Comments received on poems by Neville
Our Sweet and Sticky Mouths
Accidental Poet said:
The cigarettes were only a circumstantial ornament anyway. Well penned N.
April 3rd, 2023 08:29
Accidental Poet said:
The cigarettes were only a circumstantial ornament anyway. Well penned N.
April 3rd, 2023 08:29
Our Sweet and Sticky Mouths
Christina8 said:
This is an excellent piece...I love how you said what you said without actually just saying it....if that makes sense....wonderful!
April 3rd, 2023 08:00
Christina8 said:
This is an excellent piece...I love how you said what you said without actually just saying it....if that makes sense....wonderful!
April 3rd, 2023 08:00
Our Sweet and Sticky Mouths
L. B. Mek said:
lol
that\'s one way to paint over our vices
then again
it\'s only a temporary solution
just like that momentary gratification
.. well it\'s all good n fun, if both willing
reminds me of that good will hunting joke,
all the same:
(
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UGqmfzxg_zw
)
April 3rd, 2023 04:11
L. B. Mek said:
lol
that\'s one way to paint over our vices
then again
it\'s only a temporary solution
just like that momentary gratification
.. well it\'s all good n fun, if both willing
reminds me of that good will hunting joke,
all the same:
(
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UGqmfzxg_zw
)
April 3rd, 2023 04:11
The Price of a Single Soul
L. B. Mek said:
\'And despite it being so
tarnished, wore
her heart on her sleeve
beneath a
breastplate of feathers ..\'
that\'s just, soul crushing
depths of poetic empathy, to contemplate
brilliantly worded, dear Poet
(we trip and fall, call it a love
draped
in lust\'s quick drying cement
then try
to build a house, on foundations
of waste
at divorce time, we place it for sale
split profits evenly
a shattered soul for you and one for me
give it Time
we\'ll recover, enough to try and fall
Up
...once again!)
April 3rd, 2023 04:04
L. B. Mek said:
\'And despite it being so
tarnished, wore
her heart on her sleeve
beneath a
breastplate of feathers ..\'
that\'s just, soul crushing
depths of poetic empathy, to contemplate
brilliantly worded, dear Poet
(we trip and fall, call it a love
draped
in lust\'s quick drying cement
then try
to build a house, on foundations
of waste
at divorce time, we place it for sale
split profits evenly
a shattered soul for you and one for me
give it Time
we\'ll recover, enough to try and fall
Up
...once again!)
April 3rd, 2023 04:04
When Numbers No Longer Count
L. B. Mek said:
sorry for my rant below, Hyung
this a trigger topic for me..
(saddest part of our psychological
troubles
is that symptoms, are only evident
to those
who choose to empathise and fight
to excavate
to that hidden depth of repressed
self-hate, which underlines
so many
of the choices we see in people
that defy logic
choices, born of such pitiful levels
of self worth
choices, that insures their cycle of hurt
continues
even after escaping their aggressors
in-fact
they are not choices at all, more like
its all they know
recreating, reliving that same hell
because someone, poisoned their mind
early on
making them feel, like they deserve
only the worst in life
and what do we,
\'the well adjusted, judgemental\' do
recognising the symptoms:
best of us, act like we don\'t realise
feigning ignorance
while the rest point and name call
vomiting those
\'hoar\' and \'walk of shame\' labels
yet, still
the very worst
prey on those vulnerable poor souls
time n again
to sate their barbaric depravity
then boast allowed their conquest numbers
and then
every decent person, is left
to try and undo the damage
of those neurotically insidious fools;
Dante, got it wrong
there\'s more than one level of hell for such lustful vermin\'s
in-fact an entire universe of hell
is dedicated just for them
or at least, I like to think...!)
April 3rd, 2023 03:58
L. B. Mek said:
sorry for my rant below, Hyung
this a trigger topic for me..
(saddest part of our psychological
troubles
is that symptoms, are only evident
to those
who choose to empathise and fight
to excavate
to that hidden depth of repressed
self-hate, which underlines
so many
of the choices we see in people
that defy logic
choices, born of such pitiful levels
of self worth
choices, that insures their cycle of hurt
continues
even after escaping their aggressors
in-fact
they are not choices at all, more like
its all they know
recreating, reliving that same hell
because someone, poisoned their mind
early on
making them feel, like they deserve
only the worst in life
and what do we,
\'the well adjusted, judgemental\' do
recognising the symptoms:
best of us, act like we don\'t realise
feigning ignorance
while the rest point and name call
vomiting those
\'hoar\' and \'walk of shame\' labels
yet, still
the very worst
prey on those vulnerable poor souls
time n again
to sate their barbaric depravity
then boast allowed their conquest numbers
and then
every decent person, is left
to try and undo the damage
of those neurotically insidious fools;
Dante, got it wrong
there\'s more than one level of hell for such lustful vermin\'s
in-fact an entire universe of hell
is dedicated just for them
or at least, I like to think...!)
