broken branches have been nicked while I wasn\'t looking and used during the Palm Sunday procession.
October 23rd, 2022 04:11
arqios said:
A few of these broken branches have been nicked while I wasn\'t looking and used during the Palm Sunday procession.
October 23rd, 2022 04:11
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