Comments received on poems by Parisab
The Sins of Us
Bobby O said:
We play roles
I’m no saint
Those announcements declare a closeness rarely achieved not that there isn’t freedom it’s that we restrict it and it’s really hard to define why this situation this freedom lives but not that? Our own sense of freedom when it surrounds is a welcome beast though the strife lurks.
May 5th, 2023 03:10
Bobby O said:
We play roles
I’m no saint
Those announcements declare a closeness rarely achieved not that there isn’t freedom it’s that we restrict it and it’s really hard to define why this situation this freedom lives but not that? Our own sense of freedom when it surrounds is a welcome beast though the strife lurks.
May 5th, 2023 03:10
This is Love
L. B. Mek said:
these words, echoed
in those romance walls
of my heart,
beautifully worded, dear Poet
\'So this is love, it’s when I shine
At the bay where stones embrace\'
May 5th, 2023 02:59
L. B. Mek said:
these words, echoed
in those romance walls
of my heart,
beautifully worded, dear Poet
\'So this is love, it’s when I shine
At the bay where stones embrace\'
May 5th, 2023 02:59
Flight
Bobby O said:
Severance for all pain they felt and caused
This line set me to ponder
Pay/Reward for pain caused as if dutiful? Or inevitable to the degree of a necessary ingredient and thus be part of the “bills”
But it was unpaid severance - purposely skipped ? Consciously the avoidance indicates an unsettled system. I admit I don’t know but the compelling write thrust upon me the conundrum. Freaking successful piece thereby!!!
May 5th, 2023 00:49
Bobby O said:
Severance for all pain they felt and caused
This line set me to ponder
Pay/Reward for pain caused as if dutiful? Or inevitable to the degree of a necessary ingredient and thus be part of the “bills”
But it was unpaid severance - purposely skipped ? Consciously the avoidance indicates an unsettled system. I admit I don’t know but the compelling write thrust upon me the conundrum. Freaking successful piece thereby!!!
May 5th, 2023 00:49
Flight
Bobby O said:
Severance for all pain they felt and caused
This line set me to ponder
Pay/Reward for pain caused as if dutiful? Or inevitable to the degree of a necessary ingredient and thus be part of the “bills”
But it was unpaid severance - purposely skipped ? Consciously the avoidance indicates an unsettled system. I admit I don’t know but the compelling write thrust upon me the conundrum. Freaking successful piece thereby!!!
May 5th, 2023 00:48
Bobby O said:
Severance for all pain they felt and caused
This line set me to ponder
Pay/Reward for pain caused as if dutiful? Or inevitable to the degree of a necessary ingredient and thus be part of the “bills”
But it was unpaid severance - purposely skipped ? Consciously the avoidance indicates an unsettled system. I admit I don’t know but the compelling write thrust upon me the conundrum. Freaking successful piece thereby!!!
May 5th, 2023 00:48
Pomegranate
Parisab said:
You are so kind to I’ve of your time resources to familiarize yourself with some of my scribbles-Soon I may request your feedback of pairings of poems for a collection-thank you poet friend.
May 4th, 2023 22:29
Parisab said:
You are so kind to I’ve of your time resources to familiarize yourself with some of my scribbles-Soon I may request your feedback of pairings of poems for a collection-thank you poet friend.
May 4th, 2023 22:29
Midnight Flight
Parisab said:
You are most gracious for giving this a second look-I experimented with writing with delta like brain wave speed (sleep like:)) I get some of the philosophical part about quantum physics, but as the mathematical equation, my brain at most alert, would not grasp-
May 4th, 2023 22:26
Parisab said:
You are most gracious for giving this a second look-I experimented with writing with delta like brain wave speed (sleep like:)) I get some of the philosophical part about quantum physics, but as the mathematical equation, my brain at most alert, would not grasp-
May 4th, 2023 22:26
Pomegranate
Bobby O said:
It’s so BRAVE to claim desired and deserved fun using the word SHAME and skillfully making it work. Damn.
