Comments received on poems by Fay Slimm.
ONCE DISTILLED.
Heartwriter said:
It truly was intreging. Very enjoying. Excellent!
June 20th, 2018 06:04
Heartwriter said:
It truly was intreging. Very enjoying. Excellent!
June 20th, 2018 06:04
ONCE DISTILLED.
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Beautiful Fay!
Like last night by the sounds of it?
Lovely word plays
Bravo
Andrew
June 20th, 2018 05:34
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Beautiful Fay!
Like last night by the sounds of it?
Lovely word plays
Bravo
Andrew
June 20th, 2018 05:34
APPREHENSION.
willyweed said:
wonderful write we all can relate to this well structured poem. ww
June 19th, 2018 20:17
willyweed said:
wonderful write we all can relate to this well structured poem. ww
June 19th, 2018 20:17
APPREHENSION.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing FAY ~ Everyday life is punctuated with happenings ~ Births ~ Marriages ~ Illnesses & Deaths etc all tinged with apprehension. In my immediate Family I have (so far) only lost one Grandpa (Mum\'s DAD) and one Grandma (Dad\'s MUM) but of course I have attended many Christenings ~ Weddings & Funerals etc Your poem explores the APPREHENSION of a Lady facing the declining Health of Her Dad which i am sure must be very difficult ! Your poem describes so very elegantly her train journey to see her Dad (possibly for the last time ?) following an urgent phone call ~ thank heaven for Modern means of instant communication anywhere in the World ! I love the last line ~ because she calms her apprehension and foreboding by doing exactly what I would do in similar circumstances:
THEN SHE STARTED TO PRAY ~ AMEN
Thanks for caring ~ Yours as always ~BRIAN
June 19th, 2018 18:24
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing FAY ~ Everyday life is punctuated with happenings ~ Births ~ Marriages ~ Illnesses & Deaths etc all tinged with apprehension. In my immediate Family I have (so far) only lost one Grandpa (Mum\'s DAD) and one Grandma (Dad\'s MUM) but of course I have attended many Christenings ~ Weddings & Funerals etc Your poem explores the APPREHENSION of a Lady facing the declining Health of Her Dad which i am sure must be very difficult ! Your poem describes so very elegantly her train journey to see her Dad (possibly for the last time ?) following an urgent phone call ~ thank heaven for Modern means of instant communication anywhere in the World ! I love the last line ~ because she calms her apprehension and foreboding by doing exactly what I would do in similar circumstances:
THEN SHE STARTED TO PRAY ~ AMEN
Thanks for caring ~ Yours as always ~BRIAN
June 19th, 2018 18:24
APPREHENSION.
Heartwriter said:
My heart string was pulled by this one. Very well written. Thanks for sharing raw emotion.
June 19th, 2018 06:23
Heartwriter said:
My heart string was pulled by this one. Very well written. Thanks for sharing raw emotion.
June 19th, 2018 06:23
APPREHENSION.
Laura🌻 said:
My dear Fay,
This write resonates like a thunderbolt! I’ll never forget that early morning phone call!
With your poetess prowess, you’ve beautifully penned that painful feeling that physically takes over when receiving that dreadful phone call!
~Laura~
June 19th, 2018 05:23
Laura🌻 said:
My dear Fay,
This write resonates like a thunderbolt! I’ll never forget that early morning phone call!
With your poetess prowess, you’ve beautifully penned that painful feeling that physically takes over when receiving that dreadful phone call!
~Laura~
June 19th, 2018 05:23
APPREHENSION.
dusk arising said:
Gripping, suspenseful and filled with fearful apprehension.
Dear to all our hearts for, in the normal course of our lives, we lose our loving parents.
Loved the way you plucked out the features of the day, a day you are wondering whether it is the last day on which you\'d see your father.
I felt this.
June 19th, 2018 04:11
dusk arising said:
Gripping, suspenseful and filled with fearful apprehension.
Dear to all our hearts for, in the normal course of our lives, we lose our loving parents.
Loved the way you plucked out the features of the day, a day you are wondering whether it is the last day on which you\'d see your father.
I felt this.
June 19th, 2018 04:11
APPREHENSION.
Michael Edwards said:
A great write that takes you with it and some super lines - great work Fay.
June 19th, 2018 02:08
Michael Edwards said:
A great write that takes you with it and some super lines - great work Fay.
June 19th, 2018 02:08
IT PASSED.
Christina8 said:
A very nice piece of poetry with fantastic imagery!
June 18th, 2018 14:08
Christina8 said:
A very nice piece of poetry with fantastic imagery!
