Comments received on poems by Neville
Innerness
dusk arising said:
In my case the world within would be more aptly described as a thicket. Overgrown with the weeds of lost causes seeded by the fallen fruits of past desire.... but enough of me.
Tell her not to mark her would be boundaries with poured candle wax upon your tortured flesh sir. For your body is a temple, fallen to ruin maybe, but still deserving of respect.
Oh the games you play with my mind, capable of such perverse yet simple thought. Another intriguing write.
October 28th, 2020 05:02
dusk arising said:
In my case the world within would be more aptly described as a thicket. Overgrown with the weeds of lost causes seeded by the fallen fruits of past desire.... but enough of me.
Tell her not to mark her would be boundaries with poured candle wax upon your tortured flesh sir. For your body is a temple, fallen to ruin maybe, but still deserving of respect.
Oh the games you play with my mind, capable of such perverse yet simple thought. Another intriguing write.
October 28th, 2020 05:02
Innerness
Fay Slimm. said:
Wildness inside - that holds a truth when boundaries are shattered by boundless passion......... what an invite when all outside feels confined to tame................. brilliant write again Nev.
October 28th, 2020 04:49
Fay Slimm. said:
Wildness inside - that holds a truth when boundaries are shattered by boundless passion......... what an invite when all outside feels confined to tame................. brilliant write again Nev.
October 28th, 2020 04:49
Hiding Behind New Dust
Goldfinch60 said:
When we remove the dust from our lives we always see what beauty we had during that life.
Andy
October 28th, 2020 01:46
Goldfinch60 said:
When we remove the dust from our lives we always see what beauty we had during that life.
Andy
October 28th, 2020 01:46
Hiding Behind New Dust
Fay Slimm. said:
Beauty tho\' dust-trapped finds ways through to let shine its attraction and to whomsoever - as does this write dear Nev. with such a spark of beguile behind every line.
October 27th, 2020 11:02
Fay Slimm. said:
Beauty tho\' dust-trapped finds ways through to let shine its attraction and to whomsoever - as does this write dear Nev. with such a spark of beguile behind every line.
October 27th, 2020 11:02
Hiding Behind New Dust
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Blame me teacher - one said to us \'Sing loud, so as to dislodge the dust from the ceiling\'. So I did - and not stopped yet! lol. I\'m covered in dust now. (Do shut up, Orchi. lol).
October 27th, 2020 08:58
orchidee said:
A fine write Neville.
Blame me teacher - one said to us \'Sing loud, so as to dislodge the dust from the ceiling\'. So I did - and not stopped yet! lol. I\'m covered in dust now. (Do shut up, Orchi. lol).
October 27th, 2020 08:58
Hiding Behind New Dust
dusk arising said:
This is a class thing i\'m sure.... the only dust i got was on my Airfix kits dangling from the ceiling. The ones my dear brother used to love to aim pieces of folded cardboard at, propelled by an ack ack elastic band.
October 27th, 2020 07:03
dusk arising said:
This is a class thing i\'m sure.... the only dust i got was on my Airfix kits dangling from the ceiling. The ones my dear brother used to love to aim pieces of folded cardboard at, propelled by an ack ack elastic band.
October 27th, 2020 07:03
Beyond Broke
BoxMyHeart said:
Reminds me of a woman I know. Stubborn with a tattoo of honest on her body.
October 25th, 2020 02:48
BoxMyHeart said:
Reminds me of a woman I know. Stubborn with a tattoo of honest on her body.
October 25th, 2020 02:48
Beyond Broke
Goldfinch60 said:
Delusion is a disease which can be mended with the medicine of love.
Andy
October 25th, 2020 01:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Delusion is a disease which can be mended with the medicine of love.
Andy
October 25th, 2020 01:33
Beyond Broke
dusk arising said:
Many out there are still in need of a repair kit in their later years. I was once deluded enough to consider my heart a repair shop.
Disallusioned, i threw away my tools.
October 24th, 2020 18:01
dusk arising said:
Many out there are still in need of a repair kit in their later years. I was once deluded enough to consider my heart a repair shop.
Disallusioned, i threw away my tools.
October 24th, 2020 18:01
Beyond Broke
Fay Slimm. said:
Seriously good this concise diagnosis of delusion my friend.............the two final words - \"needy and broken\" brought sad heartache that this state is so familiar today.
October 24th, 2020 11:58
Fay Slimm. said:
Seriously good this concise diagnosis of delusion my friend.............the two final words - \"needy and broken\" brought sad heartache that this state is so familiar today.
October 24th, 2020 11:58
Beyond Broke
orchidee said:
Where ya meeting all these gals? Or is the same gal each time?! lol. I gotta \'get me coat\', \'get out more,\' and meet some of \'em!
October 24th, 2020 11:09
orchidee said:
Where ya meeting all these gals? Or is the same gal each time?! lol. I gotta \'get me coat\', \'get out more,\' and meet some of \'em!
October 24th, 2020 11:09
Los Echoes
Goldfinch60 said:
Those moments in time gave me some wonderful memories when my lover was by my side but now on my own I am becoming a different person and seeming to become \"free without guilt\".