May 4th, 2023 22:20
Bobby O said:
It’s so BRAVE to claim desired and deserved fun using the word SHAME and skillfully making it work. Damn.
May 4th, 2023 22:20
Midnight Flight
Bobby O said:
If the perfunctory science that Einstein first felt true as thought experiments before the equations were stamped indelible , this piece danced with its poetic beauty and resonates on many levels. Read it four times and only them timidly attempt to whisper my thoughts.
May 4th, 2023 22:16
Bobby O said:
If the perfunctory science that Einstein first felt true as thought experiments before the equations were stamped indelible , this piece danced with its poetic beauty and resonates on many levels. Read it four times and only them timidly attempt to whisper my thoughts.
May 4th, 2023 22:16
My son of 2000, My son of now
Bella Shepard said:
This beautiful poem is so unique in its concept. The joy of a newborn, then reflection, 23 years later, of how that incredible life that has affected yours. As a mom I can relate to this whole heartedly. I\'m late to the reading, but thank you for sharing this wonderful verse of mother love.
May 1st, 2023 10:27
Bella Shepard said:
This beautiful poem is so unique in its concept. The joy of a newborn, then reflection, 23 years later, of how that incredible life that has affected yours. As a mom I can relate to this whole heartedly. I\'m late to the reading, but thank you for sharing this wonderful verse of mother love.
May 1st, 2023 10:27
My son of 2000, My son of now
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful!
Like fine wine, a poem 23 years in the making
exudes, refined sweetness and brevity
of the richest, velvet sincerity..
Thank you! for sharing this wonderful sip
of your life\'s, resplendent wine!
Happy Birthday to your lucky son
Hope you all had a lovely weekend
🍾🥂🍰👏🍾
May 1st, 2023 02:51
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful!
Like fine wine, a poem 23 years in the making
exudes, refined sweetness and brevity
of the richest, velvet sincerity..
Thank you! for sharing this wonderful sip
of your life\'s, resplendent wine!
Happy Birthday to your lucky son
Hope you all had a lovely weekend
🍾🥂🍰👏🍾
May 1st, 2023 02:51
My son of 2000, My son of now
Dr. Shailesh Gupta Veer said:
Really interesting. Beautiful theme.
April 30th, 2023 01:10
Dr. Shailesh Gupta Veer said:
Really interesting. Beautiful theme.
April 30th, 2023 01:10
Jazz Liberation
Bobby O said:
As the music flows to chance …
Such mellifluous imagery. Perhaps a piece I’ve posted speaking to how I feel Jazz and hip hop are the same could tempt a read and a shared thought? Titled
Thelonius Reborn as the Dee Oh Double G
April 29th, 2023 02:03
Bobby O said:
As the music flows to chance …
Such mellifluous imagery. Perhaps a piece I’ve posted speaking to how I feel Jazz and hip hop are the same could tempt a read and a shared thought? Titled
Thelonius Reborn as the Dee Oh Double G
April 29th, 2023 02:03
Midnight Flight
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'Restless I dance to feed from the earth’s synergy
Like giving birth to infinity\'
April 24th, 2023 03:29
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'Restless I dance to feed from the earth’s synergy
Like giving birth to infinity\'
April 24th, 2023 03:29
Holy Amnesia
L. B. Mek said:
such grace in you poetic imagery
such nuanced, owned fragility
in these searching words, a theme
relatable to anyone
even those, devoid
of any theological alignment
this poem, resonates and voices
such universal humane, sentiments
wonderfully worded, a great read
thank you, dear Poet
(there\'s a few lines, I scribbled
a long time ago
which I feel your words reflect:
\'for naked , I\'m clothed
in hope\'s
progressive steps
upon treadmilling, memories
and pulsing themes
of breathless, inadequacies\')
April 24th, 2023 03:27
L. B. Mek said:
such grace in you poetic imagery
such nuanced, owned fragility
in these searching words, a theme
relatable to anyone
even those, devoid
of any theological alignment
this poem, resonates and voices
such universal humane, sentiments
wonderfully worded, a great read
thank you, dear Poet
(there\'s a few lines, I scribbled
a long time ago
which I feel your words reflect:
\'for naked , I\'m clothed
in hope\'s
progressive steps
upon treadmilling, memories
and pulsing themes
of breathless, inadequacies\')
April 24th, 2023 03:27
Midnight Flight
thinkerbell said:
Great imagery dear poet..loved the dreamscape you created 🥰
April 23rd, 2023 14:32
thinkerbell said:
Great imagery dear poet..loved the dreamscape you created 🥰
April 23rd, 2023 14:32
Dancing in the Street
Parisab said:
Thank you for your attention and comments about my poems dear sir
April 22nd, 2023 10:19
Parisab said:
Thank you for your attention and comments about my poems dear sir
April 22nd, 2023 10:19
Midnight Flight
Fay Slimm. said:
You express the dream of life most vividly with this engagingly good imagery - - thank you for sharing your Midnight Flight dear poet-friend.
