Comments received on poems by Parisab
A Hazy Strange Winter
Neville said:
to put it quite simply, those subtle changes you made make an already fine poem so very much more refined .. excellence at its very best .. Neville
April 14th, 2024 10:51
Neville said:
to put it quite simply, those subtle changes you made make an already fine poem so very much more refined .. excellence at its very best .. Neville
April 14th, 2024 10:51
Heavy Hearts and Dandelions
Parisab said:
Thank you for the kind sentiment and connecting to the words…
April 14th, 2024 09:34
Parisab said:
Thank you for the kind sentiment and connecting to the words…
April 14th, 2024 09:34
Heavy Hearts and Dandelions
sorenbarrett said:
Young deaths always draw more attention due to the potential loss and the basic feeling of needing to protect the helpless. It is so sad when unknown potential is snuffed out too soon. The metaphor here fits so well and the imagery is great.
April 14th, 2024 09:30
sorenbarrett said:
Young deaths always draw more attention due to the potential loss and the basic feeling of needing to protect the helpless. It is so sad when unknown potential is snuffed out too soon. The metaphor here fits so well and the imagery is great.
April 14th, 2024 09:30
A Hazy Strange Winter
Neville said:
.... incredible ink even more cohesively daubed .. quite simply beautifully scribed .. Neville
March 2nd, 2024 04:08
Neville said:
.... incredible ink even more cohesively daubed .. quite simply beautifully scribed .. Neville
March 2nd, 2024 04:08
A Hazy Strange Winter
peto said:
The imagery is stunning
Especially liked \"smiling fish\"
Only complaint I have is we don\'t see enough writing from you
That being said
They are always worth the wait
Superb
March 1st, 2024 13:41
peto said:
The imagery is stunning
Especially liked \"smiling fish\"
Only complaint I have is we don\'t see enough writing from you
That being said
They are always worth the wait
Superb
March 1st, 2024 13:41
A Hazy Strange Winter
Parisab said:
I truly appreciate your refreshing view of this piece, Cassie:)
March 1st, 2024 10:47
Parisab said:
I truly appreciate your refreshing view of this piece, Cassie:)
March 1st, 2024 10:47
A Hazy Strange Winter
Cassie58 said:
the shining winter is where my heart fluttered
it flew and the streams were full
of smiling fish
I sense a change in a relationship here. What was once bright even in the coldest season has lost some heat and light. Beautiful poetic expression Parisiab. A fabulous piece of poetry.
March 1st, 2024 09:16
Cassie58 said:
the shining winter is where my heart fluttered
it flew and the streams were full
of smiling fish
I sense a change in a relationship here. What was once bright even in the coldest season has lost some heat and light. Beautiful poetic expression Parisiab. A fabulous piece of poetry.
March 1st, 2024 09:16
Star of Bethlehem Under Rubble
Garth Rakumakoe said:
This mysteriously takes me to the Middle East affair for some reason, and it even semi-references a book I read on Israel and the star of David. There\'s so much in it about losing one\'s way, and perhaps even a fall from grace... \"My hands were sorting the stars in the sky this night\" is such a great line, and very relatable... \"And I fear that you may even have lost your way back to your star\" underpins a lot about an unforgettable history and legion that cannot be forgotten nor ignored, but is sadly lost, along with its innocence.
This is where this piece kept me abducted, vividly so. Unmatched story telling, dear P.
February 20th, 2024 06:16
Garth Rakumakoe said:
This mysteriously takes me to the Middle East affair for some reason, and it even semi-references a book I read on Israel and the star of David. There\'s so much in it about losing one\'s way, and perhaps even a fall from grace... \"My hands were sorting the stars in the sky this night\" is such a great line, and very relatable... \"And I fear that you may even have lost your way back to your star\" underpins a lot about an unforgettable history and legion that cannot be forgotten nor ignored, but is sadly lost, along with its innocence.
This is where this piece kept me abducted, vividly so. Unmatched story telling, dear P.
