Comments received on poems by Neville
They Lied About the Five Minute Warning
sorenbarrett said:
This reminds me of grammer school during the cold war when we had drills of hiding under our desks for a neuclear attack as if that would do any good.
September 20th, 2024 05:35
sorenbarrett said:
This reminds me of grammer school during the cold war when we had drills of hiding under our desks for a neuclear attack as if that would do any good.
September 20th, 2024 05:35
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
Tom Dylan said:
Some powerful pieces, Nevlle and like the two for one offer. Cheers, Tom
September 20th, 2024 05:18
Tom Dylan said:
Some powerful pieces, Nevlle and like the two for one offer. Cheers, Tom
September 20th, 2024 05:18
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
Goldfinch60 said:
Two good poems Neville, those Cryo babes to my mind are unthinkable.
Love could solve all in the second one.
Andy
September 20th, 2024 01:18
Goldfinch60 said:
Two good poems Neville, those Cryo babes to my mind are unthinkable.
Love could solve all in the second one.
Andy
September 20th, 2024 01:18
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
orchidee said:
I am not here - I am frozen in ice. That must be how I\'m millions of years old. Goldfinch is too. lol.
September 19th, 2024 13:01
orchidee said:
I am not here - I am frozen in ice. That must be how I\'m millions of years old. Goldfinch is too. lol.
September 19th, 2024 13:01
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
Cassie58 said:
I do like your two for the price of one days Neville. Nothing like a bargain.
Your Cryo Babes, makes me shiver. I really don’t approve of the meddling that is already going on, yet alone what is around the corner. I can only say, that I am happy, I am not going to be around to see it all. It is positively scary. It is totally unethical in my book.
As to The Hurting Game, this comes across as very competitive. I think it’s a good idea to call a truce and take a breather. I would imagine that this scenario is perfectly common place in some households. Not my ideal, but hey whatever works for some. Best kiss and makeup by bedtime:)
Have a happy Thursday.
September 19th, 2024 08:41
Cassie58 said:
I do like your two for the price of one days Neville. Nothing like a bargain.
Your Cryo Babes, makes me shiver. I really don’t approve of the meddling that is already going on, yet alone what is around the corner. I can only say, that I am happy, I am not going to be around to see it all. It is positively scary. It is totally unethical in my book.
As to The Hurting Game, this comes across as very competitive. I think it’s a good idea to call a truce and take a breather. I would imagine that this scenario is perfectly common place in some households. Not my ideal, but hey whatever works for some. Best kiss and makeup by bedtime:)
Have a happy Thursday.
September 19th, 2024 08:41
Now Out in The Open
Tom Dylan said:
A fascinating piece, Neville. You really paint the picture, convey the emotion, and the last line just nailed it, mate. A fine write.
September 19th, 2024 07:31
Tom Dylan said:
A fascinating piece, Neville. You really paint the picture, convey the emotion, and the last line just nailed it, mate. A fine write.
September 19th, 2024 07:31
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
sorenbarrett said:
I\'m sure glad you included that statement about the two being not related or I would have been all day scratching my head. The first is a most interesting thought that had not occured to me before. Maybe people won\'t believe in parenthood in those days. The second I can feel as if I had said it myself. Nicely worded
September 19th, 2024 05:27
sorenbarrett said:
I\'m sure glad you included that statement about the two being not related or I would have been all day scratching my head. The first is a most interesting thought that had not occured to me before. Maybe people won\'t believe in parenthood in those days. The second I can feel as if I had said it myself. Nicely worded
September 19th, 2024 05:27
Cryo Babes .. and .. The Hurting Game
Doggerel Dave said:
So two responses, Neville:
- I personally find all reproductive technology pretty repulsive. I am much in harmony with this one.
- A recognizable dynamic in some relationships I have observed…
I felt comfortable with those two – they felt real in their implied rebukes.
September 19th, 2024 02:42
Doggerel Dave said:
So two responses, Neville:
- I personally find all reproductive technology pretty repulsive. I am much in harmony with this one.
- A recognizable dynamic in some relationships I have observed…
I felt comfortable with those two – they felt real in their implied rebukes.
