Comments received on poems by Neville
A Life Sadly Lived
spilleronsheet said:
Sad and tragic
Maybe it was the story of someone who lived short
But yet I believe it’s not the length that matters but how you make it
Like Roald Dahl wanted a life like a candle burning from both sides
Doesn’t matter if it’s long or not
But what matters is, can it be big
Can we create a noise and ruckus for others to notice
Can we make others life better
Maybe a meaningful life is well lived
As always dear Neville, the words you choose truly depict your experiences and the thoughts show that you have witnessed and seen a lot
A man of few words but big impacts and huge feels
Quite emotive
December 24th, 2021 00:56
spilleronsheet said:
Sad and tragic
Maybe it was the story of someone who lived short
But yet I believe it’s not the length that matters but how you make it
Like Roald Dahl wanted a life like a candle burning from both sides
Doesn’t matter if it’s long or not
But what matters is, can it be big
Can we create a noise and ruckus for others to notice
Can we make others life better
Maybe a meaningful life is well lived
As always dear Neville, the words you choose truly depict your experiences and the thoughts show that you have witnessed and seen a lot
A man of few words but big impacts and huge feels
Quite emotive
December 24th, 2021 00:56
The Taking of Innocence
Garth Rakumakoe said:
Literally a bitter piece of a despicable whole, told in the most definitive of its unfolding. A poem I hate to love, but love nonetheless. Well done sir. I felt it.
December 23rd, 2021 14:12
Garth Rakumakoe said:
Literally a bitter piece of a despicable whole, told in the most definitive of its unfolding. A poem I hate to love, but love nonetheless. Well done sir. I felt it.
December 23rd, 2021 14:12
A Life Sadly Lived
Michael Edwards said:
How sad. A dear friend and excellent artist passed away a few weeks ago - he had no family and at his service it was mostly populated by other artists who will all miss him so. It was a simple serviice that was soon over but nevertheless it was so moving. Your great lines reminded of this - great write.
December 23rd, 2021 11:38
Michael Edwards said:
How sad. A dear friend and excellent artist passed away a few weeks ago - he had no family and at his service it was mostly populated by other artists who will all miss him so. It was a simple serviice that was soon over but nevertheless it was so moving. Your great lines reminded of this - great write.
December 23rd, 2021 11:38
A Life Sadly Lived
dusk arising said:
A seventeen line epitaph or testimonial may well be more rhan most of us get. Some are wise enough to write their own. Spike Milligan for example. Upon his gravestone are hewn the words \" I told you i was ill \".
December 23rd, 2021 08:06
dusk arising said:
A seventeen line epitaph or testimonial may well be more rhan most of us get. Some are wise enough to write their own. Spike Milligan for example. Upon his gravestone are hewn the words \" I told you i was ill \".
December 23rd, 2021 08:06
The Taking of Innocence
Draven said:
Well written with such few words. It made me feel disgusted...yet I am thankful for you for sharing.
Is it possible to include triggerwarnings?
December 23rd, 2021 07:27
Draven said:
Well written with such few words. It made me feel disgusted...yet I am thankful for you for sharing.
Is it possible to include triggerwarnings?
December 23rd, 2021 07:27
A Life Sadly Lived
Fay Slimm. said:
The title alone of this sensitive verse brought a lump to my throat - seventeen words to describe a life of years lived is so very tragic - - a sigh of a read Nev. which reminds me of some homeless who thru sad circumstance live on the street at this festive time of year........x
December 23rd, 2021 07:24
Fay Slimm. said:
The title alone of this sensitive verse brought a lump to my throat - seventeen words to describe a life of years lived is so very tragic - - a sigh of a read Nev. which reminds me of some homeless who thru sad circumstance live on the street at this festive time of year........x
December 23rd, 2021 07:24
A Life Sadly Lived
Draven said:
This is very bittersweet. Yet, I think 17 of the right, well chosen words could sum up a wonderful life too. Less is more.
Yet, I sympathise with what you are sharing here in your poem too
December 23rd, 2021 07:18
Draven said:
This is very bittersweet. Yet, I think 17 of the right, well chosen words could sum up a wonderful life too. Less is more.
Yet, I sympathise with what you are sharing here in your poem too
December 23rd, 2021 07:18
A Life Sadly Lived
orchidee said:
A poignant write Neville.
Meanwhile - I thought it was about me, singing badly through life! lol.
December 23rd, 2021 06:35
orchidee said:
A poignant write Neville.
Meanwhile - I thought it was about me, singing badly through life! lol.
