Comments received on poems by Emi
Without A Beating Heart
Emilou G. said:
You left me no time at all, To say my goodbyes ....... many times the most unexpected happens when we think it is far from happening. And though it seems impossible to survive, in HIS most perfect time, you will be able to move on. ...........SMILE! THE DAY IS GOD'S NEW GIFT!
March 20th, 2011 23:53
Emilou G. said:
You left me no time at all, To say my goodbyes ....... many times the most unexpected happens when we think it is far from happening. And though it seems impossible to survive, in HIS most perfect time, you will be able to move on. ...........SMILE! THE DAY IS GOD'S NEW GIFT!
March 20th, 2011 23:53
Masquerade
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautifully expressed and very, very sad. Your symbolism and metaphors of cowering and jar of tears, headless flower, faded sun and merely jester, excellently depict the situation. Shared by many, doubtless, unfortunately. Very well expressed.
March 20th, 2011 22:02
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautifully expressed and very, very sad. Your symbolism and metaphors of cowering and jar of tears, headless flower, faded sun and merely jester, excellently depict the situation. Shared by many, doubtless, unfortunately. Very well expressed.
March 20th, 2011 22:02
Without A Beating Heart
Cheeky Missy said:
Very good for "just throwing something together"! This depicts the heartache very well with the metaphor of colourless photos for the memories and vibrant colour for the recent violent wrenching grief, with the symbolism of a heart not beating depicting the death of everything, especially the speaker. Great job.
March 20th, 2011 21:15
Cheeky Missy said:
Very good for "just throwing something together"! This depicts the heartache very well with the metaphor of colourless photos for the memories and vibrant colour for the recent violent wrenching grief, with the symbolism of a heart not beating depicting the death of everything, especially the speaker. Great job.
March 20th, 2011 21:15
Up
Cheeky Missy said:
Marvelous! What an eerie, chilling, horrifying depiction of dying! Wow. Excellent!!! Awful, though for the frightening consideration. Well-written. This is one of your best pieces, seems to me and yet so horrifying. Bravo.
March 12th, 2011 22:36
Cheeky Missy said:
Marvelous! What an eerie, chilling, horrifying depiction of dying! Wow. Excellent!!! Awful, though for the frightening consideration. Well-written. This is one of your best pieces, seems to me and yet so horrifying. Bravo.
March 12th, 2011 22:36
Sometimes
Dolphine29 said:
I know the exact feeling; like we could just melt inside life through the universe of nature around us and dwell in our dreams.
I love it!!!!! Great Poem.
Best
Dolphine
March 11th, 2011 00:01
Dolphine29 said:
I know the exact feeling; like we could just melt inside life through the universe of nature around us and dwell in our dreams.
I love it!!!!! Great Poem.
Best
Dolphine
March 11th, 2011 00:01
Sometimes
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Delightful use of "sometimes" with all the depictions of freedom and enjoyment of the natural world. I quite enjoyed the scenes you used to express this pleasure in nature. Very nicely written.
March 10th, 2011 21:30
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Delightful use of "sometimes" with all the depictions of freedom and enjoyment of the natural world. I quite enjoyed the scenes you used to express this pleasure in nature. Very nicely written.
March 10th, 2011 21:30
Cracked and Crumpled
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent and so poignantly expressed! Beautifully done! You depicted it so very well, all the little details expressing the charming love and endearing experiences....delightful! Fantastic double usage in the title, poem and conclusion of cracked and crumpled... heart and paper...dreams, lover. Lovely!
March 10th, 2011 00:13
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent and so poignantly expressed! Beautifully done! You depicted it so very well, all the little details expressing the charming love and endearing experiences....delightful! Fantastic double usage in the title, poem and conclusion of cracked and crumpled... heart and paper...dreams, lover. Lovely!
March 10th, 2011 00:13
Cracked and Crumpled
sarah said:
aww...beautiful...the way you play with words ..the flow...awesome!
March 9th, 2011 01:01
sarah said:
aww...beautiful...the way you play with words ..the flow...awesome!
March 9th, 2011 01:01
Eventually
Dolphine29 said:
This will sound very odd, but as I was reading it I have to admit it is well ... very close to the way I feel.
It’s beautifully written and I congratulate you in the deepest sense.
Take care
See you soon
Dolphine
March 7th, 2011 21:09
Dolphine29 said:
This will sound very odd, but as I was reading it I have to admit it is well ... very close to the way I feel.
It’s beautifully written and I congratulate you in the deepest sense.
Take care
See you soon
Dolphine
March 7th, 2011 21:09
Promises
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. So very sweet! So girlishly spoken, yet such a dear promise and precious love. You excellently expressed it. I quite enjoyed it.
March 1st, 2011 23:54
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. So very sweet! So girlishly spoken, yet such a dear promise and precious love. You excellently expressed it. I quite enjoyed it.
March 1st, 2011 23:54
The End
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellently sad! Very beautiful progression from bad to worst...in the yearning and contrary coldness.
March 1st, 2011 00:28
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellently sad! Very beautiful progression from bad to worst...in the yearning and contrary coldness.
March 1st, 2011 00:28
Forever & Always
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent! Beautiful, delightful, romantic and sweet! I love all your images expressing your adoring love. It is lovely.
February 22nd, 2011 00:14
Cheeky Missy said:
Excellent! Beautiful, delightful, romantic and sweet! I love all your images expressing your adoring love. It is lovely.