April 3rd, 2023 03:58
Our Sweet and Sticky Mouths
orchidee said:
Boo hoo, I gets no \'tumbles\' with KP.
\'Just don\'t give us the descriptions of you and KP in bed\', they say. \'It\'s too ghastly and TMI - Too Much Info!\' We hardly share a bed anyway. Or if we do, I can\'t say I recognise her much with that botox! heehee.
April 3rd, 2023 03:19
orchidee said:
Boo hoo, I gets no \'tumbles\' with KP.
\'Just don\'t give us the descriptions of you and KP in bed\', they say. \'It\'s too ghastly and TMI - Too Much Info!\' We hardly share a bed anyway. Or if we do, I can\'t say I recognise her much with that botox! heehee.
April 3rd, 2023 03:19
Our Sweet and Sticky Mouths
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is a celebration of the transformative power of intimacy and the sense of fulfillment that it can bring.
April 3rd, 2023 03:07
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is a celebration of the transformative power of intimacy and the sense of fulfillment that it can bring.
April 3rd, 2023 03:07
The Price of a Single Soul
Christina8 said:
A fuck for a soul, not a fair exchange if you ask me (Unless it was incredible! Im kidding) Beautifully crafted poem, sir x
April 2nd, 2023 09:52
Christina8 said:
A fuck for a soul, not a fair exchange if you ask me (Unless it was incredible! Im kidding) Beautifully crafted poem, sir x
April 2nd, 2023 09:52
The Price of a Single Soul
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\'\'The Price of a Single Soul\" is a well-crafted and thought-provoking poem that uses powerful imagery and themes to explore the complexities of desire, temptation, and the cost of one\'s soul.
April 2nd, 2023 07:15
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\'\'The Price of a Single Soul\" is a well-crafted and thought-provoking poem that uses powerful imagery and themes to explore the complexities of desire, temptation, and the cost of one\'s soul.
April 2nd, 2023 07:15
The Price of a Single Soul
orchidee said:
Bit of a strange thing to ask for, in exchange for one\'s soul - swoon! lol.
KP and I never have any \'ardour\' stuff!
April 2nd, 2023 04:18
orchidee said:
Bit of a strange thing to ask for, in exchange for one\'s soul - swoon! lol.
KP and I never have any \'ardour\' stuff!
April 2nd, 2023 04:18
When Numbers No Longer Count
Doggerel Dave said:
I have a bit of a bed obsession. I do have a wee smidgin of trouble incorporating the relations you speak of into my conception.
I do hope, however it all turns out well..... 😇!!!
April 1st, 2023 16:52
Doggerel Dave said:
I have a bit of a bed obsession. I do have a wee smidgin of trouble incorporating the relations you speak of into my conception.
I do hope, however it all turns out well..... 😇!!!
April 1st, 2023 16:52
When Numbers No Longer Count
Poetic Dan said:
What books are there to see? Always a pleasure to read from your soul my friend
April 1st, 2023 11:23
Poetic Dan said:
What books are there to see? Always a pleasure to read from your soul my friend
April 1st, 2023 11:23
When Numbers No Longer Count
orchidee said:
Ohh, now a ranting comment, until Fido stops me... Ohhh, F, F, F, and F, and furthermore, F. WOOF! lol.
April 1st, 2023 06:50
orchidee said:
Ohh, now a ranting comment, until Fido stops me... Ohhh, F, F, F, and F, and furthermore, F. WOOF! lol.
April 1st, 2023 06:50
When Numbers No Longer Count
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"When Numbers No Longer Count\" is a powerful exploration of the complexities of human relationships. Through its vivid imagery and blunt language, the poem captures the confusion and emotional upheaval that can arise when intimacy turns to estrangement.
April 1st, 2023 06:07
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
\"When Numbers No Longer Count\" is a powerful exploration of the complexities of human relationships. Through its vivid imagery and blunt language, the poem captures the confusion and emotional upheaval that can arise when intimacy turns to estrangement.
April 1st, 2023 06:07
When Numbers No Longer Count
orchidee said:
I got enough trouble being in the same bed as KP! lol.
April 1st, 2023 04:55
orchidee said:
I got enough trouble being in the same bed as KP! lol.
April 1st, 2023 04:55
Huntress
Goldfinch60 said:
That chase has led you to a great time Neville.
Andy
April 1st, 2023 01:51
Goldfinch60 said:
That chase has led you to a great time Neville.
Andy
April 1st, 2023 01:51
Huntress
Doggerel Dave said:
Didn\'t enjoy being just one scalp on a belt full of \'em? You had your moment Old Chap (whoever you are)......or maybe you didn\'t..................?
March 31st, 2023 19:17
Doggerel Dave said:
Didn\'t enjoy being just one scalp on a belt full of \'em? You had your moment Old Chap (whoever you are)......or maybe you didn\'t..................?