September 19th, 2024 02:42
Now Out in The Open
Goldfinch60 said:
Very emotive words Neville with a seemingly fulfilling finale.
Andy
September 19th, 2024 01:44
Goldfinch60 said:
Very emotive words Neville with a seemingly fulfilling finale.
Andy
September 19th, 2024 01:44
Now Out in The Open
Dan Williams said:
This is the coldness that can\'t be warmed by any blanket, and furnace. Bone chilling and determined to stay around. Good work, and good luck.
September 19th, 2024 01:04
Dan Williams said:
This is the coldness that can\'t be warmed by any blanket, and furnace. Bone chilling and determined to stay around. Good work, and good luck.
September 19th, 2024 01:04
Now Out in The Open
Thomas W Case said:
Tremendous work. I felt the heartbreaking cold.
September 18th, 2024 20:39
Thomas W Case said:
Tremendous work. I felt the heartbreaking cold.
September 18th, 2024 20:39
Now Out in The Open
Doggerel Dave said:
Not much of that around here right now, but I do have vivid but decently distant memories of cold - both physical and emotional and neither are much fun....
September 18th, 2024 08:46
Doggerel Dave said:
Not much of that around here right now, but I do have vivid but decently distant memories of cold - both physical and emotional and neither are much fun....
September 18th, 2024 08:46
Now Out in The Open
sorenbarrett said:
Hiding out in the open. Yes indeed I took this for more than just a relationship gone bad but something more hiding out in the open. The litteral story is one of coldness and I felt this in the poem\'s construction and wording. It gave me chills.
September 18th, 2024 05:05
sorenbarrett said:
Hiding out in the open. Yes indeed I took this for more than just a relationship gone bad but something more hiding out in the open. The litteral story is one of coldness and I felt this in the poem\'s construction and wording. It gave me chills.
September 18th, 2024 05:05
Now Out in The Open
Cassie58 said:
In a poem that got colder by degrees as I read through, there was a surprising upturn in the final lines. A poem of contrasts between then and now. The warmth is so much kinder on the soul. The cold is callous. I have always hated winter. You convey emotion so very well here Neville. Have a beautiful day my friend.
September 18th, 2024 03:32
Cassie58 said:
In a poem that got colder by degrees as I read through, there was a surprising upturn in the final lines. A poem of contrasts between then and now. The warmth is so much kinder on the soul. The cold is callous. I have always hated winter. You convey emotion so very well here Neville. Have a beautiful day my friend.
September 18th, 2024 03:32
Now Out in The Open
orchidee said:
Good write N.
We\'re cold here emotionally at times - shivery - a time of grieving.
Not hard-hearted, but some of us could not bear to stay long with a loved one when in hospital, not that he was in pain exactly, but suffering.
September 18th, 2024 02:27
orchidee said:
Good write N.
We\'re cold here emotionally at times - shivery - a time of grieving.
Not hard-hearted, but some of us could not bear to stay long with a loved one when in hospital, not that he was in pain exactly, but suffering.
September 18th, 2024 02:27
Black Pearls
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Neville, I too have come across young people like that and I have this ability to help them by just listening, it doe not sound like much but if they know that you are really listening to them they keep speaking and the problems they have come to them and they realise what they are and tend to get over them themselves.
Andy
September 18th, 2024 01:51
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Neville, I too have come across young people like that and I have this ability to help them by just listening, it doe not sound like much but if they know that you are really listening to them they keep speaking and the problems they have come to them and they realise what they are and tend to get over them themselves.
Andy
September 18th, 2024 01:51
Black Pearls
Bobby O said:
I had a nice visit here but did wish though , instead of windy seeds, some partially cooked pasta was the master of the pirouette , FUSILI maybe?
September 17th, 2024 23:56
Bobby O said:
I had a nice visit here but did wish though , instead of windy seeds, some partially cooked pasta was the master of the pirouette , FUSILI maybe?
September 17th, 2024 23:56
Black Pearls
Doggerel Dave said:
I only managed to get it from the subsequent discussion, I’m afraid, Neville -Apologies.
Hard for me to understand, but cutters are there and so difficult to help resolve, so good luck to both of you.