December 23rd, 2021 06:35
A Life Sadly Lived
L. B. Mek said:
in one of the scribbles I\'ve shared
I started with these lines:
\'no flashing lights, or wailing sirens
nor herd of mourners, or endless wakes
my passing will be as subtle: as the life I led\'
(I just thought, your write today
and these words, fit
in such a poignant way)
sadly without context, all I can do
is comment and appreciate your ability
to infuse so much depth and feeling
in such few lines and even less detail..
what a masterful wordsmith you are, my friend
\'humbly, I read
and learn\'
December 23rd, 2021 06:19
L. B. Mek said:
in one of the scribbles I\'ve shared
I started with these lines:
\'no flashing lights, or wailing sirens
nor herd of mourners, or endless wakes
my passing will be as subtle: as the life I led\'
(I just thought, your write today
and these words, fit
in such a poignant way)
sadly without context, all I can do
is comment and appreciate your ability
to infuse so much depth and feeling
in such few lines and even less detail..
what a masterful wordsmith you are, my friend
\'humbly, I read
and learn\'
December 23rd, 2021 06:19
A Life Sadly Lived
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Some people live in such sadness , and others in joy . It’s not fair tho is it because it is our right to be happy in our own life . I know I get frustrated with the sadness life has thrown me .. but I know I’m worthy of much more
December 23rd, 2021 05:08
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Some people live in such sadness , and others in joy . It’s not fair tho is it because it is our right to be happy in our own life . I know I get frustrated with the sadness life has thrown me .. but I know I’m worthy of much more
December 23rd, 2021 05:08
The Taking of Innocence
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
How people can be so cruel is beyond me …. ((
December 23rd, 2021 02:20
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
How people can be so cruel is beyond me …. ((
December 23rd, 2021 02:20
The Taking of Innocence
Goldfinch60 said:
That too makes me angry, how anybody can hurt anybody else is such a dreadful thing in my mind.
Andy
December 22nd, 2021 16:21
Goldfinch60 said:
That too makes me angry, how anybody can hurt anybody else is such a dreadful thing in my mind.
Andy
December 22nd, 2021 16:21
The Taking of Innocence
orchidee said:
If it was not such a serious theme - it\'s my fault!
My version is: I made her kiss me, nothing more. Well I had just been eating garlic! lol.
December 22nd, 2021 06:54
orchidee said:
If it was not such a serious theme - it\'s my fault!
My version is: I made her kiss me, nothing more. Well I had just been eating garlic! lol.
December 22nd, 2021 06:54
The Taking of Innocence
dusk arising said:
I share your anger on this subject. Not least for the reputation it casts upon the innocent male majority. But of course mainly anger on behalf of the violated.
December 22nd, 2021 06:19
dusk arising said:
I share your anger on this subject. Not least for the reputation it casts upon the innocent male majority. But of course mainly anger on behalf of the violated.
December 22nd, 2021 06:19
The Taking of Innocence
Fay Slimm. said:
Rape would make a saint angry - this write needs reading by a far larger audience and taking a lesson from - -- into my list for further reference...............x
December 22nd, 2021 05:50
Fay Slimm. said:
Rape would make a saint angry - this write needs reading by a far larger audience and taking a lesson from - -- into my list for further reference...............x
December 22nd, 2021 05:50
Quarry
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Neville, the only traps I see are the hoops I run a croquet ball through. LOL
Andy
December 22nd, 2021 01:43
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write Neville, the only traps I see are the hoops I run a croquet ball through. LOL
Andy
December 22nd, 2021 01:43
Signing Out
Garth Rakumakoe said:
A carving out of the self. This leaves a mark on any reader/writer. When one has come into their own and became their own writing perhaps? Very deep, very profound sir.
December 21st, 2021 15:20
Garth Rakumakoe said:
A carving out of the self. This leaves a mark on any reader/writer. When one has come into their own and became their own writing perhaps? Very deep, very profound sir.