February 22nd, 2011 00:14
Painted Dream
StormyDay said:
Dreams are often the best inspiration for poetry. I loved the imagery! Keep it up.
February 18th, 2011 13:02
StormyDay said:
Dreams are often the best inspiration for poetry. I loved the imagery! Keep it up.
February 18th, 2011 13:02
Always You
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....I LOVE the conclusion! This is beautifully, sweetly romantic, loving and delightful. It's a beautiful snapshot of your love. I like it very well....and the title is so perfect.
February 12th, 2011 16:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....I LOVE the conclusion! This is beautifully, sweetly romantic, loving and delightful. It's a beautiful snapshot of your love. I like it very well....and the title is so perfect.
February 12th, 2011 16:00
Little Black Shoe
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightful ode to that precious little black pair of shoes! Your author's comment was further helpful in enjoying it. But the apparent "luck" it seems to bring is a lie. This was indeed a fun little piece...you could have titled it even more enticingly and too truly something like "Ode to the Little Black Shoe". Very nicely written and cute....each of your five stanzas honoring it differently and making a beautiful tribute to a simple pair of "little black shoe[s]....I enjoyed it.
February 12th, 2011 15:57
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightful ode to that precious little black pair of shoes! Your author's comment was further helpful in enjoying it. But the apparent "luck" it seems to bring is a lie. This was indeed a fun little piece...you could have titled it even more enticingly and too truly something like "Ode to the Little Black Shoe". Very nicely written and cute....each of your five stanzas honoring it differently and making a beautiful tribute to a simple pair of "little black shoe[s]....I enjoyed it.
February 12th, 2011 15:57
Last Pieces
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating, with a beautifully sweet conclusion. How, though, if brought to the "Disregard Wasteland" does she meet a saviour....or is it rather that his hand in hers, the "last pieces" of the puzzle as you so well put it, offering the love and family, delivers her out of the "Disregard Wasteland"? The verbal image was very well drawn with your symbolism. Lovely, I enjoyed it.
February 12th, 2011 15:51
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating, with a beautifully sweet conclusion. How, though, if brought to the "Disregard Wasteland" does she meet a saviour....or is it rather that his hand in hers, the "last pieces" of the puzzle as you so well put it, offering the love and family, delivers her out of the "Disregard Wasteland"? The verbal image was very well drawn with your symbolism. Lovely, I enjoyed it.
February 12th, 2011 15:51
Swan Song
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Impressive....this is excellent. I love how you presented it as a swan song, and wove it so beautifully from start to finish....almost as a wave rising and then falling....so very lovely and bittersweet....the imagery is perfect. Delightful!
February 12th, 2011 14:04
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Impressive....this is excellent. I love how you presented it as a swan song, and wove it so beautifully from start to finish....almost as a wave rising and then falling....so very lovely and bittersweet....the imagery is perfect. Delightful!
February 12th, 2011 14:04
Swan Song
dbremner said:
Brilliant poem, especially so written in the 'first person' which I always think is good. The ending is quite beautiful, well done!
February 12th, 2011 05:28
dbremner said:
Brilliant poem, especially so written in the 'first person' which I always think is good. The ending is quite beautiful, well done!
February 12th, 2011 05:28
Always You
dbremner said:
You have done really well here it's a nice poem full of sweetness.
February 10th, 2011 15:29
dbremner said:
You have done really well here it's a nice poem full of sweetness.
February 10th, 2011 15:29
Little Black Shoe
erin wynette said:
little black shoe,
may i borrow you
so i would be lucky too
like the one who owns you!!!
cute poem!!
February 9th, 2011 13:34
erin wynette said:
little black shoe,
may i borrow you
so i would be lucky too
like the one who owns you!!!
cute poem!!
February 9th, 2011 13:34
As Long as Forever
Anna said:
Wow...... It's beautiful and it's sad at the same time...... It's brilliant....... :)
February 8th, 2011 19:59
Anna said:
Wow...... It's beautiful and it's sad at the same time...... It's brilliant....... :)
February 8th, 2011 19:59
Tick Tock
Anna said:
I can't say smart things here, like everyone else, 'cause I don't know how. But what I can tell you is the truth. When I was reading your poem, I was very struck by it, and when I finished, my smile was a mile wide. It's honestly beautiful!~
February 8th, 2011 19:56
Anna said:
I can't say smart things here, like everyone else, 'cause I don't know how. But what I can tell you is the truth. When I was reading your poem, I was very struck by it, and when I finished, my smile was a mile wide. It's honestly beautiful!~
February 8th, 2011 19:56
Our Garden
Anna said:
I really love your poem! It's overflowing with sweetness!
February 8th, 2011 19:52
Anna said:
I really love your poem! It's overflowing with sweetness!
February 8th, 2011 19:52
Our Garden
Cheeky Missy said:
Very beautiful! What a lovely depiction of your romantic love, and of it's expanse, larger than all...the bouquet is beautiful, and the garden desirable....delightful!! Great job!
February 8th, 2011 18:19
Cheeky Missy said:
Very beautiful! What a lovely depiction of your romantic love, and of it's expanse, larger than all...the bouquet is beautiful, and the garden desirable....delightful!! Great job!
February 8th, 2011 18:19
Last Pieces
dbremner said:
Very well written with some really good individual lines. I really like the term 'Disregard Wasteland'. You paint the whole scene well.
February 8th, 2011 11:49
dbremner said:
Very well written with some really good individual lines. I really like the term 'Disregard Wasteland'. You paint the whole scene well.
February 8th, 2011 11:49
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