March 31st, 2023 19:17
Huntress
Fay Slimm. said:
Scary but true - Whatever the gender human predators show indiscriminate hunger when hunting for scalps - - wonder what they think of their conquests as age steals their ability to stalk more prey........ x
March 31st, 2023 14:01
Fay Slimm. said:
Scary but true - Whatever the gender human predators show indiscriminate hunger when hunting for scalps - - wonder what they think of their conquests as age steals their ability to stalk more prey........ x
March 31st, 2023 14:01
Huntress
L. B. Mek said:
subtle as ever, dear Poet supreme
a great write!
(in nature documentaries
a lioness, hunts alone
when discarded by her pride
for refusing to confirm
to that new conquering bully
and have her children murdered;
oh how
the viewers laud her defiance
and steadfast loyalty to her children,
where as
in our society, that same lady
born with a \'lioness\' spirit of independence
is marginalised and demeaned
for not being submissive...
luckily
there\'s still a few genuine, men
around
to value, those fierce queen\'s
forced to survive
and hunt
amongst modernity\'s regressive
idiocy...!)
March 31st, 2023 05:13
L. B. Mek said:
subtle as ever, dear Poet supreme
a great write!
(in nature documentaries
a lioness, hunts alone
when discarded by her pride
for refusing to confirm
to that new conquering bully
and have her children murdered;
oh how
the viewers laud her defiance
and steadfast loyalty to her children,
where as
in our society, that same lady
born with a \'lioness\' spirit of independence
is marginalised and demeaned
for not being submissive...
luckily
there\'s still a few genuine, men
around
to value, those fierce queen\'s
forced to survive
and hunt
amongst modernity\'s regressive
idiocy...!)
March 31st, 2023 05:13
Huntress
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is a powerful and evocative exploration of the theme of pursuit and the thrill of the chase.
March 31st, 2023 05:11
Mottakeenur Rehman said:
The poem is a powerful and evocative exploration of the theme of pursuit and the thrill of the chase.
March 31st, 2023 05:11
Huntress
Accidental Poet said:
Love happens in the strangest of ways N. But isn\'t it grand? Just like this little gem you\'ve penned.
March 31st, 2023 04:59
Accidental Poet said:
Love happens in the strangest of ways N. But isn\'t it grand? Just like this little gem you\'ve penned.
March 31st, 2023 04:59
The Marks on Our Ceiling
L. B. Mek said:
this is harrowingly, relatable
and
I so love how subtly you imbue
social commentary in your poetry
these words, beyond the fun
expose the eventual consequences
we\'ll be inheriting
when so much of our youth, assume
living excluded from the wider world
is better than learning the skills
to socialise and coexist
with others...
(another important message
worded light and accessible
thank you Hyung
I read n learn)
March 31st, 2023 02:24
L. B. Mek said:
this is harrowingly, relatable
and
I so love how subtly you imbue
social commentary in your poetry
these words, beyond the fun
expose the eventual consequences
we\'ll be inheriting
when so much of our youth, assume
living excluded from the wider world
is better than learning the skills
to socialise and coexist
with others...
(another important message
worded light and accessible
thank you Hyung
I read n learn)
March 31st, 2023 02:24
Upon Learning to Fly
L. B. Mek said:
(that thread of paradox in existence
live boldly
or survive, watching-on as other\'s
...fly)
\'if Icarus, lived long enough to date\'
lol
such a fun read, thank you Hyung
March 31st, 2023 02:16
L. B. Mek said:
(that thread of paradox in existence
live boldly
or survive, watching-on as other\'s
...fly)
\'if Icarus, lived long enough to date\'
lol
such a fun read, thank you Hyung
March 31st, 2023 02:16
A Question of Waste
L. B. Mek said:
makes me sad
how modernity celebrates
all those flaunting their wealth
and wasting billions
on supposed missions to Mars
yet \'OUR\' children
are marginalised more n more
and left to fend for themselves...
(sobering to contemplate
that this succinctly worded
\'wake up call\'
will be relevant, till the end of time
still
thank you! dear Poet supreme
for boldly stating
what we all, try to willingly ignore!)
March 31st, 2023 02:07
L. B. Mek said:
makes me sad
how modernity celebrates
all those flaunting their wealth
and wasting billions
on supposed missions to Mars
yet \'OUR\' children
are marginalised more n more
and left to fend for themselves...
(sobering to contemplate
that this succinctly worded
\'wake up call\'
will be relevant, till the end of time
still
thank you! dear Poet supreme
for boldly stating
what we all, try to willingly ignore!)
March 31st, 2023 02:07
The Marks on Our Ceiling
Goldfinch60 said:
Sorry Neville I am not allowed to tell you what they are. LOL
Andy
March 31st, 2023 01:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Sorry Neville I am not allowed to tell you what they are. LOL
Andy
March 31st, 2023 01:49
The Marks on Our Ceiling
arqios said:
Tempted to ask how high these ceilings are.
Mum always had us never eat in the bedroom lest the tomato sauce or any other sauce fall and stain.
March 30th, 2023 07:02
arqios said:
Tempted to ask how high these ceilings are.
Mum always had us never eat in the bedroom lest the tomato sauce or any other sauce fall and stain.
March 30th, 2023 07:02
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