April 22nd, 2023 03:23
Fay Slimm. said:
You express the dream of life most vividly with this engagingly good imagery - - thank you for sharing your Midnight Flight dear poet-friend.
April 22nd, 2023 03:23
Midnight Flight
Parisab said:
I was experimenting writing (and editing) in a dreamlike state:) Many thanks.
April 22nd, 2023 02:46
Parisab said:
I was experimenting writing (and editing) in a dreamlike state:) Many thanks.
April 22nd, 2023 02:46
Midnight Flight
Dr. Shailesh Gupta Veer said:
Dreamy atmosphere. Beautiful imagery my friend.
April 22nd, 2023 02:39
Dr. Shailesh Gupta Veer said:
Dreamy atmosphere. Beautiful imagery my friend.
April 22nd, 2023 02:39
Holy Amnesia
Parisab said:
Thank you dear poet-I guess I see our memory loss, as a function of the material world fading and our attention shifting to our spiritual connection with our maker.
April 17th, 2023 18:49
Parisab said:
Thank you dear poet-I guess I see our memory loss, as a function of the material world fading and our attention shifting to our spiritual connection with our maker.
April 17th, 2023 18:49
Holy Amnesia
Bella Shepard said:
Your words are striking and beautiful dear poet. A question posed, to which the answer is conflicted. Loved it!
April 17th, 2023 12:53
Bella Shepard said:
Your words are striking and beautiful dear poet. A question posed, to which the answer is conflicted. Loved it!
April 17th, 2023 12:53
Apologies
L. B. Mek said:
how I relate, dear poet kin
we Diaspora, survivors
trailblazers of haunting grief:
\'When I left, I left you a trail of tears, I migrated with a broken heart\'
\'we watch you collapse in the blood of your trauma
I’m making kabob and rice for the boys tonight
with a side of guilty comfort\'
April 10th, 2023 04:03
L. B. Mek said:
how I relate, dear poet kin
we Diaspora, survivors
trailblazers of haunting grief:
\'When I left, I left you a trail of tears, I migrated with a broken heart\'
\'we watch you collapse in the blood of your trauma
I’m making kabob and rice for the boys tonight
with a side of guilty comfort\'
April 10th, 2023 04:03
Jazz Liberation
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful wording
so vivid it surpasses poetic dimensionality
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 10th, 2023 02:30
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful wording
so vivid it surpasses poetic dimensionality
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 10th, 2023 02:30
Pomegranate
Kurt Philip Behm said:
\"Let shame fulfill us with the scent of pomegranates!\"
Great closing line !
April 8th, 2023 20:23
Kurt Philip Behm said:
\"Let shame fulfill us with the scent of pomegranates!\"
Great closing line !
April 8th, 2023 20:23
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