Comments received on poems by dusk arising
becalmed beyond escape
L. B. Mek said:
\'becalmed beyond escape
she took us
men of steel
wooden ships\'
wonderful imagery and penned with a tone hinting of both regret and acceptance simultaneously,
for some reason the image of the final scenes in The Godfather films comes to me after reading your words - seating alone in that garden, contemplating their mistakes and \'time\'s thieving hand\', both Vito and eventually - inevitably: Michael, his heir and youngest son
October 26th, 2020 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'becalmed beyond escape
she took us
men of steel
wooden ships\'
wonderful imagery and penned with a tone hinting of both regret and acceptance simultaneously,
for some reason the image of the final scenes in The Godfather films comes to me after reading your words - seating alone in that garden, contemplating their mistakes and \'time\'s thieving hand\', both Vito and eventually - inevitably: Michael, his heir and youngest son
October 26th, 2020 04:50
fallen dreams
L. B. Mek said:
\'Fallen\': three times rang, in your lines: like the tap count to defeat..
moving and deeply thought provoking,
Brilliant!
October 26th, 2020 03:52
L. B. Mek said:
\'Fallen\': three times rang, in your lines: like the tap count to defeat..
moving and deeply thought provoking,
Brilliant!
October 26th, 2020 03:52
becalmed beyond escape
orchidee said:
Was you at Trafalgar in 1805 on one of them boats? Did ya meet Nelson?!
October 26th, 2020 02:41
orchidee said:
Was you at Trafalgar in 1805 on one of them boats? Did ya meet Nelson?!
October 26th, 2020 02:41
fallen dreams
Goldfinch60 said:
Very powerful write d a, that solitary raven will be alone for a long time methinks.
Andy
October 26th, 2020 02:10
Goldfinch60 said:
Very powerful write d a, that solitary raven will be alone for a long time methinks.
Andy
October 26th, 2020 02:10
fallen dreams
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - a classic for sure this write of powerful imagery which draws this reader into more perusal ........ a great use of music and words combined in memories now long fallen into dreams..... into my favourites with this gem of a piece.
October 25th, 2020 05:21
Fay Slimm. said:
Ah - a classic for sure this write of powerful imagery which draws this reader into more perusal ........ a great use of music and words combined in memories now long fallen into dreams..... into my favourites with this gem of a piece.
October 25th, 2020 05:21
you ask me why?
Neville said:
beautiful words indeed DA .. there will be many out here that will immediately recognise and relate to many of those examples you have shared with us today .. funny how we notice those little things innit ...
Neville
October 25th, 2020 03:20
Neville said:
beautiful words indeed DA .. there will be many out here that will immediately recognise and relate to many of those examples you have shared with us today .. funny how we notice those little things innit ...
Neville
October 25th, 2020 03:20
go then
AwHec8 said:
Dear dusk my whole heart goes out to you in knowing the pain of a brother now gone. As your words do let all know a whole world within your brother has passed on. To be remembered by those who knew him, until reunited in glory.
Dude I wish I could give you a hug. I would cry with you if given the chance. Respectfully Don
October 22nd, 2020 19:43
AwHec8 said:
Dear dusk my whole heart goes out to you in knowing the pain of a brother now gone. As your words do let all know a whole world within your brother has passed on. To be remembered by those who knew him, until reunited in glory.
Dude I wish I could give you a hug. I would cry with you if given the chance. Respectfully Don
October 22nd, 2020 19:43
the sea
MMadrid said:
Your poem is so descriptive made me feel as if i was at the beach, thoroughly enjoyed it.
October 22nd, 2020 10:56
MMadrid said:
Your poem is so descriptive made me feel as if i was at the beach, thoroughly enjoyed it.
October 22nd, 2020 10:56
you ask me why?
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful, imbued with the warmth that only \'being in love\' can bestow, although my favourite part is in the author\'s comment section:
\'... but I know what love is for it has journeyed with me, romanced me, and pleasured my existence along the way to here\'
October 22nd, 2020 06:24
L. B. Mek said:
Beautiful, imbued with the warmth that only \'being in love\' can bestow, although my favourite part is in the author\'s comment section:
\'... but I know what love is for it has journeyed with me, romanced me, and pleasured my existence along the way to here\'
October 22nd, 2020 06:24
you ask me why?