December 21st, 2021 15:20
Quarry
Fay Slimm. said:
Can see you know the inns and the out of the poaching game Nev. - - shall you be out early for Xmas catches this year to serve on poor homeless tables- - if so will join ya as cook...............x
December 21st, 2021 09:15
Fay Slimm. said:
Can see you know the inns and the out of the poaching game Nev. - - shall you be out early for Xmas catches this year to serve on poor homeless tables- - if so will join ya as cook...............x
December 21st, 2021 09:15
Quarry
dusk arising said:
I did a practice run for my roast potatoes today.... mmmm lufferly they was too. But I\'m buggered if i\'m going to go out setting traps for my christmas meal to catch..... oh no sir. These be tymes of yon olde Morrisons doorsteppe delivery dontcha know....... stay away from they plague ridden types and heathen politicians aaaarrrrr
December 21st, 2021 06:46
dusk arising said:
I did a practice run for my roast potatoes today.... mmmm lufferly they was too. But I\'m buggered if i\'m going to go out setting traps for my christmas meal to catch..... oh no sir. These be tymes of yon olde Morrisons doorsteppe delivery dontcha know....... stay away from they plague ridden types and heathen politicians aaaarrrrr
December 21st, 2021 06:46
Quarry
L. B. Mek said:
got eggnog\'s on me mind
but me cream is all askew
so I\'ll borrow Neville\'s advice
and brew his recipe anew, \'yey!\'
a horse hair for cinnamon stick
a lengthy twine for sugar cane
a baited trap for my Quarry
a broken twig and wire
to boarder Boris, in his
Quarantine borders... (for once)
all served
with a side of poached eggs
in Rum...
(thanks for inspiring my little scribbled reply, my friend
great Fun!)
December 21st, 2021 06:31
L. B. Mek said:
got eggnog\'s on me mind
but me cream is all askew
so I\'ll borrow Neville\'s advice
and brew his recipe anew, \'yey!\'
a horse hair for cinnamon stick
a lengthy twine for sugar cane
a baited trap for my Quarry
a broken twig and wire
to boarder Boris, in his
Quarantine borders... (for once)
all served
with a side of poached eggs
in Rum...
(thanks for inspiring my little scribbled reply, my friend
great Fun!)
December 21st, 2021 06:31
Quarry
orchidee said:
In one sense it sounds like a witches brew. Got any eye of newt? Aww, why all these one-eyed newts going about? Apologies to newts!
December 21st, 2021 05:10
orchidee said:
In one sense it sounds like a witches brew. Got any eye of newt? Aww, why all these one-eyed newts going about? Apologies to newts!
December 21st, 2021 05:10
Signing Out
L. B. Mek said:
Poesy, our beloved
\'what\'s in a muse
but for a flicker, lullaby
from wings, of a butterfly\'
sincerity\'s inked words
have a tendency to fly...
(simply Brilliant, dear Poet
I think I break-up with my muse
every afternoon, and wake-up
at 3am, under that judgemental
moonlight gaze
to make-up, scribbling
like it\'s my very fist time...)
December 21st, 2021 04:29
L. B. Mek said:
Poesy, our beloved
\'what\'s in a muse
but for a flicker, lullaby
from wings, of a butterfly\'
sincerity\'s inked words
have a tendency to fly...
(simply Brilliant, dear Poet
I think I break-up with my muse
every afternoon, and wake-up
at 3am, under that judgemental
moonlight gaze
to make-up, scribbling
like it\'s my very fist time...)
December 21st, 2021 04:29
Signing Out
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Neville, your Muse is only having a nap and will awake very soon.
Andy
December 21st, 2021 02:35
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Neville, your Muse is only having a nap and will awake very soon.
Andy
December 21st, 2021 02:35
Signing Out
Coyote said:
Do not fret my friend, the muse wanders but never goes too far. It does like to return at the most inconvenient of times though. Excellent write🙂
December 21st, 2021 00:49
Coyote said:
Do not fret my friend, the muse wanders but never goes too far. It does like to return at the most inconvenient of times though. Excellent write🙂
December 21st, 2021 00:49
Signing Out
spilleronsheet said:
It’s hard to say that your muse is gone
Who can stay to hide the shine from sun
So who can stop praising the words you weave
A man with less words but so much emotions
Where each word is engulfed with waves of emotions and feels
But yes often I wonder if the muse is gone, what shall happen to me
For so long it wasn’t there
Now if it goes I can’t seem to find purpose then
Your poetry never lacks the gleam
The sheen you carry with your pen
The mightier it is
Your poetry always a treasure dear Neville
December 21st, 2021 00:03
spilleronsheet said:
It’s hard to say that your muse is gone
Who can stay to hide the shine from sun
So who can stop praising the words you weave
A man with less words but so much emotions
Where each word is engulfed with waves of emotions and feels
But yes often I wonder if the muse is gone, what shall happen to me
For so long it wasn’t there
Now if it goes I can’t seem to find purpose then
Your poetry never lacks the gleam
The sheen you carry with your pen
The mightier it is
Your poetry always a treasure dear Neville
December 21st, 2021 00:03
Signing Out
Rozina said:
It’s all there! It’s holiday season during Christmas. Have a safe and Merry Christmas.
December 20th, 2021 22:16
Rozina said:
It’s all there! It’s holiday season during Christmas. Have a safe and Merry Christmas.
December 20th, 2021 22:16
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