Comments received on poems by Neville
Blemished
orchidee said:
Now a \'has-been\' aged about 150? Like KP then! lol.
November 2nd, 2024 14:58
orchidee said:
Now a \'has-been\' aged about 150? Like KP then! lol.
November 2nd, 2024 14:58
Blemished
sorenbarrett said:
At first glance I thought that the l on lord was a capital and it took me in another direction. That would have been good too. But then I thought this is Neville he wouldn\'t write that. I have to read poems more than once with my careless eye. The feel I get is one of shock, sadness over deterioration and change. I have seen photos of celebrities when young and old and how they have changed and likewise photos of family members of mine and even myself. This poem fits so well. Some really good lines (old rope, empty oyster shells, and cold lava flows) each a different element of the aging process. Frayed not as strong, lacking life, having lost past heat and flexability. (perfect cut red rose, bleeding out, yet while, drowning amid, silent death throes) the insidious nature and silence of aging. What was perceived as a blush now seen as a bruise. A haunting and too real write Neville
November 2nd, 2024 12:12
sorenbarrett said:
At first glance I thought that the l on lord was a capital and it took me in another direction. That would have been good too. But then I thought this is Neville he wouldn\'t write that. I have to read poems more than once with my careless eye. The feel I get is one of shock, sadness over deterioration and change. I have seen photos of celebrities when young and old and how they have changed and likewise photos of family members of mine and even myself. This poem fits so well. Some really good lines (old rope, empty oyster shells, and cold lava flows) each a different element of the aging process. Frayed not as strong, lacking life, having lost past heat and flexability. (perfect cut red rose, bleeding out, yet while, drowning amid, silent death throes) the insidious nature and silence of aging. What was perceived as a blush now seen as a bruise. A haunting and too real write Neville
November 2nd, 2024 12:12
Blemished
Cheeky Missy said:
It\'s, it\'s-- blame it on whatever suffices but, it must be my present silliness which made me nearly laugh aloud in reading, unless you so intended that. If not, please, please forgive me. Beautifully rendered with a bittersweet and haunting poignancy, imagery surpassing excellence and a charm which, like a good cuppa wafts sweetness despite all, or shall we call the conclusion the tannins? [I apparently like them for more than tanning leather.] Thank you for sharing.
November 2nd, 2024 11:38
Cheeky Missy said:
It\'s, it\'s-- blame it on whatever suffices but, it must be my present silliness which made me nearly laugh aloud in reading, unless you so intended that. If not, please, please forgive me. Beautifully rendered with a bittersweet and haunting poignancy, imagery surpassing excellence and a charm which, like a good cuppa wafts sweetness despite all, or shall we call the conclusion the tannins? [I apparently like them for more than tanning leather.] Thank you for sharing.
November 2nd, 2024 11:38
If Only Things Had Been Different
Doggerel Dave said:
Enjoyed, Neville, but why the enigmatic contradiction in the last five lines, and why don\'t others....I feel a dissociative state coming on......
November 1st, 2024 21:56
Doggerel Dave said:
Enjoyed, Neville, but why the enigmatic contradiction in the last five lines, and why don\'t others....I feel a dissociative state coming on......
November 1st, 2024 21:56
Looking Beyond Spring
Dove said:
I adore this, very inspiring...
(Like raindrops on old cobbles falling,)
A gentle rhythm, a soft enthralling,
Each drop a story, a whispered tale,
Of journeys long, and winds that prevail.
I can sense, see, and feel each individual splash,
A tiny drama, a fleeting flash,
As water dances, a watery ballet,
On worn grey stones, where shadows play.
November 1st, 2024 12:02
Dove said:
I adore this, very inspiring...
(Like raindrops on old cobbles falling,)
A gentle rhythm, a soft enthralling,
Each drop a story, a whispered tale,
Of journeys long, and winds that prevail.
I can sense, see, and feel each individual splash,
A tiny drama, a fleeting flash,
As water dances, a watery ballet,
On worn grey stones, where shadows play.