Andy
October 21st, 2020 00:03
Goldfinch60 said:
Those moments in time gave me some wonderful memories when my lover was by my side but now on my own I am becoming a different person and seeming to become \"free without guilt\".
Andy
October 21st, 2020 00:03
Los Echoes
MendedFences27 said:
\"Echoes\" of bygone days, now blessed with the freedom of maturity, what perhaps was complicated is now unbound. What was unreachable can now be attained. What were \"just lost moments in time\" can now become moments of fulfillment.
\"Do we,\" \"does it,\" and \"do we,\" again seem like \"echoes\" from those \"lost moments.\"
Beginning and ending on the same refrain brings the concept full circle, and adds another slice of \"Echo.\" A very clever poem, well written and expressed. A retrospective self-inquiry. Made me ponder my own past relations. - Phil A.
October 20th, 2020 14:58
MendedFences27 said:
\"Echoes\" of bygone days, now blessed with the freedom of maturity, what perhaps was complicated is now unbound. What was unreachable can now be attained. What were \"just lost moments in time\" can now become moments of fulfillment.
\"Do we,\" \"does it,\" and \"do we,\" again seem like \"echoes\" from those \"lost moments.\"
Beginning and ending on the same refrain brings the concept full circle, and adds another slice of \"Echo.\" A very clever poem, well written and expressed. A retrospective self-inquiry. Made me ponder my own past relations. - Phil A.
October 20th, 2020 14:58
Los Echoes
dusk arising said:
Reading others poetry we create a meaning from the familiar in our life.
Today i read this as a driver sat in a waiting room whilst his wife fought for her life in another room after a motor accident. The driver feeling very humble and wishing he could exchange places.
Well that\'s where you took me today. I felt this was written from the edge of feelings. Intriguing and stimulating for my remaining few grey cells.
October 20th, 2020 14:47
dusk arising said:
Reading others poetry we create a meaning from the familiar in our life.
Today i read this as a driver sat in a waiting room whilst his wife fought for her life in another room after a motor accident. The driver feeling very humble and wishing he could exchange places.
Well that\'s where you took me today. I felt this was written from the edge of feelings. Intriguing and stimulating for my remaining few grey cells.
October 20th, 2020 14:47
Los Echoes
orchidee said:
Someone having fun? Glad someone is, cos Fido won\'t let me! lol.
October 20th, 2020 07:01
orchidee said:
Someone having fun? Glad someone is, cos Fido won\'t let me! lol.
October 20th, 2020 07:01
Los Echoes
Fay Slimm. said:
Freeing feelings from guilt makes former clandestine days full of meaning - - another beguiling poetic situation to contemplate Nev. - and composed so very well .
October 20th, 2020 05:20
Fay Slimm. said:
Freeing feelings from guilt makes former clandestine days full of meaning - - another beguiling poetic situation to contemplate Nev. - and composed so very well .
October 20th, 2020 05:20
Waving at Dolphins
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful rhyme and tone, immersive imagery and crisp clear metaphors,
effortlessly capturing the whimsy in the idyllic scene of carefree childhood it depicts;
such write\'s could easily be tinged by the grating notes of envy - unknowingly, when viewed through eyes that have lived long enough to know the bitterness of regret,
another brilliant write my oh so talented friend!
October 17th, 2020 03:48
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful rhyme and tone, immersive imagery and crisp clear metaphors,
effortlessly capturing the whimsy in the idyllic scene of carefree childhood it depicts;
such write\'s could easily be tinged by the grating notes of envy - unknowingly, when viewed through eyes that have lived long enough to know the bitterness of regret,
another brilliant write my oh so talented friend!
October 17th, 2020 03:48
Waving at Dolphins
Goldfinch60 said:
I was taken to that place by the sea with your words Neville, thank you,
Andy
October 17th, 2020 00:39
Goldfinch60 said:
I was taken to that place by the sea with your words Neville, thank you,
Andy
October 17th, 2020 00:39
Waving at Dolphins
Fay Slimm. said:
The calm of this poemed scene passes into a harbouring dance such as I see on days like these in my neck of the woods - sun and your \"tame and tireless waves\" lapping in harmony with little boats - - - - - - a truly inspiring piece of writing mon ami.............x
October 16th, 2020 06:24
Fay Slimm. said:
The calm of this poemed scene passes into a harbouring dance such as I see on days like these in my neck of the woods - sun and your \"tame and tireless waves\" lapping in harmony with little boats - - - - - - a truly inspiring piece of writing mon ami.............x
October 16th, 2020 06:24
Waving at Dolphins
dusk arising said:
Picture me, sat on the quayside seeing this exactly as you describe, obligatory spliff between my fingers lest i should be blind to this vision. A smile of contentment across my hungry mouth as the munchies begin to nag.
Took me into a fanciful state of mind as was once so accessible from a certain abuse. But I was there and yes I can picture your playfully happy scene in my minds eye.