Michael Edwards said:
One never knows - just the little things I guess - great write (pleased you wrote \'sighs\' and not \'thighs\' - or there again...!)
October 22nd, 2020 03:49
Michael Edwards said:
One never knows - just the little things I guess - great write (pleased you wrote \'sighs\' and not \'thighs\' - or there again...!)
October 22nd, 2020 03:49
go then
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
This is a wonderful tribute Dusk. You have found and used your words eloquently. I will take the liberty of adding the poem to my list of favourites.
Thank you, Alan
October 21st, 2020 06:43
Alan .S. Jeeves said:
This is a wonderful tribute Dusk. You have found and used your words eloquently. I will take the liberty of adding the poem to my list of favourites.
Thank you, Alan
October 21st, 2020 06:43
go then
Neville said:
There is nothing I could say that has not already been written about these splendid words ... sad though they might be ...
I found the whole of \'go then\' a deeply moving poem my friend
... Neville
October 20th, 2020 15:48
Neville said:
There is nothing I could say that has not already been written about these splendid words ... sad though they might be ...
I found the whole of \'go then\' a deeply moving poem my friend
... Neville
October 20th, 2020 15:48
go then
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wonderful emotive words d a, we know that a place awaits us all and we will all meet to go on for eternity.
Andy
October 20th, 2020 00:33
Goldfinch60 said:
Such wonderful emotive words d a, we know that a place awaits us all and we will all meet to go on for eternity.
Andy
October 20th, 2020 00:33
go then
Michael Edwards said:
Eloquently expressess the loss of loved ones. Super stuff.
October 19th, 2020 13:40
Michael Edwards said:
Eloquently expressess the loss of loved ones. Super stuff.
October 19th, 2020 13:40
go then
Fay Slimm. said:
A heart-tugging read from the first line to the last - losing a much loved brother could not have been versed any better than this......... thank you for sharing it my friend.
October 19th, 2020 03:09
Fay Slimm. said:
A heart-tugging read from the first line to the last - losing a much loved brother could not have been versed any better than this......... thank you for sharing it my friend.
October 19th, 2020 03:09
go then
L. B. Mek said:
\'until i may one day
follow,
take with you the love
of lost childhood
the joy of sunlit mischief
of creative yearning
and toil and sweat
and blood spilled
upon the play of life\'
this is beautifully worded, it tugs at raw cinders of emotion we all have buried deep - deep within,
personally I have always yearned for a brother - the longing is so palpable I\'m certain in another life I must have had one or two that I had a tight bond with,
(although I still wouldn\'t swap the family I was blessed with for anything),
a moving dedication of exemplary emotive writing!
October 19th, 2020 03:07
L. B. Mek said:
\'until i may one day
follow,
take with you the love
of lost childhood
the joy of sunlit mischief
of creative yearning
and toil and sweat
and blood spilled
upon the play of life\'
this is beautifully worded, it tugs at raw cinders of emotion we all have buried deep - deep within,
personally I have always yearned for a brother - the longing is so palpable I\'m certain in another life I must have had one or two that I had a tight bond with,
(although I still wouldn\'t swap the family I was blessed with for anything),
a moving dedication of exemplary emotive writing!
October 19th, 2020 03:07
go then
jarcher54 said:
I have three brothers, all like me getting up there in their 60\'s. Your little musings made me cry. Do you know Anne Carson\'s \"book\" Nox? It is an elegy to her late brother in the form of a scrap-book collage-poem-scroll thing that is not quite a book, based on Catullus\' \"Ave atque vale\" to his own brother.
https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2010/07/12/the-unfolding
Your poem brought Nox to mind in the wonderful painful way that such a thoughtful work will do. Whatever makes sadness beautiful, you nailed it. So to speak.
October 19th, 2020 01:04
jarcher54 said:
I have three brothers, all like me getting up there in their 60\'s. Your little musings made me cry. Do you know Anne Carson\'s \"book\" Nox? It is an elegy to her late brother in the form of a scrap-book collage-poem-scroll thing that is not quite a book, based on Catullus\' \"Ave atque vale\" to his own brother.
https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2010/07/12/the-unfolding
Your poem brought Nox to mind in the wonderful painful way that such a thoughtful work will do. Whatever makes sadness beautiful, you nailed it. So to speak.