November 1st, 2024 12:02
If Only Things Had Been Different
Parisab said:
Acknowledging, rather than apologizing, seems more real…I believe, it always suits your poems more…Stay fresh, my friend…
November 1st, 2024 11:15
Parisab said:
Acknowledging, rather than apologizing, seems more real…I believe, it always suits your poems more…Stay fresh, my friend…
November 1st, 2024 11:15
If Only Things Had Been Different
MendedFences27 said:
Second chances are like 2 in a million, but we all wonder and never forget. The most powerful word in this poem is \"if.\" This poem captures a universal dilemma, lost love. There is no going back no matter how many times we dream of it happening. All that\'s left is a memory. - Phil A.
November 1st, 2024 10:37
MendedFences27 said:
Second chances are like 2 in a million, but we all wonder and never forget. The most powerful word in this poem is \"if.\" This poem captures a universal dilemma, lost love. There is no going back no matter how many times we dream of it happening. All that\'s left is a memory. - Phil A.
November 1st, 2024 10:37
If Only Things Had Been Different
Cheeky Missy said:
What\'s so charming about this one is that it should resonate with countless since too many of us have begun pining again over missing lovers. Oh! The piercing ache! The yearning to have a second chance where the first plummeted. Beautifully rendered with excellent spirit and that superbly haunting poignancy which drives us insane.
November 1st, 2024 08:30
Cheeky Missy said:
What\'s so charming about this one is that it should resonate with countless since too many of us have begun pining again over missing lovers. Oh! The piercing ache! The yearning to have a second chance where the first plummeted. Beautifully rendered with excellent spirit and that superbly haunting poignancy which drives us insane.
November 1st, 2024 08:30
If Only Things Had Been Different
arqios said:
On quite important junctions in life it’s the small things that count for the most and make the biggest differences!
November 1st, 2024 06:54
arqios said:
On quite important junctions in life it’s the small things that count for the most and make the biggest differences!
November 1st, 2024 06:54
If Only Things Had Been Different
sorenbarrett said:
Highly identifiable the what if. I think everyone has, at one time or another, asked themselves such things. A poem that is so human
November 1st, 2024 04:02
sorenbarrett said:
Highly identifiable the what if. I think everyone has, at one time or another, asked themselves such things. A poem that is so human
November 1st, 2024 04:02
If Only Things Had Been Different
orchidee said:
Who are ya? Oops, sorry, yes, I didn\'t think of ya. I forgot ya! lol.
November 1st, 2024 03:09
orchidee said:
Who are ya? Oops, sorry, yes, I didn\'t think of ya. I forgot ya! lol.
November 1st, 2024 03:09
If Only Things Had Been Different
Goldfinch60 said:
That question that haunts our lives Neville:
\"If only.......?\"
Andy
November 1st, 2024 02:07
Goldfinch60 said:
That question that haunts our lives Neville:
\"If only.......?\"
Andy
November 1st, 2024 02:07
Looking Beyond Spring
Goldfinch60 said:
|It will arrive Neville and the way time flies in our lives it will be with us very soon.
Andy
November 1st, 2024 01:45
Goldfinch60 said:
|It will arrive Neville and the way time flies in our lives it will be with us very soon.
Andy
November 1st, 2024 01:45
Looking Beyond Spring
Thomas W Case said:
Tremendous imagery. You take the reader into the scene and make them feel the emotion. Top notch.
October 31st, 2024 23:50
Thomas W Case said:
Tremendous imagery. You take the reader into the scene and make them feel the emotion. Top notch.
October 31st, 2024 23:50
Looking Beyond Spring
Dan Williams said:
Seems like anticipation thwarted. I too still look for certain people long after they have departed. Nice.
October 31st, 2024 23:39
Dan Williams said:
Seems like anticipation thwarted. I too still look for certain people long after they have departed. Nice.
October 31st, 2024 23:39
Looking Beyond Spring
MendedFences27 said:
Missing someone and hoping to find them in the future. The \"rains\" of separation, the comfort of home, the \"buds\" of hope, all images that lead one to think that someone is missed. And then the sad conclusion that they cannot be found. This poem comes to that sad ending, and the reader was expecting a much happier one. A terrific poem. Loved it. - Phil A.
