Comments received on poems by poetboy123
My Greatest Hope; My Darkest Fear
ElenaGrace said:
This is really pretty, I think we all have that anticipatory feeling for the future
March 31st, 2018 16:23
ElenaGrace said:
This is really pretty, I think we all have that anticipatory feeling for the future
March 31st, 2018 16:23
My Greatest Hope; My Darkest Fear
sylviasearcher said:
It reminds me a little of the sentiment I was trying to capture in my poem?
What do you think?
March 31st, 2018 09:49
sylviasearcher said:
It reminds me a little of the sentiment I was trying to capture in my poem?
What do you think?
March 31st, 2018 09:49
Overcome
winternightsky123 said:
I love this💗sorry I’ve not been active lately x
March 22nd, 2018 12:44
winternightsky123 said:
I love this💗sorry I’ve not been active lately x
March 22nd, 2018 12:44
Overcome
Lorna said:
Good one...... it\'s hard work sometimes to fight being afraid .. no one can do it for us!
March 21st, 2018 04:13
Lorna said:
Good one...... it\'s hard work sometimes to fight being afraid .. no one can do it for us!
March 21st, 2018 04:13
Overcome
Goldfinch60 said:
Life\'s play can be both a comedy or a tragedy but if we find the right part freedom is there for everyone.
March 21st, 2018 01:38
Goldfinch60 said:
Life\'s play can be both a comedy or a tragedy but if we find the right part freedom is there for everyone.
March 21st, 2018 01:38
Improvement
poelove said:
they may soar ahead but still haven\'t fled love this line as it sums up this poem of persistence..
I would however suggest you put a space and separate the last line thereby keeping all verses at four lines in keeping with the poems rhythm.. really enjoyed this piece
March 3rd, 2018 07:22
poelove said:
they may soar ahead but still haven\'t fled love this line as it sums up this poem of persistence..
I would however suggest you put a space and separate the last line thereby keeping all verses at four lines in keeping with the poems rhythm.. really enjoyed this piece
March 3rd, 2018 07:22
Improvement
Goldfinch60 said:
Small steps will get you to your goals, just keep taking them.
March 3rd, 2018 01:35
Goldfinch60 said:
Small steps will get you to your goals, just keep taking them.
March 3rd, 2018 01:35
Chaos Realized
poelove said:
I really enjoy your originality good story lines
again though my my opinion as an example:
butterfly flying with multi colored wings
could be better read
butterfly flying, multicolored wings
only a constructive criticism that\'s what this site is supposed to promote ...also I would not mind hearing your (youthful) opinion on my poems..peace
March 1st, 2018 08:05
poelove said:
I really enjoy your originality good story lines
again though my my opinion as an example:
butterfly flying with multi colored wings
could be better read
butterfly flying, multicolored wings
only a constructive criticism that\'s what this site is supposed to promote ...also I would not mind hearing your (youthful) opinion on my poems..peace
March 1st, 2018 08:05
Born of A Tear
poelove said:
wonderful poem I love how you focused and expounded on a single tear to create a wave well done!
March 1st, 2018 07:56
poelove said:
wonderful poem I love how you focused and expounded on a single tear to create a wave well done!
March 1st, 2018 07:56
Belief
poelove said:
its good to see young writers striving to hone their craft. I love the thought behind this poem they show your potentials but now (since this is a writing sight) I would like to give some constructive criticisms...
Poetry is the best words in their best place. so I would say try to condense your words looking for the best word every time for example the first verse could read
A single word
struggling to contain
vast shifting arrays of emotion\'s breath...bursting the words\' seams
Struggles to hold
waves of frustration, moments of loss---and so on. By removing a lot of the articles words like (the)
just a little advice from an old man.
February 28th, 2018 08:03
poelove said:
its good to see young writers striving to hone their craft. I love the thought behind this poem they show your potentials but now (since this is a writing sight) I would like to give some constructive criticisms...
Poetry is the best words in their best place. so I would say try to condense your words looking for the best word every time for example the first verse could read
A single word
struggling to contain
vast shifting arrays of emotion\'s breath...bursting the words\' seams
Struggles to hold
waves of frustration, moments of loss---and so on. By removing a lot of the articles words like (the)
just a little advice from an old man.
February 28th, 2018 08:03
Transforming Coal
Lorna said:
A wonderful picture of determination.........
February 24th, 2018 05:10
Lorna said:
A wonderful picture of determination.........
February 24th, 2018 05:10
Soaring Past the Mountains
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write with the last two lines very uplifting.
February 19th, 2018 01:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write with the last two lines very uplifting.
February 19th, 2018 01:26
Soaring Past the Mountains
Laura🌻 said:
An excellent poem
with a great ending!
You are very sagacious
for a 15 year old! I applaud
you.
~Laura~
February 18th, 2018 16:33
Laura🌻 said:
An excellent poem
with a great ending!
You are very sagacious
for a 15 year old! I applaud
you.