October 19th, 2020 01:04
bored through overkill
FineB said:
Hi duskarising,
A great write.
Trying to be positive now when there is so much darkness in the world is a daily challenge.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
October 19th, 2020 00:27
FineB said:
Hi duskarising,
A great write.
Trying to be positive now when there is so much darkness in the world is a daily challenge.
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
October 19th, 2020 00:27
bored through overkill
orchidee said:
Yes, it can get boring. Then we may become common-place, forgetting simple things - social distancing, washing hands, etc.
October 18th, 2020 10:25
orchidee said:
Yes, it can get boring. Then we may become common-place, forgetting simple things - social distancing, washing hands, etc.
October 18th, 2020 10:25
bored through overkill
Fay Slimm. said:
I second your outcry D.A. about being bored by continual media attention to C19 when other issues are being ignored -- -- many like me have given up watching or reading the news until sanity appears again.
October 18th, 2020 02:00
Fay Slimm. said:
I second your outcry D.A. about being bored by continual media attention to C19 when other issues are being ignored -- -- many like me have given up watching or reading the news until sanity appears again.
October 18th, 2020 02:00
bored through overkill
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD MORNIN* DUSK ~ Love the dialect in yo POEM this mornin* an* am sure ev*ryone will agree. By now w*all expect it to have go away or a least cure with JAB. But NO it still around an* gettin* mo worse every day. The Media Men is obsessed with it cos nothin* else is happen in the World cos of it. Our Poem today is about it an* so indirect is yors !
Love ~ Peace an* Joy
Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
October 18th, 2020 01:04
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
GOOD MORNIN* DUSK ~ Love the dialect in yo POEM this mornin* an* am sure ev*ryone will agree. By now w*all expect it to have go away or a least cure with JAB. But NO it still around an* gettin* mo worse every day. The Media Men is obsessed with it cos nothin* else is happen in the World cos of it. Our Poem today is about it an* so indirect is yors !
Love ~ Peace an* Joy
Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
October 18th, 2020 01:04
in fields of green
Crowns4Christ said:
this is really meaningful dusk. melissa crown
October 17th, 2020 20:48
Crowns4Christ said:
this is really meaningful dusk. melissa crown
October 17th, 2020 20:48
in fields of green
FineB said:
Thank you Dusk Arising for a poignant and interesting write.
Through these troubled times of Covid the world seems to.have been brought together.
Lets hope moving forward in the world all that is going on will bring peace amongst nations and end all types of war
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
October 17th, 2020 12:10
FineB said:
Thank you Dusk Arising for a poignant and interesting write.
Through these troubled times of Covid the world seems to.have been brought together.
Lets hope moving forward in the world all that is going on will bring peace amongst nations and end all types of war
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
October 17th, 2020 12:10
in fields of green
Michael Edwards said:
A moving write and may the fields of green serve to teach the human race that the land upon which we live is far more importanrt than all the moment-in-time wars which are of little or no consequence in the overall scheme of things.
October 17th, 2020 07:39
Michael Edwards said:
A moving write and may the fields of green serve to teach the human race that the land upon which we live is far more importanrt than all the moment-in-time wars which are of little or no consequence in the overall scheme of things.
October 17th, 2020 07:39
in fields of green
L. B. Mek said:
\'For each bears a name, a soul departed.
Young men from far away brought here
full of life to become pawns in a conflict.
To fight a war beyond their understanding
and pay a price beyond my understanding.\'
these lines capture the bewildering irrationality that underlines my deep frustration at the necessity, yet equally: deplorable reasoning for the existence of the word \'soldier\',
movingly insightful write
October 17th, 2020 04:08
L. B. Mek said:
\'For each bears a name, a soul departed.
Young men from far away brought here
full of life to become pawns in a conflict.
To fight a war beyond their understanding
and pay a price beyond my understanding.\'
these lines capture the bewildering irrationality that underlines my deep frustration at the necessity, yet equally: deplorable reasoning for the existence of the word \'soldier\',
movingly insightful write
October 17th, 2020 04:08
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