October 16th, 2020 05:56
dusk arising said:
Picture me, sat on the quayside seeing this exactly as you describe, obligatory spliff between my fingers lest i should be blind to this vision. A smile of contentment across my hungry mouth as the munchies begin to nag.
Took me into a fanciful state of mind as was once so accessible from a certain abuse. But I was there and yes I can picture your playfully happy scene in my minds eye.
October 16th, 2020 05:56
Wasps
L. B. Mek said:
a certain Queen might dispute your disregard for their ferocious cousins, but I for one agree with you entirely lol,
wonderful read
October 15th, 2020 04:19
L. B. Mek said:
a certain Queen might dispute your disregard for their ferocious cousins, but I for one agree with you entirely lol,
wonderful read
October 15th, 2020 04:19
Wasps
Dove said:
I miss the bees, usually get wasp nest! Something about climate change! Lost a grade school friend to a bee sting,
Now Bee Have yourself, smiling ,
October 14th, 2020 13:55
Dove said:
I miss the bees, usually get wasp nest! Something about climate change! Lost a grade school friend to a bee sting,
Now Bee Have yourself, smiling ,
October 14th, 2020 13:55
Bring us More Liquor
Dove said:
Pub owner and a hangman “ what do patrons say. “ Good to the last drop” just kidding,
A well written poem, you never fail to entertain or teach
October 14th, 2020 13:48
Dove said:
Pub owner and a hangman “ what do patrons say. “ Good to the last drop” just kidding,
A well written poem, you never fail to entertain or teach
October 14th, 2020 13:48
Wasps
dusk arising said:
Oh i dunno about good for nuthin..... they make a rather satisfying crunch when u squash \'em.
I usually encounter them hiding in the branches when i\'m blackberry picking. Far fewer of them about lately though. Last year i had a wasp nest in the soil beneath my front hedge. I prepared wasp traps as per you tube videos and they just filled up with blue-bottle type flies so i just kept my distance.
I only got stung once which was as a child on the side of my third finger which hurt like hell.
October 14th, 2020 12:40
dusk arising said:
Oh i dunno about good for nuthin..... they make a rather satisfying crunch when u squash \'em.
I usually encounter them hiding in the branches when i\'m blackberry picking. Far fewer of them about lately though. Last year i had a wasp nest in the soil beneath my front hedge. I prepared wasp traps as per you tube videos and they just filled up with blue-bottle type flies so i just kept my distance.
I only got stung once which was as a child on the side of my third finger which hurt like hell.
October 14th, 2020 12:40
Wasps
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Morning Neville. In NATURE & ECOLOGY every living thing has its place and especially WASPS they are an essential part of Natures Cycles & Webs ~ OK they sting but that is part of their defence mechanism ! Visually they add a touch of colour and their NESTS are a MASTERPIECE of High Rise Flat Engineeing built of Wood not Wax !
What good do they do ! WASPS play an impotant role in Pollination - Predation & Parisitism. Without WASPS we would be overun with insect pests and there would be NO FIGS. Some think that would be a good thing ! WASPS pick up YEAST from late season grapes and store it in Winter for the next seasons grapes. So next time you see a WASP ~ DONT kill it but *Raise a Glass* to it AMEN.
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours A & B & Smokey ! ! !
October 14th, 2020 06:08
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
BRIAN HERE ~ Good Morning Neville. In NATURE & ECOLOGY every living thing has its place and especially WASPS they are an essential part of Natures Cycles & Webs ~ OK they sting but that is part of their defence mechanism ! Visually they add a touch of colour and their NESTS are a MASTERPIECE of High Rise Flat Engineeing built of Wood not Wax !
What good do they do ! WASPS play an impotant role in Pollination - Predation & Parisitism. Without WASPS we would be overun with insect pests and there would be NO FIGS. Some think that would be a good thing ! WASPS pick up YEAST from late season grapes and store it in Winter for the next seasons grapes. So next time you see a WASP ~ DONT kill it but *Raise a Glass* to it AMEN.
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours A & B & Smokey ! ! !
October 14th, 2020 06:08
Wasps
Goldfinch60 said:
Nearly all my long life I have never been stung bu a bee or a wasp but about four years ago I was getting the rotary clothesline in and there was a wasp sitting on top and it stung me as I reached up to get the line down. They hide from you and then get you.!
Andy
October 14th, 2020 04:21
Goldfinch60 said:
Nearly all my long life I have never been stung bu a bee or a wasp but about four years ago I was getting the rotary clothesline in and there was a wasp sitting on top and it stung me as I reached up to get the line down. They hide from you and then get you.!
Andy
October 14th, 2020 04:21
Wasps
Fay Slimm. said:
Loving this short and pithy opinion of stingers that prey on sweet flesh at this time of year - remembering earlier encounters I uttered loud Ouches when reading these words Nev...............x
October 14th, 2020 03:04
Fay Slimm. said:
Loving this short and pithy opinion of stingers that prey on sweet flesh at this time of year - remembering earlier encounters I uttered loud Ouches when reading these words Nev...............x
October 14th, 2020 03:04
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