Corporal B and Me
Cassie58 said:

What a satisfying and positive outcome here Neville. Corporal B was a right mean bar steward. You though, deserved all the cheers and salutes you got from your mates. Did you ever see the 1965 version of The Hill? When I read your poem, my
mind drifted to that film, it also drifted to events earlier this week, well covered in the media. I smiled at your account of his car being wired up. Naughty, but very nicely done.

March 5th, 2025 18:23

Corporal B and Me
sorenbarrett said:

A great story in poem format Neville. As a child from 6 to 12 was bullied by a neighbor. Until finally fought him in front of a school crowd and lost. But following this he came to me and asked to be my friend, He came to me for help with homework through high school. The standing up not the winning seems to be the issue in this poem as well. Although not at all the same the standing up is the key to how one feels about themselves and that is to me the key. When you feel good about yourself others will follow. A poem of raw openness

March 5th, 2025 11:28

Corporal B and Me
arqios said:

That can’t be fiction at all! 🙏🏻🕊️

March 5th, 2025 10:02

Hold the Sugar
Cheeky Missy said:

Aww, how heartbreaking! Time has a subtle way of thieving so very much, as if the wealth not measured by gold is much easier to steal, I guess. Gorgeous and beautifully rendered with exquisite imagery and a painfully haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.

March 4th, 2025 14:40

This is Where Spring Begins – Haru Ga Hajimaru
Cassie58 said:

Love that image. His index finger tracing her name through a film of thin ice on window glass. There are contrasts here between cold and heat, which work so well. Plenty of symbolism and spring is a time for new beginnings and growth. A perfectly lovely poem Neville.

March 4th, 2025 02:44

This is Where Spring Begins – Haru Ga Hajimaru
Tristan Robert Lange said:

Love this and the formatting...brilliant. The opening is the title. Then the poem leads back to the opening. Love it! An easy fave for me, my friend. Well done! 🌹👏

March 3rd, 2025 17:12

Culled
spilleronsheet said:

Could feel the pain in those words…culling indeed in whatever rationale defined is painful

March 3rd, 2025 13:17

This is Where Spring Begins – Haru Ga Hajimaru
sorenbarrett said:

Once again Neville you invoke your mastery of symbolism and metaphor to enchant a poem. This one even feels oriental before one reaches the line. You have taken past and present, warm and cold, the foggy aspect of what is normally clear glass, ice and spring and tied them into a relationship with implied sensuality. A lovely magic trick conjuring up many a fanciful vision. Lovely

March 3rd, 2025 09:56

Listen Loud Just One More Time
Goldfinch60 said:

Sometimes they just do not hear Neville but in true love they know.

Andy

March 3rd, 2025 02:45

Listen Loud Just One More Time
Cassie58 said:

So very beautifully rendered Neville, all the way down until those final two lines summoned the war drums. Purchased book number twelve recently, pleased to support your chosen charities. I have the full set now.

March 2nd, 2025 12:59

Listen Loud Just One More Time
Cheeky Missy said:

Lemme guess, those shells were as calcified as the reference to conch suggested, right?! But he HAD to tell her because nothing was too good for whom he adored. Ah, but I\'m well-nigh overcome until I can hardly breathe. Oh you and your skill! Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a captivating poignancy. Thank you for sharing.

March 2nd, 2025 12:04

Listen Loud Just One More Time
Poetic Licence said:

Sometimes whispers are louded than shouts and vica versa, but that depend of who the war drums for, yourself or someone else, very interesting, relatable and enjoyable read

March 2nd, 2025 06:57

Listen Loud Just One More Time
sorenbarrett said:

The subtlety in this piece nearly slipped past me. If he needs to shout and argue then he is not being heard and is that a cue war drums? Is the war with a competitor, her or himself? Often a whisper is heard more easily than a shout and peace talks might be in order. Another lovely subtle piece with so much packed within it. Like all good art it changes with ones mood.

March 2nd, 2025 05:04

Once I Felt Like a Sky Hungry Kite
NafisaSB said:

the phoenix will rise, and you will survive - after every fall, one is able to spring back, and fly high if the determination is there
a touching masterpiece - liked it


March 1st, 2025 00:06

Insatiated (A Neologism for Our Times)
Cheeky Missy said:

Hmm, intrigue is verily a siren herein, complete with shades, a deep, dark trenchcoat, and I fear nothing else after excepting those long, slender legs elongated further by spike heels. La dee! She\'s smoking too. Whew. Ahem. Exquisitely rendered with haunting imagery and a rather erotic poignancy. Thank you for sharing.

February 28th, 2025 14:18