February 20th, 2024 06:16
A Hazy Strange Winter
vividvoid14 said:
hey, do you plan on making another poem??
February 15th, 2024 23:11
vividvoid14 said:
hey, do you plan on making another poem??
February 15th, 2024 23:11
A Hazy Strange Winter
Parisab said:
Means a lot coming from a poet at heart! It turns out that we are colleagues as psychologists, after all:)
February 4th, 2024 14:05
Parisab said:
Means a lot coming from a poet at heart! It turns out that we are colleagues as psychologists, after all:)
February 4th, 2024 14:05
A Hazy Strange Winter
sorenbarrett said:
Poignantly melancholic and sad. As a retired psychologist I have heard this story before and lived it as well so it has familiar notes and its music is as dark as a winter day.
\"Now there is pitch dark in winter and we squeeze each others’ hands like the succulents scorching for their monthly thirst\"
A very powerful line. Brilliant
February 4th, 2024 14:00
sorenbarrett said:
Poignantly melancholic and sad. As a retired psychologist I have heard this story before and lived it as well so it has familiar notes and its music is as dark as a winter day.
\"Now there is pitch dark in winter and we squeeze each others’ hands like the succulents scorching for their monthly thirst\"
A very powerful line. Brilliant
February 4th, 2024 14:00
Love Potion No.19
Teddy.15 said:
I simply adore this type of commotion Parisab, wonderful and filled with emotion. ❤️
February 4th, 2024 13:15
Teddy.15 said:
I simply adore this type of commotion Parisab, wonderful and filled with emotion. ❤️
February 4th, 2024 13:15
Star of Bethlehem Under Rubble
Thomas W Case said:
Truly beautiful work. A heavy write.
February 3rd, 2024 21:31
Thomas W Case said:
Truly beautiful work. A heavy write.
February 3rd, 2024 21:31
Heavy Hearts and Dandelions
Garth Rakumakoe said:
I love how it ends so openly, and continuously as though that end never ends... The duality in it is also quite attractive in its sensitivity, the dandelions and hearts are almost each in their own bubbles, until one is not, upon contact with the other... This piece speaks to the literary skies...
You weave a mighty pen... May blessings abound your works!
February 2nd, 2024 05:04
Garth Rakumakoe said:
I love how it ends so openly, and continuously as though that end never ends... The duality in it is also quite attractive in its sensitivity, the dandelions and hearts are almost each in their own bubbles, until one is not, upon contact with the other... This piece speaks to the literary skies...
You weave a mighty pen... May blessings abound your works!
February 2nd, 2024 05:04
A Hazy Strange Winter
Garth Rakumakoe said:
This is the stuff timeless books are written of... It\'s such a \"touch, smell and feel\" kind of poem, loaded with fondness and nostalgia, you know. The person written of in the piece, the scenery, the closeness of memory... shall simply never die...
Be very proud of these words, gifted one. They are a portrait in time.
February 2nd, 2024 04:57
Garth Rakumakoe said:
This is the stuff timeless books are written of... It\'s such a \"touch, smell and feel\" kind of poem, loaded with fondness and nostalgia, you know. The person written of in the piece, the scenery, the closeness of memory... shall simply never die...
Be very proud of these words, gifted one. They are a portrait in time.
February 2nd, 2024 04:57
Star of Bethlehem Under Rubble
Bigguy said:
I love this. I think you can hurt the reader even more viciously on a spiritual level with a sequel or revision.
Hope that isn\'t presumptuous, but I love this poem! Well done!
February 2nd, 2024 01:15
Bigguy said:
I love this. I think you can hurt the reader even more viciously on a spiritual level with a sequel or revision.
Hope that isn\'t presumptuous, but I love this poem! Well done!
February 2nd, 2024 01:15
The Fig Tree and the Bird
Reynaldo Casison said:
Your welcome Parisab
Have a sweet night
January 28th, 2024 22:22
Reynaldo Casison said:
Your welcome Parisab
Have a sweet night
January 28th, 2024 22:22
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