Comments received on poems by 13LaurenD
Just Try It One More time
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Just try it one more time” by 13LaurenD
There seems to be despair and despondency in your poem. You must never give up hope. Life is worth living. The night is terrible and gives you dark ideas. But each morning that starts is full of promises. Stay cheerful and remember that your friends are on your side. Be happy ! Soman Ragavan. 17 July, 2023. //
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July 17th, 2023 06:04
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"Just try it one more time” by 13LaurenD
There seems to be despair and despondency in your poem. You must never give up hope. Life is worth living. The night is terrible and gives you dark ideas. But each morning that starts is full of promises. Stay cheerful and remember that your friends are on your side. Be happy ! Soman Ragavan. 17 July, 2023. //
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July 17th, 2023 06:04
Just Try It One More time
L. B. Mek said:
more power to you!
just remember
while you\'re disappointing
those parasites
there may be those, who
you inspire
by sharing your defiance
stay strong!
I for one am a witness
to your worth
July 17th, 2023 05:34
L. B. Mek said:
more power to you!
just remember
while you\'re disappointing
those parasites
there may be those, who
you inspire
by sharing your defiance
stay strong!
I for one am a witness
to your worth
July 17th, 2023 05:34
Your On Your Own
LIZ said:
Beautifully sad! This was painful to read. Because I remember saying similar words myself. The emotional rollercoster! I hope your tribe arrives soon.
July 16th, 2023 12:59
LIZ said:
Beautifully sad! This was painful to read. Because I remember saying similar words myself. The emotional rollercoster! I hope your tribe arrives soon.
July 16th, 2023 12:59
Set Back
peto said:
No such thing as a failure Lauren
There is such a thing as a quitter
That\'s not you
What doesn\'t kill us makes us stronger
One step one day if necessary one minute at a time
Great delivery of your message with rhyme
July 9th, 2023 13:59
peto said:
No such thing as a failure Lauren
There is such a thing as a quitter
That\'s not you
What doesn\'t kill us makes us stronger
One step one day if necessary one minute at a time
Great delivery of your message with rhyme
July 9th, 2023 13:59
You Got This
peto said:
Brilliant Lauren
Keep them coming
The forgive myself line is vital
I once asked god to forgive me when I wouldn\'t forgive myself
What a cheek eh
Loving the recovery
You got it
July 4th, 2023 14:18
peto said:
Brilliant Lauren
Keep them coming
The forgive myself line is vital
I once asked god to forgive me when I wouldn\'t forgive myself
What a cheek eh
Loving the recovery
You got it
July 4th, 2023 14:18
Prison
jewelwrites55 said:
Your hard work is not in vain and your poem is beautiful. Knowing you want to better yourself is the first step. Thank you for sharing such a vulnerable poem. Stay as strong as you can and be kind to yourself on your journey.
July 3rd, 2023 14:19
jewelwrites55 said:
Your hard work is not in vain and your poem is beautiful. Knowing you want to better yourself is the first step. Thank you for sharing such a vulnerable poem. Stay as strong as you can and be kind to yourself on your journey.
July 3rd, 2023 14:19
Keep Moving Forward
peto said:
Feel it Lauren
Frothy emotional appeal seldom suffices
It takes one to know one
Not their fault
If you are taking self inventory as it appears you are
Keep writing and a lot
Dont listen to me or any other \"expert \"
About how it should be
Sack the snide
Take whatever works
Keep moving forward
June 30th, 2023 17:46
peto said:
Feel it Lauren
Frothy emotional appeal seldom suffices
It takes one to know one
Not their fault
If you are taking self inventory as it appears you are
Keep writing and a lot
Dont listen to me or any other \"expert \"
About how it should be
Sack the snide
Take whatever works
Keep moving forward
June 30th, 2023 17:46
Keep Moving Forward
David Wakeling said:
i tried to read this but it kept on going and going and going.I gave up.The message if there is one could be said in a fraction of the number of words.Verbose
June 30th, 2023 17:32
David Wakeling said:
i tried to read this but it kept on going and going and going.I gave up.The message if there is one could be said in a fraction of the number of words.Verbose
June 30th, 2023 17:32
Keep Going
Bobby O said:
In order to reach that glory ..:
Wishing they had stayed on your team,,,
I for sure certainly would have stayed.
I like the phrases and your use of cadenced rhyme. You go Girl!
June 23rd, 2023 23:51
Bobby O said:
In order to reach that glory ..:
Wishing they had stayed on your team,,,
I for sure certainly would have stayed.
I like the phrases and your use of cadenced rhyme. You go Girl!
June 23rd, 2023 23:51
Keep Going
peto said:
Nothing changes if nothing changes
To thine own self be true
Very positive writing
You appear to be on a journey of discovery
Enjoy every step
Cleverly placed rhyme to enhance
June 23rd, 2023 13:42
peto said:
Nothing changes if nothing changes
To thine own self be true
Very positive writing
You appear to be on a journey of discovery
Enjoy every step
Cleverly placed rhyme to enhance
June 23rd, 2023 13:42
Carry On
peto said:
Got a vibe you may be 5 days into recovery (85 days line)
Loved the strength coming from self searching
Well on your way
Glad you found this platform
Keep em coming
Enjoyed the rhyme also
June 18th, 2023 12:05
peto said:
Got a vibe you may be 5 days into recovery (85 days line)
Loved the strength coming from self searching
Well on your way
Glad you found this platform
Keep em coming
Enjoyed the rhyme also
June 18th, 2023 12:05
I\'m Happy To See That You\'re Okay
L. B. Mek said:
the one\'s who get destroyed
in a breakup
are the one\'s who loved the most
the one\'s, capable
of bravely, giving it everything
holding back nothing
and the one\'s, most likely
to find that \'love\', we all dream about
eventually
or at the very least, live their lives
free of regret
so, yeah
tears have our eyes looking like
basketballs
and everyone else, tells us we\'re
losing, by caring so much
after the fact
but, deep down
we know this grief period
is a reward for the sincerity
we imbue into everything we do
in life
(more power to your Truth, dear poet
stay strong!)
thanks for sharing
June 9th, 2023 03:11
L. B. Mek said:
the one\'s who get destroyed
in a breakup
are the one\'s who loved the most
the one\'s, capable
of bravely, giving it everything
holding back nothing
and the one\'s, most likely
to find that \'love\', we all dream about
eventually
or at the very least, live their lives
free of regret
so, yeah
tears have our eyes looking like
basketballs
and everyone else, tells us we\'re
losing, by caring so much
after the fact
but, deep down
we know this grief period
is a reward for the sincerity
we imbue into everything we do
in life
(more power to your Truth, dear poet
stay strong!)
thanks for sharing
June 9th, 2023 03:11
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