September 17th, 2024 07:30
Doggerel Dave said:
I only managed to get it from the subsequent discussion, I’m afraid, Neville -Apologies.
Hard for me to understand, but cutters are there and so difficult to help resolve, so good luck to both of you.
September 17th, 2024 07:30
Just Another Take On Life
Tom Dylan said:
A fine writing, Neville. Works on so many levels.
September 17th, 2024 06:58
Tom Dylan said:
A fine writing, Neville. Works on so many levels.
September 17th, 2024 06:58
Black Pearls
Cassie58 said:
Well I’ve come along and read this many times to try and get pictures in my head. I see oysters. Yes sea food. Recently I watched a video of black pearls being extracted from an oyster shell. Fascinating it was. I wondered whether the oyster felt pain. Discarded oyster shells? How am I doing Neville? Such a unique write. Loved it whether I am close or a million miles away :)
September 17th, 2024 06:25
Cassie58 said:
Well I’ve come along and read this many times to try and get pictures in my head. I see oysters. Yes sea food. Recently I watched a video of black pearls being extracted from an oyster shell. Fascinating it was. I wondered whether the oyster felt pain. Discarded oyster shells? How am I doing Neville? Such a unique write. Loved it whether I am close or a million miles away :)
September 17th, 2024 06:25
Black Pearls
sorenbarrett said:
\"and asked, if I should
like to watch
her bleed black pearls,
to hide the hurt
of being left so far behind\"
My favorite part of this charming poem that seems a puzzle. Since you have made it clear not to introduce spoilers for the next reader I\'ll refrain but several came to mind. I do think in one case the word silhouette is a key word, An alternate view is the title itself and seed have great meaning.
September 17th, 2024 04:39
sorenbarrett said:
\"and asked, if I should
like to watch
her bleed black pearls,
to hide the hurt
of being left so far behind\"
My favorite part of this charming poem that seems a puzzle. Since you have made it clear not to introduce spoilers for the next reader I\'ll refrain but several came to mind. I do think in one case the word silhouette is a key word, An alternate view is the title itself and seed have great meaning.
September 17th, 2024 04:39
Just Another Take On Life
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing words once more Neville. That journey in life can often repeat.
Andy
September 17th, 2024 01:24
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing words once more Neville. That journey in life can often repeat.
Andy
September 17th, 2024 01:24
Just Another Take On Life
NafisaSB said:
i agree - some things keep changing, and some are the same..
good and thoughtful write
September 17th, 2024 00:52
NafisaSB said:
i agree - some things keep changing, and some are the same..
good and thoughtful write
September 17th, 2024 00:52
Just Another Take On Life
Bobby O said:
This applies to so many things all at once. It’s perfect. It’s confounding If I already wasn’t addicted to having you as a brother I’d be looking for petty reasons to not like you. So often I struggle to pinpoint instead of circling, and then you say something poignant about everything all at once in a mere 34 words. !!!
September 16th, 2024 23:47
Bobby O said:
This applies to so many things all at once. It’s perfect. It’s confounding If I already wasn’t addicted to having you as a brother I’d be looking for petty reasons to not like you. So often I struggle to pinpoint instead of circling, and then you say something poignant about everything all at once in a mere 34 words. !!!
September 16th, 2024 23:47
Just Another Take On Life
2781 said:
O death, where is thy sting? O grave, where is thy victory?
September 16th, 2024 07:27
2781 said:
O death, where is thy sting? O grave, where is thy victory?
September 16th, 2024 07:27
Just Another Take On Life
sorenbarrett said:
You are right Neville there are several ways of looking at things and as I looked at this poem I saw many but again you are right the outcome is always the same. No matter what we do death is the final word for one and all and this becomes indelibly clear as we grow older. Beautiful and probably not the intended interpretation but so be it.
September 16th, 2024 06:55
sorenbarrett said:
You are right Neville there are several ways of looking at things and as I looked at this poem I saw many but again you are right the outcome is always the same. No matter what we do death is the final word for one and all and this becomes indelibly clear as we grow older. Beautiful and probably not the intended interpretation but so be it.
September 16th, 2024 06:55
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