October 31st, 2024 13:46
MendedFences27 said:
Missing someone and hoping to find them in the future. The \"rains\" of separation, the comfort of home, the \"buds\" of hope, all images that lead one to think that someone is missed. And then the sad conclusion that they cannot be found. This poem comes to that sad ending, and the reader was expecting a much happier one. A terrific poem. Loved it. - Phil A.
October 31st, 2024 13:46
Benign Bridges
Dove said:
Fighting definitely a waste of time...
To love, to smile, so divine
A bridge is made to close a gap
Not for dictators or lying saps...
October 31st, 2024 07:36
Dove said:
Fighting definitely a waste of time...
To love, to smile, so divine
A bridge is made to close a gap
Not for dictators or lying saps...
October 31st, 2024 07:36
Looking Beyond Spring
Doggerel Dave said:
Dealing with spring now, and feel happy that someone somewhere feels strong enough to tackle theirs and keep it and subsequent seasons under control, Neville.....
October 31st, 2024 06:09
Doggerel Dave said:
Dealing with spring now, and feel happy that someone somewhere feels strong enough to tackle theirs and keep it and subsequent seasons under control, Neville.....
October 31st, 2024 06:09
Looking Beyond Spring
arqios said:
To have to feel it all but unable to see it through, must be mighty frustrating!
October 31st, 2024 05:29
arqios said:
To have to feel it all but unable to see it through, must be mighty frustrating!
October 31st, 2024 05:29
Looking Beyond Spring
sorenbarrett said:
Neville I had to read this over a couple of times to get the sense of progression in this poem. This poem is very subtle. It begins with the falling raindrops hitting hard stone and it emphasizes the feeling of (each splash) painful indeed. The second portion mentions the word hungry for the fledglings that type of hunger when awaiting something as important as an empty stomach or heart. Then the buds with patience awaiting spring and finally the last statement of despite all this not being able to see the awaited. This leaves a rather sad feel and one of disappointment. Did like the pun like introjection of (rain check) This has a somewhat haunting feel to it. Brilliant!
October 31st, 2024 04:51
sorenbarrett said:
Neville I had to read this over a couple of times to get the sense of progression in this poem. This poem is very subtle. It begins with the falling raindrops hitting hard stone and it emphasizes the feeling of (each splash) painful indeed. The second portion mentions the word hungry for the fledglings that type of hunger when awaiting something as important as an empty stomach or heart. Then the buds with patience awaiting spring and finally the last statement of despite all this not being able to see the awaited. This leaves a rather sad feel and one of disappointment. Did like the pun like introjection of (rain check) This has a somewhat haunting feel to it. Brilliant!
October 31st, 2024 04:51
Looking Beyond Spring
Bobby O said:
Sense see and feel. Taking a rain check alone on a branch birthday dumb. This is nice peace man I like it a lot.
October 31st, 2024 02:42
Bobby O said:
Sense see and feel. Taking a rain check alone on a branch birthday dumb. This is nice peace man I like it a lot.
October 31st, 2024 02:42
Hail
Goldfinch60 said:
This happened the other day somewhere where they said the hailstones were as big a golf balls. What is happening to this world!
Andy
October 31st, 2024 02:20
Goldfinch60 said:
This happened the other day somewhere where they said the hailstones were as big a golf balls. What is happening to this world!
Andy
October 31st, 2024 02:20
Hail
MendedFences27 said:
Whoa, big hailstones. They are very dangerous. Can be killers. Global warming is responsible for the frequency of this kind of happening and to some extent the intensity, When will the Population of the planet wake up and do something? Thanks for posting this, we all need to be aware of these happenings. - Phil A.
October 30th, 2024 09:28
MendedFences27 said:
Whoa, big hailstones. They are very dangerous. Can be killers. Global warming is responsible for the frequency of this kind of happening and to some extent the intensity, When will the Population of the planet wake up and do something? Thanks for posting this, we all need to be aware of these happenings. - Phil A.
October 30th, 2024 09:28
Unilaterally Mine
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Simply put, beautifully expressed! Wonderful job! 🖤❤️🖤👏🌹
October 30th, 2024 09:03
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Simply put, beautifully expressed! Wonderful job! 🖤❤️🖤👏🌹
October 30th, 2024 09:03
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