~Laura~
February 18th, 2018 16:33
Mindful Wanderings
Poetic Dan said:
The song is our spirit
Wondering from you to me
Teaching me in my silence
From the words of your scene
Hearing an echo that feels free
Being inspired and inspiring
Thank you for always doing what you do and helping these words just roll off my tongue.
February 9th, 2018 10:04
Poetic Dan said:
The song is our spirit
Wondering from you to me
Teaching me in my silence
From the words of your scene
Hearing an echo that feels free
Being inspired and inspiring
Thank you for always doing what you do and helping these words just roll off my tongue.
February 9th, 2018 10:04
Where Is The Outrage?
Resa71 said:
Your writing is a lot like mine when I was your age.
Not necessarily the same word style, honestly your vocabulary is much broader than mine was at 14.
Reading your work has made me realize, how self absorbed in my own problems I’ve become.
I have morphed into the kind of person I once raged against in my youth.
That’s what happens sometimes, when you grow up and have children. Thank you for your words!
They are a much needed reminder to open our eyes , and take a stand whenever possible!
February 6th, 2018 13:00
Resa71 said:
Your writing is a lot like mine when I was your age.
Not necessarily the same word style, honestly your vocabulary is much broader than mine was at 14.
Reading your work has made me realize, how self absorbed in my own problems I’ve become.
I have morphed into the kind of person I once raged against in my youth.
That’s what happens sometimes, when you grow up and have children. Thank you for your words!
They are a much needed reminder to open our eyes , and take a stand whenever possible!
February 6th, 2018 13:00
Where Is The Outrage?
Resa71 said:
Your writing is a lot like mine when I was your age.
Not necessarily the same word style, honestly your vocabulary is much broader than mine was at 14.
Reading your work has made me realize, how self absorbed in my own problems I’ve become.
I have morphed into the kind of person I once raged against in my youth.
That’s what happens sometimes, when you grow up and have children. Thank you for your words!
They are a much needed reminder to open our eyes , and take a stand whenever possible!
February 6th, 2018 13:00
Resa71 said:
Your writing is a lot like mine when I was your age.
Not necessarily the same word style, honestly your vocabulary is much broader than mine was at 14.
Reading your work has made me realize, how self absorbed in my own problems I’ve become.
I have morphed into the kind of person I once raged against in my youth.
That’s what happens sometimes, when you grow up and have children. Thank you for your words!
They are a much needed reminder to open our eyes , and take a stand whenever possible!
February 6th, 2018 13:00
Where Is The Outrage?
dusk arising said:
Death is an end to existence in our dimension but not spiritually. There are poets on here who have a faith which tells them there is more to existence than out life in this dimension. Some believe blindly, others have experienced the inexplicable evidence that proves the continuum.
Very good writing poetboy.
January 30th, 2018 17:38
dusk arising said:
Death is an end to existence in our dimension but not spiritually. There are poets on here who have a faith which tells them there is more to existence than out life in this dimension. Some believe blindly, others have experienced the inexplicable evidence that proves the continuum.
Very good writing poetboy.
January 30th, 2018 17:38
Time To Say Goodbye
Poetic Dan said:
Ripped me apart and stitched back up. You are one powerful soul that has so much, as always I thank you with a passion I know you understand.
January 22nd, 2018 12:36
Poetic Dan said:
Ripped me apart and stitched back up. You are one powerful soul that has so much, as always I thank you with a passion I know you understand.
January 22nd, 2018 12:36
This Flame Will Burn On
Caring dove said:
very nice :-) there has to be something to live for
January 19th, 2018 14:35
Caring dove said:
very nice :-) there has to be something to live for
January 19th, 2018 14:35
Endless Possibilities
FredPeyer said:
Well written, poetboy, every new day brings endless opportunities and it is up to us to grab and hold on to them!
January 19th, 2018 11:27
FredPeyer said:
Well written, poetboy, every new day brings endless opportunities and it is up to us to grab and hold on to them!
January 19th, 2018 11:27
This Flame Will Burn On
Poetic Dan said:
Burn on my friend.
Thank you for a powerful read as the sun rises for me
January 19th, 2018 04:16
Poetic Dan said:
Burn on my friend.
Thank you for a powerful read as the sun rises for me
January 19th, 2018 04:16
This Flame Will Burn On
Goldfinch60 said:
May that flame never ever be extinguished.
January 19th, 2018 02:00
Goldfinch60 said:
May that flame never ever be extinguished.
January 19th, 2018 02:00
Time To Say Goodbye
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, may that poison soon find an antidote and life goes on as normal.
January 17th, 2018 02:16
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, may that poison soon find an antidote and life goes on as normal.
January 17th, 2018 02:16
Time To Say Goodbye
Jooles said:
Loved this...to what were you saying goodbye so sadly but with so final may I ask?
January 16th, 2018 17:25
Jooles said:
Loved this...to what were you saying goodbye so sadly but with so final may I ask?
January 16th, 2018 17:25
There Is A Flicker, At Least
Aislinn Wilson said:
You\'re clearly a skilled writer.
January 15th, 2018 19:56
Aislinn Wilson said:
You\'re clearly a skilled writer.
January 15th, 2018 19:56
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