June 18th, 2018 14:08
IT PASSED.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ when I saw the picture I thought t was going to be about the dreaded MOT ! In my experience of car driving (15 years) while there is often a CALM before the Storm ~ I know there is always one afterwards ! My worst experience was driving in the Lake District when the rain was so heavy it blurred vision ! We had to pull into a lay-by til it abated ! Then the Sun came out ~ but we were made aware of how steep the drops were on the driving side ~ scary ! Thanks for sharing a lovely poem on a scary situation ~ Loved the visual ~ Please check my ROSES ~ BRIAN
June 18th, 2018 05:23
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY ~ when I saw the picture I thought t was going to be about the dreaded MOT ! In my experience of car driving (15 years) while there is often a CALM before the Storm ~ I know there is always one afterwards ! My worst experience was driving in the Lake District when the rain was so heavy it blurred vision ! We had to pull into a lay-by til it abated ! Then the Sun came out ~ but we were made aware of how steep the drops were on the driving side ~ scary ! Thanks for sharing a lovely poem on a scary situation ~ Loved the visual ~ Please check my ROSES ~ BRIAN
June 18th, 2018 05:23
REFLECTION.
dusk arising said:
Oh so true. If only writing such truths could bring them to our door.
i live in hope.
June 15th, 2018 16:49
dusk arising said:
Oh so true. If only writing such truths could bring them to our door.
i live in hope.
June 15th, 2018 16:49
REFLECTION.
Classicmister said:
A very complex but perceptive reflection on love. You manage to convey so much with few words,
June 15th, 2018 09:17
Classicmister said:
A very complex but perceptive reflection on love. You manage to convey so much with few words,
June 15th, 2018 09:17
CO-EXISTENCE.
dusk arising said:
Just today i sat in the sunshine watching trains go by and admired the beauty of the long grasses growing by the rusting 5 bar gate. Taking time to take it in because, well because its a simple beauty i\'ve taken for granted throughout my days and next time i pass that way it will probably be a different season.
So much of beauty we take for granted.
Reading your piece today brought this fresh to mind. The spirit of your words is so true. Thank you.
June 14th, 2018 17:22
dusk arising said:
Just today i sat in the sunshine watching trains go by and admired the beauty of the long grasses growing by the rusting 5 bar gate. Taking time to take it in because, well because its a simple beauty i\'ve taken for granted throughout my days and next time i pass that way it will probably be a different season.
So much of beauty we take for granted.
Reading your piece today brought this fresh to mind. The spirit of your words is so true. Thank you.
June 14th, 2018 17:22
CO-EXISTENCE.
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. Hopefully we need not say \'You\'ve had your Summer (all of it); it was yesterday; that\'s your lot for this year!\'
June 14th, 2018 10:54
orchidee said:
A fine write Fay. Hopefully we need not say \'You\'ve had your Summer (all of it); it was yesterday; that\'s your lot for this year!\'
June 14th, 2018 10:54
CO-EXISTENCE.
SLR said:
Love the last two stanzas. Nature will bring out the child in us, if we let it. By it does take a deliberate action on our parts. Time will slip away while we\'re distracted by our every day lives and we miss the importance of being mentally and physically refreshed by nature. Love this one Ms Fay!
June 14th, 2018 10:26
SLR said:
Love the last two stanzas. Nature will bring out the child in us, if we let it. By it does take a deliberate action on our parts. Time will slip away while we\'re distracted by our every day lives and we miss the importance of being mentally and physically refreshed by nature. Love this one Ms Fay!
June 14th, 2018 10:26
CO-EXISTENCE.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY we all need to get out MORE ! I do a lot of Coastal Field Courses ~ mainly S E Coast checking on erosion ~ and I love to go to the Lake District and I\'m going to the Isle of Man in OCTOBER ~ EXOTIC ! I write alot about the Seasons so you know where my HEART is ! Lots of good advice in your lovely POEM ~ Please check \"COTTAGE BY THE SEA\" with DEAN & NANCY \"Things\" as a BONUS also FUSION on ANIMALS with The Shadows \"APACHE\" as another BONUS ~ Your Friend as always BRIAN !
June 14th, 2018 08:21
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks FAY we all need to get out MORE ! I do a lot of Coastal Field Courses ~ mainly S E Coast checking on erosion ~ and I love to go to the Lake District and I\'m going to the Isle of Man in OCTOBER ~ EXOTIC ! I write alot about the Seasons so you know where my HEART is ! Lots of good advice in your lovely POEM ~ Please check \"COTTAGE BY THE SEA\" with DEAN & NANCY \"Things\" as a BONUS also FUSION on ANIMALS with The Shadows \"APACHE\" as another BONUS ~ Your Friend as always BRIAN !
June 14th, 2018 08:21
LET US GO.
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write as ever Fay, may your journey be filled with joy and love.
June 14th, 2018 01:07
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write as ever Fay, may your journey be filled with joy and love.
June 14th, 2018 01:07
LET US GO.
SLR said:
Sweetly sexy and romantic. Love it Ms Fay. Hope you don\'t mind if I screen shot it to read whenever the mood strikes. Gotta save this one.
June 13th, 2018 20:50
SLR said:
Sweetly sexy and romantic. Love it Ms Fay. Hope you don\'t mind if I screen shot it to read whenever the mood strikes. Gotta save this one.
June 13th, 2018 20:50
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